justivy03
Jul 18, 2016
Writing Feedback / In about 140 words write a paragraph about the importance of doing exercises [4]
Hi Quyen, indeed, WELCOME the the team, it's always good to welcome yet another member of the team and we hope that this is just the start of a great partnership.
Moving forward, I must say that this writing task is quiet straight forward, definitely not that easy, as you have to make sure that you strictly follow the word limitations as instructed. Now, as I read along, I notice a few minor changes that can be enhanced to make your essay strong. To better understand this observation, please find the corrections below;
- There are many important reasons
- Firstly , taking exercises keeps us healthy.
- Secondly, exercises aidsus in maintaining fitness
- andpossessinghelp us possess
-cheapinexpensive way
- forobesityobese people
- to achieveatheir weight-losing goal.
- andrelaxingrelaxes us. Because, as it releases chemicals
- sothat each of us should plan to do it regularly.
There you have it Quyen, I hope the above modifications are helpful towards your revision and for future writing reference, mind the position of the words in the sentences, the minor details are also very crucial such as the linking verbs as well as the tenses as this affects the overall idea of the essay.
Hi Quyen, indeed, WELCOME the the team, it's always good to welcome yet another member of the team and we hope that this is just the start of a great partnership.
Moving forward, I must say that this writing task is quiet straight forward, definitely not that easy, as you have to make sure that you strictly follow the word limitations as instructed. Now, as I read along, I notice a few minor changes that can be enhanced to make your essay strong. To better understand this observation, please find the corrections below;
- There are many important reasons
- First
- Secondly, exercises aids
- and
-
- for
- to achieve
- and
- so
There you have it Quyen, I hope the above modifications are helpful towards your revision and for future writing reference, mind the position of the words in the sentences, the minor details are also very crucial such as the linking verbs as well as the tenses as this affects the overall idea of the essay.