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Name: Muhammad Hasbi
Joined: Jun 29, 2015
Last Post: Oct 6, 2016
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School: English Studio, Kampung Inggris Pare

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hasbi   
Oct 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / The main reasons and several ways to tackle the inequality between developed and developing country [2]

The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before.

What do you think are the main causes of this difference
and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap?

In recent years, most of the people focus on issues related to the wide gap between rich and poor countries. There are many notions have been given around this problem. But, it still seems to be hardness to tackle. This essay will discuss the main causes why this issue is occurred particularly education and economic sectors and several measurements to solve it like improving the education system and encourage the developed country to help the developing country.

Nobody can doubt that in the education quality of inhabitants in the poor country particularly in rural areas usually have lower level rather than in the wealthy country such numbers of illiterate people which cause a lot of them become unemployment. In addition, monopolization in trade and economy sectors of developed nations can threaten the developing nations and it can lead to economic crises. And even is able to bring negative impacts to more hard circumstances. Also, lots of natural disasters usually occur in poor countries such us earthquakes, tsunamis, and landslides. These cases impact with killed thousands of people and destroyed a huge number of houses, buildings, and infrastructures. So, the government is forced to invest a lot of money for rebuilding.

Apart from these matters, there are several actions to solve these problems. It is clear that the education system should be improved due to it is the main cause many people become unemployment such developing school facilities. Not only this, the world organization related to the economic sector has the obligation to make policies related to this for reducing the deceitfulness in world trading. in my view, the rich country advisable help the developing country with supporting prosperity and invest money.

To conclude, there are some reasons why dissimilarity between wealthy and poor countries has existed these days that are education, economic crisis, and disaster. However, the collaboration with other sides and involving developed country is needed to deal with this case.
hasbi   
Oct 8, 2015
Writing Feedback / Using an automatic photo booth [3]

The picture depicts the description tools to using an automatic photo booth. Overall, it can bee seen that it consists with two main sides that are indoor and outdoor. In any case, this machine is solely produce 1 large format or 4 passport-sized images.

With regards to inside the box, there is an adjustable chair where people can shit before taking pictures. This side is completed with mirror and eye level, people who wan to using it should see and focus to eye level. After three seconds the light single directly will appear. Before photos are took, they have to close the curtain for obtain good quality photographs.

Turning to outside, this photo box is only available to print certain format like 1 large format or 4 passport-sized images. And these could be color or black and white types. In above part of this side, there is a square hole where the image result printed. This process is usually spend time a minute.



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hasbi   
Oct 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / The problem is whether the printed media will disappear because of the e-books? [4]

With recent developments in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspapers, and magazines will soon be a thing of the past.

Others feel that these forms of media will never disappear.

what is your opinion?


No body doubts that the expansion of technology like e-books is popular currently. Most of people indicate that the presence of it leads to disappear the printed media such as books, newspapers, and magazines. However, others believe that these types of media will be still exist. I firmly agree with the former idea rather than the latter one. This essay will discuss how the printed media vanishes in around the society and why the online media will become famous.

To begin with, printed media like books, newspapers, and magazines become uninteresting subjects for society in recent years due to efficiency to provide information. This is because, as a whole, lots of people move to electronic media. Take example what happened in USA is. In 2010, Committee of Concerned Journalistics (CCJ) has released that approximately 65 percent of Americans stopped to subscribe newspapers and magazines. Consequently, more than 300.000 printed media out of their business and move to release news by these type of media.

On the other hand, online media like e-books experiences a great progress and still exist nowadays. There are several factors related to this why its cases occurred. Firstly, it is one of media which is extremely easy to access, whenever and wherever the people can do it like using smartphone. In addition, electronic media can provide a lot of update information such the latest incident occurred in the world. Also, these kinds of media are predominantly free to access or read, compare with printed media which is usually need to pay.

To sum up, printed media like newspapers, books, and magazines can fade and will become dispensable things in modern era linked to topicality and speed matters of the news. I strongly believe that online media will be notoriously and my prediction is the last daily reader will disappear in 2043.
hasbi   
Oct 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Which one is more important, impressive buildings or public facilities? [5]

hi... ochio...
your writing is very good and easy to understand..
but i will you some advice:

firstly, before you writing, understand the task first?

this is your task: Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

and

Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience!
so, you must give reason why the government should invest in arts and in the impressive edifice

for explanation and developing paragraph, you can follow this pattern:

should the government spending money to build impressive buildings ?
if yes, why?
if no, why?

should the government spent on improving schools and hospitals?
if yes, why?
if no, why?
hasbi   
Oct 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Why People Must Living In Different Zones [3]

Hi....Ejepe...
your writing is very good, but i'm sad to say that:

before you writing, you should understand the task, what the question, what you should do?

in introduction your thesis statement solely cover one aspect of topic. only advantages. are the drawbacks neglected?

For example, Badui tribe in Banten, Indonesia. what happen in the are?
your explanation totally not clear in first of the body paragraph.
and there is no effect and conclusion in your paragraph.

your as a whole using multiple idea paragraph.!

in introduction you solely mention about advantages, not disadvantages..
so, why you mention in second body paragraph.?

please consider about these matters.

good luck
hasbi   
Oct 6, 2015
Writing Feedback / Shopping's responses of society in the capital city of Auckland [4]

The table and pie chart illustrate the proportion of new shopping's responses of society in the capital city of Auckland based on result of research. Overall, it can be see that females experience very satisfied in shops and restaurant rather than males. in another case, both of them is predominantly feel satisfied in design sector.

The percentage of males who feel very satisfied in shops at around 17 %. Compare with females that depict twice of males proportion. While mainly of men satisfied and abstained than female in this side, both indicate an equal dissatisfied percentage at 20 %.In restaurants field, although they have similar number on very satisfied and no comment, men reveal a huge number of satisfied than female at 55% and 35 respectively. Moreover, women refer fourfold dissatisfied of the percentage of men.

turning to design, both of sexes think satisfied is 62 % and 17 % very satisfied of total proportion. These figures feel 11 % on dissatisfied; likewise, no comment reaction 10 %



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hasbi   
Oct 6, 2015
Writing Feedback / To be born, live, study, work, and even die in the same place [2]

hi.. jida..

Nowadays, inhabitants frequently move from one place or position to another to other places. On the other hand, in bygone era in modern era, people usually lived in one location to be born, live, study, work even die in the same place.

In my opinion,
stayed in one place and moved to another place had advantage and disadvantage for each.
my advice you should make clear and specific what the advantages and disadvantages...
and also the task expected to you for showing more than one advantages and disadvantages.


I believe that living in same place in their lifetime had an advantage, you must consistent and coherence with your explanations
you said an advantage and in this paragraph you depict several advantages.

All in all, moving from place to place to find a new way is obviously better than staying in one place throughout the life. because they can get several experiences when we go in the different area and also try something new in there.

this conclusion solely cover one main topic of the passage. where is the disadvantages?

good luck
hasbi   
Oct 6, 2015
Writing Feedback / The satisfactionlevel of costumers according to a new shopping complex in the capital of New Zealand [2]

Hi...Irhamee

Overall, it can be seen that the views of visitors are positive about that complex---> what do you mean about positive, please make clear and make specific.

enjoying buying -->subject verb agreement,. there are double VERB.
ENJOY BUYING

please be careful to using adverb of event, because there are several adverbs which not mentioned in chart.
like:

buying daily basis in shops ,
those visitors do not like the facilities
etc..

good luck
hasbi   
Oct 6, 2015
Writing Feedback / How that enormous increase in flights around the world over recent years affects us? [2]

The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years.

what do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights?

do you think flights should be taxed more?


In the twentieth century, the global has shown a rise significantly in aviation services for various kinds of people lives like holiday, business and trade purposes in around the world. I deeply agree with this statement related to increasing level of using airplane. However, while flights have great profits for supporting people's requirements, there are many drawbacks of it according to welfare, cost, and even pollution.

To begin with, present of aircraft services have contributed to the inhabitant's lives more dynamic and efficient. Utilizing the airplane has allowed businesses and meets up with other colleagues or family members to easily cross over territorial boundary lines. For instance, in the last two decades the aviation corporation in Singapore reveals that predominantly people there using airplane for traveling that is approximately seventy percent. Consequently, demand of flights is becoming more advances in which people tend to shift consider the aircraft is primary transport to assist their daily activities.

However, beside that there are several advantages of flights. First of all, airplane are still become one of dangerous transportation due to increasing rate of flight accidents in the world annually which cause hundreds of people die. Secondly, burning fossil fuel of plane like avtur conclude it become the most pricey transportation and it also can lead to serious pollution in air which impact to dilute the ozone layers. Also, lack of facilities for supporting flights is not adequate and become an obstacle like aerodrome nowadays is still unavailable in rural areas.

In conclusion, presence of aviation conveyance has rendered some advantages for society regards on save time and effectiveness matters. But, in my notion, the airplane can cause serious problem such threatening accidents and damaging of environment.
hasbi   
Oct 6, 2015
Writing Feedback / Safe the Tourism Object [2]

hi mujahid,

i'm very sad to say that before you writing please understand the question or task.

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to.
How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience

Many individuals utterly argue that tourism industries have several dire effects in the nation where visitors go to. where your thesis statement? do you argue or agree with the statement?

This essay will examine the reason why some demerits is occurring in environments--->make clearly your issue, like a main idea or main topic

and its customs and then discuss some possible solutions--->make clearly also, what possible solution do you mean?

your give the reader repetition examples__Solely BALI,., why?
i recommend to you to give give example in foreign country,.
there are lots of tourism places in oversea areas,.,

good luck
hasbi   
Oct 6, 2015
Writing Feedback / Moving to a New Place or Just Staying in One Favorite Place? The first option is more exciting. [2]

Hi... aninii...

. In my opinion, the benefits are greater than the drawbacks we receive
what do you mean about the statement?

what the benefits?
what the drawbacks?

make clear your notion!

Some populations believe that moving to the new placeS brings .. .
To begin WITH, there is a lot of stress when citizens have planned to move to your new house. They have to pack all of their stuffs stuff (without "S" because Uncountable noun) and goods.

Fortunately, nowadays, there are so many hired moving to move

However, there are also several reasons why people move to the different areas during their lifetime and they believe there are more benefits for of human being.

Firstly, a new home, new place, and new athmosphere atmosphere bringS new opportunities and new spirit
for OF individual.

please pay attention to your grammar
and make different utilizing OF and FOR

your conclusion not cover all of body paragraph, related to your essay content or topic explanation.

good luck
hasbi   
Oct 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / There are three treatments to purify water: dam, waste and storm water [2]

The diagram illustrates the ways to reused rainwater. Overall, it can be seen that there are three treatments to purifying water these are dam water, wastewater and storm water. Predominantly of water is used to household purposes.

To begin with, rain water from the sky is collected in dam. After this, water is flowed to water treatment plant for filtering. Then, water already to be used for daily activity like for drinking water. For rainwater which fall on house's roof is particular drip cup is accommodated before water sent into home.

Before waste water from house recycled and reused again, it has to pass through wastewater treatment. In this step, liquid waste is treated the excess of water and then channel it to the lake. After that, result of the isolation leave water for purifying again and it is used again for household needs. Storm water treatment is a drainage canal to efflorescent to the river.



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hasbi   
Oct 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / The mass media affected people's society bigger than another - even more than politicians [5]

hi..irhamee.,.,

i think you should pay attentian and understand the topic before you writing,.,

The recent research has shown that media like the Internet and TV have a grater influence over people's livesthanpoliticians .
Which do you consider to be the greater influence ?

firtly.--you should write how the media can strong influence the society?
and secondly you should write about why the politicians can not trusted by people today?
good luck
hasbi   
Oct 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : The Effects of Tourism and How to Reduce Negative Impacts of It [2]

hi ...aniani..

I think the tourism will bring more positive effects impacts than negative impacts.

The predominant factors resulting in negative effect a negative effect or negative effects
of the countries which is travel destination the travel destination of tourist is littering of the environment in local place. For example For instance, cruise ships in Carribean Sea is are estimated waste more than 70,000 tons of waste.

so it will be one of the advantage advantages for them.
And another reason is the tourism will pay the tax to local government and it will bring it will brings a benefit for...

the tourist have has to...

this my advice, i expect that it can help your writing.
-you should check you grammar about plural and singular
-please pay attention about your task,.,
for example in this writing you are expected to explain "What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments" you are commanded to give relevant example related to this, and why you are mention about positive of tourism,.,?

probably yes, but you have to carefully answer the task.

good luck
hasbi   
Oct 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / World Wide Web and TV lead to immense influence of people lives then parliamentarians [3]

Recent research has shown that media like the Internet and TV have a greater influence over people's lives than politicians.

Which do you consider to be the greater influence?


answer:

Result of survey these days has explained that public media such the World Wide Web and TV lead to immense influence of folk lives then parliamentarians. I firmly agree with the former idea than the latter one. Firstly, this essay will discuss how the media influence people activities and secondly limited information provided by politicians.

It is undoubtedly that mass media playing a huge role around the people lives. This is because media like the internet and television are able to provide various kinds of information and knowledge include social news, economy even political conditions in each country. In addition, it also can extend lots of update news to society which facilitates them to access by mobile phone. Public media nowadays is used celebrities or famous persons to advertise products, which are more influential among the communities. There are proofs that these successful to persuade people.

Furthermore, the government officials are people who have competence in administration sector of a country and they are solely render particular information like public administration conditions even they beguile the society regards on status of a country. In my notion is that because they have wealth and power to manipulate people's actions. Take example in Bangladesh, in 2007 almost two thousand politicians did not nominated in general election retired from political parties due to people were not trusted them. It proves that inhabitants be lost to what the politicians informed. So, this case can lead to political discrepancy.

To sum up, the communities are no longer possible to put credence to government officials who are more often manipulate information and exploit their authority. However, I strongly believe that mass media have enormous impact to persuade people lives.
hasbi   
Oct 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / Initial teacher training qualifications of students who living in the UK between 2005/6 and 2006/7 [2]

The table illustrates the proportion of initial teacher training qualifications of students who living in the UK between 2005/6 and 2006/7. Overall, it can be seen that in the exception of PGCE, all of ITT figures increased sharply in the last year.

In 2005/6, total teaching qualifications obtained stood at 31.390 with proportion 23.865 for female and 8.065 for male. Next year, while the total of this figure grow slightly by 15, there was a slightly increased of the number of male at around 7.610 while female reached a peak to 24.335. On the other hand, total of PGCE fell gradually from 24.405 in 2005/6 to 23.900 in 2006/7. This case followed by female and male at around 1.5 % by male.

Furthermore, Bed and other degrees showed low percentage of ITT qualification was that approximately 14.5% male. Total of this group rose steadily by 480 in 2006/7, with proportion 6.920 for female and 1125 for male.



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hasbi   
Oct 4, 2015
Scholarship / Executive and co-founder of the Information and Communication Technology Students Association [6]

Hi...Nana...!

if you want to write related to your leadership experience, you should consider about your challenge to become a leader in your organization.
and your essay not contain about it.
firstly, actually, you must show one of serous problems in your organization when you still become a leader, and explain your threat, solution, measurements to deal with this problems. if need, explain also why you took this measurement

The second, organization is one of place to collaborate with other members of the organization, you can depict about your relationship with them and how do you collaborate with them.

thirdly, in each organization definitely has several levels of position start from members until the leader or executive. and your position is co-founder or executive, please tell your coordination with other divisions

good luck
hasbi   
Oct 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / Globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of culture identity, is it true? [2]

As mass communication and transport continue to grow societies are becoming more and more alike leading to phenomenon known as globalization, some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of culture identity.

To what extend do you agree o disagree?


Answer:

It is obvious fact that predominantly countries in the world experience a phenomenon namely globalization which is effort to improve quality of life such expand public facilities include transportation and communication. Most of folks tend to feel that it can influence and cause culture identity become disappear. In my view, I partially agree due to the fact that globalization probably can help local culture each country such in promotion side, it would be faded if people cannot face the globalization judiciously.

To begin with, undeniable that globalization playing an immense role to develop cultures in each country in the world, particularly make a culture become famous in foreign country. It tends to help to promote the local culture in widespread area. In addition, people might be effortless to studying culture each other due to the advance of communication transport, with devices now able to communicate long distance. Culture also can improve tolerance and unity between person and others. Evidence of this can be seen with harmony of religious community life in the world and increasing of respect's values such pluralism matter.

However, the effect of presence globalization has not all been positive. In my notion for future life or long-terms impact, it seems imbalance between globalization and culture. Take example to Betawi traditional culture in Indonesia which is well known Ondel-ondel toys. In my opinion Ondel-ondel is impressive culture of society who living in Jakarta. Because of predominantly people adopt modern culture from a certain country it cannot be seen more often these days. As a result people tend to go with the stream and it is definitely causes them neglected their own cultures. There is no doubt that people had less nationalism, respects, and loss their identity.

To sum up, despite the fact that there are benefits to the culture regards for adopting the globalization, I believe that these solely help the culture become more popular in other countries. It is unlikely that easy to getting loose from this situation, so folks should be smart and it is my hope if they want to follow a trend which is part of the globalization.
hasbi   
Oct 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / Ielts Task 2: Even though globalization affects the world's economics in a very positive way,... [2]

Hi, Pdeep,.,

What the topic your essay,.,?

this is my suggestion,
first, you should understand the question. and make differ the background, facts, opinion. and give your thesis statement.

World is converting to the global village which shift world economics to become globalization. However, it does have certain merits but and demerits as well. Which are going to discuss in below paragraph.---> your introduction is shorter. where the thesis statement?

and is not clearly what do you will write in the body of passage.

First paragraph. your explanation predominantly use short sentence. make complex your sentence
and i think you should follow a pattern for making good paragraph.
for one idea paragraph like this.
main idea--> explanations--->example-->effect--->conclusion(if need)
or multiple idea paragraph like this:
idea-->explanation, idea-->explanation, idea-->expalanation,

and conclusion is not cover all of the explanation of content from all paragraphs.
and understand the question, what your tasks?

good luck
hasbi   
Sep 30, 2015
Writing Feedback / Nokia had the biggest market share among the cell phone brands between 2005 and 2006 [2]

The table illustrates the global market share of the cell phone for workers based on factories from 2005 to 2006. Overall, it is immediately apparent that Nokia witnessed the highest percentage of mobile phone market share over the time frame

By 32.5 percent in 2005, Nokia was the most popular mobile phone in the world. Next year, it experienced an increased at 35 percent. Compare with others, this figure decreased sharply from at 19.2 percent in 2005 to 16.2 percent in the last period. Meanwhile, Motorola and Sony Ericsson grew gradually during a two-period by 3 % and 1 % respectively.

On the other hand, three other mobile phone brands reminded declined. Samsung phone fell gradually during the period from 12.7 % to 11.8 %. Furthermore, LG indicates dropped slightly of the number of market share by 0.4 % in the next year. BenQ mobile phone showed low percentage, no more than 5 %.



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hasbi   
Sep 30, 2015
Writing Feedback / Market share of the well-known mobile phone brands between 2005 and 2006 [3]

Hi...bayuwibowo..
your overview is very good, but, you must consider about comparison or thesis statements about the data.
and brand had leading in a two year period in a two-year period

Nokia is was the best brand in the survey there is no mention about this data from a survey ,.Nokia depicted the highest percentage of cell phone market share, this brand not only had increased their market by 2.5% but also dominated with over than thirty percent in this following years.

there are many repetitions of word "brand"
hasbi   
Sep 30, 2015
Writing Feedback / Global Mobile Phone Sales in a 2-year period [2]

The chart illustrates the global market share of mobile phone cell phone sales in a 2-year period for manufactures

there was a slight increase in Motorola's phone market

in contrast, The Number of Samsung's market decreased gradually between from 12.7 percent to 11.8 percent
hasbi   
Sep 30, 2015
Writing Feedback / A lot of folks argue that the level of violence action between teenagers have increased [3]

Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some Psychologists claim that the basic reasons for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


answer:

currently, lots of folks argue that the level of violence action between teenagers have increased. Regards on indicates of some psychologists, it is occurred due to the children never get social and emotion learning from school and their relatives. This essay is partly agree with the issue, I am firm believe that the main factor of violent action appear in around the children is an environment affects. This essay will explain related to this.

It is a common fact that the number of violent crime among young children increased sharply. This is because the content of learning is rarely to teach them about social life and how to respect to each other. Taking example in Somalia, one of the unsafe countries in the world, the number of crime action in this area growing up annually, particularly teenager. Such the robber cases witnessed more than five cases per day. In fact, most of them never achieve knowledge about social life in their school even in their family. As a result, it is definitely that they do not understand about living harmonious in society and solely consider that fight is the great way deal with their matters.

However, there are several factors cause violent actions between young teenagers. The environment playing an immense role to influences children's behavior. Teenager is the period of life when person effort to find their identity, they are deceivable and can be affected. Firstly, while bad environment where they life is not definitely influenced all teenagers become bad behavior, predominantly of them following this conditions. In additions, teenagers who live such in thief area could follow the habit of folks there became a thief. Also, several obligation of government related to youngsters matters are not suitable include forced them to develop their creativity.

To conclude, although criminal actions of people under 18 age group is less attention about social and emotion learning from their school and family. I believe that environment where they live play an essential part how they behave every day. Government should pay attention for these matters especially for youngsters for the next generation.
hasbi   
Sep 30, 2015
Graduate / Help with Statement of Purpose for MS in Engineering and concentration in chemical engineering!! [4]

Hi, Brooke..

statement of purpose is requirement to enroll at an university.
in my experienced, there are the two generic questions that need answering, at least inferentially, in most Statements of Purpose are: "Why are you interested in this program?", and "What makes you special?".

This allows you about the opportunity to provide Faculty substantive information. you can demonstrate that they your homework about the program and thought seriously about the strengths and weaknesses.

Write all your past accomplishments - academic, extra curricular, social contributions, sports - whatever you've done well in life. Also write all the things that you feel or care for strongly.

What is it that you want to do in life? What is the career you want to choose for yourself in the future and why?

Write the area that you want to study further in. How will taking up this course of study help you achieve your long term career goals.

good luck,
hasbi   
Sep 29, 2015
Writing Feedback / What is the life in a media-rich society? [3]

It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.

It is firmly argue that most of people depend on and influenced by media in daily basis. Presence of it be able to fast influence people and the role of media is very essential for people lives. This is essay will discuss how the media can expose and cause familiar each person in society and the drawbacks of media-rich for them.

There is no doubt that media playing immense role these days in social life. It is capable to make exist or famous each person. Taking example in the United States in last two years ago, lots of people take benefit of the media for campaign purposes. Such Donald Trumpt, one of the US president candidates, he become famous there even in the world due to media publications such on the TV or newspaper. It is a proof that media-rich is immediately change mindset people's sense and affect them to trust the information content what they have published.

However, there are several negative impacts of media for human lives. Firstly, information of the media sometimes consists of wrong news and it is definitely that there is no guarantee regards to propriety of these news. In addition, several media organizers usually present provoke news which is aim to persevere between one social group with each others. Also, the cost of media publication extremely expensive and tend to has low flexibility, such a tabloid.

To sum up, most of people extremely believe that media can affect people lives. However, the media can provoke each group with others due to humiliate news. People should smart and consider to trust the content of information have been provide by media.
hasbi   
Sep 28, 2015
Writing Feedback / Rail transport in four countries (UK, US, Japan and Italy) in 2007 [2]

The table indicates that the proportion of using train in four countries (UK, US, Japan and Italy) in 2007. Overall, it can be seen that Japan was the highest level of using rail transport than other countries. USA predominantly using trail transport for carrying goods while Japan using it for passenger purpose.

The number of people using rail transport not include metro in Japan was 27, which was the highest percentage of using this transportation and it had 1980 passengers per head of population. Meanwhile, the capacity of cargo than able to carried solely 23.01 billion tons. On the other hand, while USA depicted low in the number of people using rail transport just at 0.3 and only 80 passengers per head of population, the number of cargo carried reach up to 2,820 billion tons.

UK and Italy have similarities of the number of using trains. For both countries, people using trail transport around 5.9 and 5.5 respectively. The number of passenger kilometers per head of population at approximately 780 and the average of brought things purpose solely 22 billion tons



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hasbi   
Sep 28, 2015
Writing Feedback / Living in a big city - means more robbers and criminals around [7]

Living in a big city has many reasons.inIn a bigthis city people can make alot a lot of choices for studaystudy and find best great works.

Big city-----Repetition

but But in a small cites it is so difficultdifficult for example is no option for study at university big cityes cities many reich rich and intelligent people live . There are tidy and big restaurants , cinemas entertainment centers, a lot of parks etc. so people want to move to the city

for archtect:
please pay attention about spelling or typo each word before upload your writing.
there are many mistake words.
and how to use aposthrophe in paragraf, for instance, using point. there are no space before point.
and Upper case after point.

and carefully and enjoy your writing.
hasbi   
Sep 27, 2015
Undergraduate / Life is a process of learning, studying, and changing. Keep a kindness nature when becoming an adult [4]

I've never knowknown how to be the eldest sister

I feel thankful that my family gives me chance

My family experience had taught me how to become a tough person, how to confront hardships, how to overcome obstacles, how to be a leader, how to become independent, how to take care of others, how to contribute, how to given, and how to tolerate..etc,.,

there are so many kinds of experiences, why you didn't grouping this matters. i think you shouldn't mention one by one.

please pay attention and carefully to use SEMI COLON (; )

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