Writing Feedback / Mania can be good, warming, and deathly. Nowadays, a novel mania is arising... [3]

TED: WORLD'S ENGLISH MANIA - JAY WALKER

Mania can be good, warming, and deathly. Their interest could be widely diverse such as there are Beatles mania, Sports mania, Religious Mania. Nowadays, a novel mania is arising, called English mania. This mania also emerged In China, where most of the people acquired English by screaming it. Chinese pupils have been starting to study English since third grade. The reasons why they have to learn English started from the sole word, which is OPPORTUNITY. It means opportunity for better life and a job. Needless to say, people who know English, especially its mania, could pay for school and all kinds of foods in their table. Chinese student must be taken up English 12 hours a day for taking a great test that will determine their entire life. The World has universal language such mathematic and music instead of English. People can conduct global conversations with English to converse global issues: climate change, poverty, and diseases. English reflect a hope for better future. Our future needs general language to solve global problems.

Writing Feedback / It is proved, that the rise of public sports facilities boosts up awareness of public health [2]

Being healthy is a right for all societies all over the world. Some of the inhabitants utter that enhance the proportion of sports facilities are the best way to develop public health: in contrast, another side reveals it would give a slight impact to public health and need more other actions. These statements are valid; it depends on of our effort and support on both sides.

In the first place, societies have an assumption that public health assisted by increasing of sports facilities. I do really believe that people really supports the aforesaid statement. In 2015, there were many public sports fields all over housing in east Jakarta constructed by the government of Jakarta. It makes the resident of housing more productive with doing some exercises such aerobic, playing badminton, or football. Thus, it was very helpful to maintain public health.

Apart from the previous discussion, other inhabitants state opposite statement that sports facilities affect the public health slightly. I agree with the aforementioned pronouncement as well, due to the fact that it must be supported by others proceeding. According to Kompas.com, there are many types of research that disclose public health. Apart from sports facilities, inhabitants necessitate many actions such as encourage a healthy lifestyle and establish few sports group to accommodate people that have enormous desire for being healthy.

The evidence shows that the rise of public sports facilities boosts up awareness of public health. Nevertheless, it should be supported by others real action. The fusion of both aspects could improve public health.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 - The Pressure for Students at School [2]

The school is the first-hand agent to develop children's education foundation. Some people in few countries reveal that youngster had pressured in school and caused they have slight spare time. I have a tendency it had occurred that the school has another perspective regarding learning process. They should do a research to the pupil then evaluate thereafter.

Every school has an own horizon to rule learning method. Jaya Hadiningrat, a senior contributor to The Jakarta Post uttered that most of the countries in ASEAN have the strict practice that required their school member to finished many homework at home. They do not have many times for refreshing their brain. It is not good for their frame of mind, even though it will shape the pupil in the future. Hence, the situation lessens the creative hemisphere of the learner.

All I can say that the obvious problem-solving for this case is the school should observe and assess their learning practice. For instance, the preceptor must have a report of student's cognitive apart from student report. In a cognitive report, the teacher will have internal evaluation measuring the effectiveness of the teaching method. The institute will find out the matter experienced by their school member.

In short, the student should have well organized time between studying and relaxing. Moreover, the preceptor should appraise learning and teaching progress as well. Both of effort will bring improvement for the proceeds.

Writing Feedback / Writing task 2 - Learning English in Early Period [2]

Studying overseas language is not a bugbear in this modern era. Some experts claim that juvenile must learn a trans-border language at grade school instead of high school. I extremely agree, in this globalization age, the child has to acquire overseas language to compete with international society and raise the standard of children's education in the future. Despite it is too early for child learns another language.

In the first place, early education for study English has a slight drawback. There is a fear that the child will experience boredom if children recommended by the scholar to study English in primary school. They will not be willing learn more about the subject when they have already grown. For instance, begin in grade school the child had to learn the basic of English. On the other hand, in high school they must learn more advance English, they will be too bored to study the subject more.

Apart from the previous discussion, there are many merits of studying the subject in early age, due to the fact that they have to compete one another with the foreign child. According to TIME magazine, the pupil, especially in ASEAN countries, must collide while ASEAN Economic Community has already occurred at this time. They will rival to get job opportunity with fellow Indonesian or overseas society. Moreover, educations of the student will be escalated by learning English hereafter. As a result, they will survive in the future when they study English in the early period.

In conclusion, it is obviously the pupil must take trans-border language due to the advantages of learning English in grade school, although they must struggle with their flatness.

Writing Feedback / School is the first-hand agent evolving children to learn how to deal with adverse circumstances [2]

Our children are a precious gift from GOD. One of the pivotal foundations of the children is an education. In general mind of some individuals that parents send their children to school for socializing and striving in society. Whilst others consider that homeschooling is the prime preference for a child to be more focus on the lessons. Both of tracts are proficient ways to given depend on parent's deliberation.

The most obvious merit of going to formal education is how pupils face their life as assorting with their relatives in school. According to Danielle Tasmajian, the Master's College for kon.org utters that school is first-hand agent evolving children to learn how to deal with the circumstance. The pupil will attempt to encounter various characters of their fellows in a good way. They must have an important role in social development to through the adolescence phase. Nevertheless, it will be a boomerang for parents if they do not keep track of their children association.

On the other hand, there is another mode for taking an education is teaching the children at home. The vantage is the pupil can be more pay attention to studies. It proved when my mate takes homeschooling for his education. He reveals that learn tuition at home could create his focus at the highest level. Unfortunately, children with homeschooling status will struggle when they have to deal with group scope.

To sum up, by taking conventional school assist children to develop their behavior over the fettle. In spite of teaching the pupil in the home could make them fully focus on the subject. It is a fundamental selection for parents and they have to grant it wisely.

Writing Feedback / Summary: The Homeschool Option - it is chosen by the most of families in United States [2]

Homeschooling is chosen by the most of families in United States approximately one million children. It can be found at Japan, Taiwan, and South Africa as well. Homeschooling is not a novel idea: in contrast, it is a relatively new practice enrolling the children to a conventional school. In this modern era, there are many rationales why parents opt to homeschooling for their child's education way: they live in rural area, children with exceptional talent in arts, disgruntled to school available. Other than that, differing educational philosophy regarding safety of the school environment and home-grown school cannot accommodate their child's education needs. Government in some regions avowed course of such study is mandated, whilst homeschooler perhaps required only follow common guidelines or even none at all. As a matter of fact, most of families keep their preferences on a formal school: similarly, homeschooling become another preference and it has more prevalent among parents.

Writing Feedback / Summary: Various Learning Style in School [2]

There are various types of absorbing-the-lessons style: visual, auditory and kinesthetic. A person with visual learner genes sits somewhere in the classroom that has nothing blocks their view. They tend to depending teacher's gestures and facial expressions. Their best study materials are colorful videos, diagram, and flip-charts. On the other hand, auditory learners take a position where they can hear well the teacher's voice. Listen other students and talk about the subject is the best way to assist them process novel knowledge. Other than that, kinesthetic learners need dynamic learning environment: hands-on experiences in math, science, and reading. Furthermore integrating building projects, sports, and art-and-crafts activities help out a kinesthetic learner. Surprisingly, educators have found other learning methods of students such verbal learners who enjoyed using word for speaking and writing and logical learners who had strong logic and reasoning. Moreover, there are social learners who best working in group setting: in contrast, solitary learners who prefer work alone.

Writing Feedback / 100 out of 650 million of people having a physical disability in the world need wheelchairs. [2]

Summary: Wheelchair-Accessibility Issues

100 out of 650 million of people having physical disability in the world need wheelchairs. The existence of a wheelchair makes people with disability embrace independent lifestyle. On the other hand, the adversity of this moving tool: strenuous, large, and hard to maneuver on slippery surfaces and steep slopes. One of the most difficult places for wheelchair users is house. There are many parts of house which require certain condition such in bathroom with grab bars, higher toilet seats, and built-in shower seats. Many nations have rules demanding public buildings to be wheelchair friendly. The exterior needs: wide sidewalks and automatic doors, whilst the interior necessitates wide corridor and the restroom must be accessible. In advancement of technology era, the disabled could drive a car with a portable ramp. Many cities have already had subway and bus system to serve wheelchair user to the utmost. In most developing countries, an enormous attention does not come from wheelchair accessibility as access to wheelchair.

Writing Feedback / The Japanese tourists in 1995 were much more eager to travel overseas than it was 10 years earlier [2]

The breakdown information reveals the number of foreign tourists that traveling abroad in 1985 and 1995 measured by million. The overseas tourists are from Japan, Australia, and Canada. Overall, it can be seen that Japan was the nation that had wide gap while Australia only had a narrow gap in time frame.

Turning to the detail, in early year, Japan and Australia had increase number of people that went to another country. Japan had enormously jumped to 15.1 million in 1995. It was threefold from the former year that only at 4.9 million. Similarly, Australia had very slight increase from 7.1 million to 7.2 million in 1985 and 1995 respectively. Moreover, there were only one million tourists in its alteration along a decade.

Furthermore, Canada had a significant drop at the end of period. In 1985, the proportion of Canada at 6 million tourists and declined to 5.5 million people who travel abroad. The gap in 10-year period was 5 million holiday-maker.

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Writing Feedback / Walking or Riding a car - people's choice illustrated in the table [2]

The given table illustrates the average length of travelled per person per year in 1985 and 200 measured by miles. The traveling could count by walking and riding a car. Overall, it can be seen that people made traveling with a car had become a common way instead of walking.

To begin, it was noticeable in early period that people prefer to ride a car. It proved that the number the used of car in 1985 attain to 3.199 miles away. On the other hand, after 15-year period, the car proportion continuously arose at 4.806 miles in 2000. The difference between 1985 and 2000 was 1607 miles.

Another method that people utilized to travel around was by walking. In 1985, walking way stood at 255 miles. It reversed from the proportion of people that utilized car to travel. There was slight decrease from the former year, it is 237 miles away and lessened until 18 miles in 2000.

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Writing Feedback / The global figure of habitant growth between 1800 and 2100 and the forecast of urban areas residency [3]

The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions.

The breakdown of information reveals the figure in global habitant growth between 1800 until 2100 and forecast of urban resident in the next 25 years measured by millions. Overall, it can be seen that the inhabitant in all over the world were have a dramatic alteration during 250-year period and affected to the municipal habitant of world at developing regions in 25 years later that will be tremendously rise.

To begin, world occupant has been growing that stood from 1000 million in early period. It was a slowly increase until 1960; in contrast, in the next 55-year period, there was a rapid rise until this day at 7000 million. Furthermore, it will be continuously arise until reach a peak at 8000 million people in 2040. Surprisingly, the prediction shows that will be significantly drop into 6250 million in the end of period.

On the other hand, the forecast of urban population in 25 years later will be slightly increased every five years in developing regions. It will be reach a peak at 4000 million in 2040 while developing regions will have not any alteration at all and stable at 1250 million people.

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Writing Feedback / Japan's inhabitant of elderly people is measured by millions [3]

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan.

The given table and chart show Japan's inhabitant of elderly people in over a century measured by millions. Overall, it can be seen that population of Japan increase from 1950 until this time at 2015. The forecast showed that Japan's resident will be significantly plummeting until the end of period.

To begin, proportion of Japan's habitant stood at 84.1 million in 1950 that elder people over 65 was 4.9% (4.1 million) from the total of population. In 2005, the proportion of ageing people increase over fivefold from early period at 25.7 million, it was 20% of 127.8 million Japan's inhabitant. After 20-year period, the proportion of occupant enormously booms until reach a peak in 2015 (127.8 million).

The prediction in the future the population will be dramatically dropping into 110% and 89.9% in 2035 and 2055 respectively; in contrast with proportion of people over 65s will be sequential as at 37.2 million (34%) and 36.5 million (41%) in 2035 and 2055.

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Writing Feedback / Sleep Patterns shows that a truck driver, full-time mother and doctor don't sleep very well [2]

The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations according to a Canadian study.

The given table illustrates the scheme of sleep five different occupations according to Canadian study. Overall, truck driver, full-time mother and doctor have a rough pattern of sleep that they still awake have a rough pattern of sleep that they still awake whereas other individuals normally sleep fairly from 10 p.m. until 7 a.m.

A Canadian study reveals that doctor only has five hours sleep a day start from 1 a.m. to 7 a.m. and divided by short awake at 3 a.m. This may be because she or he must face emergencies call. Full-time mothers have a normal eight-hour portion of sleep basically; nevertheless two hours sleep at 1 a.m. until 3 a.m. must change into at 1 a.m. until 3 p.m. It probably they have to be awoken for comforting their babies. Surprisingly, truck drivers have a tough schedule of sleep; they only sleep at 7 a.m. until 10 a.m. and from 4 p.m. to 7 p.m. in a day.

In contrast with other former occupations, students have an ordinary time sleep, it starts 11 p.m. to 7 a.m.; similarly, the business executive begin their rest from 11 p.m. until 5a.m. They have less 2-hour sleep instead of the former job.

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Writing Feedback / The percentage of juvenile ever born by women aged 40-44s in Australia in 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006 [3]

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.

The given table reveals regarding the percentage of juvenile ever born to women aged 40-44 in Australia in 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006. Overall, it can be seen that after 1980's women with three or more children has declined and there were noticeably rise for women had not children at all.

In 1981 and 1986, for women who with no children, one and two children proportion increased progressively at 9.7%, 8.7% and 35.6% in 1986 respectively; in contrast, women were more likely to have had three or more children markedly drop into 27.0% from 27.4% and 18.9% from 27.6% in 1986.

In 1996 and 2006, all number of children that ever born had similar trend with the former years. There were significant jump the women were childless (12.8% and 15.9%) and only had one child (11.3% and 13.2%) in 1996 and 2006 from 1996 and 2006. Women aged in their early forties were had given birth two child had a very slight increase from 38.2% in 1996 to 38.3% in 2006. Moreover, the proportion who had three child and more were decline from 24.6% to 21.5% and 13.1% to 11% respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Cutting Edge Observation: Migration of Bird [2]

Migration is the common movement of wildlife their reproduce land and their living areas during throughout the years. This essential natural activity affect to evolved species and it can serve the necessary form for breed and grow juvenile. Bird migration is the most fascinating migration for observer in this century.

General pattern of bird migration is moving to higher latitudes for reproduce through the warm monsoon and they will turn back to lower latitudes in non-breeding time. Thus, they can make a nest and feeding the youth in conducive areas with this form of migration. Bird could migrate to a certain place that far away from their origin place. For instance, trans-equatorial migration is the arctic tern. It means breeding in the arctic territory and winters in Antarctic waters. They have to travel as far as 24,000 miles throughout a year during the process of migration. It must not take in long distance for bird migration. There are some species exhibit altitudinal migrations that typical of many grouse species. They are breeding in higher prominence, nearby or the summit of mountains, when they spend the non-breeding time nearby valley and or proximate low country.

The time periods of bird migration are different which based on their track. When they pass through the wide surface of water and other wide land as deserts and mountains, they have to take much longer period to get to their destination. On the other hands, most of birds fly for a narrow time around six to eight hours for every single day and tend to flying only for few hundred miles.

In this days, the observer find out fascinating observations which all migratory birds have a capability in natural navigation to reach their migration spot. Nocturnal migrants are tend to flying at night and rely on to stars for their navigational; In contrast, Diurnal migrants are tend to traveling during the day and make the sun to be their sign.

Writing Feedback / Devastating Consequences of Logging [3]

Logging industry makes several decays such living environment destruction, pollution, and clime change. Like terrene creatures, aquatic creatures are becoming extinct by deforestation. Trees shade all organism on the ground underneath their strong parts of body. The canopy of branches and leaves avoid superficies runoff by retard heavy rainfall, thus the water could not fall to the earth directly. Roots of the trees could stabilize the soil and help to avoid attrition. Symbiotic mutualism occurs when well ground boost root growth and microbe activity that help the trees grow well.

Aquatic habitats can be damaged by logging as well. Falling ground and other residue can be intercepted by vegetation along stream. The eroding earth which containing organic things can drain more oxygen. It makes fish and other animals killed due to decimation oxygen.

Trees become natural defenses of pollution in the air. The leaves of trees filtering pollutants from air and also get rid of carbon dioxide from the atmosphere. If the carbon dioxide airborne, which they can alloy with acid rain and water vapour, it will be generate quality of water round streams and along of river. In healthy forest ecosystem, trees protect to mitigate evaporation when they dragging haze from the ground into the atmosphere. Moreover, deforestation sway rainfall scheme and it leads to severe flooding and forest fires. Logging is an enormous actor behind global warming. In short, responsible logging over tropical rainforests would preserve next generations.