Writing Feedback / The percentage of elderly aged over 65 in USA, Japan and Sweden from 1940 to 2040 - IELTS [3]

scheme of elderly population

The line chart provides information about the percentage of elderly aged over 65 in USA, Japan and Sweden from 1940 to 2040. Overall, it is clearly seen that the proportion of people aged over 65 years in the three countries fluctuates during the given period. However, the three figures show an upward trend towards the end of survey.

The number of USA population initially stood at approximately 9% in 1940 while the figures for Sweden was about 7% at the same time. Then the former went up markedly and reached 15% as well as the latter figures showing a growth to just under 15% in 1980. Interestingly, after standing at the same level by around 14% in 2000, USA has been relatively unchanged while there has been a fluctuation figure in Sweden elderly population by 2020. Afterwards, both countries are predicted to rise towards the end of the survey. Nevertheless, Sweden population is expected reaching higher percentage than USA in 2014 ; approximately 25% and 23% respectively.

In contrast, Japanese figure was originally levelled off at 5% before dipping to 3% in 1960. The percentage then stabled for 20 years, after which there has been a gradually rise since 1980 and the figure is predicted peaking at 27% in 2040 after overtaking the first position from USA.

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Writing Feedback / The line chart compares the data of package delivery distributed by two delivery service companies [2]

IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - PARCELS DELIVERED BY FedEx and TNT MAIL SERVICES

FedEx vs TNT MAIL SERVICES

The line chart compares the data of package delivery distributed by two delivery service companies between 1920 and 2000. Overall, it is noticeable that both lines experience an upward trend. However, although FedEx was the most popular mail service at first, it was replaced by TNT through the end of the survey.

In the first year, the highest came to FedEx with 15.000 parcels while TNT only a quarter of it. Both companies then experienced a growth in the following twenty years, yet the gap between FedEx and TNT have widened. Conversely, the former plummeted tremendously to approximately 120.000 while the latter saw a slight surge to 80.000 in 1950. Such gap then narrowed down and both figures nearly reached the same level in 1960.

Afterw which, FedEx proportion saw a significant rise over the next 20 years before dipping steadily over the last given period. In contrast, the number of TNT parcels decrease minimally then the figure rocketed dramatically and reached a peak by 24.000 after overtaking the first position from its competitor.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - INFORMATION ABOUT DIARRHEA CASES IN MASHHAD FROM 1983 TO 1992 [4]

diarrhea instances figure

The line chart provides data about the changes of number of diarrhea cases occuring in Mashhad from 1983 to 1992. Overall, the figures of diarhhea cases dropped significantly at the end of given period despite fluctuations occur over time. Besides, they were at their highest in '89 while the lowest figures could be observed in '92.

In the three first years ('83, '84, '85), they stood at 100 and remained relatively unchanged. The figure then rose considerably to reach about 190 in '96. A year after that, this was followed by a slight increase to the level of 200. However, this upward trend was suddenly broken and the number of diarhhea sufferings plummeted dramatically back to the initial level in '88.

Afterwards, an enormous surge was seen in '88; fourfold higher than the former figure. Nevertheless, in the following year, a plunge appear tp 300 and the figure remained steady until '91. Interestingly, the figure dipped tremendously and hit the zero level of diarhhea cases in the last given period.

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Writing Feedback / INFORMATION ABOUT COMMUTING PATTERN IN HOUSTON, TEXAS AND CO2 EMMISSIONS [3]

The road to work and air pollution

The given table and bar chart display the data about several categories of commuting pattern of people in Houston, Texas and how much the type of transportation contribute to the CO2 emission. Overall, it can be seen clearly that cars with only one person are the most common transportation mode and cause the highest emission of CO2 compared with the other means of transport.

Car with just driver break the record as the largest percentage of commuters at 48% while cycle/walk only stand at 4% as the lowest percentage of travellers. Nevertheless, car with one person only obtain the second position when it comes to the average age of traveller category. The highest proportion at this category is reached by train or bus at 47 with roughly similar number on each type of transport.

Apart from previous comparison, cycle or walk appears as the most environmentally friendly means of transport with zero emission. It is followed by bus or train with approximately only 0,01 kg of CO2 emission. Conversely, the most contributed on CO2 emission is seen on car with one person category which stand at 0,32 kg per person while sharing car category only release less than one-third of the highest emission.

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Writing Feedback / I would argue that dwelling in small village had several merits and demerits. [5]

In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area.

What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

life on suburbs or in a city

Today, large number of humans reside in urban place while conversely, most people in the past lived in suburb area where they knew each other closely. I would argue that dwelling in small village had several merits and demerits.

Needless to say, emotional connection between people living in small community were more closely each other. It was because they lived in small area which require them to interact each other in more intense way. Taking my experience as an example, when I visited a remote village in South Sulawesi for a research purpose. At the time, there was a funeral ceremony and interestingly, the whole occupants in the area joined together to supply all needs for the family who are in grief without expecting any rewards for their help. The community undoubtedly reflect the strong emotional relation in small community environment. In addition, inhabitants in village tend to have a good quality of health because they accustomed to breath of fresh air without exposing by air pollution. As such, they will be more active and will be automatically got a low level of stress.

However, there are drawbacks of living in small community faced by the inhabitants. Firstly, they had a limited social networks due to the situations where they lived only involved small number of people. As their interaction pattern only circle in one minor and limited scope of society. Then, the dwellers got less education and job opportunities. For instance, most of young people in small village in Kabaena Island only get their education up to the level of highschool. As a result, they were only hired for a blue-collar jobs since they don't have a higher education background. Not only this, recent research reveals that people living in village tend to experience poverty in their life.

The aforementioned evidences show the two sides of drawbacks and benefits for people who reside in small village. However, I believe that those drawbacks can be reduced by equalizing the development in large city and small village.

Writing Feedback / People get information through news, but meanwhile are uncertain about the truth of these news [4]

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Hi! I am practicing on IELTS Writing.

Nowadays, people get information through news and papers, but meanwhile are uncertain about the truth of these news.

Should we believe the journalists?

What qualities should a good journalist or correspondent have?

Legit and fake stories

Today, mass media provide a lot of information for society through newspapers and electronic news yet the validity is still doubted. This essay will discuss about how far people can trust the journalists and what credibility a journalist should have.

It is undeniable that journalism activity has delivered a vast information to society. However, people should not totally believe the information or news that is delivered by journalists. It is because today there are a lot of competition among those journalistic workers to reach the best rating view or to be the fastest to provide news. Because of the competition, they then tend to do everything including manipulating the data to make the information sound more sensational or delivering the information as fast as they can without doing deep observation and interview to ensure the validity of the data. It results in the invalidity of the data and information they spread to people.

Every kind of profession requires certain qualities, so does journalism. The fundamental characteristics that journalists should have are being neutral and independent. Journalistic workers should be neutral and should not take a side of any group. By doing so, they can cover both sides and looking at any angles of a phenomenon before presenting it into the news form. Moreover, they should be independent from any pressure and interest of any group so they can be free to report any occurance and fact as it is without intervense from any party.

To conclude, people should clarify the rightness of an information and should not totally trust what journalists report. Furthermore, a good correspondent should have independency and neutrality in accomplishing their task.

Writing Feedback / The chart presents people's sleep scheme among five professions based on Canadian research result. [4]

WRITING TASK 1 - SLEEP PATTERNS OF PEOPLE IN FIVE DIFFERENTS OCCUPATION

The chart presents people's kip scheme among five professions based on Canadian research result. Overall, it can be seen clearly that business executive and student has a regularly kip scheme everyday, while three other profession categories shown an irregular sleep scheme.

Regarding to the data, a regular kip scheme are experienced by student and business executive. Either student or business executive start to sleep at around 11-12pm. However, student have more sleep time than business executive. Student's daily bedtime is eight hours while business worker only have six hours bedtime in a day.

In contrast with those two categories, an irregular sleep scheme appear on these three profession categories ; truck driver, full time mother and doctor. Meanwhile, truck driver and fulltime mother have the same bedtime pattern ; fulltime mother has to divide her sleep time into three different parts and truck driver's time sleep have to divide into two. However, doctor has the fewest bedtime with only five hours a day.

Writing Feedback / Yearly collected data of kids whose Australian mother is 40-44 years old - statistics since 1981 [3]

WRITING TASK 1 - NUMBER OF CHILDREN EVER BORN TO WOMEN 40-44 YEARS

The table presents the collected yearly data of kids who was born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia since 1981. Overall, it is clearly seen that proportion of women with three or more kids experienced downward trend, while the reverse proportion appeared to women with no kids or one and two kids.

To began with, either percentage of women who had three kids or four kids above showed a downward trend since 1981 up to 2016. The percentage between the two categories had slight difference at first ; at 27.4 % and 27.6 % respectively. Yet, wide gap of percentage occured in both of categories in 2006. However, a sharp decline percentage experienced by women who had four or more kids.

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n contrast, the three others categories experienced a upward trend. Either proportion of women with no kid or one kid increase gradually in almost twofold from former's percentage in 1981. However, women who had two children pierced the highest percentage over four other categories during 1981 to 2006.

Writing Feedback / The data about global population progress and the proportion of urban areas in several world zones. [2]

WRITING TASK 1 - WORLD POPULATION GROWTH

The graphs compare the data about global population progress and the proportion of urban areas in several world zones. Overall, it is noticeably that global inhabitant proportion will increase gradually and proportionate to the total people who lives in expanding areas, while the sum people of developed zones will remain steady.

Initially, the worldwide inhabitant number was on 1000 millions of people. Afterwards, there was no significantly inreasing until 1920. The rising number recently appear from 1940, and keep increase enormously. The proportion of population will be projected hit the peak in 2040 at approximately 8000 millions of people. While, in the following years, the global inhabitant number will be experienced a downward trend to 6000 millions of people.

Compared to the second data, the number of people in expanding zones also experienced an upward trend and will be predicted to keep increase up to 2040. While the highest proportion predicted will be reached in 2040 at about 3000 millions of people. By contrast, the developing areas showed a steadily number and predicted will stay the same until 2040.

Writing Feedback / The number of inhabitants in Japan during a century [2]

WRITING TASK 1 : JAPANESE POPULATION FOR 50 YEARS

The bar chart and the table compare the information about the number of inhabitant in Japan during a century ; from 1950 to 2055 calculated in millions and the quantity of elderly resident aged 65 years above. Overall, it is clearly seen that the sum of Japan's population is keep increase throughout the years until 2005, while the old age people's figures will be projected rise up to 2055.

The total number of resident in Japan experience a gradually increase for fifty years, since 1950 to 2005. Its figures hit the peak of population in 2005. While, the reverse condition occured after 2005, where the quantity of Japan's inhabitant decrease slightly until 2015. Moreover, the reduction of Japan's total population will have been decreasing sharply by 2055.

Looking at aged people figures, its number experience an upward trend and will be predicted increase up to 2055. The enormous amount of elderly resident's increasing number seen from 1950 until 2005. There was an increase of about 21% at the time. However, the next increasing number of elderly only projected about 10% in each twenty years (from 2005 until 2055).