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IELTS Task 2 : Encouraging sense of competition or cooperation in childhood [8]
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion=======================================================
Sense of competition and cooperation are beneficial in adulthood. Obviously, some people say that the two senses should be encourages as soon as possible in the childhood. Some other, however, argue that it was unnecessary to teach in the early stage of live. In my opinion, both of sense can be discuss with several reasons.
The sense of competition is sharper a soft skill of children. Educating children with such skill can be implying as they join in a competition. Probably, taking interest in playing on musical instrument, parents can be registered their daughter to a local musical competition. Other ways to achieve competitions values are with rewarding children in their good school mark. Thus the sense of competition boosts motivation of children to gain the best of their ability, the beneficial values in order to reach personal goals in the adulthood is easily happen. Taking my niece experiences in facing her interest in photography, while her parents includes her in many photography competition since her teens, nowadays she becomes a professional wildlife photographer in a national magazine.
On the other hand, competition might rise the tendency to defeat other people in such terrible ways. Based on this view, encouraging cooperation skill should be stance stronger. Though children is taught become cooperative and altruistic, in adulthood, adapting with the circumstance of work field would be easily did. One of the ways to teach cooperation skill is with sharing. Obviously, the smallest entity starts with sharing among siblings. In fact, there is a success story started with the way their parents teach them to share with other. Dan Pearman, a Paddle Power organization founder, reaches success in distributing bicycles around the world as his ambitions to share benefits to other people, "my success as a result of advice to share with others", he said.
Having said that encourages children with cooperation or competition has beneficial values in for children later life. While competition trains children to reach their goal in adulthood, cooperation benefits to deliver sense of help. I believe that all mentioned feature having each advantage depends on the way we teach children in their childhood.
