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sandipsinh   
Feb 26, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK2: WHY DO YOU NEED MUSIC? [5]

Isn't it your essay too short. I have inkling about IELTS, what is the length of essay, they demand?
sandipsinh   
Feb 26, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl - essay evaluation - Many subject learning is better or specializing in one subject [2]

Some universities require students to take classes in many subjects. Other universities require students to specialize in one subject. Which is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Knowledge is power, which can be avail by educating ourselves through schooling or personal learning. Subjective and objective information is required to be remarkable in competitive world. Universities and schools offer courses consisting of several subjects; on the other hand learner has option of studying one subject. However, it is incomprehensible that learning many subjects is better or mastering one is safe option. My further explanation would be consisting of pros and cons of learning several subjects or specializing in one.

Preluding of education start with basic information of subject and by the time student stroll in intermediate classes they get acquainted with many subjects. Learning of many subjects helps them to observe knowledge as well as in researching subject of their interest. This entire process further aids them to choose a specific subject to make career in their interested field. For instance - My sister's son is learning computers, math, English, social science and couple of other subjects in his 9th grade. He is more inclines toward computers abreast studying other subject with equal diligent. Perceiving his interest towards computer my sister and he concludes that he would keep computer as his major subject in higher grades. Learning variety of subject not only delivers subjective knowledge but also build the foundation of topic. I discern that specialization in one subject should be done after studying all relevant subjects.

On the other side of coin, specialization offer custom and all- embracing information about single subject. Learning of one subject indeed constructs a men master of that subject. Mastering in one subject helps candidates to be more productive and constructive in their chosen field. It produces clear vision of subject, demand of subject, and scope after studying it. The most phenomenal advantage of mastering any subject is it presents vast variety of option to build one's career. For Instance, candidate who pursue master of business administration are well acquainted with all relevant subjects and aspect of business and management world. They can choose any field to work with their master degree.

All in all, single or several subjects, both has their distinctive advantage in our educational system. Knowledge of various subjects is better suggested for initial learning, it further help us to choose perfect subject to specialize in. As it is said, men is no skillful if he is "Jack of everything and master of nothing.
sandipsinh   
Mar 3, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Should we spend our lives doing the same things and avoiding changes? [2]

Use space after comma ( FIRST LINE) - In this electronic age, advanced technology and modernized world has imposed several modifications in human life.Everybody has to keep in pace with alterations to survive in this universe.This is because people who deny to accept changes are considered orthodox in the society and experienced various consequences.I personally believe that change is the law of nature and it has become essential for every individual to modify their life style for personal development and future prospectus.
sandipsinh   
Mar 3, 2014
Writing Feedback / WHAT IMPORTANT SKILL A PERSON MUST HAVE TO BE SUCCESSFUL - TOEFL ESSAY EVALUTION [5]

What is a very important skill a person should learn in order to be successful in the world today? Choose one skill and use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

Skillful men is respected everywhere, similarly to sustain in today's competitive world one must possess effective skills. Although learning cannot be ever enough but it is very potential skill to be successful for several reasons. It is necessary for any candidate to have a quick learning skills because it will enhance his knowledge and expertise in any given field. Further I will be appending my views on essential skill a person must hold.

Quick learning ability can make person learn aspects faster and it will help him to get adapted to any difficult environment. Also he would able to save his time. Quick learning skill help's student to cover their course in time without compromising the depth understanding of the concept. Likewise it grant growth to working professional that learn new technique of work in jiffy. For example I have got a friend who took a job in Animation Company as a counselor as he was not getting job anywhere else. But he learned counselling skill in few days and wonderfully justifying his counselor position. Now he is promoted has counselor head and handling 7 counselor under him with administration department of the company. Learning is a process that does not require any background knowledge except the person's willingness to learn things.

Learning skill also help in gaining any type of knowledge. As it is said Knowledge is power but it cannot happen without any zeal of learning. Knowledge never get perish as such it is deemed as asset of learning men. Learning help's people to initiate new beginning in any unknown field also. With the help of learning skills people in the world learn so many languages despite of nonnative speaker of those languages. Similarly people learn cooking different food. Learning skill makes our stay comfortable in any unfamiliar country, It helps us to get accustom with any surrounding. For instance when I went on Span tour, it was very difficult to seek any help form local people as they do not have any acquaintance of English. So I bought a Book for dumps to learn basic Spanish to make my tour easy. I started communicating with people to learn about Span that's how I learned Spanish and also got idea about the culture, values and belief of the Spanish populace.

I discern that everything is implicitly or explicitly connected with the skill of learning. Any age living being is depended on this skill to make their life better. It is historical skill since non - computers days as well as it is already experimented technique of gaining knowledge and inventions. Therefor quick learning skill is most authentic and magnificent skill.
sandipsinh   
Mar 4, 2014
Scholarship / "What impressed me about the UWC school I marked as my top-choice." - a mot. letter to UWC [2]

should learn that change cannot be brought (NO NEED TO PUT ABOUT) without showing solidarity and tolerance of others, while offering them what maybe they weren't lucky enough to come by during their own education.

Some children who look the same as I do,( COMMA) have a hard time embracing the myriad of traits some of their peers have - their distinct dispositions and complexions, the complexities

Rest i find it drafted pretty well with reasons and awareness about where are you heading.
sandipsinh   
Mar 4, 2014
Writing Feedback / Government budgets should be spent on public transportation or road and highways - Toefl [5]

Transportation means have indeed made world smaller. Good transportation facilitate easy and convenient travel. When matter is of transportation condition of platforms wherein these means of transportation are used are equally important that's why government should allot budget to maintain roads and highways. However myriad transportation means are available, but among all of them buses, trains and subways have earned more popularity among common men for several reasons as such government must spend money on improving public transportation. Further, I will be appending my views on the reasons of spending money on development of public transportation.

Buses,trains and subways are economical mean of transportation for all income group people therefore maintaining them is essential. Currently in blustering cities like Mumbai and New York, people are highly depend on subways, buses and trains for commuting. Besides accelerating inflation has highly affected the fare of all means of transportation. In such a scenario small pockets cannot afford air ways fare therefore to facilitate lower to higher - middle class people government must keep public transportation highly functional. It also help tourist who come to see a new country. Train can connect two zone of country in few hours that makes it most demanding by the populace. Having effective public transportation can deemed as asset of any country as it is for the benefit of public.

Secondly, Public transportation is used maximum world wide. Entire city would be depended on this for minor to major purpose like this transportation help many business to deliver goods in time at minimal rates and mails and posts are delivered by the use of trains. Public transportation fetch need of government as well as civilians. In city like Mumbai, student to vice president of any company would not hesitate to travel in local train or subway due to heavy traffic on the roads, which delay their arrival at desired destination. Seemingly, facilities are their but due to the improper management and use of road and highways, their usage is avoided. Government must also implement strict rules to using public transportation for safety purpose.

Buses and other automobiles are highly depended on roads and highways as such government must not ignore their effect on transportation. Roads and highways should be maintain or renovate time to time for smooth travel. As preferences of people include use of roads as well as public transportation, it is imperative to keep them in appropriate condition.

Government must divide its budget considering preferences of all income group people and growth of country, but daily used facilities must get higher priorities as such I discern that government should spend money on maintaining public transport.
sandipsinh   
Mar 5, 2014
Writing Feedback / Government budgets should be spent on public transportation or road and highways - Toefl [5]

Dumi and Pahan Thanks ...
Pahan i trying to fallow this structure but in time constraint end up drafting my essay like this besides..
I am confuse about body para content - you mean to say that i must directly mention my point of explanation in 1st sentence of any paragraph and then provide my details or examples.
sandipsinh   
Mar 11, 2014
Writing Feedback / My father wanted doctor profession for me; subject without opportunity to study [5]

If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.

Students chooses subject to study as per their interest or on the basis of scope course has after pursuing it. But all of those student desire to study a special subject that they are not able to learn alike our several underachieved goals and hobbies. Similarly, if given a chance I would like to study medial stream, as my family always wanted me to be doctor.

My father always wanted me consider doctor profession that something enlightens desire of studying medical course but my choice contracted by my learning Management. My father wanted to provide me and my sibling higher education to secure our future. He always emphasized on getting better education more than achieving materialized wishes. Despite every family members protest against educating daughters, he served us with best possible facilities, life and education. He wanted us to be indifferent then other alike him. To fulfill his desire of me earning doctor's degree I would like to study Medical course.

I have studied management as per my interest although i somewhere was in quandary about my choice of subject. I would wish to learn medical course to set an example in my family for growing cousins. To earn fame and name in my society. To experience that fascinating wish of operating people and saving their lives. After being growing big to maturity level I realized, how pleasurable and noble profession is of doctors. As it is said "many are wonderful creations of god but none alike human"- an imagination of saving a life created by god boost me to study it doctors course at once. One of my friend is a very good example of fulfilling his desire of studying course relevant to medical - despite being form management field she studied Nursing as she did not get admission in medical college after her 12th grade due to low mark.

Everybody has their situations and limitations to choose their career, some chooses certain realm because of its great job opportunities and financial gain, so other some are forced to do so. All profession are best as far as it interests you and can be successful in that.
sandipsinh   
Mar 12, 2014
Writing Feedback / TOEFL ESSAY - Short stories are preferred more than movies,explain your position. [7]

Short stories are more enjoyable than watching movies. Use specific reasons and examples to explain
There are myriad options available currently to entertain ourselves but watching movies are most popular option among all. Similarly many short stories are also available to read for amusement. Nevertheless of these available options their expectance by populace varies, short stories are more popular among growing kids, so movies are enjoyed by all age beings. In many way both have their distinct importance.

Theater and movies have evolved phenomenally in recent years therefore it has gained enormous publicity. Movies are liked by people for several reasons for instance a script's dialogues and characters are played by mortal actor or actresses. It is apparently realistic colorful and bright. People adopt many fashion and trend shown in these movies, to quote an instance - Bell -bottom pants become most preferred by people in 80's as many actresses in 80's were seen cladding themselves in pair of that style pants. Movies are more thrilling with incredible special and visual effects, action, and drama that makes them more captivating. Adding to it, currently available technology has modernized movie industry as a result of it many categories of movies like animated movies and si- fi movies are also produced and seen by infinite numbers of people globally.

On the other hand, story books are indeed a very good source of awareness and entertainment but it has secure its audience till school going kids. On its merit side, it is used most for informing children about basic social information for instance - A team of fire - brigade with their truck has been called to one of the kindergarten in our vicinity for presenting demo on fire extinguishing in order to informing kids about it. Although it has been used widely by leaners but it is considered boring by grown-ups. Besides reading books are generally avoided by working and elderly people - my mother -in-law sleeps many time while reciting bed time stories to my kid. It require attention and concentration to grasp the content of it, on the other hand it is easy to connect with ongoing movies. It can be seen anywhere in theaters as well as home with some crispy snacks.

Reading stories were good mean of amusement in primitive days. However it has still kept it presence alive in specific age group. Also it is undeniable that currently movies are ruling everybody's hearts in all the ways.
sandipsinh   
Mar 13, 2014
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Which is better- Learning foreign language in home or host country? [5]

Hi
you have got good correction suggestion and i will like to add one too - try to write at least 350 words - mention examples depending on the topic.

If you are trying to prepare for TOEFL - view this link of
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sandipsinh   
Mar 13, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl - Do you agree or disagree? "The most important thing about a job is how much money [5]

Do you agree or disagree? "The most important thing about a job is how much money you earn in that job."

Almost everybody want to have good salaried job and they should, finance is a prime factor for which we work. Handsome digit salary is required to pay our bill and secure our future. But monetary gain has not outweighed other emotional and personal benefits which are required along with it. Further in my essay I will be appending my elucidation on importance of other factors with receiving salary for an employee.

There are various job profile that provide high salary but not necessarily promise growth to the worker. In order to increase their bank balance, they sabotage their future prospect. Many companies has promotional graph designed with its criteria that helps you to gain promotion as well as increment but not necessarily offer you job responsibilities or profile that you would enjoy performing. To quote an instance - one of my husband's engineer friend changed his job that gave him good position and package but unfortunately he find himself learning nothing in new job and concurred that good salary can be earned but not at the cost of limited career growth.

Secondly, it is equally imperative to be satisfied with your job as it is to earn attractive income. Job - satisfaction involve many factors such as work - environment, work - place, team support and other similar perks. By paying healthy amount to worker many companies demand their so much time that they do not get time to have their meals. Similarly you do not get better support team to take over your task and meet the target but you ought to accomplish it as you take good portion of companies' money. My brother did not got leave to offer his prayer in my grandmother's death ceremony despite pleading and promising to meet the goal in time.

Money can get us food and fashion but it is definitely not capable to buy us success and happiness. Money is essential but not everything in life. Our motive to earn money is to make our life luxurious but not restricted.
sandipsinh   
Mar 13, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1; Annual expenditure of a British school [10]

In all three years the greatest expenditure on staff salaries. But( LETTER AFTER FULL STOP HA TO BE AS PER 1ST ALPHABET) while other workers' salaries declined from 28% in 1981 to 15% in 2001, teachers salaries remained the biggest cost, ( SPACE SHOULD BE ONLY AFTER COMMA NOT BEFORE) AND TAKEN OVER 50% of total spending in 1991 and slightly dropped to 45% in 2001.
sandipsinh   
Mar 13, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl - a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to ado [4]

Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples.

Globally myriad customs are fallowed by people and it holds essential value in their lives. Customs inadvertently has become identity of various nations. Many countries shares similar custom, so other few countries has distinct custom. Similarly India is a country where people highly believe in their customs and rituals and there are few that can be adopted by other counties. My explanation on the same will be presented in my essay further.

In India, aged people stays with their families and their kids pleasantly takes the honor of taking care of their parents. This custom facilitate elders to receive best care, love and affection of their family reciprocating the same to their children and grand kids. Unlike in USA, parents are not left alone to fight with their serenity at their last stage of life. My grand - mother -in -law was bed ridden for more than five years due to her paralysis still she was taken care by me and my mother -in- law until she died. If our parents endure immense predicament to raise us, we must not leave them alone when they have given us their every treasure and in return demanding merely love form us. Delivering good care and living with our parents gives us immense pleasure of humanity.

Secondly Marriage and other alike ceremonies are performed with historically suggested religious procedure. Although it sounds a way over - boarding and out - dated but true essence of Indian culture and beliefs can be cherished and relived in these ceremonies. This custom of ceremonies also unites extended and nearby families and folks. To quote an instance - in my brother's wedding we invited his Russian friend with his family, he tried to be part of all the rituals that groom party has to perform. He liked the custom of bride's mother and family welcoming groom and his family with blessing and prayers. He specifically performed this ritual in his wedding back in Russia to involve his step mother - in -law in his wedding more as family and not as guest. Indian ceremonies and occasion prompt people to forget their grievances and get associate as family.

People around the world accept beneficial changes with full heart. Globalization has connected populace of many countries likewise adaptation of each other's advantageous culture can help us build better compatibility with each other. India's above mention customs can indeed help people to be connected with their parents entire their life and keep their roots alive through religiously performed ceremonies.
sandipsinh   
Mar 14, 2014
Undergraduate / Transfer Essay; "Where in the world did you learn to ride horses like that?" [3]

A tiny suggestion -
Horse - riding mania/ craze/ overwhelming desire rather then
Horse crazy stage, makes it little obscure - it does not specify whom are you presenting here yourself or horse. As it is essential to give clear idea about your writing in first sentence.
sandipsinh   
Mar 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / TOEFL -You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. [5]

Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
( I found this prompt little unsuitable for essay writing, However as i found it in one of the practicing site i am writing essay on this topic)

Globalization has brought countries of the world nearer to each other. Off late people use to commute places for commerce and trade that triggered industrial revolution and ignited the zeal of seeing other countries. This fashion started by Industrial revolutionaries allowed people to travel world for amusement and increasing their knowledge about the world. With the same will i would like to visit India.

Firstly, my parents and relatives are settle in Gujarat state of India. That serves me a very good reason to visit India and with increasing obligations of life i gets rare opportunity to see them. I desire to meet them and have some quality time with my siblings. With them I can travel several cities of Gujarat such as Surat, Ghandinagar and Ahmedabad to see various historical museum and Hindu temples. I precisely wants to visit Gandhi ashram constructed in honor of legendary freedom fighter of India - Mohandas karmchand Gandhi. This museum has various utensils, handmade thread processing machineries used by him. Gujarat's Gir forest is one of the prominent sanctuary of the India, I would like to view Lions from as near as it is possible. This species of lions roams in terrain provided to them by Gujarat Government. My visit to India will allow me to browse Gujarat state with my few family members who are residing in India.

Secondly, I have not seen even major places of India hence I would first like to see India. I have heard that India is been deemed as "Golden bird" therefore I want to find out what made primitive people to give this title to today's under developing country India. However India's unduly affluence is quit conspicuous from their wide range of culture as such I would like to see northern and southern states of India. I'll start from Jammu and Kashmir and end my journey at Mahabaleshwar. Although I will not able to see all the places of India due to lack of time, nevertheless i would get idea about mythology, history and creed and belief of the Indian populace.

Travelling other place for any reason gives us an opportunity to gain insight about the world. Also allows us to connect with our other brothers and sisters in different hemisphere of the earth. I discern before trying to know about other planets and life possibility in there, we must explore our world first, therefore i would start my travel to see the world form country INDIA.
sandipsinh   
Mar 17, 2014
Writing Feedback / Servings Per Container; Creative Writing: Lyric Essay [2]

Not sure is that me only, or all other readers will also find it vogue.

My brother waited tables in high school -hey your intro is very confusing - what do you want to express by this sentence.
DOES HE WEIGHED TABLE OR WAITED FOR THE TABLE.
Could make it more clearer. i mean due to this first sentence - the entire fallowing lines are difficult to give idea about your thought.
sandipsinh   
Mar 17, 2014
Writing Feedback / toefl essay: large company vs small company - which one is better? [3]

Hey hi ,

I am not an expert but learner from my own mistakes.

How about mentioning at-least one or few reasons of people preferring either small company or bigger company in one sentence for the intro.
1 the company will be more productive and obtain more profits. However, people have different opinions about workplace.
2 join in this kind of company - to get selected and work for prominent company/ or such prominent company.
3 This made me proud. As you can see, working in a large company is prestigious - - this personal experience of mine presented clear understanding of value of working in prestigious company.
sandipsinh   
Mar 17, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl - Differences between parents' generation and our generation. [5]

Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

"Every generation is smarter than the last one" is self-explanatory phrase in itself. Every generation give something new to the world, our parents' generation offered our generation the understanding of valuing love and humanity, a better version of science and technology, several inventions - e.g luxurious automobiles, organic food and computers. All these contribution by them presented our generation adequate world to live in. However, our generation is level above then theirs because we have better resources and platforms to make our generation better in all the ways.

If we talk about their contribution to humankind, the list would never end. The first and foremost contribution of our parents' generation is, they kept our historical and religious value fresh and acknowledged us about aspects of it. To quote an instance - Across the globe, parents of all religion would be teaching their children the ritual, custom and value fallowed by them in their RELIGION. On the other hand, today's generation is more focused in their advancement then keeping these religious faith and rituals in its ideal form. My grand - father used to offer prayer to god twice in a day and we on the flip side offer our prayer to god once in a week. As it said our family and custom is our identity, in todays' accelerating world our parents generation's this gift is not well taken care by our generation.

On the advancement side, it would be unfair to compare two generation as both of them would have their distinct share in building their generation remarkably well. Our parents' generation invented Mobile phone, which further had been advanced by our generation into smart phones. This incredible difference could be well experienced by people that have used Nokia 3310 and 3315 and now probably using Iphone. Our parents enrolled us in computer institutions to learn computers, we invented hi tech laptops and I - Pads that is merely small in size, but has all features of providing information about all current and previous generations. Further, the enhancement of world will flourished even better by next generations as it is unstoppable.

All - embracing inventions, values and rituals, lessons and experiences of our parents' generation have given us already built empire to make it best for our generation. As it is said change is disliked by many, yet that change is necessary to make the difference, I am glad that my generation invented many significant change to make the difference in the lives of humankind.
sandipsinh   
Mar 18, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl - Differences between parents' generation and our generation. [5]

dumi
you need to start with the feature that you are going to talk about how your parents' generation is different to yours. In this case it is the value system that your parents had. So, let's do it this way;

First, the value system of our parents vastly differed from the values and perceptions of our generation. Our parents were highly influenced by religious and traditional beliefs. They were more concerned about social ethics than us. For example, ?????????? (now give an EXAMPLE)

Dhumi bundles of thanks to you - for sparing time for reading, providing helpful suggestion and for making my doubt clear.

Here is one more question i want to ask :-

You suggest - to mention reason or point of explanation in first sentence of our para,right.
sandipsinh   
Mar 18, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1: How a thermos flask works. [4]

Next part is called vacuum flask THAT IS OR WHICH IS divided into two parts:
This part is divided into two parts: FIRST part that is near vacuum is poor conductor and SECOND- in glass envelope - silvered - contains component that FUNCTIONS to decrease infrared radiation. The third component is the outer case, which is part of the body in the outer flask.
sandipsinh   
Mar 18, 2014
Graduate / PERSONAL STATEMENT; MPH for SOPHAS [5]

I want to pursue a master's degree in public health,(COMMA) so that I can gain more skills and knowledge that is essential in handling complex tasks and advocating for public health and environmental protection
sandipsinh   
Mar 18, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl essay - AGREE OR DISAGREE - ONE LONG VACATION OR SEVERAL LONG VACATION. [6]

Some people believe that students should be given one long vocation each year. Other believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Everybody require some break from their tight schedules likewise students also require vocation form their intense academic schedules. Many people promote one long vocation system of the school because it would help student to start their course or academic year with strong zeal of learning. So other several, prefer numbers of short breaks during the year so that student can get rejuvenate periodically. In both the scenario students relief themselves. However, i discern that several small breaks will help students to be active in their academics.

Firstly, several vocations throughout the year will keep stress level of students low. Many educational bodies schedule its small vocations after term exams so that student's get relief form exam pressure. However, research done by universities proves that student's performance improves if they get regular breaks from their learning, preparation and examination schedule. Many colleges in foreign countries provide vocations to students after each semester that facilitate student to entertain themselves as well as prepare for their next semester. Also several holidays aid these students to not only amuse themselves but also arrange fund and materials such as books and references material for their upcoming course.

Secondly, scientific research provide several authentic survey of the students' performance after break. It states that students learning capability increase after having refreshing vocation. To quote an instance, in my school we used to get several vocations after our quarterly exams. During those vocations i used to analyze my performance in latest examination and used to go through those question or concept again to avoid making same mistakes. I also used to spend my time on developing some recreational activity or learning some sports or game. During my all vocations, I used to miss my school due to which I used to restart my session with great enthusiasm of learning and scoring good marks in new quarter.

Vocations are not only required by students but also by professionals and housekeepers. As it not only provide break to them from their regular commitment but also allows them to spend some time on themselves, heel stressful mind and boost desire of resuming to the regular schedule. Therefore schools should consider giving several small vocations to the students during the year.
sandipsinh   
Mar 19, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl essay - AGREE OR DISAGREE - ONE LONG VACATION OR SEVERAL LONG VACATION. [6]

dumi
First, "vocation" is not the right word. It is "vacation" that means a holiday. "Vocation" means a strong feeling of suitability for a particular career or occupation.

Great great thanks Dhumi.
Hey Dhumi - could you please tell how was the over all essay or how it was structured - is it anywhere alike the structure you have provided.

And the suggestion made by you in intro is indeed quit coherent. But can i ask - is mines was wrong or just required more direct and clear delivery of message. I hope you wont mind as i am tracking my self and mistakes, few days to face exam.
sandipsinh   
Mar 21, 2014
Writing Feedback / policies to deter negative effects; Urbanization is an important ongoing process [5]

.Employment choices are increaseING for the youngsters.They need not to rely on ANY one type of industry only.They can choose from the different options available.Moreover educational standard , standard of living and financial status is also improving by the urbanization.

I am agree( I AGREE OR I CONCUR) with the authors view if the urbanization keep on going at the same pace then it can disturb whole of our environment.If more and more people will move to the cities who will be left in the villages.Who will be going to

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