Jennyflower81
Nov 17, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Each country should be held accountable for others' - Adelphi essay [2]
In my country The reader does not know what country you are from.
In order for poverty to be solved State that there are many different approaches to ending poverty, maybe give a few examples. Then go on to explain exactly what YOUR plan would be if you could reduce poverty. It is a nice idea that everybody share their money with the poor, but unfortunately there are individuals who are very much opposed to this.
The government should establish a department whose sole purpose is to assist with poverty in the country. We call this assistance "welfare" in America.
The government should also establish a law limiting the amount of children an individual can have based on their ability to sufficiently support these children as this too will greatly affect the level of poverty worldwide. Doesn't China have a policy like this? I am not sure if this sounds like a solution.
The government should also set aside a minimum of 4% of total tax collected to assist those people experiencing poverty based on level of poverty being experienced by an individual and to develop emergency housing for persons experiencing extreme poverty. This sentence is confusing. You are being vague here, expand on your 4% idea.
Every nation should take responsibility for other countries as the welfare of one affects all the[i] others.[/i]
This is very idealistic, keep focusing on real, creative solutions.
This essay still needs work, you are off to a good start! Remember that your paper is a reflection of yourself.
In my country The reader does not know what country you are from.
In order for poverty to be solved State that there are many different approaches to ending poverty, maybe give a few examples. Then go on to explain exactly what YOUR plan would be if you could reduce poverty. It is a nice idea that everybody share their money with the poor, but unfortunately there are individuals who are very much opposed to this.
The government should establish a department whose sole purpose is to assist with poverty in the country. We call this assistance "welfare" in America.
The government should also establish a law limiting the amount of children an individual can have based on their ability to sufficiently support these children as this too will greatly affect the level of poverty worldwide. Doesn't China have a policy like this? I am not sure if this sounds like a solution.
The government should also set aside a minimum of 4% of total tax collected to assist those people experiencing poverty based on level of poverty being experienced by an individual and to develop emergency housing for persons experiencing extreme poverty. This sentence is confusing. You are being vague here, expand on your 4% idea.
Every nation should take responsibility for other countries as the welfare of one affects all the[i] others.[/i]
This is very idealistic, keep focusing on real, creative solutions.
This essay still needs work, you are off to a good start! Remember that your paper is a reflection of yourself.