Undergraduate / 'On televisions, I had only seen the end' Giving back to your country essay [7]

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Please tell us how you would make a contribution to your country, using your education ?

On televisions, I had only seen the end, but not the means; only the beautiful completion of a charity work, but not the toils underlying it. And it was until my Community Service [name] Project, a project I initiated to improve a local school in [name], that I actually got a chance to taste, not just a modicum of it, but the whole chunk of the real "work" behind a charity work.

The difficulties accumulate from raising money and asking for sponsorship to carefully taking care of the budget and cooperating with the local teachers to build a toilet and repair classrooms. But in spite of all the hard works, the warmth radiating from young [the village's name] kids was my reward. And it was more than a gratifying reward. My friends and teachers, who joined my project, were similarly glad to be a part of it. And from this small, but deeply meaningful accomplishment, I felt it was my right to own a seemingly impossible dream -- to dream bigger.

My plan is to ameliorate my country in two ways: through education and through non-governmental organizations. I am not talking about an education reform, but I am talking about an attempt to enhance the education system and teach my fellow citizens to be self-sufficient, giving them "more" spaces and opportunities to think independently and productively. If every single person learns to sustain him or herself, the country as a whole will be sustained. I am also planning to introduce [name] lessons into my country's curriculum. I have seen a dichotomy between "creativity" and "education" in the education system as if the two are mutually exclusive so I would like to merge the two together. And from the Community Service [name] Project, I have realized the values of cooperation and solidarity. Thus, it is my hope to merge all small non-governmental organizations together; thereby creating a single solid organization capable of making a positive contribution to my home country. This plan ultimately utilizes the solidarity to effect a change.

My plan may sound ideal. But this is exactly why I need [the institution's name] education to make me see my solidarity-plan in my home country more complete in picture; in symmetry, more balanced; and in fixtures, quite harmonized. With the [the institution's name] flexibility to design my own curriculum, the support from the Psychology Department to help me find my "niche" in the cognitive science concentration, and the vibrant community, I will be able to come back to my home country, well prepared and fully inspired to dive headlong into all works before me, tasting all the means to an end -- and of course, not missing the beauty of an accomplished task.

Undergraduate / 'positive psychology, brain science, and creativity' - Extracurricular Activity Short [3]

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Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

I, the Founder of the [name] Club, initiated and designed the club to center on perception, cognition, positive psychology, brain science, and creativity. Activities in the club include integrating the use of Mind Maps into study habits; promoting Gratitude Journals (intended to feature Positive Psychology); and brainteasers. I still remember receiving "I've never thought of that before!" as a response when I explained that the brain is a self-organizing system and that shifting attention from something significant to something insignificant can result in creativity. Thus, the process of unraveling the truth about the brain to the [name] Club members is very enjoyable to me. Some students' proposed solutions to certain problems are bizarre. However, they make sense in the hindsight and demonstrate how the new type of thinking is at work, after all.

Undergraduate / 'the way humans develop, think' - academic interests and reasons for applying [7]

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Prompt:
Please provide information which you feel will be of interest to the Admissions Tutors and will help them know you better, e.g. your reasons for applying, the chosen curricula, extra-curricular activities, participation in voluntary work, past working experience, career aspirations and other achievements.

I have always been intrigued by the way humans develop, think, and interact with each other. Thus, my academic interests range widely from social sciences to cognitive science. I have been an active learner-that is, I have sought to acquire knowledge through all possible means. I would ascribe my academic passion to the accessibility of educational resources. By merely listening to lectures (from iTunes U) which are legally offered by universities across the world, I have learned so much and grown so much. The podcasts I listen to are drawn from Psychology, Anthropology, Political Philosophy, and Sociology.

After listening to these podcasts, I stepped out to seek for a hands-on experience. And to my satisfaction, my work experience at [name] Company further kindles my passion for Social Sciences.

Aside from my personal interest in the field of Sociology, I have simultaneously developed a passion for Cognitive Science. I have sought to meet my role model, [name], a national best-selling author in Thailand and an expert in the field of Mind, Brain, and Education. Her books, which feature the theory of Multiple Intelligences developed by Dr. Howard Gardner, have convinced me of my love of brain science. Altogether, my personal interest in Sociology and Cognitive Science makes me eager to learn more about the world.

However, it is [name] concepts that ultimately captivate me. To reinforce my interest, I decided to open up the [name] Club at my school. My [name] Club comprehensively highlights positive psychology, creativity, brain science, and sociology. The members often come up with bizarre ideas, which make sense in the hindsight; thereby demonstrating how such thinking is at work, after all.

It is worth noting that all of these beautiful efforts and discoveries started from the mere accessibility of educational resources. And it is at [name], a place of educational resources and a renowned faculty, that my aspiration to discover more about my academic interests is made possible.