Student Talk / Reading : 9.0 - Just got my IELTS result. [19]

Hello everyone... I got me result today and achieved desired score Alhamdulilah.
This forum helped me alot and I am sooooo thankful to every single person, esp moderators, who helped me a lot and corrected my mistakes. I can never be able to thank the way I feel. Thank you sooooo much.

Here is my score:
Reading : 9.0
Speaking: 7.5
Writing: 7.0
Listening: 7.0

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Today young people are finding it harder and harder to find permanent jobs! [11]

In many countries, young people are finding it harder and harder to find permanent jobs. Why is this? What can be done to improve the situation?

These days, everyone wants a respectable job after graduating from college or university; however, finding a permanent work has become difficult for youngsters. There are many reasons creating these issues regarding jobs, and their solutions are also discussed in following paragraphs.

First of all, universities train their students only theoretically and do not support them to enroll into various workshops and internships. Therefore, problem arises when companies give permanent job opportunities only to experienced applicants because they do not have to train them. Moreover, untrained fresh graduates are big threat to the companies. In this way, younger people have to struggle harder in order to get decent jobs. However, an obvious solution for this issue is that universities should offer internships to their students in vacations or arrange workshops in addition to the class work. This will help students to get training and experience in their corresponding fields.

Secondly, increasing unemployment rate is another reason for this situation. After leaving university, young people, who are desperate to start earning money, end up accepting any job without considering that it offers only temporary contract and less salary. Furthermore, companies also exploit such newly graduates as they work more for less salary. Therefore, those who have experience and good grades in colleges or universities are declined, for they demand high salaries with permanent contracts. A good idea to solve this issue is that special awareness programs for students, who are leaving universities, should be arranged in which various job offers and their benefits would be discussed. In this way, students will be able to choose right jobs for themselves.

In conclusion, I believe, young people only need right guide given by their teachers and parents to get a respectable job that helps to build their future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Number of Heart cases of in England during four decades(1960 to 1990) [4]

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph shows the number of cases of heart diseases in England during four decades(1960 to 1990). It can be clearly seen from the graph that the figure of heart patients was highest in 1970 and 1980.

According to the graph, the cases of heart diseases were only 100 in 1960 and 1965, however, they started growing gradually up to 200 in next five years(1970). But this trend went sharply up in 1975 and the figure of heart patients raised to 500 in just 5 years. However, this number stayed at the same level in 1980.

The incidents of heart diseases started to decline steadily to 300 in 1985 and dropped even lower to 0 in 1990. This figure remains 0 in next five years(1995).
To sum up, the figure of heart diseases in England changes dramatically from 100 to 500, stays there for a while and then suddenly goes back to 0.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task II. people choose to live alone or with friends rather with their family [5]

Hello I have got IELTS on 6th July. plz give me writing feedback to get 7 band.

Nowadays more people are choosing to live with their friends or alone rather than with their families. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

These days, due to study or work demands, living separately has become a trend in youngsters. They prefer to live either alone or with their colleagues. Some people think this infatuation is creating some bad effects on society. I agree with this opinion because these negative impacts have been obvious since last decade.

First of all, people who are living separate from their family lose the financial support they get from their parents. For example if a student takes an apartment to live away from home, he has to pay its rent and bills, and for that purpose, he needs to work somewhere. In this way, he not only wastes his time but also loses concentration on studies.

Secondly, while living alone, people are no longer under their parent's supervision and, hence, are more prone to influence from negative activities. For instance, one of my friends who were living in different city from his parents got himself involved in crimes because his parents were not able to keep in contact with him regularly. Therefore, separate living can damage people's moral foundation, too.

Last but not least, people think family is a restriction which will snatch their freedom if they involve their siblings or parents to their problems. Such as if a person is ill and needs some physical or financial help, he will have no one to depend on as he already has his denied his family. So staying away decreases the importance of the family as people have to endure the ups and downs of the life alone and unaided.

In conclusion, I would like to say, living away from family makes people alone and isolated and less considerate as they think about themselves only. This in turn would lead to an unhealthy attitude towards the society.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; 'benefits of technology' What older people can learn from young people? [3]

With the advent of technologies and inventions, our generation has become fast and advanced in every aspect of life, and this has created a wide gap between our parents and us. Therefore, some people argue that older people cannot apprentice anything from their youngsters. I disagree with this statement because there are many things that can reduce this generation gap.

First of all, everyone is using the internet and mobiles these days which seems totally different from the means of communications in the past. For instance, Face book, Skype, Whatsapp are favorite sharing forums that youngsters use nowadays but our elders are unfamiliar with their usage. By guiding them how to employ the internet and mobiles, they can keep their fellows and family members in contact easily.

Secondly, young generation takes interest in video games and those sports which need more mental skills than physical for example, Xbox, Vita and PSN. In the past, people used to play sports like Football, hockey and Cricket. However, now when our parents are attaining old age and do not have much energy to take part in games, they still can learn from us how to practice such video games and enjoy in their free time.

Last but not least, older people can join adult schools which arrange special courses on every field of their interest. For example, parents of one of my classmates live in United Kingdom, and they go to an adult school where they exercise hiking, swimming, travelling and even this school run classes about different cultures, their languages, traditions and cuisines.

In conclusion, I must say, if we really want to train our parents about how we enjoy the benefits of technology, computer, games and the internet, surely, there is nothing that we cannot explore everything together.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Advertisements make us waste money, or make our life easier? [7]

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

These days advertisements have taken a vital part of our life. All the famous brands and companies display their products by means of TV, radio, internet even on the roads through billboards where they become the focus of everyone's attention. Some people believe that advertisements force us to spend money unnecessarily, but others think they are essential to make our life easy. I agree with the second statement and support the advertisement agendas.

Firstly, advertisements save our time from browsing for the required products in the markets or websites. For example, without advertisements we need to go to the shops or browse internet even to find small things. However, after watching the advertisements of different companies, we can compare their products and prices and decide without wasting much time on searching.

Secondly, advertisements also inform about innovations and improved version of the stuff we are already using. For example, if we are using an old air conditioner that is consuming more time and extra electricity, through advertisements we will know that there is an upgraded version of air conditioner that consumes less energy and cools the air more quickly.

Moreover, companies also inform us about product promotions and sale offers by displaying in ads, and provide vouchers that save money. For example, they show the promotion codes on the billboards or display the vouchers on internet from where we can download them and use in the shop to save money.

In conclusion, I must say it is not advertisements that make us waste our money but our own lack of wisdom and cleverness. If we make budget and spend money only on required things, no advertisement or attractive sale offer can exploit our money.

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2: Inclusion of Competitive sports in the school curriculum. [2]

Some people believe that competitive sports, both team or individual, have no place in the school curriculum, How far do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, students are taking particular interest in extracurricular activities and competitive sports either in a team like football, team hockey and cricket, or individually like swimming, running and gymnastics. However, some people argue that competitive sports should not be included in the school curriculum. I disagree with this notion, and explain the advantages of sports in the school in further paragraphs.

First, team sports help teenagers develop a healthy competitive attitude in every field of life because they take every task seriously and try to win. For example, they learn to thrive for success and practice till perfection in sports; therefore, they follow the same rule during class projects, too. In the same way, their team spirit and sportsmanship help them learn about solid work ethic and determination. It also guides them to hone their personal and physical fitness, and create optimism in their thoughts and behaviour as they compete with their fellow competitors and classmates.

Similarly, while practicing for sports, students keep their health fit and body in shape, and in order to keep themselves fit and suitable for sports they exercise, meditate and eat healthy diet. For example, they make a schedule for routine work and adjust their time equally for studies, exercise and practice. Therefore, their routine life becomes organized and well planned.

Finally yet importantly, sports are meant for teenagers to deal with their aggressiveness, anger, disappointment and other emotions without damaging their personality, and also encourage them to set their goals in life and achieve them with efforts and determination.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: TASK 2: Problems caused by Internet and its solutions. [2]

The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think the main problems associated with the use of the web? What solutions can you suggest?

The use of Internet is become an imperative part of our life since it is acknowledged a bigger source of information. However, some troublesome issues have come into focus regarding its widespread use. I shall explain main problems related to the use of web and effective measures in following paragraphs.

To begin with, I must say, Internet is the biggest treasure of information; however, its excessive use reduces thinking skills. For example, a student enters the topic of his project in Google and simply copies all the relevant material without any serious effort. This in turn prevents his developing the sense of responsibility. Apart from this, internet also provides wrong information sometimes because internet is an easy access to everyone. Therefore, anybody can spread anything without thinking of the outcomes. For instance, a big chaos has created regarding the video issued on YouTube, which was based on wrong ideas about the life of Prophet Muhammad (BPUH). This also led to misunderstandings between Muslims and people of other religions. Moreover, Internet viruses spread by hackers are also very common problem because they attack user's computer, destroy important data, and hack personal information.

However, if certain measures are taken while using Internet, these problems can be resolved. First, all the websites containing curricular materials should be age restricted so that students cannot cheat. In addition, parents should also keep a check on children about what they surf on Internet. Furthermore, strong anti-viral software can be put into effect to detect and stop the internet thefts to crash our computers.

In conclusion, I will say, Internet is a blessing, but its misuse is making it a huge trouble for all of us.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Water Cycle/ Life cycle of butterfly/ Letter /Process fo digital photography [3]

Write short paragraphs describing each of the following:

A: The water cycle which creates clouds and rainfall.
When temperature rises in a warm area, water in the rivers evaporates into air. This air rises high and then turns into clouds. Once clouds are formed, they travel from warm areas to cold ones. Finally, when temperature falls, these clouds condense to form raindrops which fall to the ground as rain.

B: The life cycle of a butterfly.
First of all, an adult female butterfly lays eggs on a leaf of a plant. After few days, theses eggs hatch and produce larvae which remain hibernate through the whole winters, or turn into pupae. These pupae, after few weeks, develop wings. As soon as wings are formed, pupae- now known as butterfly- starts flying, and in turn lay eggs on the leaf to complete its life cycle.

C: The progress of a letter from packaging to delivery.
As soon as the letter is closed and the address is written on the envelope, it is dropped into the letterbox. It is collected and then stamped in the post office by the postal worker. After that, the letter is transported to the city of the address. Once it is reached, the letter is further stamped in the post office and given to the mail carrier who, finally, delivers the letter to its destination.

D: The process of digital photography from taking a photograph to displaying the image.
At first, the camera is focused on a view of which the photograph is taken. After making the camera ready, picture is clicked by pushing a button on the camera. Once the photograph is taken, it is transferred to computer where it is edited according to the demand. The photograph is subsequently ready for display.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Importance of studying History in school. [3]

To some people studying the past has little value. Do you think it is important to do so? What will be the effect if children are not taught history?

These days, History has declared an optional subject. People do not like to study it, and only few select it willingly. However, in my opinion, History is an important subject for children to study.

For example, studying the past requires interrogations and interpretations. Such as if history of Ireland is to study, it is necessary to know Gaelic, an ancient Irish language. Therefore, it increases other skills along with the knowledge. Likewise, History includes the conflicts among different races and religions in the past. So, after knowing about how these conflicts happened and then sorted, they can be avoided in present days.

Moreover, studying the past explains most of the situations happening these days. Such as conflicts between India and Pakistan are still not resolved since 1947. As a result, this affects the peace attempts in Asia because both are powerful Asian countries, and they always try to attack each other.

Therefore, if children do not like studying history, they will lack lots of knowledge and skills. History teaches them the facts of life along with ranges of skills, since History provides them with the ability to analyse and judge the affairs of the past on their own. In addition, they also learn to research the facts and material through planning and judgement. Moreover, History also triggers an interest to study other subjects because they develop various skills that can be applied in those subjects.

In conclusion, I must say History should be a compulsory subject for children so they will know better about the world they live in. And, various techniques should use to make it an interesting subject.