|Why Columbia (Located in New York, the hub of diversity)
5 - Located in New York, the hub of diversity, Columbia possesses one of the most diverse student bodies and award-winning...
UndergraduatealicimooEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Common short essay: Summary of activity, all comments are welcomed
8 - I taught my students Everyday English, which was not an easy task. Most of the students were very shy...
UndergraduatejustinwangEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|"A reason to everything that happens" app essay- revision?
Undergraduatexsilverlovexxsilverlovex - Dec 26, 2008
|Florida State University Essay-- the summer before my senior year
Undergraduatemlechik10EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Common Application Essay: personal/local concern and its importance
2 - Sights in India are often quickly associated with street cows, monuments, festivals and modernization, which I do not deny...
UndergraduateexperimentalistEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Rice Supplement- Cultural Essay
UndergraduateChiHF9009EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Common App essay - Uniquely "Un-Asian"
5 - Yes, change it to Malaysian, so it is more specific and descriptive. Words and phrases are like employees; the...
UndergraduatelaliEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|'earthquake-hit areas' - Sarah Lawrence essay about changes
4 - "You're going to study abroad? What's your major?" I knew my answer. To say, "It's undecided," was thought to...
Undergraduatevan_goghEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Among all majors, I believe engineering helps us enhance our lives; Columbia Short Answers
UndergraduateJJBrownJJBrown - Dec 26, 2008
|'Ambiguity ' - University of Virginia (favorite word)
2 - Ambiguity seems to bother some, and this is understandable . The ambiguous nature of literature also enables me...
Undergraduatealice955EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Common app essay: Topic of your choice ("a flower vase")
Undergraduatenylrejnylrej - Dec 26, 2008
|Common Application Short Response(Activity-Cambodia trip)
Undergraduatealice955EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Academic Interest (I like math, physics and economics)
Writing FeedbacktonydengcnuEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Common App Essay - Topic of your Choice (My passion for public speaking?)
2 - Well, the first part of that last paragraph is good... but you can conclude with mention of how your...
UndergraduateUnicornsnowindEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Common app essay (topic of your choice) - Fly high
UndergraduatechocolateleeEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|FIT Essay - Fashion and Wall Street job
5 - Thanks for the feedback, everyone! Another question for you guys? Do you think the beginning of my essay...
Undergraduateblackkpearl09blackkpearl09 - Dec 26, 2008
|"It is hard for an empty bag to stand upright." - Benjamin Franklin quote
8 - YES!! Good advice from zowzow. Hey, zowzow, do you want to check out the contributor page? See the link...
UndergraduateomarerchidEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Princeton supplement (a favorite quotation from an essay or book)
4 - Honestly, I would come up with another topic and write a new essay. This essay says nothing about you...
UndergraduatenadirwChink - Dec 26, 2008
|Leaving everything I cherished in Thailand / "Kindness holds up the world"
UndergraduateForgott3nvan_gogh - Dec 26, 2008
|'her parent's divorce was for the best' - Apply Texas
Undergraduatebabyqu33nsEF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|'anti-death penalty' - commonapp essay: issue you concerned and why it is important
2 - A good essay but try to relate yourself into this issue...don't give what can be found in books or...
Undergraduategooddogexperimentalist - Dec 26, 2008
|'famous for its English and Humanities' - Why Hamilton College?
3 - Yeah, even though the luck thing is kinda true, we can't write it in the essays, can we...lol ...
Undergraduatelast_min_girllast_min_girl - Dec 26, 2008
|NYU summer activity (other colleges I visited paled in comparison)
Undergraduateimikeimike - Dec 26, 2008
|CommonApp Short Answer: elaborate on one of your activities
11 - I like where you were headed at the end. The statment about how it "helped me gain a greater...
Undergraduatepencilpurple92 - Dec 25, 2008
|"undecided"Cornell supplement(interests essay) -feedback
Undergraduatepurple92purple92 - Dec 25, 2008
|"Who Am I?" -- Common App Essay
11 - Wow, thanks for the comments everybody! I didn't expect so much praise for this essay at all. Thanks for...
Undergraduateshayonsalehshayonsaleh - Dec 25, 2008
|Common application essays, need opinions (one of two to choose from)
5 - Thank you for all of your opinions... I really appreciate them... Would you give me any grammatical advice?...
Undergraduatecandyapplecandyapple - Dec 25, 2008
|Yale hold a legacy ; Why Yale, 500 characters only?
6 - mmh, I'll try to rewrite it by targeting one or two things instead of all these things. It's just...
Undergraduatealicimooalicimoo - Dec 25, 2008
|With the help of Frida Kahlo I learned to embrace my unique looks, show the real beauty
NEW - edits and input please!! Frida Kahlo self-portraits prompt : what work of art, music,science and mathematics, or...
|Common application short answer--internship at a department store
NEW - In July 2007, I worked as an intern for 4 days at Zhongyou Department Store. I was assigned to...