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Your school days, an enjoyable event description

5 - The enjoyable event I would like to talk about here is the spring outing activity that happened on my...

Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
what is advantage and disadvantage of a new shopping mall ?

3 - A mechanisms of free-trades of consumerism in modern times, shopping malls are large places full of goods and service...

Writing FeedbackBBOY - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
TOEFL assay: You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business.

4 - I see that you are very good at writing in English! I'll help with a phrase in this sentence:...

Writing Feedbackcuchocruz - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
Havisham: My Story based on the Poem Havisham

3 - Thank-you, i am only 14 years old and my english teacher gave me an E grade for this piece,...

Writing FeedbackAdamking120 - Feb 25, 2010 / Adamking120 - Feb 26, 2010
personal narative -mexico tattoo

NEW - started writing this personall narrative for a senior english assingment..feeling kinda stuck. please helppp Laying my head back...

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micheal jackson : rock with you

4 - 1958: when Michael was born in lower middle class family with a curse of being black. ---- if you...

Writing Feedbackkasi_gem - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
descriptive essay about my favorite animal (the lion)

4 - Cathy is right! It's not convincing if you do not give a reason why it is the greatest. I...

Writing FeedbackESCRIBE - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
which one do you think--- a wide range of courses --most/least important

3 - Nowadays, along with the emphasis on the overall development of individuals, students now stay ... ---- you don't need...

Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
Modern buildings are appearing in large numbers, we should build our buildings in traditional styles

5 - Well, it is a very difficult language to learn! You are doing very well. The way to practice is...

Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
How to Apply to Universities in America from Indonesia (process analysis)

3 - ...but something always goes gets in their way. Some people just cannot afford it, and some people just...

Writing Feedbackpurplespongy22 - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
a narrative reflective essay regarding education

2 - If you are writing in the present verb tense, keep consistent about it: When his class mate, Ken Harvey,...

Writing FeedbackDeedames - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
Indian-White Relationship in Colonial New England, can you check my essay

3 - You can't just start by saying something had been some way without saying "when" you are talking about: When...

Writing FeedbackJuan8897 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
A healthy person: What do people do to stay healthy in your country?

2 - Like in other countries, a healthy life style and having a healthy society is one of the main prioritiesofin...

Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Feb 25, 2010 / Rod_Farva - Feb 25, 2010
"Freedom to Failure" - Definition & Example paper, passive voice, prepostion use

2 - Yes, isn't it interesting that we crave that sense of connectedness, so we blog and twitter about what...

Writing Feedbackkjwerner - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
TOEFL essay (compare work of artists and scientists)

3 - Good advice, Peng! I also think this essay needs an intro paragraph that talks about both artists and...

Writing Feedbacksheryl82 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
[TOEFL essay] Teachers should update their knowledge every 5years.

7 - everybody thanks a lots I'll try to use ur advice :)...

Writing Feedbackduke616 - Feb 22, 2010 / duke616 - Feb 25, 2010
Personal Story - The Child Hood

4 - Remember the first letter of each sentence should be in capital...

Writing Feedbackhyori14 - Feb 23, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 25, 2010
Green Change - "cause and effect" essay

3 - What a powerful line this is! When people deeply understand the cultural turbulence that takes place, they really...

Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - Jan 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
Essay-Mommy Makeovers, Newest Trend in Cosmetic Surgery-Feedback Welcome!

4 - Questions are good attention grabbers, for sure. They are almost a little cliche, though, because of how overused rhetorical...

Writing Feedbackamymich79 - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2010
Personal Essay- How the children from India transformed me

3 - This is how you end the first paragraph, so it sort of establishes these ideas as the theme...

Writing Feedbackjenniferrchan - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2010
Politicians and scientists have the greatest influence on earth.discuss IELTS GT

4 - I like your argument that politicians and scientists have influence on earth. It seems very vague though as to...

Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 15, 2010 / hey_millie - Feb 24, 2010
People are being demoralized day by day.Discuss IELTS GT

4 - Perhaps elaborate on your conclusion or tie it into another paragraph somehow. Otherwise a great essay!...

Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 17, 2010 / Veta - Feb 24, 2010
Nanotechnology (implications and the future) - essay polishing

2 - There are many different implications that nanotechnology has for the future.--- this kind of sentence always weakens an essay....

Writing FeedbackClyde - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior,

3 - Raising a child is a hard task for human being. It is also a 24-hour per day job for...

Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
Anti-social behavior, lack of respect to others -help me make some improvement

5 - This is what colons are for----> There are mainly two causes of this phenomenon: the negative influence of ......

Writing Feedbackadverb - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
Reasons-winners are be motivated by money & fame, what impacts on youth & itself

3 - Great thanks, klusterfunk. (1)Due to the rapid ecomomic development, Due to /Owing to/As a result of; Along with...

Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 22, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 22, 2010
"big or small inventions and their roles" - English Composition Clep

2 - When you use a semi-colon, you are supposed to have a complete sentence worth of words on each side...

Writing Feedbackmonessie - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
toefl writting:Printed books have greater effects on society than television

2 - In fact, people in growing numbers prefer television to printed books, considering it efficient and effective. Yet, there are...

Writing Feedbackelvis_ma - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
TOEFL IBT ESSAY "Telephones have had more positive effects on human kind than TV

2 - Don't write it all as one long paragraph. Separate it into some 4 or 5 sentence paragraphs: ...telephone,...

Writing Feedbackcandy890411 - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
ESSAY 250 WORDS - IELTS - Politicians and Scientists

4 - Number agreement, and use a comma: Scientists and politicians have played important roles in the world lately, as their...

Writing Feedbackvictorp_sv - Feb 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
A point to believe - Can anyone help me to short my creative essay?

15 - The whistle blows, and I hesitate. ---- I think this is better, but maybe you made it 2 sentences...

Writing Feedbacklittle636 - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
garbage sites, safety council - GRE Argument

4 - Thanks for your helping!...

Writing Feedbackwoodcrowfoot - Feb 20, 2010 / woodcrowfoot - Feb 22, 2010
"Do Phone Calls Increase Voter Turnout?" - article summary and critique

NEW - I was hoping to get some quick revisions for the rough draft of my article critique, I feel like...

Writing Feedbackggc540 - Feb 22, 2010 / — -
'just a typical teenager' - Creative writing Who am i? essay

5 - thanks alot.....

Writing Feedbackeram - Feb 18, 2010 / eram - Feb 21, 2010
marvellous pakistan

3 - When you write, use capital letters at the beginning of every sentence. When you write the word Pakistan, capitalize...

Writing Feedbackkasi_gem - Feb 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2010
In achieving happiness,relationship is of more important than anything else.

2 - Thus the most frequent reason given for studying has changed to be a desire to become an authority in...

Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2010
GRE issue essay:"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes..."

7 - What's the meaning of "pl"?...

Writing FeedbackYeming - Feb 16, 2010 / Yeming - Feb 21, 2010
TOEFL"It is better to marry some who is similar to you rather than different

4 - I　guess you finish it in a rush. Criteria, other believe, definitely, Some believes that marrying a person similar to...

Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Feb 19, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 20, 2010
Marshalls made me realize how sine qua non a higher education is

2 - Jonathan, you are a hero. Thanks for helping so many people lately. I see what the problem is...

Writing FeedbackBlaqnsassy - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
Is persistence all that is needed to be successful? - A SAT essay

3 - god thesis statement. This is brilliant. Patience and motivation are indeed the components of persistence. Thanks for sharing...

Writing FeedbackDemha - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
Educating Children with Toys - help me with these pargraphs

5 - Consequently, toy manufacturers are designing toys that can aid children in learning to initiate action, to taking care...

Writing Feedbackmary123 - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
Narrative Essay (an experience) - "How do I approach him?"

5 - Well, for good clear composition, you ca use the last sentence of the first paragraph to establish a...

Writing Feedbackbharat2363 - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
'Building character' - Community Service- Synthesis Essay

3 - This should be a comma and not a semi-colon: Having community service as a requirement to graduate is a...

Writing Feedbacktiger13twin - Feb 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2010
GRE Argument essay:Finding new jobs for laid-off XYZ company employees

2 - This is looking very strong! ...last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did...

Writing Feedbackeringao - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2010
THE PROCESS OF FORGIVENESS, BLAME, AND SELF-ACCEPTANCE

3 - Hi Overall great essay. But I'm sure that your readers will be much happier if you stop using profanity....

Writing FeedbackMementoMori - Feb 2, 2010 / Demha - Feb 19, 2010
IELTS Essay - Technology vs Traditional Cultures

4 - comments: Your first paragraph sounds like you are giving your opinion. That should be your final paragraph. What is...

Writing Feedbackvictorp_sv - Feb 17, 2010 / comet2000 - Feb 18, 2010
"never thought college was important at all" - Cause and Effect

4 - Comments: So far, it's ok. I think you should expend more on your essay. It's a bit short but...

Writing FeedbackDannyrestrepo - Feb 17, 2010 / comet2000 - Feb 18, 2010
Give reasons and make suggestions. unemployment problem , reasons and solutions.

3 - One of serious issues associated with this change is the high young unemployment rate among young people, which in...

Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 18, 2010
Revising and ideas..How has your childhood shaped you as a writer

4 - As a child, I was encouraged to be open, focused, as well as descriptive in everything that I did;...

Writing Feedbackashleyfloyd - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 18, 2010
Some people prefer home theater, others cinema at hall, discuss. IELTS GT

3 - hai, Can't you introduce with some dialogue on movie,than starting with your agreement? Even one can review some more...

Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 17, 2010 / remya - Feb 18, 2010
achieving happiness through relationships - IELTS ESSAY

6 - Thank you sir.I will take care of these mistakes next time....

Writing Feedbackremya - Feb 17, 2010 / remya - Feb 18, 2010
Inspiration Essay about a Broadway star

2 - Not many girls get the opportunity to meet the one person who they idolize, and the one person who...

Writing FeedbackDanni Nicole - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2010
Toefl essay: Grades represent a proper way of motivating and encouraging students to learn

3 - Hi, very well written, but i am not clear with your conclusion para. it helps students know their advantages...

Writing Feedbacklizzielu17 - Feb 12, 2010 / Poojasugandhi - Feb 17, 2010
Reasons to attend college or university -(TOEFL) Writing practice

2 - Hi, are you preparing for the toefl ibt?? Then your essay is incomplete. You should follow proper pattern for...

Writing FeedbackMasterSci - Feb 17, 2010 / Poojasugandhi - Feb 17, 2010
Do you agree or disagree? a jury has access to the defendant's past record

5 - These mistakes should be cleaned up: or BE BETTER INFORMED TO JUDGE OTHER...

Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 14, 2010 / linmark - Feb 17, 2010
Why Life Insurance important? - It has many benefits

6 - I didn't realized how important it is until my grandmother passed away late last year. I feel like...

Writing Feedbackjaneypooh - Feb 12, 2010 / Randyhl - Feb 17, 2010
Smoking at public place should be banned. Argumental essay for IELTS GT

8 - Thank you, Kevin. You really have got the power to raise one's confidence higher. Thanks again for your overwhelming...

Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 14, 2010 / usalma2002 - Feb 16, 2010
First Impressions from Lasting Impressions (tattoos and piercings essay)

3 - Tattoos and piercings have been around for many years they are even found in the bible as a marking...

Writing Feedbackmonkeygirl76 - Feb 15, 2010 / Nets - Feb 16, 2010
Argu: discuss disad./ad. business and cultral contact bt countries,&your opinion

3 - an intensive discussion on whether it is a positive development or a negative one. Undoubtedly, there is a...

Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 16, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2010
TOEFL - I believe people can get more knowledge from books

3 - This is because books contain more information and knowledge, and people can learn from past. ---- yes, learning from...

Writing Feedbackchlghdgus - Feb 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 16, 2010

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