|Misreading the topic? - UC prompt 1
Undergraduatewongxywongxy - Nov 28, 2008
|work habits and time management - Common Application Extra Curricular
2 - I took out the opening sentence, because, although it captures a scene from your experience, it does not really...
Undergraduatewongtongsoup22EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|UC prompt #2 - my academic experience
4 - thank you!...
Undergraduatepsypsypsypsy - Nov 28, 2008
|Double-major in music / Political science major - Emory and Duke essays
2 - I like the forthright way you explained how Emory became a point of reference after having been the first...
UndergraduateNikhilEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|to give myself to the world - does this essay fit the prompt?
2 - Great essay! It is more entertaining than most essays. Try not to start sentences with articles (i.e "and,"...
UndergraduatembhaireEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|College community experience & diversity - Common App Prompt 5 question
UndergraduateSwamiEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Knows the goal and how to achieve it; Letter of Recommendation from Chemistry teacher
LettersAmyRemusAmyRemus - Nov 28, 2008
|"Look around the world more broadly." - UC PROMPT #1
NEW - PROMPT: Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us...
|essay about the nature of estrangement
4 - Hello! Does this involve the Nature vs. Nurture question? If so, type nature vs. nurture into Google. Also, you...
EssayschriscEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|I am proud of my open mindedness - "Working With Different Scenarios"
UndergraduateTheFlameProofTheFlameProof - Nov 28, 2008
|a setback that you have faced and how it was resolved - essay
5 - Thanks so much...and what do you mean don't make UM sound like highschool? Do you have any suggestions for...
Undergraduatepianogirl_5pianogirl_5 - Nov 28, 2008
|"the Tenth Man" - Simple Essay
Writing Feedbackstudent838EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Cape Verde, West Africa - 250 words for personal essay
2 - Great story, I hope you have lots of success!! See how I separated the paragraphs differently... now it is...
UndergraduateEstela2009EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|what my dad has been preparing me for my whole life - UC prompt 1
Undergraduatelilibeth91760lilibeth91760 - Nov 28, 2008
|I am shedding tears - UC Prompt #1 Essay
5 - How about adding a strong intro sentence that tells the reader the THEME of what you are about to...
UndergraduatebumsengsjEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Admission Essay (Boston University) - its environment attracts me
5 - Just a few months ago, I discovered the significance of Boston University for my academic future. One of the...
Undergraduateyimm107EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|"My family guides and supports me" - UC personal statement
Undergraduatelattentlattent - Nov 28, 2008
|"martial artist" - UC prompt help???
4 - This is a nice essay. I would like to mention that Dr. Yang Jwing Ming has important things to...
UndergraduatekabyakEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|UC Prompt #2 - Jean Paul
Undergraduatesatyr5EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|"Imagine" by John Lennon; UC Promt 1- Morality Class
2 - This is a powerful essay! As soeone who grew up hearing Imagine and other important Beatles music, it intrigues...
Undergraduatesatyr5EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|UC Prompt #1 - "can I walk the walk?"
UndergraduatekMzkMz - Nov 28, 2008
|Springfield College Physician's Assistance Addmission Essay
2 - Within your essay, I think that "physician's assistant" should not be capitalized, because it is not a proper noun...
Undergraduateulbz1190EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Catholic school, September in Florida - Common App Essay PROMPT 2
6 - Thanks a lot for the corrections saviorknights, 'especially' the one about the mixed-up tenses. I never would have caught...
Undergraduaterandomzmrandomzm - Nov 28, 2008
|UC prompt #1 - ""Are you two twins?"
5 - - Does it flow? (good transitions) You have a very distinguished style and it is portrayed quite vividly in...
UndergraduatesaviorknightsPen Name - Nov 28, 2008
|My life vs. my Chinese parents + an art class, UC Prompt Essays
4 - Here are some suggestions to help you: Prompt one: ...neither of them could speak English correctly ...
UndergraduatevclicoolEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Physical Education (A Key in Establishing relationships)
SpeechescheereylEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Growing up knowing I had Transcobalmin II was a little alienating - essay about determination
3 - Hi, I revised my response and would greatly appreciate it if you told me your thoughts. Thanks Danielle3...
UndergraduateDanielle3Danielle3 - Nov 28, 2008
|Polar bear essay - I could really use on what i've written so far
2 - Great! I made some minor changes below. It will be good if you have a good intro paragraph and...
Writing Feedbackshannon1432EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|"my focus was helping my classmate" - Kyle was born with a disability
2 - Hello! You probably should not use Kyle's real, full name, but instead just all him "Kyle." How about...
UndergraduatejoycewriceEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Santorini, Personal Statement
5 - Since you made the trip possible for yourself, maybe you should talk about how you made it possible and...
Undergraduatemrlanastasiab17 - Nov 28, 2008