|Rice Supplement Why this school ("Bill Nye the Science Guy show")
4 - Yes, and take out all unnecessary words: In order to betterexplain why I am applying to the Wiess...
UndergraduateCzerwonaEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|Bowdoin Short Essay
3 - We can improve this first sentence, too: For all students, college will be an unfamiliar environment that involves...
UndergraduateohreallyEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|CMC essay ("the world's economic theory and philosophy")
3 - Excellent, Chelsea! Your ending sentence, especially! Please check out the EF Contributor page (link at the bottom of the...
Undergraduatecbm2891EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|Essay on Interpersonal Skils and experience - Law school
4 - Separate two or more adjectives with commas: Apart from studying law during my graduation years, I have had...
GraduateRaiEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|NYU short answers - Patience, perseverance / Drama, Theater clubs / "Breakaway" / Management
4 - arghuman82, your username is cool!! But your feedback is lacking. Part of your job as a member is to...
UndergraduateEricEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|Being counselor for friends - CMU App Essay Why you chose CMU/Major
UndergraduateJSnyder726EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|'With great power comes...' - Common App- Spiderman
UndergraduatefalconchickEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|Brown essay - "The Pickup"
4 - Hellomoto, you impress me again!!! Have you ever wondered if you are walking on the right path of...
UndergraduatehopefullEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|Cornell ILR Supplement (San Fernando's Annual March for Justice)
UndergraduateFlower ChildEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|BROWN ESSAY "PARKOUR" (the edge of the precipice)
UndergraduatehellomotoEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|Common App Essay; 'And there was the sergeant, organizing and motivating'
UndergraduateDiegophEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|Common App essay ("my parents jumping up and down")
3 - No, not rude! We appreciate your participation!! Though my parents were ecstatic at my acceptance, I would soon...
UndergraduatejinuyaEF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|Why Penn (the creative approach) - give me some last minute support
3 - The general approach is great! Just eliminate all that is unnecessary and make every sentence count. That is how...
UndergraduateHiroShima11EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|"Lights out" - poem analysis
5 - I think the images you are using is not strong enough for the atmosphere you want to express. You...
Poetrylearningtowritecharliesun - Jan 3, 2009
|"You broad my eyes," -my first poem
Poetrycibakicharliesun - Jan 3, 2009
|"It was Good to Have Known you Sarah" - Poem
PoetryRajivcharliesun - Jan 3, 2009
|Common App Extra Curriculum(150 words, Senior Math Team)
Undergraduatexinixcharliesun - Jan 3, 2009
|Common App Extracurricular Short Answer (varsity sports and various clubs)
UndergraduateJustin09charliesun - Jan 3, 2009
|Essay question: Why do People Buy?
6 - I think you need to make your question more specific. Why do people buy instead of bartering or instead...
EssaysDennyRistieEF_Sean - Jan 3, 2009
|essay question on national theatre and somerset house???
3 - You might start your preparation for this essay, once you have done some research, by making a list of...
EssaysJasonBanksEF_Sean - Jan 3, 2009
|'too late for the election' - Brown U. Supplement - Academic Interests
UndergraduaterandomzmEF_Sean - Jan 3, 2009
|Last Minute MIT additional essay ("a turning point of my life")
3 - A few more suggestions: "According to the philosophy of Confucius and thousands years of tradition, examination is the...
UndergraduatevivalacanadaEF_Sean - Jan 3, 2009
|NYU short answer (diversity is critical to my future education)
13 - I agree that you should go into explaining how "remarkable" the program is. Additionally, I'm not too sure whether...
UndergraduateVeggychickpig - Jan 3, 2009
|'I listened to the lyrics' - 100th page of my autobiography
8 - this is a really good essay, beautifully written. it gives the reader a good sense of who you are....
Scholarshippiggytails626jh3492 - Jan 3, 2009
|Minority students. As a Puerto Rican student I I helped bring Latino Club to my school.
12 - Of the 2,592 students attending (school name), only 6.6% of them are minorities. As a Puerto Rican student navigating...
UndergraduateprocrastinationEF_Constance - Jan 3, 2009
|I'M A THUG-Common App Essay-My FIRST draft.
UndergraduateyeeLW Trojan - Jan 3, 2009
|UPenn autobiography - i decided to write about my future
Essayslalaforu2LW Trojan - Jan 2, 2009
|Cornell CAS- 1st draft. 'The great thing about magic'
10 - I like your essay. I'm applying to Cornell to but to ILR...Hopefully we'll see each other there....
UndergraduateJSFlashLW Trojan - Jan 2, 2009
|why BU? ("born and raised in Walnut, California")
10 - Thank you, mad3na90, for the correction. I think that the post was getting off track and not helping, just...
UndergraduateuhlyssuhEF_Constance - Jan 2, 2009
|COMMON APPS ESSAY (Alice in Wonderland); I had grown too much
2 - Great job! I could not find any grammatical or stylistic errors, but would like to know the prompt question...
Undergraduateidk1234EF_Constance - Jan 2, 2009