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Through this experience I have learned that I am stronger than I would have ever deemed myself to be [4]
What is the purpose of this writing? IELTS, TOEFL, or...? Also, it is always good to include the complete prompt, so this way helps us understand what you are tying to explain in your essay. After I read this essay, I find some ideas sound peculiar, so I cannot even make some changes regarding the issue. But nevertheless, you can see what I have shown below.
- You need to write a clear introductory paragraph.
The main objective of this paragraph is to present your position on the issue. But you need to pay particular attention to how this paragraph is organized. For example, at the beginning of the paragraph, you have to write a hook, that grabs readers' attention. An effective hook is written with no more than ten words. This is what I suggest students in this forum. Following this, developing your background information. Some students simply reword the prompt, while some others try to elaborate the prompt with current issues. Once you are done, now it's time to write your thesis. A good thesis statement should tell the readers how you will interpret the matter under discussion.
- Coherence and cohesion of body paragraphs
This is the most important paragraph after the introduction. This paragraph discusses what you are presenting in the mini-outline of introductory paragraph with detailed arguments. Not only this, body paragraph needs to be be truly effective. This means that you need to keep your ideas succinct and to the point. It is always good to tie all of the body paragraphs together with cohesive devices, such as firstly, secondly, on the one hand, also, etc.
- Ending your essay with a concluding paragraph
Some students say that this is the most difficult paragraph, since your task is to summarize the aforementioned discussion, but shun being repetitive. To write an effective conclusion, starting off with a concluding signal, such as in conclusion, all in all, etc, to indicate readers that your paragraph will be soon ended. Afterwards, providing a restatement of the thesis statement is must. Beware of being repetitive. I strongly suggest. Prior to ending your conclusion, it is vital to add personal though which can be suggestions, fears or warning, as the consequences of what has been discussed.
- As I struggled
to find the words to begin WRITING this 250-WORD essay
and in two hundred and fifty words describ
e ING the most difficult thing I have experienced ( A COMMA) my mind drew blanks.