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Name: Chinky Behl
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Last Post: Nov 22, 2017
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chinkybehl22   
Nov 22, 2017
Writing Feedback / It is observed that some languages is diminishing as time goes. Saving those or not? [3]

Introduction is perfect.

However, after giving your opinion, you should also write a separate paragraph to conclude the essay. Conclusion should represent the gist of the discussion points of the essay

Moreover, there are a few grammatical and sentence construction which I would like to highlight:

1st paragraph:
... it is government's duty ...

2nd paragraph:
... Taroko tribe are is no longer exist.

3rd paragraph:
... used for fewer the few people ...

... culture were was not developed ...
... every citizens have has enough food ...

4th paragraph:
I personally believe that culture cultural diversity is ...
Henceforth, I am completely agree ...
chinkybehl22   
Nov 22, 2017
Writing Feedback / task 2 essay : Gender Inequality Aspect In The Professional Zone [8]

There are few sentence construction which I would like to recommend:

1st paragraph:
In a naturally way, ... that between women ... relate with to many social ...

Although we are in the 21st century and the differents differences are ...
In my opinion , I think the exception ...and society aslo also about physique.....

2nd paragraph:
Normally, they are borned in order to believed that they ...
Hence , in a few ...
... women's duty are is tied with ...
Most of the family, ... who looks after them ... person who goes out ...

3rd paragraph:-
... women's character are is too ...
... be easy to make and ...
Therefore , their thinking are is simpler than men , but ...
Their attitude comes from mood ...
... situations are good , but in a lot of works are not ...
chinkybehl22   
Nov 21, 2017
Undergraduate / Will it be beneficial to teach students of distinct abilities collectively? [5]

TOPIC :- Some people think educating children of different abilities together will benefit them. Others think different abilities together will benefit them. Others think intelligent children should be taught separately and be given special courses. Discuss both the views and your opinion.

all in class should be treated equally



It has been observed that the intelligence level differs from one kid to another. Some people believe that it will be beneficial to teach students of distinct abilities collectively. However, there are a few who think that sharp-minded kids should be taught separately to impart specialized training courses. This essay will discuss both the views followed by my opinion.

Some people think that students at different intelligence quotient should be taught together as it will enhance the performance of the average students. While interacting with the intelligent kids, they will learn new things and enhance their knowledge. These interactions would help them clear their doubts and they can grasp best practices of the sharp-minded kids to fetch good results.

However, there are a few who are in a favor of a separate section for the intelligent kids to sharpen their skills and to impart skill based special courses. They feel that due to the same understanding level, they will grasp things efficiently within no time. A personalised class specially for these kids would enhance their skills and increase their concentration level without being disturbed by the mischievous kids. Specialised courses would help them master the skills and shape up their career for a better future.

In my opinion, all the students irrespective of their intelligence level, should be taught together. On a daily basis, they will interact with other kids of different understanding level. They will learn to adjust to each other and increase their patience level. This would further enhance their overall personalities.

To conclude, people should encourage the education system to teach all the students of different abilities together. This will not just improve the performance of the class, but also help in the overall development of the children. Henceforth, all the children should be treated equally and given a fair chance to enhance their knowledge.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 20, 2017
Writing Feedback / Some people are afraid of new things therefore they stick to what they know [5]

TOPIC:- Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that the change is always a good thing. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowledge or experience.

scared of change



In this competitive world, most of the people welcome change and take it positively. However, there are a few who avoid changes in their lives and prefer to lead a conventional lifestyle. This essay will discuss both the views, followed by my opinion.

Nowadays, changes are inevitable. In order to achieve success and ease the daily activities, people prefer to bring changes, in terms of adopting technological advancement, exploring new career opportunities, etc. They feel that to achieve something big, they need to come out of their comfort zone and try to explore new things. Moreover, it is observed that changes are also done to cope up with existing problems. For example, the introduction of electric cars and solar cookers was widely accepted as it helped to conserve the non-renewable resources and reduce pollution.

However, there are a few , especially old aged people, who are resistant to these changes. They prefer to stick to the conventional methods to carry out their daily activities. They feel that as they have mastered these skills, adopting new methods would be a risky affair to deal. They fear to experience the complexity and challenges of learning new techniques. For example, old people prefer a basic phone over smartphone as they find it complex to operate and they fear that their inefficiencies will be showcased to their grandchildren, who might make fun of them.

In my opinion, in order to survive efficiently, people should accept the changes in their lives. As these changes make them competitive and help them to excel. Adapting the technological advances or even a small change in their lifestyle can make a big difference leading to a better and advanced future.

To conclude, people should welcome the change as it positively impacts their lives. It's not only comforting the individuals, but also benefit the society by eradicating environmental threats. This further boost the growth and development of the nation.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 20, 2017
Writing Feedback / Companies should actively recruit younger employees who have greater potential to learn [4]

Overall good read.

However the introduction should paraphrase the topic along with your opinion.
In this essay, you have started the discussion in the introduction itself which should not be an ideal case to fetch good scores.

Nowadays, companies should hire young people who have a zeal to learn new things. As it is observed that the learning abilities of the individuals decreases with age. I completely agree with this statement because of the following reasons.

Hope this helps.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 19, 2017
Writing Feedback / The international community should reduce or eliminate the debt of the world's poorest countries [5]

TOPIC:- The international community should reduce or eliminate the debt of the world's poorest countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

financial aid in terms of debt



Nowadays, it has been observed that the developed countries provide financial aid in terms of debt, to the under-developed nations. There is a proposal to either completely waive-off or lower down the debt given to these countries. I partially agree with the proposal.

On one hand, completely writing-off or reducing the debt of the poorest countries will help in the growth and development of these countries. By taking financial aid from the developed nations, the underdeveloped countries are trapped in a vicious circle. They utilize this amount to improve the infrastructure of the country and in providing an efficient and advanced healthcare facility to its citizens. However, in order to pay back the loan amount along with huge interests, they end up utilizing their nations reserve. Henceforth, by waiving off the loan amount, they would concentrate on implementing measures on improving the economic conditions and the standard of living of the population instead of diverting their focus on exploring options of paying back the amount.

On the other hand, lowering or nullifying the debt amount of the underdeveloped nations would create a negative impact on the developed countries. As per the international treaties, legal and ethical rules and regulations have been laid down to provide financial aid to these countries. Exempting the poor countries from financial liabilities will be considered, a biased approach. This would create negativity and may disturb the peace and harmony of the nations across the world.

In my opinion, it is a good option to lower down the debt amount of the underdeveloped nations to boost their economy. However, the amount should not be completely waived-off. As these nations could take undue advantages in the future, by making it a practice. They could completely get dependant on these financial aids for the development of the nation.

To conclude, reducing or eliminating the loan amount of the poor countries can contribute to the overall growth of these nations. However, this could lead to unrest in different parts of the world. Henceforth, the proposal should be planned wisely before executing it.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 19, 2017
Writing Feedback / Identity, Turkey's history and conflict with the west [3]

It will be really helpful, if you can write the actual topic in order to seek feedback.
There are few sentence construction which I would like to highlight based on what I grasped.

3rd paragraph:
But the most the drastic changes ...

6th paragraph:
... country who seeks to ... doubted it's its candidacy.

hope this helps!!!
chinkybehl22   
Nov 19, 2017
Writing Feedback / Writing letters on a paper is obsolete nowadays? [6]

Overall a good read, quite informative.

There are few sentence construction and spelling mistakes which I would like to highlight.

1st paragraph:
... writing a letter, despite ...

2nd paragraph:
... messaging is an a good example ...

3rd paragraph:
... habits with ease for three the following reasons.
... proofs which scientiests scientists merely base on in to do research on many fields.

... wedding parties or bussiness business meetings ... sincerity and formality formality.

... observing their handwriting handwritten letters.

4th paragraph:
... view that comtemporary contemporary communications and writing letters are have equally essential ...
chinkybehl22   
Nov 18, 2017
Writing Feedback / The top performing sportsmen earn huge amount of money as compared to people in other professions [5]

TOPIC:- Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other professions. Some people think this is justified while others think it as unfair. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

sport stars should not be overpaid



Nowadays, top performing sportsmen earn huge amount of money as compared to people in other professions. Some people consider it a rational approach. However, there are a few who think it is unjustifiable. This essay will discuss both the views in detail, followed by my opinion.

Sports professionals with outstanding performance should be overpaid as it is a short-lived career which requires rigorous hard work as compared to other professions. This field demands a strict, disciplined life with extensive physical efforts, consistent practice, a fixed diet schedule to bring pride and glory to the country. Due to such tough requirements, people in this field have an average career span of 10-15 years. As sports professionals have limited tenure, they should be rewarded with high monetary gains to acknowledge their excellent performance.

However, there are a few who think that top performing sportsmen and women should not have high salaries as it is a biased approach. They feel that there are other critical professions which are more valuable to the country as compared to the sports field. For example, the professions, like doctors, social worker, works for the betterment of the society. Their efforts not only help to reduce the social issues prevailing in the community, but they also contribute in providing a healthy environment. As a result, they significantly contribute to the growth of the country. Henceforth, their efforts should be equally recognized along with the sports professionals.

In my opinion, although there are some logical reasons for huge earnings of the top performing players, people from other professions should also be equally appreciated in terms of lucrative monetary benefits for their outstanding contribution. As all the professions are critical in their own field and contributes to the overall development of the country.

To conclude, sports people delivering excellent performance should not be overpaid in comparison to other professionals who make a significant contribution to the society.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 18, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTES Task 2: Online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. [6]

As the feedback is already given on the introduction which I also found that there is a scope of improvement.

There are few sentence corrections which I would like to make:

2nd paragraph:
... purchasing merchandises online ...
... a laborious chores for me ...
... walk around supermarket , try to find ...

... so different for from searching items ... I need , then the items ...

3rd paragraph:-
... the spot that as is convenient for ... rent is generallly higher ...

... necessary to located in the urban center
chinkybehl22   
Nov 17, 2017
Writing Feedback / TOPIC:- Crime is a problem all over the world, crime prevention will make no difference. [2]

TOPIC:- Crime is a problem all over the world. Some believe that crime prevention will make no difference, others disagree. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

ways to reduce the criminal activities



Nowadays, crime is a serious issue across all parts of the world. Some people think that preventive e measures can control criminal activities. However, there are a few who are not in an agreement with this thought. This essay will discuss both the views followed by my opinion.

Preventive actions, like efficient security system, strict and inevitable punishments against any unlawful activities, etc. will lower down the frequency of criminal activities. People would develop a sense of fear and restrict themselves to commit crime. It has been observed that the crime rate is subsequently lower in the countries where there are strict rules and punishments against the criminals as compared to other countries. Moreover, advanced safety measures, like installation of CCTV cameras, screening of people in public places, patrolling of police officers at crowded places etc. will prohibit people to indulge in any malpractices. As a result, the crime rate will be reduced, leading to a secure environment.

However, there are a few who think that the preventive measures will not have any significant impact in controlling the criminal activities. They feel that no controls can stop a mentally-ill person to commit a crime. As these people lack an understanding between good and bad things. They unintentionally indulge themselves in the criminal activities without realizing its consequences. Moreover, people after consuming drugs tend to lose control over their senses resulting in unlawful activities which lead to dreadful outcomes.

In my opinion, although there are some unintentional criminal activities for which there are limited control mechanism, proactive measures should be put in place as it will lower down the crime rate to a large extent. Henceforth, providing a safe place for individuals.

To conclude, preventive controls, like proactive safety measures, stringent punishment will drastically reduce the criminal activities around the world.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 17, 2017
Writing Feedback / Young members of a society wants independence from their parents [4]

Overall good read, there are few sentence construction errors for which I would like to give suggestions:

1st paragraph:
... become self-sufficient quicker in the early stage of their life will benefit the most and would have a better life afterward in future.

2nd paragraph:
... and to do that , they obliged to ...

... leave their parents house , which makes ...
chinkybehl22   
Nov 16, 2017
Writing Feedback / We should make factories and other forms of industry pay for all the pollution that they have caused [3]

TOPIC:- Most pollution, especially air and water pollution, is caused by industry. If we want to protect the environment, we should make factories and other forms of industry pay for all the pollution that they have caused. That is the only way to make sure that the owners will make a serious effort to reduce the pollution that they cause. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

who is to blame for the environmental pollution?



It is quite evident that industries are the biggest contributor for all types of pollution like, air, water etc.. In order to safeguard the environment, these industries should pay for the damage, they have caused. This is an ideal solution to create a sense of responsibility amongst the owners to reduce the pollution. I completely agree with this idea.

In my opinion, imposing heavy taxes and strict penalties to the industries following unhealthy practices leading to environmental issues is the most efficient way to reduce pollution. This will force the industry owners to restrict such activities leading to decline in pollution level and enforce green surroundings. Moreover, due to this step they will incorporate advanced and environmentally friendly techniques which would significantly contribute to the overall growth of the country and provide a better and healthy future.

Furthermore, incorporating such measures would help develop a sense of social responsibility amongst the industry owners. It is observed that the humans are resistant to change. However, these forced changes will make them aware about the criticality of the issue and its adverse damages in the long run. They will be inspired to become more responsible in eradicating these malpractices. Henceforth, developing trust and harmony amongst the citizens and increase the happiness quotient of the country.

In a nutshell, making the industry owners accountable for this negative development is the best way to tackle environmental issues, like air, water pollution etc.. It is a win-win solution for both the owners as well as the country by providing a healthy environment and advanced environmentally friendly techniques to run industrial operations. Henceforth, in my opinion, such actions should be encouraged for an environmentally-safe future.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 16, 2017
Writing Feedback / Idea of going abroad for university study is an exciting prospect for many people [6]

Hello,

Thanks for all the valuable feedback, based on the feedback I wrote it again. Please suggest if its better and if there are any recommendations:

Nowadays, many students go abroad for higher education. Although this offers students some benefits, they experience several unavoidable challenges while studying in a foreign country. Due to which, it is argued that students should continue their studies in the native country. This essay will argue both the sides, followed by my opinion.

On one hand, students should be encouraged to study overseas as it enhances their overall personality. They interact with other pupils from different parts of the world. As a result, they become confident and competitive. These interactions help them build networks which benefit them in fetching lucrative job offers in the long run. Furthermore, studying abroad, especially in a developed nation enhances the knowledge and skills of the individuals. They get well-versed with the latest tools and technologies. As a result, they implement the learning and best practices in their home country. Henceforth, significantly contributing to the overall growth in the country.

On the other hand, there are many difficulties which international students experience while studying abroad, making the belief strong to stay at home. Students after going to abroad tend to experience a culture shock and language barrier. They are frustrated after observing a different lifestyle and culture. They develop a feeling of homesickness which further leads to depression and mental stress. Moreover, due to the language gap, they find it difficult to express themselves in front of others. As a result, they are often misunderstood.

To conclude, I completely disagree that students should stay at home. In my opinion, although there are some initial challenges like culture and language gap experienced by the students after going abroad, the advanced knowledge and specialized skills attained by them will ensure a bright future for themselves and their country. Henceforth, pupils should be encouraged to study abroad instead of staying at home.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 16, 2017
Writing Feedback / Universities should spend the same budget for libraries and sports activities. [2]

Good discussion and points.

There are few grammatical mistake which I would like to highlight:
3rd paragraph:
... as studying in library and libraries.

4th paragraph:
... sports activity as the libraries
Investing on in sports activities ...

5th paragraph:
... in agreement for to this ... as libraries is are helpful ...
chinkybehl22   
Nov 16, 2017
Writing Feedback / Different opinions regarding weather children should be taught to be competitive or cooperative [5]

There are few sentence construction which I would like to make:-

1st paragraph:
weather whether
... from my perspective, trying to ...

3rd paragraph:-
On the other hand, a sense of ...

... interactions on a an after-school ...
... could be advanced pace of ...

Overall good read, however in the third paragraph, before citing an example, the first statement should be explained better. After making a statement, there should be a supporting explanation followed by an example.

Hope this helps!!!
chinkybehl22   
Nov 15, 2017
Writing Feedback / Idea of going abroad for university study is an exciting prospect for many people [6]

TOPIC:- The idea of going abroad for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it probably better to stay at home because of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in a different culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

perspective of attending a school overseas



Nowadays, many students go abroad for higher studies. They consider it a lucrative opportunity due to the several benefits attached to it. However, there are a few who prefer to stick to their native country because of the unavoidable challenges in terms of varied lifestyle and culture which international students come across while studying in the foreign countries.

In my opinion, pupils should be encouraged to study overseas as it enhances their overall personality. Students tend to come in contact with other individuals from different parts of the world. This leads to broadening their horizon and make them confident and competitive. These interactions help them build networks, which prove beneficial in the long run to fetch lucrative job offers. Furthermore, these courses enhance the knowledge and skills of the individuals. They get well-versed with the latest techniques and techniques and technologies. As a result, they implement their learning and best practices in their native country and significantly contribute to the growth of the nation.

However, there are a few who are in favour of pursuing their higher studies in the home country. They believe international students experience a culture shock and language barrier after going abroad. They often get frustrated after observing a different lifestyle and culture of a foreign country. They develop a feeling of homesickness which further leads to depression and stress. Furthermore, due to the language gap they fail to express themselves in front of others and are often misunderstood.

In a nutshell, studying abroad has both advantages and disadvantages. However, its benefit outweighs the shortcomings. Henceforth, people should be encouraged to go overseas for higher education to shape up their career and to become independent to have a better future for themselves and their country.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 14, 2017
Writing Feedback / Some people argue that cars should be banned in city centres while others are against this idea. [5]

I have modified the third paragraph, please suggest if this is better:-

However, there is a flip side to it. Restricting the four-wheeled vehicle, especially in city centres would negatively impact the overall economy of the country. Automobile industries significantly contribute to the growth and development of the country by providing a wide variety of employment opportunities. Casting out these vehicles around the city centres will reduce the demand of new cars which will drop the production and hence resulting in the shutdown of several car manufacturing firms. This would further lead to unemployment and other redundancies.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 14, 2017
Writing Feedback / Some people argue that cars should be banned in city centres while others are against this idea. [5]

The topic states Some people argue that cars should be banned in city centres while others are against this idea.
So First view is that why the cars should be banned that is explained in second paragraph
Second view is that people are against banning the cars so the reason why people are against is provided in the 3rd paragraph

Please let me know as to why is off track
chinkybehl22   
Nov 14, 2017
Writing Feedback / Some people argue that cars should be banned in city centres while others are against this idea. [5]

TOPIC:-Some people argue that cars should be banned in city centres while others are against this idea. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion.

no access for cars to the downtowns



Nowadays, cars have become an efficient means of transportation. The invention of cars has provided comfort and reduced travel time, but at the same time has caused serious environmental threats, like noise and air pollution. Some people are in favour of banning the cars in city centres to solve these issues. However, there are a few who share a different perspective.

The growing popularity of the cars has caused serious traffic problems and environmental issues. Some people think that abandoning this four-wheeled vehicle will reduce congestion. This would further reduce the stress level of the people caused due to the daily traffic jams. Furthermore, this will be a significant step to tackle environmental threats by reducing air and noise pollution. As these cars run on fuel, like petrol, diesel etc. The harmful gases are released due to the constant burning of these fuels, resulting in the rise in air pollution and several hazardous diseases amongst individuals. Henceforth, forbidding the motorcars would lead to a healthy environment and preservation of the non-renewable fossil fuels.

However, there is a flip side to it. Restricting the four-wheeled vehicle would negatively impact the overall economy of the country. Automobile industries significantly contribute to the growth and development of the country by providing a wide variety of employment opportunities. Casting out these vehicles will drop the production and hence resulting in the shutdown of several car manufacturing firms. This would further lead to unemployment and other redundancies.

In my opinion, banning the cars is not a wise resolution to tackle the environmental issues. However, the government should encourage the people to restrict the use of it by providing an efficient and economical means of public transportation. They should roll out awareness programs to encourage the individuals to car-pool and explore other means of transportation.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 14, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 2, University education should be free for everyone [3]

Though I am not an expert, as per me the introduction should first have a background before jumping to the real topic.

Nowadays, a hefty amount of tuition fees are required to be paid by the students to study in the universities. Some believe that the fees for higher education should be waived off as it is unaffordable for everyone. I completely agree, that not charging people for education could become very beneficial for a country and its economy.

Hope this helps!!!
chinkybehl22   
Nov 13, 2017
Writing Feedback / The government spending on sport training for top players as compared to everyone [4]

TOPIC:- Some people believe the government should spend money on sport training for top players. While some people believe they should spend money on sports training for everyone. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

funds for a few sport stars or for every athete



Sports play a major role in the overall growth and development of the individuals. Nowadays, a major chunk of the overall budget is allocated to the sports training. Some people think that the government should invest their funds in providing the sports training to their top players. However, there are a few who feel that the government funds should be utilized for imparting physical health education to the commoners.

Some believe that the government should focus on all the individuals as compared to the top players, which are significantly lower in proportion. By utilizing the government funds in imparting sports training to all the individuals will make them fit and healthy and reduce the frequency of several hazardous diseases caused due to limited physical movement. Nowadays, people are leading a sedentary lifestyle, these physical health education sessions will encourage them to pursue a healthy living. This would further boost the overall economy of the country.

However, there are a few who believe that the government should spend the money on providing fitness training to the elite players as compared to the entire nation. They feel these champions are the biggest asset of the country. As they bring pride and glory to the nation. By spending the government funds in providing them advanced and specialized sports training will further enhance their skills. As a result, while participating in a tournament, they will be more competitive and would have an edge over other participants.

In my opinion, the government should follow a balanced approach in distributing the funds to provide sports education to the commoners and top players. As both these sections are equally important for the overall growth and success of the nation.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 13, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing part2, congestion and traffic jams are a common and major problem in most cities. [7]

Please find below the sentence construction which can be useful:

... for the public ...

Overall it's a good read, however I feel the reasons could have been explained in detail instead of just giving a one liner reason.

The first reason mentioned could have been explained in detail by giving proper justification before jumping to the second point.

Hope this helps!!!
chinkybehl22   
Nov 13, 2017
Writing Feedback / TOEFL independent writing - Why go to university? [6]

Please find below the sentence correction which I would like to make:

... is a bridge for the students to be ... and sophisicated sophisticated before getting into the society.

This essay lack conclusion, please find below the conclusion which can be added to the essay:

To conclude, the actual reason for attending a college or university can be different among individuals. In my opinion, students attend these institutions to shape up their career and to have a secure future. As in the current era, university degree is a prerequisite for employment in all the organisations.
chinkybehl22   
Nov 13, 2017
Writing Feedback / Nowadays children are consuming too many sugar based drinks. what are the reasons and solutions? [5]

drinks unhealthy for kids



In the past few years, a drastic change has been observed in the eating and drinking habits of children. These days, there has been a rise in the consumption of sugar-based drinks amongst kids. People need to take strict actions to control this negative development as it adversely impacts the growth of the children.

The increase in the consumption of these aerated drinks is due to the significant rise in the advertisements. The companies are now targeting the younger generation to sell their products. They have strategically designed their campaigns by luring the kids through attractive and colourful packing and showcasing the superheroes and film stars promoting the consumption of these drinks. As a result, children are influenced to buy these sugar-based beverages which create a negative impact on their health in the long run. Moreover, these carbonated drinks are quite economical and readily available in the market. Hence, children find it easy and affordable to purchase it. For example, in India, a bottle of Coca-Cola is sold at Rs.10 which is cheaper as compared to fresh fruits juices.

However, the consumption of these sugary drinks can cause severe diseases in the long run. Henceforth, strict measures should be taken to restrict the intake of such drinks. Parents play a major role in reducing the consumption of these drinks. They should educate their children about the ill-effects and the critical diseases which it can cause. Furthermore, the government should impose heavy taxes and restrictions on selling the carbonated beverages. This will further reduce the production and intake of it.

To conclude, a collaborative approach of the government and parents are required to discourage the consumption of these sugar-based drinks and to have a healthy and secure future. Parents should inculcate healthy practices amongst their kids by encouraging them to have fresh fruits juices. The government should impose strict policies to restrict the selling of such unhealthy drinks.
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