niesaysi
Mar 7, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Private car ownership has grown, led to traffic congestion [3]
The advantage of this policy is that the one who would like to purchase a car will have to consider carefully -- what is to consider about?
Another opinionAdditionally , is thatthe government could make and ban enforces laws for these transport types.
For example, we need to stipulate clearlythat which streets the cars are or not allowed to run in.
Besides, for the streets where the traffic jam is frequentlytaketaken place..
Your essay is evidently short. Actually, second and third paragraph can be combined as one. I can't see any reason to separate them.You still need to present more specific examples to support your main topic.
The advantage of this policy is that the one who would like to purchase a car will have to consider carefully -- what is to consider about?
For example, we need to stipulate clearly
Besides, for the streets where the traffic jam is frequently
Your essay is evidently short. Actually, second and third paragraph can be combined as one. I can't see any reason to separate them.You still need to present more specific examples to support your main topic.