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abc1400   
Jul 2, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - the main point is to be sure if we can pay a loan or not [7]

Having friend is important, but more important than that is you keep and have good relationship with them. Also these days money play an important role in our lives. It is a big problem to borrow money from your friends because I think borrowing money from friends can harm this relationship.

First of all, friendship is a two way road and both side of this relation have some expectations from each other. For example if my friend borrowed me some money, he expected that I would return that money before its deadline and if I did not do that, he would have some bad thoughts about me.

Secondly, Money is vital these days. Maybe your friend that borrowed you that money does not have good financial conditions and he anticipate you to turn back that money as soon as possible.

In spite of this, your friend is the easiest way to borrow money. because they can borrow you money without run boring business processes. Also we have friend to use their helps in this type of situations.

I think the main point is to sure that we can pay of loan or not. And never borrow money from our friends because friendship is more significant than money.
abc1400   
Aug 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / It is sometimes believed that the computer is more a hindrance than a help.Agree? [NEW]

In this last three decade the biggest human invention without any doubt is computers. Although this significant invention make our life easer, sometimes they do not seem to be helpful.

First, I think they are not very user friendly. Computers user interface is designed for expert people not ordinary people. There are lot of different elements on a computer screen that each of them do different task. For example, my father and mother they both alway nagging about how it is difficult to use these devices.

Second, there are a wide variety of computer companies with different tastes. Each of them has their own user interface and instructions. Also each company has various graphics in different version of a program. For instance, if you are familiar with Windows XP switch to Windows Seven, you may think it is different application from different company.

Third, I think computers technologies grow very fast. Each year you see new computer with a lot of new features and advantages. Although these new changes are very exciting for computer geeks and experts, It is very hard and spontaneous for ordinary people. Human nature is alway has a problem with changes and likes to keep current situation because of this many people have problem with these changes.

In summary, because of a wide variety of user interface, different tests, and fast growth many people do not believe they are helpful and useful.
abc1400   
Aug 30, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Parents (those who pay attention) are the best teachers. Agree or disagree? [3]

Although parents are very sensitive about their children's education, they are not good teacher for them. Nowadays we live in a modern world, where many things are changing very fast such as sciences, human behaviors, and it is very hard to know about these changes. However, we learn a lot from our parents. They are not appropriate teacher.

First and foremost, parents not only do not have enough information about teaching, but also they need someone to help them how grow up their children. Being a good teacher needs a lot of prerequisites that most of parents do not have. For instance, they should have enough free time for spending with children in purpose of teaching or they should know about new ways and tools of education or they should be familiar with new educational materials.

Furthermore, parents do not have enough time to spend with their children. Nowadays we are facing a global economic crises and it is necessary for both parents to work, hence there is not enough time for them to teach their children. When I was a child both my mother and father worked in an office. They usually leaved home early in the morning and came back late in the evening. It was impossible for them to be a good teacher for me.

In addition, if parents want to be a teacher for they children, they usually transfer their positives and negatives behavior to them. They do this without any intention. After period of time, the children learn a lot of negative points from their parents but a professional teacher always aware of not to transfer their bad behavior to children.

In conclusion, parents who pay attention to their children future always should use teacher for their children. They give this change to their children to build up their skills in a good way with people who train for this.
abc1400   
Sep 1, 2011
Writing Feedback / [IELTS]a police force carrying guns will increase the crime rate [4]

I think it is better to change you the bellow sentence :
If police without weapon, it would hard to prevent public when offenders are committing crimes.--> If a police officer do not carry a weapon, it would hard to prevent public when offenders are committing crimes.
abc1400   
Sep 1, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Important milestone" - TOEFL- Why do you think people attend college or university? [4]

Persuading education and entering university are most important milestone in our lives. Furthermore, having a satisfying job is another significant fact in our lives which does not happen until we have a qualification form a good university. There are many reasons why having a good job is depend on having academic study.

The first and foremost reason of the importance of job is if you want to work in famous companies in your field you have to graduate from university. For instance, in may field popular companies such as Google and Apple always hire their engineers from people who graduate from university.

Furthermore, Money plays important role in our lives. One of the best and easiest way to earn enough money is having profession depends on academic degree. Well-paid jobs need well educated people whereas graduating from university can guarantee that.

Last but not least, it is impossible to find your desirable job without having academic degree. Nowadays jobs are very complicated which means needs experts who have different skills and knowledge. undoubtedly, university is the best place to build up those skills. People who do not have those prerequisites have a very low chance to find their ideal job. For example, if you want to be a doctor, you have to have a qualification.

To sum up, having a good career makes our lives easier and more enjoyable. In order to achieve our ideal job, attend to university is vital.
abc1400   
Sep 1, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - "a chance of cooking" - food has become easier to prepare. [3]

Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved they way people live?
In the past one of the controversy topic in each home was what food should be made and who could be prepared, but these days advanced technology helps humankind to cook their food easier and healthier. According to me, Frankly, it makes my life simple and helps me save time and money.

The First and foremost reason is that it saves our times so we can focus on our problems rather than preparing food. For example, in the past, preparing food was a big problem because finding and buying different food ingredients took a long time. Besides, finding a good recipe was very hard and time-consuming task.

Furthermore, these days everyone can cook food. You can find plenty of chain stores in your neighborhood so you can go there and buy precooked food. Then, you go home and cook them in less than 15 minutes. For example my father told me when he was young it was very hard for him to cook lunch, but now he can easily cook delicious food.

Last but not least, preparing food costs has gone down. For instance, if you want to cooke a pizza you can buy a precooked pizza. After that, you put it in the oven for 15 minutes. Then, it is ready, so you have saved energy such as gas and electricity. Therefore you pay less for those bills.

To sum up, focus on our business, giving everybody a chance of cooking a good quality food, and cutting the costs are only three advantages of this fact.
abc1400   
Sep 2, 2011
Writing Feedback / Knowledge gained from real life?; Books are better resource for gain knowledge [3]

It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? why?

Theses days knowledge is power so the most significant task for us is gain more and more knowledge. There are several ways to gain knowledge and each of them has their owns pros and cons. According to me, we can learn a lot from experience. However, books are a better resource for learning.

The first and foremost reason is that reading books is a easier and safer way than experiencing different activities. For example, If you seek for a piece of information, you can easily find related book in your local library. otherwise if you want to learn by experience you should prepare a related situation and sometimes it is impossible.

Furthermore, books are a good resource in a wide variety of knowledge aspects. It is impossible for us to be expert in all science fields, but it is easy for us to know by reading related books. For example you can know about the Milky Way by reading different documents, but it is impossible to go to space and find out by your experience.

Last but not least, books are more reliable resources. When a new book published, different experts and scientist read that book and if they find a mistake on that book, helps the author to solve that. Therefore, their contents are accurate and confirmed by different people. It is very hard for us to check our experience that is accurate or not.

To sum up, Although you never forget your knowledge that comes from your experience, they are very limited. Books are better resource for gain knowledge because they are reliable and cover various sciences.
abc1400   
Sep 6, 2011
Writing Feedback / "create a positive movement in my city first" -A company to build a large factory [NEW]

A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

Build new businesses such as a new company, university, and factory not only has a lot of advantages for a small city like mine, but also can solve a lot of unsolved problems. Building a new factory in my neighborhood has a lot of advantages and bring a lot of good changes.

First, build a new factory change my city situations go towards growth. A new factory needs a lot of workforce. In hence, we should make new settlements for this new worker so a lot of new buildings are built. These workers need food so a lot of new restaurants and supermarkets are opened. These are simple examples of positive changes in my city because of new factory.

Second, Creating a new factory can solve an unemployment problem. On of the biggest challenge in my city is a high rate of unemployment. A new factory makes a lot of my citizens attend this factory. Besides, many new jobs are created such as police officer and driver.

On the other hand, my city has a spectacular nature and fresh air. A new factory is a menace for my city because it can damage nature of my city. Movement a lot of workers makes huge air pollution. Also, the factory makes a lot air pollution. Furthermore, I think crime rates will increased my new workers. I am not optimistic about new workers. Maybe they do a lot of criminal activities in my city.

To sum up, create a positive movement in my city, solve unemployment problem, and create new jobs are cons of build a new factory in my city. I think all of my fellow residents are looking forward for this significant event.
abc1400   
Sep 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / Public transportation system - hometown, what would you change? [NEW]

TOEFL - If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

A small positive change in my chaos city will bring a lot of benefits. One of the biggest problems my fellow citizenship have to tolerate is poor public transportation system. We have only a few old buses, and limited subway lines. If I had a chance to change an important thing in my hometown, I would improve public transportation system.

The first and foremost reason is decrease pollution. My city suffers from air pollution that comes from traffic fumes. I think, improving public transportation system can help my fellow citizenship to use public vehicle rather than their own cars. Consequently, we have less noise, and more fresh air.

Second, Solving a traffic problem. One of the biggest challenges in my city is traffic. Unfortunately, most of the cars in traffic jam have only one passenger. If we have good public transportation system, most of them will not use their own cars any more. Besides, these traffic james growing people anger. As a result, when they go their office or come back home they are usually angry and exhausted.

Last but not least, I would able to save my fellow citizenship time. We waste time sticking in traffic james or finding a parking lot because our city does not have capacity of these huge a mount of cars. Therefore, using public transportation helps us to have more time to spend with our families.

To sum up, improving our existent public transportation system would bring a lot of advantages for my city. Thus, if I had chance to change something, undoubtedly, it would be adding new buses and expanding our subway lines.
abc1400   
Sep 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL- What subject is the most important for students? [3]

Dear writer,
I did not understand from your introduction paragraph that you agree or disagree. You should choose one of these two sides.
I think your first paragraph does not have a strong topic sentence.
You should choose one of humanitarian or science.
abc1400   
Sep 9, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL-Television is the culprit for destroying communication between friends& family. [2]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television has destroyed communication among friends and family.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinions.


It is very hard to find a home that does not have a television. Nowadays, number of television channels and programs are increasing everyday. Unfortunately, most of people do not have a plan for make a limitation or schedule for watching television. I agree with that idea that television devastate families ties.

In spite of enjoying watching television shows, it is really time consuming task. Emergence of new television channels or shows are not surprising. We kill time by tracking these channels so at the end of the day we understand it is late for doing any other activities. This is a problem that suffers all of us everyday. At the end, there is no time for call to our parents or friends.

Second, I think watching television programs makes us lazy. We usually spend our times in front of television for at least three ours a day when we come back home after eight-hour working in the office. Hence, we do not have time to spend for healthy activity such as going to a gym or doing other sports. This makes us a lazy person who prefers to do sedentary activities like watching television shows rather than be active and sociable.

Last but not least, some television programs have a negative effect on viewers. Some thriller or action movies advertise negative activities such as doing criminal activity. These genre of programs has more negative effects on our teenagers. They usually try to mimic what they see on movies in their daily behaviors.

To sum up, killing our time, making us lazy, and advertising negative behaviors are just only few reasons to show how television is destructive. I think it is a global problem to solve this problem and it is need global contribution to find a solution.
abc1400   
Sep 12, 2011
Writing Feedback / GRE essay-preserving the wilderness [3]

I think "Carbon dioxide" is better than "carbon-di-oxide"
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Carbon_dioxide
abc1400   
Sep 12, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Universities should give money to sport activities or libraries [2]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sport activities as they give to their university libraries.


Libraries and sports activities are play important roles in universities success. Most university rankings pay attention to quality of these two activities. In my opinion universities should invest in libraries more than anywhere else.

First, I think a library is vital and strategical part of a university. All professors and students need to have a modern and well-equipped library because, after internet, library plays an important role in research. Although sport is important, it does not have the same priority of library has. In addition only small part of students attend sport activities. For example, in my university number of students who use the library is much more than students do sports activities.

Second, usually libraries do not have income. Most libraries are free not for students also for public. Hence, universities support is vital for libraries. But sport activities have a good income because every sport has different matches and for each match they have a lot sponsors. Also, they have this chance to sell their important matches tickets. To conclude, there are good ways for sports activities to compensate their expenses, but it is very hard for libraries to find a good way for have an income.

Last but not least, investing in libraries has a long-time result. For example, a library can buy a lot of new books or they can buy more computers. Most of the library facilities are stable and you can use them for a long time. Besides, in the far future, they become more valuable. On the other side, most sports facilities except buildings are usually can be used in short-time and they are not persistent for a long-time.

In spite of the importance of sports activities, libraries are more important. They are critical part of universities and a good university has to have a modern library.
abc1400   
Sep 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Where should children grow up? Countryside or Big city? [2]

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree?
Growing up children is a big burden on parents' shoulders. Since, the most important part of this process is education, in my opinion, growing up children in a city, because of having a good education system, is better.

The first and foremost reason why I think cities are better places for growing children is because cities have the latest teaching devices and methods. Moreover, it takes a lot of time for children who live in countrysides to use these new methods. For instance, when internet emerge as the important tool for research in schools, schools which are located in countrysides do not have internet and it took five years to they are able to use internet.

Second, usually cities have a better facilities and teachers. There are different schools in cities which each one has its own advantages. In addition, this big number of schools makes a good competitions between schools to give a better service to their students. As cities have more facilities and more schools for teaching, teachers prefer to stay in a city rather than countryside.

Last but not least, education cost is less expensive in cities than in countryside. Usually schools in cities have more students so they have more income. As a result, they can reduce their tuition. Besides, some big companies that only located in big cities provide some facilities for their staffs such as providing free education service.

To sum up, education is the most significant part of growing our children. Cities provide more opportunities and facilities in education for our children. One day if I had a chance to grow up my children in both countryside and a city, I would prefer to grow up my children in a city.
abc1400   
Sep 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / SPENDING Money is easier than SAVING Money [2]

TOEFL - Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it, or is it better to save your money for some time in the future?

Enjoying money is much easier than saving but you should have enough saved money for enjoying it. I prefer to save my money rather than spend them on enjoyment purposes.

First and foremost, saving money can guarantee our future. These days, we have a financial crisis problem in the world so nobody knows what will happen in the near future. Besides we have a high rate of unemployment in our society. At least for me the future is gloomy and dark. As a result, I prefer to work hard know to save enough money for my future.

Furthermore, it is easier for young people to study different skills and work harder because they are full of energy and hope. For example, when I compare my parents current situations with myself I can easily understand that is very hard for my father to learn to work with computers or learn second language. Hence, I am as young man prefer to study hard and find a well-paid job. After a while, when I save enough money, I can enjoy my money. Also At that time I can share those money with my family.

On the other hand, I think woking hard and saving money cause me to not enjoy my life. When I meet some of my friends who not think about the feature and only enjoy their money are so happier than me. I regret why I cannot enjoy my life.

To sum up, both saving and spending money have its own advantages and drawbacks. As a result, I think make a balance between this two has better results. Finally, do not be so nervous about the feature because today was our yesterday future.
abc1400   
Oct 10, 2011
Writing Feedback / Get the most important characteristics of a society by studying its cities? [NEW]

GRE - To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Is it really possible to study main characteristics of a society without study of the cities that are part of that? Sociologist have a wide variety of technics that help them to find main features of a society such as study major cities, study works of literature and study monuments. There can be no doubt that study major cities of a society can make a significant help to understand that society. In my view, study major cities is not necessary for discover important characters of a society.

First and foremost reason why study major cites does not make help is that a territories if a society my be spread among many countries and sometimes many continents. For instance, Western society is spread between North America and Europe therefore study a city such as New York City and Paris not help us but also distract sociologist. For example in New York City people always in hurry and usually eat fast foods on the other hand in Paris people pay more attention to their mealtime so eat their food in peace and some times take more than an hour to eat their main course. Thus who only studies these two cities cannot understand whether people in Western society have their meal in a hurry or peace.

A second instance in which study a major city is not necessary is that it takes long time for a society to form, so study a city only shows the contemporary situation of that city. For instance, study a current situation of Beijing - capital city of China - does not help us to understand important characteristics of East society. These days modern cities are changing dramatically and it is very hard to find static characters in them. In Eastern society people usually spend their time with their family at home but these days in a city like Beijing new recreation facilities motivate people to spend their times in night clubs rather than stay home with their families.

Last but not least reason why we should study more important factors instead of cities is that these days cities are full of people from different cultures and nationalities so it is very hard to find the similar attributes between them. For instance, It is very hard to find a Western society characteristics in a cosmopolitan like New York city because in that city you can find more than 25 different nationalities live together and each have their own specific culture.

In conclusion, it is clear that study major cities in a society does not help us to find important characteristics. These days cities are mixture of people with different thoughts, cultures and ideas and each of them belongs to a specific society. Ultimately, there are better ways rather than cities that help sociologist to discover most important characteristics of a society.