dumi
Jul 16, 2014
Writing Feedback / I definitely agree - pressure of school and parental pressure should be reduced [3]
Don't write lengthy sentences to open your essay. Begin your essay with a more catchy, interesting and meaningful hook :)
Nowadays, we can see a major increase in school drop outs. This is due to the fact that students find schools apply lots of pressure on them that they cannot really cope with.
I totally agree that (no comma)today lots of students today are exposed to pressespressure because of higher expectations.
Nowadays, most student want to drop out schools which are intolerable according to students because they can not get all responsibilities and they feel under pressure
Don't write lengthy sentences to open your essay. Begin your essay with a more catchy, interesting and meaningful hook :)
Nowadays, we can see a major increase in school drop outs. This is due to the fact that students find schools apply lots of pressure on them that they cannot really cope with.
I totally agree that (no comma)