Will try to improve further. Thanks for your patience in helping me to get required standard writing for IELTS

Nowadays, it is common to see increasing number of children often affected by various diseases especially obesity whereas, generally old-age people seems have such diseases previously. In this essay, we will explore the significant causes for obesity among young children and the possible measures to prevent it.

My mother has always spoken to me ofabout her childhood, from roaming the streets of her hometown in Mexico to picking every field imaginable throughout the many countries of the United States.

Like many Hispanics in the late nineteenth century my mother andhermother's family received their U.S. citizenship by agreeing to work on farmer's fields

All the stories my mother has told me, have made me appreciate her and my Hispanic heritage even more.

It is a way to escape from what might be a stressful inside the house

and people crossing the border.

In the car seat I am able to do what I enjoy.

When I first heard about Scripps College, I immediately dismissed it for being an all-women school

Scripps exceeded my expectations and showed me the true worth of a women's college, notably greater leadership opportunities and a supportive environment.

You should tell the reason for writing the letter in the first paragraph (introductory para) itself.

As per the agreement, myself along with my wife supposed to move in by next month 1st onwards. I am afraid I will not be able to occupy the flat as I had agreed.

Unfortunately, during my vacation to my native last week in India, I had met with an accident, which causes a severe injury in my back bone. Doctor advised me to be in bed rest for at least next two months from now. Due to my physical condition, I have made necessary arrangements in my office to purse my work from home.

Unfortunately, during my vacation to my native last week in India,

Michelangelo's Last Judgment, a masterpiece that is one of the most, unsettling and thought provoking things I have ever laid eyes on.

I hope to discover and develop my passions, wherever they might take me.

am afraid that you write too much about debating itself, and not enough about the community. This looks more like "your extracurricular activity" essay, than "the community one".

Good intro but you definitely need to centre it around the community aspect of the club.

Also, always remember that a good essay should possess these three elements: unity, coherence , and emphasis.

Different cultures manifested in the history of the human race interested me at a very young age.

However, cultural studies did not appeal to me until I entered the Spanish program at Indian Creek Middle School.

Please visit several essays posted by your co- EFmembers. Read them. Definitely, you can get more ideas on how to write an essay:)

Color is a part of all of our lives.

Each color conceals a story.

WhithoutWithout colors life could be so boring and planeplain.

Just white and black. You can also express yourself through color.

A house is one of the basic needs of any animal.So obviously i will prefer buying a home rather than starting a business.

Firstly,iI don't need to depend on others.

If i dont' have a house i have to rent a house and i need to pay for it each and every month.

The 'age old' question of whose responsibility are the poor old people who have no source of income and elderly who cannot take of themselves.

Some section of people suggest

No child can afford to buy themselves things or go places on their own

No child can survive on their own without their parents. No child can afford to buy themselves things or go places on their own. However, there is a point in most everyone's lives when they realize they need to work for their own possessions. This thinking signifies the imminent transition from childhood to adulthood.

Also, these lines are jarring; u go to an abrupt stop from a cruise 'we have yet to unlock all of its secrets. I intend to.' You can instead write, 'much is still unknown. I intend to unlock its secrets.' or something like it.

When I hear the name "University of Michigan", one word comes to mind:research "Research".

Replace this, ' It seems as if I'm always hearing about some new advancement or information that came ' with 'There is always some new innovation or advancement of knowledge'. Ur line makes others think that you are awed to hear about it but still skeptic.

During the Summer of 2013, I joined the Shakkotai lab at the University of Michigan. Shakkotai focused on Spinocerebellar Ataxias, neurodegenerative diseases that affects one's movement. I am currently looking at the gene expression of the ITPR1 receptor of Purkinje Cells and how it changes throughout the lifetime of mice models. I continue working there in an effort to publish a paper.
UofM is lauded as a top spender for university research: an achievement that reflects the desire to create a better world through a more thorough understanding of our environment and ourselves. I, too, share in that wish -- to be able to make the world a better place. In attending UofM, I hope to continue researching at this top-notch institution, for the benefit of humanity as a whole -- with our efforts combined, no disease is incurable, no problem too difficult.

As an aspiring neurosurgeon, I want to unlock the secrets of life

Remove this line 'Diversity is important to me in both my academic and student lives.' Its unnecessary.

How would that curriculum support your interests?

Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School

"No man is an island". This is the proverb meaning that everyone can not definitely live without others. This is the reason why people have to have friends. There are completely dissimilar types of peers. Apparently, different persons need different friends' characteristics. From my perspective, the most personality of my best friends that I value highly is credibility.

Let's try to imagine that we are betrayed by our best friend.

Most of these commercials consistedconsists of new reality shows

There are some shows that are not all about the drama and or sex appeal.

And these are only a few of them.

Therefore, to have a positive, the owner should use it wisely.

Most of the objects are created to have a useful usage, but sometimes we are the ones who create negative consequence

Relationships areboon to humans in this world.

both truth and white lies contributes

One of the main reasons that brought me to apply to BU was perhaps the rich cultural diverse atmosphere it provides,

studyingoversea has become a topic of frequent discussion

Some people think that going abroad for education brings many benefits, while others holddifferent views.

Enhancing language ability is the primary benefit for youngster to study overseas .

To be a good parent is significant for our family and society.

This raises an arguable issue whether it is beneficial to enlighten young people to be good parents in school.

In my opinion, it is negative as it is not only the school cannot pay focus on individual properly but also the parenting has more benefit for young people to learn how to be good parents.

On one hand, it is not a good idea to teach youth to be good parents in school due to the concentrations beyond on every student.

It was a scene from back then when I was in 10th grade.

Seeing all of this made me realize that Indonesia is still struggling to produce its own vehicle and airplane.

As the proverb says, "Health is wealth", one who has good health is said to have the wealth for his/her lifetime. Nowadays, even children are suffering from pervasive diseases like obesity at their early stages of life. There are many causes for it and it is high-time that we work on the preventive measures to avoid them.

Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only.

After attending these events, I realized how important it is an American Muslim to help out those in need...

Overall, it's a good essay that answers the question pretty well. Just a few ways to make it sound better:

Thus, a country where people are given chances to access academic institutions is investing in a prolific long-term business which will eventually have positive impacts on its whole society.

. I waited for my daily dose of joy and wonder- from its comic section

However, it began to mean more that.

in many parts of the world,

in many parts of the world, there is now greater equality between women and men.

However, there are many professions that can be done by males than females due to it is required great strengths and physical stamina, and therefore I agree with the statement.

as well as provide ana chance

Second, sports and social activities enhance student's ability to manage itshis or her time better as well as provide an chance for student to reduce stress

Nowadays, people have lived longer than ever before.

Although this tendency is a definitely positive phenomenon, it brings certain devastating outcomes to the population and society as a whole.

To tackle these issues, people must enhance the labour market to elders, and find extra places for living in the future.

Thanks for you elaborated comments, so essay got deviated and became off topic. I think it needs lot of practice. Btw, any specific improvement areas that I need to work on. Once again thank you so much for reviewing my essay.

Since the beginning of human civilization, there were several valuable historical objects were established throughout world history.

Since the beginning of human civilization, there were several valuable historical objects were established throughout world history. The best way that people can get into our past effectively is visiting the museums. Therefore, many people prefer to go to museums for some specific reasons provided here.

All of us have been underrated and overrated by others sometimes.

First, we can have more opportunities such as having a good job, or be chosen to participate in a tournament.