Writing Feedback / A proposal is that the fuel price for every vehicle should be put up [2]

People think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems.

Give your opinion.

Nowadays, environmental issues are becoming serious and received much interest of people, a proposal is that the fuel price for every vehicle should be put up. As far as I consider, it might be a useful measure, however, there are more effective measures in particular.

Firstly, a higher level of the fuel price could make the owners of vehicles carefully think about proper using cases as an emergency or there is no choice. Instead of driving their own cars, people would prefer public transports. Trains and buses would be used for daily demands at maximum, the delivery would alternate cars into trains because of cheaper freight. Thereby, the number of vehicles on the roads would reduce significantly as well as exhausting fume from vehicles would be limited. Therefore, the measure would bring an advantage to prevent the growth of the greenhouse effect.

Besides, various methods could obtain effectiveness in response to the problems related to the environment. Congestion charges are a popular way and have been applied nearly entire the world but it really met our expectations. In fact, London has used money from the method in order to improve public transports, especially free buses and trains. Moreover, the government could raise point-collecting campaigns that give valuable awards to the most enthusiastic people in the environment- protecting activities as riding to the office, waking up early to take a bus, and so on. The methods could not only contribute to the environment in general but also create a good habit for everyone to have a balanced life.

In conclusion, I believe that adding taxes on petrol could be a good measure but other measures could also bring a huge amount of advantages in protecting the environment.

Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: discuss about the extinction of animal species [3]

Endangered animals protection

Topic: Nowadays, many animal species are becoming extinct. Some people believe that countries and individuals must solve this problem, others believe that humans being are more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

While the human world is becoming more and more developed, the world of animals is on the verge of extinction. There are 2 main arguments drawn: nations and individuals must take responsibility for this issue; others claim that human is the priority. In my opinion, I totally agree with the first one.

Firstly, the extinction of animals should be obligated by countries and individuals because human life 's development has damaged the habitat of them for a long time. In order to improve living standards and meet the demands in many fields, people are always willing to destroy the forests and make advantages of wood. These lead to an imbalance in the ecosystem and they would die due to the lack of food, being hard to reproduction, etc. Therefore, I believe that people including countries and individuals should propose the solutions to prevent the issue.

Secondly, some people prefer to the human than the extinction of animals. It means they only focus on the benefits they could obtain and all ignore the problems of their activities that might cause negative effects such as a huge number of animal species would be disappeared if they continued to cut down the forest and take a big amount of animal habitat. Thereby, the environment would be seriously harmed and then affect the sake of themselves. In my perspective, it is not good once people do not put their consideration enough for the extinction of animals.

In conclusion, the extinction of many animal species should be cared much more and the countries and individuals should contribute to limit the issue.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: newly built houses should follow the old style or people can choose freely [4]

choosing the house's style

Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss and give opinion.

Nowadays, the trend of choosing the house's style is sparking various arguments. Some arguments said that contemporary houses should be in accordance with the old. The others contend that people should be allowed to decide what they want. In my opinion, the second one is more reasonable.

Sometimes, the new houses ought to be built following the old model due to the locality's landscape. It would be unimaginable if there was a modern building among a row of the ancient structure houses. For example, Hoi An city in Vietnam is a famous destination for the architecture value of tradition from a few centuries ago. Therefore, the authority should limit the emerging of the odd style buildings, compare with coherent ones. The ostracism could appear among residents, which leads to negative conflicts and reduce attachment feelings.

On the other hand, people should have the right to select which construction-designing type they want. Many modern models improve human life and positively affect the environment while architects comply with eco-friendly or well-ventilated trends. The more exquisite trends are applied to new houses, the more effectively people respond with the greenhouse. Moreover, the new buildings would help saving money more than the old ones because almost ancient materials used to be precious wood and are so expensive now. So, freely giving the decision could be suitable for individuals' economic conditions and the likelihood of protecting the environment.

In conclusion, although in some areas, keeping the new houses following the traditional style is necessary, people should be allowed to choose other styles that could bring more opportunities to their life.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 1: the percentage of car sales in different regions [2]

I'm practicing for both task 1 and task 2 of IELTS writing, please give me some comments that I can improve my skills.
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Total car sales 2006-2010

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the big car-making company's sales in four regions: South America, North America, Asia, and Europe from 2006 to 2010.

Overall, the number of car consumption in Asia and Europe was higher than in other regions. Besides, North America and South America took a small percentage, even had a downtrend.

Firstly, in Europe, the total car sales doubled from a quarter in 2006 to a half in 2010. This made Europe become the biggest car-consuming region at the end of the period. In contrast, the sales in Asia had a slight decline while kept steady at 35 percent in 2006 and 2007 then increased to 38 percent the following year but finally went down significantly to 30 percent.

There was an obvious fluctuation in the proportion in South America at around 11 percent over the period. South America reached the lowest sale with only 5 percent in 2007. In North America, the proportion felt down gradually from less than a third to just 9 percent.

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Writing Feedback / The two pie charts shows the comparison of the percentage of homes owned and rented in the UK [4]

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The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007.

Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The two pie charts given illustrates the comparison of the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK between 2007 and 1991.
In general, in both of the years, the home owner took the main part from the total number in 1991 and 2007: 22 million and 27 million homes respectively. Moreover, other types such as social renting, private renting, and social housing were also reported significantly.

In 1991, the home owner just accounted for over a half but then the number increased to nearly 75% in 2007. Actually, this type was the most popular over the period. Nevertheless, social housing had the smallest usage with about 15%. In 2007, the number even had a downtrend to one-third.

Besides, private renting and social renting kept a stable speed in declination and expansion. In 1991, the percentage of social renting was a quarter, however, had a dramatic fall to nearly 20% over the period. In contrast, the number of private renting slightly increased while it started at under 20% and then to 25% in 2007.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: people nowadays often work too much - why is that? [2]

In some countries people spend long hours at work.

Why does this happen? Is it positive or negative development
Nowadays, the world is more and more rapidly developing, which leads to a busy life to devote to the process growth. People of some countries often have the trend of spending lots of hours working. Although this could bring many advantaged to society and development all over the world, there are various existences of disadvantages.

At first, the reason is that people early recognize the importance of development, integration, potential opportunities, etc in the modern era. This can help them touch special dreams that I have never seen before. Everyone always has a desire to devote and set up a valuable world. Therefore, they try the best by working hard and spending more time.

On the one hand, the harder and more productive people work, the more the living standard could be enhanced. They take a huge role to contribute to the improvement in plenty of sectors. For example, scientists usually work day and night to create useful inventions and innovations that help human's life become effortless to get access to the new world. Thereby, applying the achievement as a background, we can go further, the living standard would be no longer what people pass down from generation to another one.

On the other hand, when the job takes too much time, the lack of balance would obviously appear. Some people even do not have free time for family, relatives, and themselves. Definitely, the relationships turn out to be out of side, out of mind. The emotion would be drought then people gradually become self-contained, avoid to have the communication with others. Besides, this can result in mental illness and damage deeply to the healthy. So, we should arrange a suitable time to equalize the life.

In conclusion, because of the importance of the world development, people work day and night. Although this could improve the living standard, the imbalance in life is also a problem.

I realized that my essay is now too long, can you give me a cure?

Writing Feedback / Writing task 1: the diagram of bottled and canned carbonate drink [2]

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Analysis of production process basing on the diagram

The diagram given demonstrates the way how botted and canned carbonate drinks are produced.
In general, there are six stages that would be in order while implementing. Water would be changed into complete products in bottles and cans. After that, they would be distributed to supermarkets.

To begin with, water is collected and put in the factory. Immediately, it is purified by filter equipment and simultaneously be transferred straight forward to the second stage. Through heating and cooling pipes of the process, its temperature is forced to increase and decline. Next to the third step, carbonate is provided in order to amount to an addition to water.

At the fourth stage, steps of the mixture are carried out with three types such as syrub mixture, color, and sterilized water. Here, the results are drinks without the package. After obtaining the products, the packing with bottles and cans is implemented. Finally, the complete products are allocated out to supermarkets for consumption.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: procedure of getting a driving license [2]

Please give me detailed comments, I'm not confident of my skill in writing task 1, especially with diagram types.

The flow chart illustrates the techniques of how to achieve a driving license in the US.

Firstly, it is required to go to the driving center and then fill in the forms. After finishing essential procedures, an eyesight test is given. If drivers can not get over, they will not have the license. In contrast, they will be asked for paying fees so that they have a written exam.

In terms of the written exam, if the result is failed, then another written one is given. If at the second one, drivers are going on to fail, they can still involve in another one that is the final. Keeping the failure, they must pay fees and have the written exam again. In case, the drivers pass the exam completely so they can have the road exam.

The road exam is one of the procedures in testing drivers' abilities. When the drivers continue to take a passing score, the result is that they can get the driving license. Otherwise, they repeat to pay fees and take part in the written exam until they have enough standards.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: Secondary education should be offered? [2]

In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

secondary schools should be motivated

Unemployment is upturns and downturns in some countries, which leads to some opinions that students should be merely allowed to get access to primary schools. The statement continues that it is unnecessary to provide them with secondary education while there will be no future in looking for a job. In my perspective, I absolutely disagree with the statement.

Firstly, knowledge or critical skills are extremely worthwhile in the development of students' capability. A student equipped enough essential basic skills can take part in the growth of a certain aspect and be effortlessly received a position. The fact is that the main responsibility of secondary education is to help students explore and enhance their abilities. For example, subjects are set up to create an overview in each sector such as technology, biology, etc. Thereby, students can have the opportunity of perceiving exactly what their demand or desire is, then orient the proper future job.

Moreover, receiving only primary education could cause a serious barrier among social levels. Those who just finished the basic one would be sometimes embarrassed because of their poor situation or become some negative factors due to a lack of education. So, eventually finding a job is more and more impossible. Definitely, others approached higher education could be nothing less than experiencing a large horizon. They could contribute to the national development via their work and enjoy a better living standard from the welfare system and citizenship. It is obvious that offering secondary education would be more effective than the limitation.

In conclusion, secondary schools should be motivated because of specific advantaged, instead of being prevented from unpredictable unemployment.
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Writing Feedback / From a long time psychologists claim that colors can affect people's feelings. IELTS 2 [3]

Psychologists have known for many years that color can affect how people feel.

For this reason, attention should be given to color schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals.
How true is this statement? How far does color influence people's health and capacity for work?

For many years, psychologists' view has been that people's feelings can be affected by colors. Therefore, the colors should be noticed to occupy in offices and hospitals. In my opinion, the statement is not absolutely true. My reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.

At first, office workers have to face various issues in their life and perhaps, there is limited time left so that their distractions or attention by colors rarely happen. Some of them who had their own family worries about money to afford their living while others just work with their passion and find it comfortable. They really do not care much about the colors surroundings that are impossible to suit everyone's expectation. So, the presence of colors sometimes is unnecessary.

In terms of hospitals, it is effortless to realize that the colors do not attract patients and doctors a lot because of their different concerns. In fact, doctors are so busy in treatment that there is no time to pay attention to colors. While resting and relaxing is more important for patients to recover their health, visitors just pop up to check the state of their relatives. In most hospitals in my country, white is one of the favorite colors used to paint in treatment rooms. The reason is to save money at maximum to boost the quality of treatment while obviously, it does not matter what colors the surroundings are.

In conclusion, the idea of psychologists for a long time has been that colors can affect people's feelings and need to be paid attention in using in offices and hospitals. However, I believe that office workers are quite busy with their own goals while hospitals' staffs and patients have a lot of others to consider.

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