gmad06
Sep 2, 2013
Writing Feedback / In some countries, traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. [3]
Very nice..your vocubalary range is impressive and your way of expressing your thoughts are of an advanced level.
I do have some tips to further improve the structure of your essay. Since your task mentioned about traditional cuisine,
negative effects on individual and society, why don't you structure it this way:
1st main body paragraph talks about the effects of fast food to society by way of replacing one's traditional cuisine
2nd main body paragraph talks about fastfood destroying an individual's health
hope this helps...
Very nice..your vocubalary range is impressive and your way of expressing your thoughts are of an advanced level.
I do have some tips to further improve the structure of your essay. Since your task mentioned about traditional cuisine,
negative effects on individual and society, why don't you structure it this way:
1st main body paragraph talks about the effects of fast food to society by way of replacing one's traditional cuisine
2nd main body paragraph talks about fastfood destroying an individual's health
hope this helps...