Writing Feedback / Should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose for them? [2]

In your opinion, should young people choose their professions or should their parents choose for them?

Young people these days are becoming more and more independent regarding to what they want to be in their future career. In many families, however, there are an old tradition in which parents still be the ones who determine children's professions. In this point, I would argue young people should be given full freedom about what to do with their chosen jobs.

Firstly, types of jobs nowadays are available in a wider range than few decades ago. Result shows that young people in this era tend to have a strong ability in gaining their career even if the jobs are common. Take Agustinus Wibowo, one of the famous writers in Indonesia, for an instance. Since he was in university, travelling has been his hobby and aspire as well. His experiences of visiting many places for years around the worlds, then, have brought him to be an explorer and traveller writer as his profession. He has been through both enjoyment and miserable along his journey to achieve his, perhaps unusual, career.

Another thing is that there is a human right in which people cannot force their desire to others, including parents to their children in the term of choosing professions. A film entitled 'Three Idiots' is an excellent example of this. Farhan, one of the players, is insisted by his parents to be an engineer, but he actually wants to be a photographer. Initially, he complies what his parents wish although in the end he decides to be a professional photographer since he do not obtain such a job satisfaction as an engineer. In this point, more attention should be pain on the fact that every person has different inclinations regarding to their careers because it is not only about money and status, but also happiness.

However, some parents hope that their sons or daughters should work based on their perspective. In my view, it happens in an old tradition in which children have responsibility to continue their parents' footsteps. For example, when their parents work as doctor, the children should do so. Those parents usually believe that they know well about their children and what profession Is best for them. They have prepared and encouraged their children to achieve such professions since they were kids. It is clear that when parents determine a job for their children, young people seem to have no opportunities to express their potential and desires.

In conclusion, it is evidence that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks if young people enable to choose their professions rather than their parents decide it for them. Where possible, parents and children should discuss related to their future careers in order to gain harmonious situations.

Writing Feedback / People's lives are more preferable nowadays than a century ago? [4]

Life now is better than it was 100 years ago. Agree or disagree?

People's lives have totally altered over a century in which life is much more preferable. As such, some people agree with this since there have been many inventions which facilitate people to do their activities effectively. Whilst I concur in this idea, I personally argue that living in these days tends to be more challenging for some people as they face a wide range of issues which emerges hand-in-hand with modern developments.

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Writing Feedback / The percentage of degrees granted in at the National University in 1990, 2000 and 2010 [2]

The pie charts give information about the percentage of degrees granted in four fields (Computer Science, Business, Law and Medicine) at the National University in 1990, 2000 and 2010.

Clearly, what stand out from the graphs shows that degrees granted in Computer Science showed an upward trend over the period while those in Business, in contrast, decreased significantly. Interestingly, two other programmes such as Medicine and Law remained virtually unchanged in the first and last year although there was a change in the middle of the period.

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Writing Feedback / People can eat different types of food effortlessly without any difficulties in preparing it. [3]

Nowadays, food becomes easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people life?YES/NO.

These days, preparing food is much easier than such an activity in the past. Some people have different views about this alteration. While many believe this has improved people's lives since their activities become convenient, others think this has also generated dire effects on people's lifestyle as many a person depends on cooking machines and instant seasonings to prepare food. However, I strongly believe people can gain more advantages of the change than its disadvantages.

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Writing Feedback / People's life would be completely different without Internet; IELTS essay [5]

The Internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different. Agree/disagree?

In the last three decades, one of the most important inventions having changed people's lives is the Internet. This has brought many alterations in the world these days. I agree with this opinion since the Internet has helped people to do many activities quicker and more effective. This great invention, however, has caused dire effects as well such as dangerous websites, unreliable information an unhealthy lifestyle.

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Writing Feedback / The components of a thermos flask to maintain hot liquid (IELTS 1) [4]

The picture illustrates the components of a thermos flask which is able to maintain the water's temperature in several hours. Clearly, what stands out from the graph shows while it looks small and simple, the design of this flask is fairly complicated. However, it has an essential function to keep water still warm.

In general, the thermos flask is arranged in two layers, both in its body and lid. First, the inner part, consisting of a silvered glass envelope having less infrared radiation and being a poor conductor, is the vacuum flask. Next, the outer one, is a case made of metal or plastic materials. The main element of this, the insulated support, is positioned in the bottom between the vacuum flask and outer case. It has the possibility to keep hot liquids on the inside of the bottle still warm within some hours.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, the picture reveals the thermos bottle is formed from cap and cup, composed of plastic. By opening the cup, people can consume the water. Not surprisingly, some heat can be lost in this step. Finally, this complicated thermos flask's design, is only about 30-40cm tall.

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Writing Feedback / The process of the greenhouse effect in the earth' surface - too much gases accumulated [3]

The diagram illustrates the process of the greenhouse effect in the atmosphere. Overall, what stands out from the graph shows while this cycle shows a natural process, human activities in recent decades have generated the amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere, increasing significantly. This causes the earth's temperature higher.

Basically, energy from the sun will be released to the earth's surface as heat. Not all this energy is reflected off the atmosphere, but some of this is radiated into space and trapped by greenhouse gases. The heat energy captured in the particular layers has generated a warm climate in the planet, namely 'the greenhouse effect'. However, this condition is worsened because of human activities producing the large number of emissions. As a result, the earth's temperature getting warmer gradually as too much heat has been trapped in the atmosphere.

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Writing Feedback / Universities' aims should provide more opportunities for students to study their own shake [2]

Some people think universities should provide knowledge and skills related to students future career. Others think that true function of universities is to give access to knowledge for its own shake. What is your opinion of the main function of universities?

These days, the main purpose of universities has generated a great deal of discussions. Some experts believe universities are the place for students to acquire professional qualifications as job prospects are very important. However, others think college's curriculum should focus on knowledge itself rather than skills because it gives them a chance to fulfill their lifelong ambition. While it is reasonable, I am totally convinced that universities' aims should provide more opportunities for students to study their own shake inasmuch as it is more beneficial to their comprehensive development.

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Writing Feedback / Running own business like Bill Gates or working at a company? [2]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

In today's world, many people run their own business due to the fact that it offers high profit. However, other people have different point of view and prefer to work in a company as they have a secure job. In my opinion, both sides have own merits and demerits.

There are several advantages of managing a business. First and foremost is that it gives potential to earn huge salary. For example, Bill Gates who is the co-founder and chairman of Microsoft Corporation, one of the best-known entrepreneurs, is the world's wealthiest person in early 2004. Although not all people can be like Gates or the high income is not a guarantee, the possibility to get lucrative money is available. In contrast, people who work at the firm know their annual payment and acquire little opportunity to add more financial.

Secondly, owning a start-up gives people the opportunity to work in a field that they enjoy. They do what they want, allow them to offer innovative products and services to customers. It gives them a sense of personal satisfaction. The last but not least, self employment have full authority to control their company. The most fascinating thing is no one can fire a business person. It will not happen if people work for someone else, they work under control as the company's regulations and also can be discharged anytime.

On the other hand, there are some drawbacks such as long and erratic work hours so that they have less time for personal life. Another bad thing, having a business incurs financial risk. The capital that they invest is in a gamble. Notwithstanding, all those problems can be handled by an understanding of business principle.

In conclusion, I would argue that the advantages of plunges into business ownership are clearly greater than the disadvantages. At the same time, being a worker at a company has more low-risk as a consequent of no investment. All in all, it depends on people's perspective of their own aspirations.

Writing Feedback / Because of media, Michael Jackson is not only known from his excellent voice [4]

"The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

It is true that contemporary mass media is much interested in expressing the lifestyle of famous people in entertainment and sports. However, some people believe that today's media both press and broadcasting should be more pay attention to enlighten folks' background as well. I totally agree for some extent, but the most important thing is how media is able bringing information which can affect positive impacts to public's perception.

These days, most media are keen on presenting many lists about personal lives and relationships of famous celebrities or sportspeople. For example to illustrate this point, Michael Jackson has reputation not only thanks to his excellent voice. His decision of plastic surgery, the way he dress, the amount of his wealth, and even his detail life habits has become public consumption which completely defeat his career as a singer. Furthermore, people tend to image this King of Pop by all those personal anecdotes, not because of his achievement. It is really annoying and might cause negative influence to the admirers. As a result, he cannot go everywhere without paparazzi of the press and public spotlight.

On the other hand, without media people are difficult to access news about stars instantly as well as they will have less influence upon society. For instance, people probably do not know about football player like David Beckham if the press agents do not updating his performances. In this term, media plays crucial function creating many spectators around the world by monitoring the sportsman. Notwithstanding, it is does not mean that media are obtained to explore and expose into his private life.

We should realize and understand that all the famed are just anybody else -- a human being. Whilst media claim that society has right to know about everything which link to the public figures, the truth is viewers or even fans does not need to grasp such things. In this term media should focus on the public figures' career. In addition, there are many exciting chronicles from typical of people which more inspiring and useful. Media should extent their materials and drive people to consider that we live in a real world and great diversity horizon, not only on the television screen or football field. The public needs to be aware about what general society used to feel and experience.

For the reasons mention above, it seems to me that the journalists should more conscious to report proper news and great stories from people whether well-known or not. Another thing is that how newspapers, magazines, televisions, radios, or online mass media can flourish and develop the way of people think to become constructive.