Writing Feedback / The main causes of the inequality between poor and wealthy countries - how this gap can be reduced? [2]

The inequality between rich and poor nations is wider than it has ever been before. What do you think are the main causes of the difference and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap?

The survival of the country depends on the government who manage it. As a half of people know that there are a plenty of unbalanced of the conditions each states particularly between poor and rich ones. In this case, I strongly believe that there are some factors which affect a rich one become richer and a poor country on the opposite, although they always help each others.

These days, the difference of the developed and developing nations can be assessed from the economical situations. So, a country is called a developed if their economy is quite strong. Thanks to that, they can lend a loan to the developing country which usually there are some requirements that must be completed by non-wealthy nations. For instance, in 1998 when there was a money crisis, Indonesia had borrowed a million dollars from America to solve unstable financial in the domestic. Then, the USA could invest their cash. This is proved that the corporation between two countries can complete an immense problem.

However, the impact of a loan is the interest. Some argue that the interest always increased significantly every year. The effect is a poor country will be worse since they cannot pay the debt as soon as possible, so willy-nilly the total of debt will be more and more which this is an advantage of a rich state. As non-wealthy countries, they have to settle theirs ith paying natural sources like oil, coal, or even an island.

The aforementioned evidence that a country will be richer after lending a huge money to others because they cannot pay it, they have to dispose to loss their natural resources.

Writing Feedback / Gaining the proper education is very prominent particularly when looking for a good job [4]

Education Helps with Job Finding

At present, a wide range of people competes to gain a better life by collecting much money. One of ways to reach that is getting a job which they have to have a higher education or a college degree. Yet, some argue that is not a must for people acquire education, main point they have to start working after completing their school and gaining the experience in the job. In this case, I strongly believe that I disagree if the individuals have to work after finishing their basic school.

In globalization era, the competition of vacancies is very tight. It can be seen that the total of the human life population always increases year by year. For example, the populations of Indonesians approximately at 1.9 million people in 1990s, that increased to 2.2 million persons solely in 20 years later. This is proved that with the huge popularity compare with the same amount job fields. So, if people want to become breadwinners, they have to have several tricks like having best educational background or improving their language especially English with taking courses.

However, although the citizens after completing their studies, they think to how earn money. may they reckon how get it soon as possible, so they try to apply in many companies as a labour. This not wrong, but the experience that they obtain only in the small area since they cannot compete with a great deal of university graduater in the level of education. For instance, a school leaver who prefer to work for years, he will be lost with new comer who have better education. Instead he novel comer will get the higher position.

The aforementioned evidence that gaining education is more prominent particularly in looking or job although, they will not get experience for a while.

Writing Feedback / The developments of technology, particularly in e-books, may cause abandonment of the printed media [2]

With recent developments in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspaper and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. others feel that these forms of media will never disappear.

what is your opinion?

These days, in globalization era, the developing of media has significant increased. Past, people only read the information from printed media such as newspaper or magazine which is only release in several times like once a day even twice in a month. Overall, at present citizens can gain knowledge from electronic book (e-book) which they must not open real book, even though the development of technology particularly in virtual book. This cannot transform the function of printing media. I strongly believe that both between e-book and printed media will be complete each other.

First, the main reason why e-book cannot change the position of printed book is usually in special case like people want to read fast and easily, they prefer to choose that. This is caused they have habit to read from formed media than from virtual media. For instance, the inhabitants who stay in rural area, they tend to know news from newspaper which this has been a daily consuming. This different with the individuals who are looking for simple for reading articles. They certainly prefer to read from portable documents.

However, portable document or e-book has the same functions as printed media which deliver the information from writer to reader. The difference is only the form of that media. The advantage of e-book is the people can save that documents on their smartphone without worrying to bring a great deal of books. For example, the students can save all of their lessons into their sophisticated device like PC or mobile phone so they can open that everywhere and every time.

The aforementioned evidence that e-book becomes a valuable media which has similar benefits as printing media although a half of people state to prefer bringing their hand phone which inside there are some portable documents so they can read simply.

Writing Feedback / In the globalisation era, the transportation improvement increased hugely - especially the flights [2]

The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years.
What do you think flight should be taxed more ?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

These days, in the globalisation era, the improvement of mode transportation has significant increased, particularly in the flight. As some people know that a wide range of them prefer to use this for travelling to the their destinations. There are different purposes why people tend to utilize air plane for a holiday, attending the business agenda which need hurry time, even in the commercial. This essay will reveal about the merits and demerits of this effect. I strongly believe that the government does not need to up the taxes on air plane since this has been a daily transportation for a half of inhabitants.

At present, almost everyone knows that with planes, he can go other places although that is too far. There is no longer distance in the world. A long journey in the past was impossible, now the people can reach their destination just in hours. For instance, several decades ago, the individuals had to travel from Indonesia to Makkah virtually a month by a ship, at present, they can arrive there solely less than 12 hours. That is very amazing of the development air plane transportation. This should be pestered by the government by keeping maintenance of the aviation facilities without adding the taxes to the passengers.

However, the demerit of air plane mode is almost none. It can be seen that the citizens can arrive at what their destinations as soon as possible. The disadvantage only for the inhabitants who stay around the airport. They are disturbed by air traffic which produce high sound from the plane's engine. This can be solved by installing a device to reduce noise in their house like redesign a house with sound proof.

To sum up, more the advantages are compared with the disadvantages. With air plane, people can save their time so they can spend their for other benefit activities than they only spend their hour for waiting.

Writing Feedback / Task 1 IELTS - Level of satisfying in the shops and restaurants [2]

The tables and pie chart reveal the number of people who are determined by gender about the level of satisfying in the survey of a novel shopping area in Auckland, New Zealand. Overall, the majority of citizens are satisfied with shops and restaurants which is built. While, the total number of inhabitants who satisfied with the design more over a half of total percentages.

First, based on the table, the aggregate of shoppers peak at 45 males and only different 10 people if compare with female in the same category or in other word satisfied. Even though the proportion of men who are very satisfied solely 17 persons, this is too far if it compared with the women. That is exactly double numbers in 34 females.

Furthermore, in the restaurants, the great deal of shoppers is satisfied. This is proved with the rate of male at 55 and female in 32. This is evidence that has a similar pattern between shops and restaurants. Whereas the proportion of shoppers who are very satisfied almost same approximately in 25 people.

Regarding the design, a wide range of number are held by satisfied category which is followed by very satisfied group with 17% and others just little around a tenth.

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Writing Feedback / 'The bright future' - correlation between little leisure time and pressure to work hard [2]

In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard on their studies.
What do you think are causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

The bright future is determined by what people do at present. In the several nations, a half of youngsters tend to focus on their studies, despite they just have little spare time. In this case, I strongly believe that there are some factors which make them under pressure, particularly in the learning since they want to reach their ambitions while that activity will affect to their leisure time.

These days, the majority of young people compete to gain a better life. They think how to solve it. Some of them may apply to several companies with hoping can obtain high wage. For example, if they want to marry, they have to save money for it. It is impossible if they do not have enough cash. So, with that problem, the youngsters have to prepare it with good education which this is able to help them to get the dream.

All of that is caused by the necessaries in the human's life. The young people have to fulfil their needs when they begin growing up before mature. For instance, they will get a better job if they have skill from the educational system. Willy-nilly, people do extra like following English course to improve their language, or joining an institute to gain certificates which this is useful for applying a job. So, people will try a great deal of ways how to be a breadwinner in the life competitions.

To sum up, as the young people just have a little leisure time, so they have to make it useful although, they try to study hard.

Writing Feedback / Task 1 - The number of citizen who use rail mode transportation. [3]

The graph reveals the number of citizens using train transportation in four countries, namely the UK, the USA, Japan and Italy in 2007. Overall, the highest usage number of rail in Asia while it can be seen that the largest amount of cargo carried in the USA.

First, the rate of inhabitants who used rail mode in Japan at the top position which beat three other states. Then, the aggregate of passenger kilometres which counted per head in Japan again became the most one. At the rate of Italy and UK almost same number, just different 10. The number of cargo carried in the USA became the hugest in 2,820 billions of tons.

Furthermore, although Japan and the USA had a big number in rail transport and cargo carried, other nations like UK and Italy got the lowest in all sectors, yet they just little differences with the number of Japan's cargo by approximately 1 billions of tons.

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Writing Feedback / Task 1 - The initial teacher training Program over following a two-year period. [3]

The table reveals the number of people who stay in the Britain for obtaining teacher training education over following two years, between 2005/6 and 2006/7. This compares with the percentage of male qualifiers. Overall, it can be seen that the total of qualifications for learning is the highest which is followed by PGCE which is stand for Post Graduate Certificate in Education, BED and other degrees, while the female has dominated with a huge number in all aspects.

In the initial teacher training (ITT) program, teaching qualifications gained the immense rate with total 31,930 pupils and solely increased by 15 people in the next year. Interestingly, the difference among all categories were far. Based on the data, for PDGE stood at 24,405 students with details of more than 17 thousand for female and almost 7 thousand for the male group. This was decreased slightly at 23,900 in a year. In addition, BED and other degrees had different significant percentages between men and women, the number of women at 83.6 percent and rose by 1 per cent in 2006/7, while the aggregate of men who joined in this group was only 14.4 percent and increased just under 1 percent.

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Writing Feedback / Who has more influence on individuals: the politicians or the public media? [2]

In the modern era, the media has enormous impact to society even it beat the influence of politicians. In this case, I strongly believe that although the media like TV or the internet which has a huge influence to the individuals, this still depends on the person considers both, between the media and politicians.

These days, a great deal of people cannot get rid of from information. They can obtain the information from the electronic media such television or radio, or they can access the news from their mobile with using the internet. Usually, inhabitants prefer to trust what they watch on television or what they read on the internet than what they hear from the politicians. For instance, a wide range of populations is believed up to date news from media which is viewed has more complex information than just from politicians who solely provide the information about politics.

On the other hand, despite the media give a lot of information, the people cannot compare it with the politicians since they are correlated with each other. This is caused because sometimes the knowledge from the politicians more accurate, compare with media which too much information what has to be understood by citizens. For example, at politic party, there are many candidates will share their visions and missions to the societies who they are as a chooser. The candidates certainly hope they gain high popularity in the society by promoting their selves on the internet even local television programs.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although the community knows the politicians' life, it will be better if they recognize the personal via media which is has more extensive influenced.

Writing Feedback / The picture describes the process of cycles how the rainwater can be recycled and reused [2]

The picture describes the process of cycles how the rainwater can be recycled and reused. In this processing is needed some equipment which are useful for supporting the progress.

First of all, several tools which are useful are rainwater tanks, water treatment plant and waste water treatment plant. Started with the rainwater fall down and it is collected in the rainwater tank and water treatment plant. The liquid from rainwater storage can be used directly without any steps. While, water from water treatment plant must be filtered or need expert ways for being ready to consume as drinking water.

Then, the household waste water from the inhabitant's house has to through a purification equipment, namely wastewater treatment plant before going to the river and become excess treated water. Furthermore, water from treatment plant can be consumed after recycling water and clean. Regarding the water from the pool has to pass a process called strom water treatment before is thrown to a nature.

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Writing Feedback / Task 1 - Two different processes of manufacturing tea. [3]

The picture describes how to process tea ready to be consumed. There are two kinds of tea which is processed, namely loose tea and tea bags. Some equipments and methods are applied in manufacturing tea.

First of all, for gaining tea is needed several workers, fans, racks, roller, cutter and oven. Some labours take solely bud and two top leaves which the best quality in a condition the leaves still fresh. Then, the crops are put on the racks and done whitering, a method which air pass though leaves on racks. After that, this divided by two categories, traditional and modern ways. The main purpose to destroy the leaves. The conventional method, with using rollers where the leaves put on there. The effect is the enzymes release from leaves. Modern method which produces tea bags, destroying leaves with cutter. This is a faster process and creating smaller granular pieces.

Then,the next step is oxidation or fermentation which the rolled leaves spread on the tiles and indirect enzyme will be released. Finally, that are entered to oven or hot air dryer. This proccess can make 97% of moisturizer out in total and releasing the flavour and aroma.

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Writing Feedback / The sale numbers of known cellular brands in the middle of the first decade of the 21st century [5]

The table describes the number of selling mobile phones from several brands, namely Nokia, Motorola, Samsung, Sony Ericsson, LG, BenQ Mobile and others between 2005 and 2006, is measured in percentage. Overall, Nokia is the most popular with the highest of market share in both year, it can be seen that the number of others brands solely a half of the Nokia company.

Based on the data, the percentage of Nokia has rose steadily from 32.5% to 35%. Then, the proportion of Motorola had been following with 21.1 per cent in 2006. Although brand of Samsung did not dominate, it can beat Sony Ericsson, LG and BenQ Mobile. This is proven by the amount of Samsung selling at 12.7%, only decreased by 1% over following a year.

However, the rate of other brands was 19.2 per cent and slightly decrease to 16.2 per cent in 2006. While the percentage of Sony Ericsson, LG and BenQ Mobile only different a little under a- tenth in both years.

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Writing Feedback / The youngsters do crime not only because of their elders but also of other severe circumstances [3]

Topic
Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

In these days, severe habits in young generations become famous behaviour. A half of people argue that they get that because their elder or teachers do not give them advice or guide how to be better in attitude. Some citizens state that most of suspects who do violent crime usually aged under 18. Overall, the writer strongly believes that there are some factors which affect them to be a criminal person, furthermore an attention from parents will be useful for their attitude.

Several aspects which influenced to youngsters are educated and there is no aware from the elder particularly from their parents. This is proved with there are many teenagers who decide to break up from their school and they prefer to earn money. Yet, they are not classified for the majority of companies. The impact of this, certainly they try to gain cash with illegal ways like becoming robbery or thief. This can be solved if their parents are serious in teaching their children, so the teenagers will have good behaviour when they grow up.

However, people cannot blame the youngsters who do criminal since their parents do not give advice, but they become evil person because of their environment like their friends. This can affect them because their circumstance try to engage become a worse person. For instance, a teenager who actually kind and never smoking. Although he knows the danger of cigarettes, he tries that and addicted because of his friends. So in this case, the function of environment is more prominent than the parents.

To conclude, despite some individuals assume that the youngsters who do crime, not only because of their elders, but it is caused by the severe circumstance.

Writing Feedback / In this era, the media have held the prominent thing in almost all aspects [4]

Topic
It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.

The media is a key of world information. Indirectly, people communicate each other who they share info by using a sophisticated equipment like a smartphone, television even the internet. Willy nilly, they certainly are influenced. The author strongly believes that although citizens are easier for getting news, yet there are several demerits which affected by.

At the beginning, the media have a huge effect in human society life. It can encourage people to carry out activities. For example, the media inform to them about the impact of the global warming issue. This can make residents who have knowledge and intended will invite others to plant the plants. As a half of people understand that tree can decrease the effect of global warming.

However, media for some people can be used in wrong aim. They try to gain mass with fake information. For instance, a dictator in a country is able to persuade his inhabitants with announce in the media. Certainly, all of society will know the news what he tells. Another sample, people get hesitate data because there are many sources in order that make confused the receiver of fact. With this, from the press, several people obtain chance from the media.

To sum up, in this era, the media have held the prominent thing in almost all aspects. It depends on how people use that which it can be negative or positive in socialize. The great person, he has to be wise in managing media.

Writing Feedback / Buying things online is very convenient. Simple trade brings some demerits though. [5]

Topic
Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.
Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

The improvement by using the internet has affected people's behaviour. Particularly, in shopping which they prefer to buy what they need like clothes, groceries even air ticket via online. In this case, I strongly believe that even though there are several advantages like citizens can gain product easily, yet some drawbacks still give impacts to the shopping activities.

These days, a great deal of inhabitants can access the internet everywhere and every time, which is no distance and unlimited time to do many activities via online. Without exception in the looking for products which is every person can open the trade website. There, they can gain what they need by typing in, then they can compare the prices and discounts among many shops in the selling sites. For example, individual wants to obtain information regarding how to buy a smartphone; he just opens the Lazada.com which he can find a wide range of seller of mobile phone. With this, so the people can obtain what they need effortlessly.

Although there are several merits in the online shopping, this does not rule out the possibility that some demerits still include in. The citizens usually just take their order after several days since they have to wait until theirs arrive. For instance, after they order some stuff on the internet and pay it, they cannot receive what they order directly, usually it takes until for a day even a week depends on the distance where they buy it. Another case like internet fraud which has become a popular issue at present, a great deal of people lost their cash because they bought on the unverified websites. So, they have to make it clear and verified the trade sites before buying goods.

To sum up, in the modern era, people cannot get rid of the internet which it can make them simply particularly in the trading. Furthermore, they have to be aware of what they do, thanks to some criminals.