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Essay about Zambia - feedback on information, flow, and format appreciated!

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TOEFL: Why people visit museums? History/ Broaden Perspectives/ Place of Attraction

3 - As a lover of travel and art, I always enjoy visits to excellent museum when taking a tour of...

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'crowded, polluted, noisy place' - a new high school may be built in the neighborhood

5 - thank you very much!!!)))...

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Essay about selecting the course.

6 - However, this claim overlooks the potential advantages of students' own selected course, such as increasing students' motivation and their...

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toefl: overemphasizing on personal lives of famous people by media

3 - As a student majoring in mass media, I think that it is true that modern media is overemphasizing the...

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Narrative Ethnographic Essay - Needs help

2 - In 1995, a Minister, along with his wife and five children, emigrated from Guatemala City, Guatemala. Her youngest...

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Have there been any bumps in the road in your life.

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Poltical Science, Multiple Questions Essay on Political Issues

2 - Oh, you have to think of the words as if you have only so many to use! Try to...

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Datong District, the oldest district of Taipei City, is my hometown.

3 - Hi Kevin, Thank you so much :D...

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'it is the right thing to do' - Page 218 Autobiographical Essay

5 - Well, I would not call it a discrepancy... but the reason I mentioned it is that what it made...

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MONOPOLY VS. PERFECT COMPETITION (research paper feedback)

3 - Thank you! I'll make some changes and will focus on MLA citation; it's not due until next week so...

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'Budget cuts' - the leading problem facing our eduactional system today?

2 - Budget cuts have been the leading problem facing our educational system today. When the state of California announced a...

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Passion for a subject or cause? UD Essay Help

2 - Over the past sixteen years of doctor visits, ... I was too young to understand why Sam was...

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US Space Project - English CLEP essay (space exploration!)

2 - Space exploration has made information available to us that previously unimaginable. Issues like hunger, disease, global warming ......

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Research Paper (Argument)-Reflections of Society in Children's Literature

2 - I thought the opening paragraph was fine, and your intention clearly stated in the last sentence. Though still...

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Haitian immigrants and their choice to struggle for better life-essay check

2 - The lives of immigrants are very difficult and filled with many hardships. In "Brother I`m Dying" Edwidge Danticat...

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Should teachers permit to teach if they don't have teacher's certification

2 - Teacher education has always played an important role in determining student outcomes. To be certified in Illinois, teachers must...

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The Watergate paper feedback

2 - Nice job. I did not find errors, but I guess it would be great to have a bit of...

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TOEFL essay: Zoos have no useful purpose. Agree/disagree

4 - No, I only know about editing. However, I know some Native speakers of English who do not write as...

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Describe a character in fiction: How the steel was tempered

3 - He once said: "Personal business must yield to collective interest." He respected his superiors and learned a lot...

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About an activity: the magazine Young

3 - After a whole day's efforts, which ranged from printing posters to blowing balloons, everyone was exhausted. However, because of...

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TOEFL ESSAY - serious or entertaining movies

4 - Instead of, "Here are my reasons," try: My reasons include the following: Oh, all the corrections that...

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'change must come from the top' - written for English CLEP

3 - Kevin, Thank you so much! This helped and I hope I'll pass the CLEP.. :)...

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Arumentative Essay(MLA Style) Is Spanking the Right Way to Discipline

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Essay about "what I would do with some land"

2 - we should not decide their destinies for... capability to take care of them or of whether or not...

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TOEFL essay: Apartment Vs dormitories at university.

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help with essay for aboard

4 - With the enormous population in Beijing it has various ethnic groups, races and tribes. I am currently taking...

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Members of a group can learn from each other, and it will help compensate one's weaknesses.

3 - well, the essay I am practicing is time-impromptu writing, which means I am not allowed to reserch something on...

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"the Tenth Man" - Simple Essay

2 - Good questions! Are you using APA or MLA? If it is MLA, you don't need to use commas... Just...

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Polar bear essay - I could really use on what i've written so far

2 - Great! I made some minor changes below. It will be good if you have a good intro paragraph and...

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Personal Response -The Wars

3 - Made substitutions of war with its synonyms. Thanks for the feedback. :)...

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the crucible-how is John Proctor presented (paragraph about him&elizabeth)

NEW - Hi, just wondering if I am answering the question with this paragraph or have gone of the point completely!!...

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A four-paragraph essay about The True Meaning of Courage

4 - Dear Gloria, Thanks so much for your suggestions. They were helpful! :)...

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Computers have made life becomes easier or difficult? Discuss

2 - I suggest that you add a sentence to the first paragraph to say what your opinion is: although computers...

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Research paper on Poe's "Ligeia"

4 - Excellent! This is a great passage; if you keep your comparisons similar to this, you're going to have a...

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"My father" - pls. help revise part of my P.S.

NEW - My father works as a senior IT researcher in RICOH, a prestigious Japanese company. Under his influence, I learned...

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IELTS; COMPUTERS REPLACE MAN POWR IN JOBS

3 - Thank you so much, i would definitely keep your corrections in mind.....

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Report on whether to diagnose a 6 year old boy who may have autism

2 - Good evening :) I have edited the first two sections of your piece and also given some general...

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Telling the truth is not a best option always

5 - Good morning :) I think I'd probably give it a low C right now, as it is without...

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Cumulative class essay about supervisor

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'traffic jam, noisy neighborhood' - New movie theater may be built

3 - Good afternoon :) "Going to movie theater is a hobby for many people; therefore, the number of movie...

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Biology Creative Essay

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help with essay #1: experience with soup kitchen

4 - Since you asked for corrections, that was all I provided in the first posting :) I think it...

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ADVANTAGES OF CITY LIVING AND COUNTRY LIVING, can you help me with this?

NEW - Some people, say that living in the countryside is the best choice, because is better for your heath. But...

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'I was two months pregnant' - A decision that has changed my life

2 - Make sure you are capitalizing the first words of every sentence. "so" should be capitalized. At this point...

Writing FeedbackTMcGee - Nov 21, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 21, 2008

Paper about ISA. My teacher said my paper is unorganized.

2 - The main thing about organization is that each subject you want to talk about should have its own paragraph....

Writing Feedbacksadie0910 - Nov 20, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 20, 2008

Essay about bad effects of the internet on students

2 - Good afternoon :) In regards to meaning, there is no difference between "internet" and "the internet." "The" is...

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What is Conrad's definition of evil from heart of darkness and the strange

NEW - What is conrad's defintion of evil from heart of darkness and The Strange Case Of Dr. Jekyll and Mr....

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Realism Essay - the readers choice

NEW - Had to write an essay on realism/romatacism. Please give any grammer corrections and content suggestions you may have. ...

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Teenagers and alcohol essay - help revise or offer suggestions:

2 - Good evening :) First, avoid contractions in formal academic writing; for instance, "It's" should be "It is." ...

Writing Feedbacktonydengcnu - Nov 19, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 19, 2008

Cause and Effect Essay-A Family of Poverty

5 - Don't tell the reader, that you're going to tell him something. Like, " I will describe what my poverty...

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The Freedom to Choose Death

NEW - The Freedom to Choose Death Euthanasia has become one of the most controversial topics nowadays. Euthanasia means "mercy...

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Pls. help revise essay: The person who has great influence on me

3 - thanks for your help, Gloria. tony...

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Taking action against moral injustice - English Essay Gr. 12 Level

3 - You're very welcome. This is a very importance stance, and this sentence needs to be included somewhere in...

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Persuasive Essay Abu Graib Prison Camp-Need Help

NEW - I need help, I am a very WEAK writer. No prisoner should ever feel mortally violated and striped...

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research essay on novel "monkey beach"

NEW - I have finished an research paper on residential school and it is based on the novel, monkey beach. Can...

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'Gillian and Mum' - Creative Writing - help needs to be proof read

6 - I see. I've edited the first section and then made some general comments in regards to the rest of...

Writing Feedbackmissfilan - Nov 12, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 17, 2008

Writing is the basis for all education and is too often overshadowed in schools today

2 - Good afternoon :) What is the prompt for this assignment? Regards, Gloria Moderator, EssayForum.com...

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People have different job expectations for jobs - essay help

NEW - Good day to you, would you mind to rate my essay, please. Thank you very much Topic in...

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Studying at traditional schools or via computer or TV

2 - I think your response is a very thorough response to the prompt. It is organized, well structured, and explains...

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