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Oct 9, 2014
Graduate / Understanding human behavior through the eyes of an economist - Master of Economics Application [3]
- Your introduction is too long and irrelevant. An effective masters SOP app immediately states the reason why you want to pursue higher studies in Economics and what benefits you hope to gain from it. More importantly, you need to present an overview of how you feel you will be able to positively affect the industry that you are a part of.
- How exactly does this experience apply to your purpose for masters studies? How can masters studies help you understand virtual currency? What will you be majoring in so that you will develop a deeper understanding of that economic world? The story is good. But it does not really lead us towards seeing a solid occupational goal for you.
- How do you expect the university to help you do that? What are your educational plans? Educational goals? Internship possibilities?
We need to make sure that the essay content is solid before we can correct the grammatical errors. Once you have addressed those problems we can proceed with fixing the grammatical issues :-)
- Your introduction is too long and irrelevant. An effective masters SOP app immediately states the reason why you want to pursue higher studies in Economics and what benefits you hope to gain from it. More importantly, you need to present an overview of how you feel you will be able to positively affect the industry that you are a part of.
- How exactly does this experience apply to your purpose for masters studies? How can masters studies help you understand virtual currency? What will you be majoring in so that you will develop a deeper understanding of that economic world? The story is good. But it does not really lead us towards seeing a solid occupational goal for you.
The more I learn about the development of a rudimentary economy and trading, the more I realize that my economics knowledge is insufficient. I hope to learn more about behavioral economics and game theory in particular
- How do you expect the university to help you do that? What are your educational plans? Educational goals? Internship possibilities?
We need to make sure that the essay content is solid before we can correct the grammatical errors. Once you have addressed those problems we can proceed with fixing the grammatical issues :-)