MisterWandering
Jul 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Social status of man is influenced by education parenting and environment [7]
Person or Parents?
instill values/teach fundamental knowledge
-> However
many
You should use present tense instead.
Don't start a sentence with so that. In this case, you could use "Therefore", "As a result" and so on.
Ever since, a person
Persongets understanding of understand what is right or wrong, good or bad, the truth or a lie
Person or Parents?
download all the basic information
instill values/teach fundamental knowledge
But,
-> However
millions of
many
took
You should use present tense instead.
So that
Don't start a sentence with so that. In this case, you could use "Therefore", "As a result" and so on.