justivy03
Jul 22, 2016
Scholarship / What can you gain from learning cultures? What aspect of french history and culture interests you? [2]
Hi Sean, first of all WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we hope that this is just the start of a great partnership, may you also find this website valuable as much as useful to your writing projects.
We strive to provide you with the most accurate and credible feedback in order to strengthen your essay and be ready for submission.
Now, as this is an application letter to an exchange scholarship program, I must say, it's quiet long for its purpose. A letter of this agenda, should be focused on one goal and one goal only, answer the question, why are you interested in participating in this scholarship program. Now, I understand that you would like to have everything covered, all the basics, academic background, social insights and personal development, however, you still have to make sure that the focus of the letter is the "why and how" of this particular exchange program.
What I suggest that you do to refine or revise this essay is that, you keep focus, make sure that the points you establish is not only focused on the purpose of this program but also to what might be the outcome of this exercise. I hope to review the next leg of your draft soon.
Hi Sean, first of all WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we hope that this is just the start of a great partnership, may you also find this website valuable as much as useful to your writing projects.
We strive to provide you with the most accurate and credible feedback in order to strengthen your essay and be ready for submission.
Now, as this is an application letter to an exchange scholarship program, I must say, it's quiet long for its purpose. A letter of this agenda, should be focused on one goal and one goal only, answer the question, why are you interested in participating in this scholarship program. Now, I understand that you would like to have everything covered, all the basics, academic background, social insights and personal development, however, you still have to make sure that the focus of the letter is the "why and how" of this particular exchange program.
What I suggest that you do to refine or revise this essay is that, you keep focus, make sure that the points you establish is not only focused on the purpose of this program but also to what might be the outcome of this exercise. I hope to review the next leg of your draft soon.