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Feb 11, 2020
Writing Feedback / Different views about the amount of money paid to top sportspeople. [5]
Words like "I/Me/Myself " - cannot be used
Introduction- Could've been better.Try writing introductory lines about the sports industry in general and then talk about the question.
Agreement para- good point with relevant examples.
Disagreement para-
" Finally, sport is a multi-million-dollar industry; there are many firms that want to use popular sportspeople for advertising purposes, by making considerable investment into advertising their products." - Irrelevant point. No relation to fair salaries. you can add more points like their limited career span and their physical fitness which is of utmost importance and how they can get out of the game/team with just one injury. you can write relevant examples taking the above point into consideration.
Words like "I/Me/Myself " - cannot be used
Introduction- Could've been better.Try writing introductory lines about the sports industry in general and then talk about the question.
Agreement para- good point with relevant examples.
Disagreement para-
" Finally, sport is a multi-million-dollar industry; there are many firms that want to use popular sportspeople for advertising purposes, by making considerable investment into advertising their products." - Irrelevant point. No relation to fair salaries. you can add more points like their limited career span and their physical fitness which is of utmost importance and how they can get out of the game/team with just one injury. you can write relevant examples taking the above point into consideration.