Writing Feedback / Parents and Young Children Profession [2]

In your opinion, should young people choose their profession, or should their parents choose for them
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

The teenager should be certain their work subject themselves and it unnecessary chosen by their parents. This essay agrees with the former idea than the latter one. Firstly, this essay will discuss the benefits of young people who choose their occupation and secondly, how the influence if parents choose this for them.

Young people should be chosen their work themselves, it is more effective than this is choose by their parents. This is because it can make teenagers are focused on their job. People who choose their profession usually enjoy to doing their work every day. For instance, Paddo is my neighbor in last two years, became a success on their career in a company because he followed his talent and ability when he apply to the job. As a result, his career increasing annual and obtain many achievements. So, it is evidence that young people must be known their talent before entrance a job.

There are many disadvantages if parents if parents determine the profession for their teenager. Firstly, they become pressure in their job because he is not suitable with their job. In addition, work condition of people usually is not better because work without ability about it can cause a bad result of their work such as influence the quality of the product which is low. Finally, the amount of worker who stress will increase. Most employments cannot finish their job which is load and duty for them, low ability about their job is the main reason it happens.

In conclusion, a job of young people should not be curtailed by their parents. The work which chose with considers ability aspect can give most advantages effect for people career. Although, an advice of parents before establishing an occupation should not be completely neglected for adjust the people skill.

Writing Feedback / Internet users in North America on the ten-year period from 1999 to 2009 [2]

A comparison of the proportion of people in three countries who used the Internet between 1999 and 2009, a ten-year period. Overall it can be seen that the percentage of the population who used the Internet grew dramatically in each country over the remainder of the period. In any case, internet users in Canada revealed the highest percentage, while Mexico depicted reverse.

in 1999, the percentage of internet users in the USA stood at 20%, whereas the proportion in both Canada and Mexico were lower, at virtually 10% and 5% respectively. over the following ten years, Internet usage in the USA and Canada increased to approximately 70% of the population. However, this figure for Mexico experienced very low, at around 24%

A more detailed look at the line chart showed the percentage of Internet users was largest in Canada, representing virtually 100% of Canadians used the Internet. On the other hand, internet user's percentage for Americans solely four-fifths and only two-fifths of Mexicans of all population

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Writing Feedback / The cost of an average house in five major cities from 1990 and 2002 [2]

A comparison of the cost of an average house in five major cities from 1990 and 2002, a 13-year period compared from 1989 is illustrated in the bar chart. Overall, it can be seen that, house prices fell between 1990 and 1995, but most of the cities saw rising prices between 1996 and 2002. In any case, London experienced the greatest changes in house prices over the remainder period.

From 1990 to 1995, the cost of average homes in Tokyo and London dropped by around 7%, and New York house prices plummeted by 5%. However, in both Madrid and Frankfurt house prices rose by approximately 2%.

Between 1996 and 2002, London house prices rose dramatically to around 12%. Furthermore, houses' price in New York had grown to 5% above the 1989 average, but homes in Tokyo remained cheaper than they were in 1989. While the cost of an average home in Madrid rose by around 2%, prices in Frankfurt remained virtually unchanged.

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Writing Feedback / A new supermarket in a town called Garlsdon [2]

A breakdown of two potential locations S1 and S2 for a new supermarket in a town called Garlsdon is illustrated in the map. Overall, it is important to note that the main difference between the two sites is that S1 is outside the town, whereas S2 is in the town centre. In any case, the railway which goes across the whole town and the main road linking the town centre with Hindon.

A more detailed look at to the map reveals that the first potential location (S1) is outside the town itself, and is sited just off the main road to the town of Hindon, lying 12 kms to the north-west. This would make it accessible to shoppers from both Hindon and Garsdon who could travel by car. S1 also close to the railway line linking the two towns to Gransdon (25 km to the south-west), a potentially large number of shoppers would also be able to travel by train.

In contrast, S2's location is right because it takes place in the town centre, which would be good for local residents. Theoretically the store could be accessed by road or rail from the surrounding towns, including Brandson, but as the central area is a no-traffic zone, cars would be unable to park and access would be difficult.

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Writing Feedback / People becoming so reliant on modern technology [2]

Over-reliance on modern technology means that people are failing to learn, or are forgetting, many basic skills.
To what extent is this true? Are people becoming so reliant on modern technology that they are to longer able to do some things without it?

Technology has changed the way people to learn. It is true that dependence of technology leads to people hard to study some fundamental talents due to the fact that people particularly children because they rely on watching TV or playing video games. I firmly agree technology brings dependency one it means that people, especially the younger generations tend to be at a loss without it.

Advanced technology is slowly taking over our social lives and slowly creeping into our relationships and everyday activities. But technology isn't really the problem. It is the people use it and how they use it effects the overall positives of technological advances. Without technology, there would be more bad than good. It is stopping many kids from physical activities because they are inside watching TV or playing video games which are leading to an increase in obesity and laziness. But without technology how would we be able to communicate easily, prevent diseases make jobs more doable, and to transport items more easily.

People Technology has become an inseparable part of our lives and they have become overly dependent on technology. While it obviously has it is used and we certainly live better for it. The accessibility to information that technology brings and dependency one it means that people, especially the younger generations tend to be at a loss without it. When people forget their phone and do not have it on their person, they often feel the phantom vibrations of the phone that is not there, much like a lost limb. There is less of a need to maintain knowledge when it is a mere Google search engine; learn a language when we can just use automated translators and pocket dictionaries.

In conclusion, although technology benefits our lives greatly, most kids these days don't even know how to use a dictionary because "Google has it all", so they do not t see it as a necessary skill. However, technology was created to make life easier that is the main purpose.

Writing Feedback / The national consumer expenditure on various items in five European countries in 2002 [2]

A comparison of the proportion of the national consumer expenditure on various items in five European countries in 2002 is illustrated in the table. Overall, it can be seen that a large part of consumers preferred to spend more money on food than clothing and leisure.

The greatest proportion of expenditure on food, drinks and tobacco was Turkey, with 32.14%, followed by Ireland with 28.91%. The consumers in Sweden spent 2 times less than that of in Turkey in this sector. Furthermore, Italians and Spanish spent the similar percentage, 16.36% and 18.80% respectively.

A more detailed look at the table revealed that the percentage spent on clothing and footwear was considerably less than 10% for all the countries. By 9%, customers in Italy experienced the largest expenditure in this category, while spending habits ranging from 5.40% to 6.63% for 4 other countries. As for leisure and education, it is obvious that the figure solely depicted at below 5% for all countries. Turkey had the highest percentage of expenditure with 4.35% compared with 1.98% in Spain.

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Writing Feedback / Britain's family cars posession over a 36-year period which is illustrated in the line chart [NEW]

A comparison of alteration in the number of cars per household in Great Britain between 1971 and 2007, a 36-year period is illustrated in the line chart. Overall, car ownership in Britain increased over the remainder period. In any case, the number of households with two cars rose, while the number of households without a car fell.

In 1971, British households were more likely to possess one car. Almost a half of proportion, at around 44% of households had one car. However, there was little change in the figures for this category at the end of the period. For families which own three or more cars witnessed very low, with around 2%, and the proportion of households with more than two cars rose by around 5%.

A more detailed look at the chart reveals that the biggest change was seen in the proportion of households without a car., which, fell steadily over the 36-year period to around 25% in 2007. In contrast, over the following 36 years, the proportion of two-car families grew steadily, reaching about 26%.

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Writing Feedback / Three ways to collect and analyze meteorological data - Australian Bureau to forecast the weather [2]

A breakdown of the process used by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology to forecast the weather is illustrated in the process diagram. Overall, it can be seen that there are four main stages in the process, beginning with the collection of information about the weather. This information is then analyzed, prepared for presentation, and finally broadcast to the public.

A more detailed look at to the diagram reveals that the first and second of the process. There are three ways to collect and analyze data. Firstly, the data source comes from satellite and presented photograph for analyzing. Secondly, incoming information can be received by radar and presented for analysis as a radar screen. Finally, drifting buoys also receive data which can be shown on a synoptic chart for analyzing the process.

For the third step is broadcasting process. All of information is prepared on a computer, and then this information is delivered to the public on the screen on TV, on the radio or as a recorded telephone announcement by public telephone grid.

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Writing Feedback / The growing number of people aged 65 and more... [2]

A comparison of the proportion of people aged 65 or more in Japan, Sweden and the USA between 1940 and 2040 as projected year, a 100-year period is illustrated in the line chart. Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of elderly people increases in each country between 1940 and 2040 as a forecasted year. Japan is expected to see the most dramatic changes in its elderly population.

In 1940, the proportion of Americans was aged 65 or over stood at 9%, compared to about 7% of Swedish people and 5% of Japanese people. Over the next 50 years, the percentage of USA and Sweden increased gradually, reaching 15% in 1990. Contrastingly, the figure for Japan witnessed very low, at solely 5% in 2000.

A more detailed look at to the line chart revealed that there will be predicted an increase of elderly people's proportion in Japan, at around 27% in the end of the period. However, For Sweden and the USA will be slightly lower, at virtually 25% and 23% respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Settlements with the past - the causes of space exploration. [2]

Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort.
To what extent do you agree with this?
How do you think space exploration will change the future?

Exploration space has a considerable value for everyone. The expanding of technology brings the huge impact throughout the world, particularly space technology that makes possible society explore other planets. In the modern era, it is argued that people going outer space have had more to do with national pride than international effort. I firmly believe that people who explore the space have been made their nationality proud of them because they brought their country identity when they explore the space, like a flag. However, other believe that space exploration implied in global effort due to the fact that it occurs because collaboration and supporting from other countries.

A convincing argument can be made that the success of people exploring outer space is not only playing a pivotal role to make their self-proud, but also it can lead their country to become famous in around the world. Yuri Gagarin was a Russian astronaut and the first person visited space. On April 12th, 1961, he orbit the earth and hoist the Russian flag in space. From that moment, Russian has been popular as a country has the advance technology to send the men explore outside Earth. People who journey into outer space make their country really proud of them because they show to throughout the world how great their country and it is a unique exploration because no one has experienced it before.

On the other hand, space exploration has involved many countries. Currently, around 13 other space agencies participate in the International space Exploration Coordination Group (ISECG) to advance a long-range human space exploration strategy. In May 2007, fourteen space agencies have released. They shared the vision of coordinated human like establish International space station and robotic space exploration focused on Solar System destinations where humans may one day live and work. It is proof that global relationship is a significant subject for travelling space successfully.

As far I am concerned, I think a journey to outside the earth is becoming a necessity for human because many people use advanced technology which can be developed on other planets. Next generation, the situation in our Earth will be changing and there is new information about move the half of people on Earth to live on Mars. Thus, the scientists have prepared and enhance the knowledge how to survive in outer space. Such Mars One has established residents in March and this company will send hundreds of people to permanent living in Mars in 2025.

To sum up, Astronaut who succeeded travel outer space will bring the prestigious achievement about their country. However, the uniqueness of this exploration create a global proud what they do and collaboration with other countries in many parts of the world. I firmly believe that free-space settlements could be wonderful places to live.

Writing Feedback / The proportion of plant and animal species will extinct between 2000 and 2100 projected year [2]

The line graph provides information on the proportion of plant and animal species will extinct between 2000 and 2100 projected year, a hundred-year period and the pie chart illustrates details about threats to plant life in tropical forest. The number of extinction species is forecast to increase steadily by decade. In any case, the majority of threats for plant life are caused by human impact.

The trend shows the change every 20 years from 2000 to 2100. The number of extinction species stood at 5000 in 2000. However, over the following six projected decades, this figure rise dramatically and reach a peak of 50.000. However, the graph predicts after this period the projected trend will be consistently plummeting, and finish with less than 30000 million over the remainder of the period.

On the other hand, plant has its threat from two main resources, human impact and natural events. It is obviously that more than 80 per cent damages are caused by human and 18.7% by natural events like disaster. Specifically, in agriculture sector and its activities (plantation and harvesting) have made 37.8% threats. Logging and other forms of humans' error are believed as hazardous activities for plant life

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Writing Feedback / Americans spending on diffrend kinds of phone services from in a ten-year period [3]

A comparison of the annual amount of Americans spending on mobile and mobile phone services from 2001 to 2010, a ten-year period is illustrated in the line chart. Overall, it can be seen that people were more likely to spend money on residential phone services rather than on mobile phone services at the beginning. However, these figures showed a reverse in the last period.

In 2001, the highest expenditure was US consumers, which spent an average of virtually $700 on residential phone services, compared to cell phone services, at solely $200. Over the following five years, this figure has plummeted by $200. Contrastingly, expenditure on mobile services has increased by around $300.

In 2006, the average American's spending on both figures was equal, at nearly $500. On the other hand, by 2010, expenditure on mobile phones exceeded the number of residential services and reached a peak to $700, while spending on residential services had fallen to just $400 over the time frame.

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Writing Feedback / Technology has changed the way people work [2]

Information technology enables many people to their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.)
Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the advantages?

Technology has changed the way people work. In the modern era, it makes possible some people to work outside their office and encourage them to do their work at home or when they are travelling. It is agreed that technology brings threefold merits rather than demerits people can save time or money, raise job satisfaction and connect with workers in different countries. However, technology leads to unhealthy lifestyle among workers.

A convincing argument can be made that information technology is not only playing a pivotal role the way people doing their job, but can also save time and money of the employees. Predominant people face traffic congestion when they want to attend at their workplace. It is definitely that it makes them spend a lot of time on the road and burning a huge amount of fuel, like gasoline.

Nowadays, many people work part-time or have flexible working hours and technology have allowed people to work from home or in their leisure time. As a result, some workers witness a good work or life balance which can raise job satisfaction. People who work in international business have to read hundreds of corporate activities email or messages every day, it means that technology can connect with labours in different countries in many parts of the world.

Apart from this, people who work in their home tend to experience the sedentary lifestyle. They are more likely to spend their time sitting in front of the computer monitor or smartphones rather than going out and taking regular exercise. Consequently, they are vulnerable to become obesity sufferer and cardiovascular disease risk. A 2013 British study showed that after 90 minutes of sitting your metabolism shuts down and the body's cells become less responsive to insulin and muscles release lower levels of the enzyme which burn cholesterol.

In conclusion, it is believed that information technology plays a significant role to assist people work that make it possible to be done without attending in their office. There are some advantages and disadvantages related to this matter.

Scholarship / The Proportion of overseas students graduated from universities in different Canadian provinces [3]

A comparison of the number of the proportion alter in the number of overseas students graduated from universities in eight different Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006, a five-year period, is illustrated by the bar chart. Overall, the highest number of international students graduated was in New Brunswick. In any case, while the trends for international students graduated was dominated in 2006 for all provinces, Alberta shows a reverse.

Predominant the graduate students from foreign countries had experienced a great proportion in 2006 than in 2001. The difference was far marked, with 11.5% in 2006 and just 7% in 2001 for New Brunswick. Next, Nova Scotia and British Columbia had an equal percentage in the number of international students graduated, representing one in ten in the final period and virtually one in twenty in the beginning. Meanwhile, between 2001 and 2006, this figure witnessed at 6% and 8% respectively.

A more detailed look at the graph depicts that the overall proportion was not always dominated in 2006. Alberta province revealed the percentage of international students graduated in 2001 has a larger proportion than it was in 2006, with 6% and 4.3%. However, the three other provinces, Monitoba, Ontario, New Foundland and Labrador showed the lowest proportion of the number of overseas students graduated, at approximately 3% in 2001 and 7% in 2006.

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Scholarship / Global sales in five different cell phone brands from 2009 to 2013 [NEW]

A comparison of the number of sales in five different cell phone brands in the world between 2009 and 2013, a 4-year period is illustrated by bar chart. Overall, there was a significant increase in the proportion of Samsung mobile phone sales over the question time while Nokia's buyers showed reverse. In any case, the number of people who bought Apple phones witnessed a grew sharply over the period.

In 2009, the Nokia was the most popular mobile phone in the world with 450 million users, and although it was still the highest sale, by the end of period it had fallen to 250 million. Initially, Samsung sales experienced a gradual increase from 230 million in 2009 to 330 in 2011. In the next two years, this figure reached a peak to 450 million, which was the highest sale of all cell phone brands.

The number of people belonged to LG cell phone was 120 million at the beginning of the period. However, over the following four years, the proportion of these users fell steadily to 80 million. While the customers of Apple mobile phone stood only at 30 million in 2009, the number of units which have been sold rose steadily to 150 for the remainder of the period. Furthermore, the proportion of ZTE cell phone was seen remained virtually unchanged over the time frame.

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Writing Feedback / Schools should focus on the subjects which support of student's goals in the future [3]

Schools should only offer subjects that are beneficial to students' future career success. Other subjects, such as music and sports, are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The people's goals depend on what they offer today. Most of the people think that schools should focus on the subjects which support of student's goal in the future and do not pay attention to secondary subjects like sports and music. It is agreed that the school's offer to teach subjects that student's need for their career is the most significant due to the fact that this case can help them reach their goals. On the other hand, while some people say that others subjects are not strongly useful for student's career, like sports and music are able to make people keep fit and develop their talents related to job opportunities.

It is more significant that schools must solely provide the subject that could make students success in their careers. This is because paying more attention to their primary subject tend to make them study more and more related to it. A 2007 Harvard annual survey revealed that 75% pilots in Paris, France success in their job as such they only focus on study aviation science in the college. Recognize of specific subjects is very helpful to make students become an expert in their major. Consequently, it is definitely they are professional workers.

Despite this case above, other subjects like sports and music should not be neglected or unnecessary to learned. To be part and partial, other subjects are same essential. Sports subject can teach students about healthy science like how to keeping fit their body everyday and there is a doubt that body healthily is one of the important requirements to find a better job. For music subject, some actors and actresses should have music talents. It is certain that this subject is essential for their career to become a famous artist.

To sum up, although some people argue that students solely learn their primary subjects is the best way to make students success of their career in the future, i firmly believe that no subjects should be considered as not important. In my notion, people should study subjects as much as possible whatever they wish.