Writing Feedback / TOEFL"It is better to marry some who is similar to you rather than different [4]

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"It i better to marry someone who is similar to you rather than who is different from you. Give reasons for your choice."

Marriages are made in heaven. This phrase is most commonly used by everyone at the time of discussion about the marriages. Some believes that marrying a person similar to you in nature would built successful relationship between them. While other believes that opposite attracts each other and complete each other, therefore make a happy and healthy relationship between them. In my opinion, the former view of similar nature would be the key of successful marriage.

First, similar nature would result in less conflicts and arguments between a couple. For instance, if a couple would like to purchase home then they would make certain crirteria for their choice. And if,there choices are similar then they would agree with same option with no compromises. Moreover, they save time of discussion about each other other opinion.

Second, their would be better understanding between couple. In a similar nature marriages each person would understand others opinion at the time of decision making. For example, me and my husband, both have the habit to watch television with the lights off. We think that its give better impact while watching. Therefore, we understand each other feelings and follow the same choice. This makes us live more comfortably with each other.

In addition to this, similar nature results in better handling of future situation. In such marriages person can assume about others opinion for particular instance. Very simply, I can assume that if I ask my husband for dinner tonight then he will definatly say yes to me. Furthermore, their would be more chances to predict situation.

All in all, if someone marry with a person of same interest then they would live more comfortably with less arguments. Furthermore, they can predict about each other nature in more proper manner and understand each other.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay - "Learning about past has its significance" [2]

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Learning about the past has no values for those of us living in the present. Agree or disagree.

Can knowledge about the past for those of us living in present would be beneficial? Some people thinks that this information is useless because the past is passed present. While others believe that it is advantageous for our present as well as future. I agree with the later opinion. Learning about past would give opportunities for new invention, prevent us from repeating same mistake and provide better understanding about the existence of particular purpose.

Various discoveries and inventions took place in field of science and technologies. This would have never been possible without the knowledge of prior achievements. For instance, certain epidemic diseases, such as polio, cancer etc. would result in the discoveries of newer antibiotics to prevent them. If suppose, no record of such evidences were found ,then no one would ever get benefited with this inventions. Furthermore, new achievements lead to the betterment of our live by providing more comfort such as machines as replaced the old pattern of hand work.

Besides with the opportunities, learning about past would prevent us to perform the same mistake again. For example, one of my friend was unable to clear the medical exam. Although he prepared very hard for it but result was unfavourable. During the next time, he took all the precautions about his previous mistakes and than gave exam with full confidence and received higher score. Thus, past experiences help us to improve our future performances.

In addition to this, past knowledge would provide better understanding of the present situations and their existence. Culture, rituals and beliefs still have their existence till today. This is because there is some basis of their beliefs which is still passing to generations. If nobody would learn about their existence then slowly it would loose their significance. Furthermore, in a country nobody could be able present their culture and tradition.

Therefore, learning about past has its significance. Its provide opportunities to developed ourselves in further discoveries. Also, help us to improve our mistake from previous experience and would provide the better understanding of present situations.

Writing Feedback / Toefl Integrated task" William shakespeare" [2]

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"Authenticity of work done by William Shakespeare"

The author claims the authenticity of work done by William Shakespeare by referring various theories. In contrast, the lecture on the other hand, refutes the passage by mentioning the facts significant to the truth ness of his work.

First, the reading passage claims that William Shakespeare was not a wealthy aristocrat and had never been to school. Therefore, an uneducated person cannot write the plays related with understanding of politics and literature. The lecture refutes this view by suggesting that although he was poor but he has attendant school with his fellow mate at Strart ford. Furthermore, Shakespeare has worked in theatres and gain experience about aristocrat manner from his acted role. Thus his writing can be justified.

Second, The author states that no records or facts has been found in evidence of Shakespeare written work. In addition to this, some theory mentions that similarities has been found between the plays of one of the popular writer Sir Francis bacon and Shakespeare .In addition to this, some scholars believes that recorded evidence were destroyed to hide the true identity of other authors. However, the lecture opposes this point and explain the fact that written records has been lost over a period of time. Furthermore, quick comparison between the two writers work can easily discriminate the differences in their style of writing.

Writing Feedback / Toefl - "not everything in life is according to our wish" [2]

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Do you agree or disagree? "It is sometimes important for people to do things that they do not enjoy doing".

I agree that people should sometimes do things that they don't enjoy doing. This is basic part of our life. There are many things in our life which are forced to do, but that are the part of our responsibilities. Moreover, sometimes doing such activities prove beneficial for us and we start learn to like them.

Most people personal and professional live are filled with various tasks which they really don't like to perform. For instance, visiting to a doctor, working with someone whom you don't like to work with at office and so on. But we do this because we know that it is our necessities and responsibilities in life. Furthermore, we understand the relationship of such work with other things in our life. If a person does not visit to a doctor, he might not get well, this would affect his professional life too. Thus, performing such activities would lessen other problems in their life.

On the other hand, sometimes doing such things prove beneficial for them. Suppose a student don't like to study, but if he/she does it then it would provide betterment in his/her life. Furthermore, sometimes people are forced to do certain things they don't like. For example, some don't like to eat certain vegetables , but if someone forced them to taste, then they might feel that they were wrong. This is good for health and add nutritious values to their health. Thus, they actually end up simply by liking it. Therefore, a person should sometimes perform such thing they don't prefer so as to get advantages in their life.

Thus, not everything in life is according to our wish. We have some responsibilities and necessities in life we could be fulfilled sometimes by doing such tasks. Also provide betterment to our lives.

Writing Feedback / Toefl"A person you know is planning to move to your town. What do you think.. [4]

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A person you know is planning to move to your town. What do you think that person would like and dislike about your city.

I am very excited to learn that one of my childhood friend is planning to move to my city Indore. Having known her for past ten years I can enumerate few things which she would like and dislike about my city.

Being a career oriented in nature. My friend would prefer to live here. Indore has numerous colleges that provide variety of career option to students. Each college is highly reputed and provide the best education facilities to the students. Graduate students from these institute were highly in demand in the multinational companies. My friend is highly interested in getting higher education and proper job for her future. Therefore, she would like this place for her career opportunities.

Another exciting thing about my city is its Climate. Indore has warm climate through out the year. My friend would be more comfortable here. She like outdoor activities a lot. In my city she can continue with her all activities, such as sports, hanging out friends and so on around the year. Furthermore, she do not have to check for the weather before making any plan. Thus, this place would be best suitable for the one 's interested in outdoor activities as well as in making career.

However, in spite of all this facilities, Indore has some features that might upset my friend. This city do not have proper transportation system. The bus services are not at proper scheduling and make any person unable to reach on time. Moreover, overcrowded transportation sometimes result in stressed travelling hours. Poor transportation services encourages more people to use their own vechile, which causes traffic congestion, air and noise pollution. Thus, I hope that my friend may get adjusted with such traffic and transportation problem.

To sum up, my friend would take advantage of education facilities and good weather but she has also overcome with the traffic and transportation problems in my city.

Writing Feedback / Toefl- Do you think it is good for teenagers to work while schooling? [3]

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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think is a good idea? Support your opinion with specific details.

In my opinion, it is not the good idea for teenagers to have job while they are still students. Although, many argue that it provide good working experience, but I think it can interfere with their life in various ways. Having jobs would affect the health of the student. It divert their mind from studies and would take away their childhood phase from their life.

A student has to do lots of studies in today's competitive world to prove himself. He has to spend his most of time in school to get a good grades. If the student get involved himself in job in rest of the time, then it would cause an extra burden on them. Furthermore, jobs has various responsibilities like attendance, sometimes extra work and so on. This would result in stress, tension and tiredness. They won't be able to get proper time for relaxation, sleep. Thus, would affect their mental and physical health.

Another reason, jobs can divert students from their studies. If students started earning in earlier age in their life, then they get attracted towards money. They feel themselves independent and would prefer to work more for money. This would affect their studies, they loose their interest from studies. Moreover, they drop out their studies so as to earn more money.

In addition to this, the main drawback of teenagers job is that, they miss out the fun of their childhood time. He would miss various childhood activities such as hang out with friends, clubs and fun activities and social interaction with others. They have whole life to do job and prove themselves, but the childhood phase will never return in their life. Therefore, they should take advantage of life as much possible they can.

Thus, for a teenager it is important to pay attention on their studies. Having job would affect their health, divert them from studies and take away one of the important phase from their life.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay"What are the qualities of the good coworker?" [4]

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What are the qualities of the good coworker?"

I've have worked in several offices and met with different coworkers. Throughout, in my experience, I think good co worker should have certain qualities. He should work in a co operative manner with others. He should be helpful in nature and show understanding with others, and the most important he should be active in work.

A good coworker must work in a collaborating manner with team. In today's business, each company works on the principle of team effort. Each person in a team has to work in a coordinate manner so as to get proper completion of project. If a coworker does not work cooperate in the team, try to prove himself better in a team, than it would arise conflict situations at the work place. Furthermore, spoil the working atmosphere. Therefore, a coworker must understand other person opinion in a team, and represent himself as a team worker not as an individual.

A good coworker should be helpful and show understanding at work place. He should be comfortable with the changes in scheduling timings, show understanding between the group members such as ready to do extra work, exchange of work and no problems with new procedures in work. Moreover, take his responsibilities seriously because if he does not perform proper work then it would affect each member in the team.

In addition to this, the most important thing is that he should be active and have interesting attitude in working atmosphere. An inactive person would unable to finish his work on time and make excuses about his work. This would result delay in work completion . However, an interested person shows willingness about his work completion within duration period.

Therefore, we spend more time with our coworkers in a week than with our family. Thus, it is important for our coworker to be people we can get along with. When coworkers are cooperative, helpful and active than everyone can get their job done well.

Writing Feedback / Toefl;Government should definitely spend money in improving transportation services [2]

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"Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation. Use specific reasons to support your details".

Government should definitely spend more money in improving transportation services. Although, many people argue that improving road conditions would reduce accident rates, but in my opinion improved transportation services would be advantageous to general public. Good transportation would provide better living condition, income to the government and more job options in the country.

First of all, improvement in transportation would lead to improved living condition in the country. Cars and other motor bikes make use of fuel energies like gas, diesel etc. This causes emission of carbon mono oxide in the atmosphere and results in air pollution. This would affect general health of the public. Furthermore, more traffic causes more traffic jam and noise pollution and more accidents. Improved transportation would encourage more people to make use of it, and thus reduces the risk of accidents and provide an healthy environment to live.

Second, transportation would increase income for the government. By improving roads government would spend money on it, and does not get anything in return. However, by increasing number of buses, trains and other services would allow government to raise its income by collecting fares. This income could be better utilized by the government in other development methods.

Third ,better transportation services leads to increase in job opportunities. Increased transportation services would provide services such as drivers, managers, maintenance jobs and so on. This would causes employment option for people in different areas. Thus more career option for general public. Therefore a general up liftment in the society.

All in all, improved transportation services would be beneficial to the general public by providing healthier environment, improve funds for the government as well as create more job option to the public.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay What do you prefer, learning by yourself or learning with a teacher [4]

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What do you prefer, learning by yourself or learning with a teacher.

I support the view that teachers should be the part of learning. Many of the student feels that self studies provide a better learning experience. However, in my opinion, teacher helps you to get proper direction in studies. In short, teacher provides guidance for particular subject, give explanations and answers to our questions and, also teaches us the techniques of learning.

Firstly, teachers provide their guidance in particular subject field. They give a systematic and better approach for the subject. Teacher always teaches a subject in which he or she is expertise in. With their experience, they provide important information about the subject, ways to gather information, such as, suggestion regarding references books etc. In addition to this, they also make us aware about possible mistakes in a subject while learning. In this manner, a student can get the proper and accurate information about the field of his/her interest with the help of teacher.

Secondly, teacher provide answers to the questions while studying. As we all know that, learning new subjects would causes various doubts and questions. Therefore, at this moment, teacher gives an answers and avoid misinterpretation of any information. Furthermore, some students remain unaware about their mistake while learning. Teachers keep observation on each student and make them aware about their mistakes.

Finally, some subject requires practical learning or experiments. In such subjects, teacher's guidance becomes essential to get the proper results. For instance, chemistry subject requires various experiments, which would be difficult for student to perform independently. Slight variation in technique would cause different result. Thus, teacher provide a proper technique to perform practical in a proper way.

In the end, I must say that actual studying has to be done by an individual. However, learning can be made easier and interesting with teacher. Hence it is better to learn with the help of teacher than by yourself.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay For children it is better to grow at the country side or in th city [3]

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For children it is better to grow at the country side or in the city. Agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that selecting a proper place for growing up the children seems to be an important decision for the parents. Every parent wants their children to be successful in their life, and for this, they give their best effort to grow them up. Many parents argue that growing children at the country side is more beneficial because cities are polluted which results in bad health of the child. However in my opinion, city would be the best place for the growth of a child. Cities provide better education, better development and better facilities for the growth of a child.

Cities provide better education facilities to the children. There are varieties of school such as government schools, private schools, Montessori schools and so on. Therefore there would be various options for the parents to select the best school of their choice for their children. Moreover, transportation services are more proper in the city areas, so reaching towards particular place becomes easy. But as compared to this, countryside places give the only option of the school that too may be not located at the nearer distance. Hence many of the children have to face problems while studies.

Big cities do provide extra curricular activities to the children which would be helpful in the development of child. For instances, sports, art and other activities which give the opportunity to develop their hidden art along with the studies. In addition to this, there would be various competition for the exams and activities which make the child to utilize his/her art in a better way and to prove himself in the society.

Also, big cities has various facilities to make human life comfortable such as hospitals. If the child get sick then proper treatment at the proper time. Along with this various technologies, market places, were there and, this things would be helpful for the children to understand today's world. Anyhow a child has to grow up by gaining the knowledge from the surrounding and has to compete in the world to prove himself.

In conclusion, I must say that the children can be better grown up in the cities because of the facilities available for education, other creative activities and to get the knowledge about the various technologies development.

Writing Feedback / Toefl; Who would you like to meet? Mr. Amitabh Bachachan [3]

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What famous athlete or entertainer from the present would you like to meet?

If I could meet a famous entertainer than, it would definitely be Mr. Amitabh Bachachan. He is the superstar of the Indian movies and has performed in more than 300 movies during his career. Meeting with him gives the pleasure to know about the him off screen.

Mr. Bachachan has a magnificent personality and the voice. But this qualities does not attract people to watch his movies, it is his acting which gives an appealing attitude to the public of various ages to bond with his movies. He has performed various different roles in the movies such as, in the lead role, as a father, grand father , comedian and so on. But in his each character he has shown the deepness of that character which makes him remembered in everyone's heart. For instance, in one of his movie he has played the character of the father who has four children, but in the later stages of life none of his child gave him support. In this movie he has given a lesson to the public that if someone has the confidence in himself than he would really get out of the troublesome situations. Therefore, meeting such a person would teach a lot .

Mr bachachan has been in the entertainment world since 40 years. But he had also face the downside graph in his career in means of finance. But he had never loose hope and tried a lot to overcome the situation. For this purpose he has started a television show, which has changed the manner of Indian television screen. The manner and the respect with which he talks to the general public in his game show makes him lovable to everyone. This is the another reason for me to meet him because this shows his optimistic nature towards the life which makes a person capable of handling the difficult nature.

Therefore, it would be very inspiring to meet such a versatile actor.

Writing Feedback / Good child should respect their parents, support, help them in their need time and make them proud [2]

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What are the qualities of good son or daughter?

The qualities of good son or a daughter should have depends upon the nature of the parents. But every parents have some common expectations from their children. Such as respect from their children, best achievement in life and their children must make them proud.

Parent wants that their children should respect them. They give their best effort to grown them up . Since birth of the child, parents try to fulfill every need of their children and for which they sometimes have to faces many problems, but they just do it because they have to see the smile on their child face. And when the child grow up, if they don't understand the struggle of their parents and don't respect them , they will hurt their parents. So good child should respect their parents.

Every parents want that their child should achieve their best in life and for this they guide their children accordingly. A good child must always listen them and should never be disobedient or rude to them. A child should never think that his parents is trying to make him follow their decision but rather he should understand about their feelings and respect that.

A good child must help their parents in their need time. Parents has done a lot for bringing up of their children. But when they need help of any manner such as financial or at time of illness, their expect their children should be with them and support them. So It is the responsibilities of a child to support their parents at the time of need.

Apart from this, one common expectation every parents have from their children that, their children make them proud with his achievements and behavior in the society. And thus they teach good things to their children. A good child must keep that teaching in mind and never perform the things in the life which make their parent disrespectful in the society.

All in all, a good child should respect their parents, support and help them in their need time and always make their parents proud on him.

Writing Feedback / Toefl Essay "Do you like to eat out or eat at home?" [5]

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"Do you like to eat out or eat at home?"

As the people get more and more busy now a days, they prefer to eat at the restaurants or other food stall. But I would still prefer to eat at home for various reasons. In the following paragraphs I will explain reasons for my choice of preference.

Although the restaurants serves the food in an appealing garnishing manner but the major concern is the hygiene. The restaurant food may or may not be the fresh food, or may be prepared with unhygienic manner. But by seeing the decoration no one understands the bad aspest of that food. But if the food prepared at home, we will be sure about the cleanlinessof the utensil used. Moreover, some vegetables loose their nutritive value if overcooked, this can happened in the restaurant the most because they just concerned with the taste which can be better added by using artificial flavours.

In addition to this, now a days with the equipments like microwave, oven, mixer grinder makes the cooking much easier in less time. Infact, cooking with this equipments is fun. This helps you to experiments new varieties of delicious food in less time. Furthermore, homemade food during parties and get together gives appraisal from others which makes oneself happy about her effort.

Apart from this, eating at home gives you the choice to eat according to your health. Various restaurants cooked food with various artificial and spicy flavours which can cause harmful effect on health on a long run. For instance, heart patients, ulcers patients, eating frequently out will make their disease worst in nature. But at home , every one can eat and prepare choice of food recommend according to their health.

In addition to this, the most important reason for eating at home is to have a dinner together with my family. This is really a very important time, to talk with my children, husband at the time of food make myself happy and feeling of togetherness in the house.

In conclusion I must say that eating at home gives the opportunity to be with the family at the time of food. Also it gives the option to eat healthier and the hygiene food.