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Oct 30, 2013
Graduate / UNIQUE CHALLENGES; Admission Essay for Occupational Therapy Program [3]

Everyone has their own unique challenges to face throughoutin their life. I ve seensee people with a variety of challenges to face.( i see people taking challenges on various terms) Everyday someone has a new challenge to face/meet, and I want to be the person to give them hope. Occupational Therapists have a way to take up a challenging situation that someone may feel despair or hopeless, andbut using creativity to give them thatcreates a hope to keep going. My passion for helping people and giving them the tools they need to succeed shapes my life. The desire to help others as an occupational therapist begins with my past.
Oct 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / Education is only accessible to privileged members of our society ? MUIS SCHOLARSHIP [2]

The study of commerce has always been my preferred choice of study and my strong transcripts only reinforces my belief of having what it takes to be a successful student.

I believe that there is a vital importance in the preservation of the knowledge and examples of the personal attributes of leaders. Leadership is not an innate characteristic. It must be learned , is acquired by learning and the future of our community will depend onmanythe respects onof how well our future leaders receive their training and impart their knowledge to the general society.
Oct 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / "Cartesian Duality";Term Paper for Core Humanities [2]

Mary Shelley believes humans are naturally innocent at birth and also are born as a blank slate or as put by John Locke a 'tabula rasa'. Differences on the subject of humanity among both Descartes and Shelley may arise from the periods in which they lived.

Mary shelley trusts humans are naturally born innocent and a blank slate during their birth which quoted by John Lock as a tabula rasa; Differences on the subject of humanity among both Descartes and Shelley may arise from the periods they lived

Descartes believed that me n is easy toeasily err in times of decision makingthey make decisions based on their own judgments or common sense. Descartes derives a set of four principals, which he says is essential to discovering the truth in the world. Descartes completely sets aside perception aside when seeking the truth.
Oct 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; rejecting public educational system would not be better [4]

Children should be educated at home by their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

Education is an inevitable part for children. Parents play a tremendous role to enhance their career. On the other hand, school, college and university have been cropped up to educate the pupils. However, the argument is that the home schooling is great for the children . I do not agree with the statement mentioned in order for plenty of reasons.

Parental education is not sufficient for the children. Because we all acknowledge that the prospective of school is to qualify children's growth of mind in social and intellectual ability. Whereas, parents just take care of them keeping private tutors or self-study. Social skills are as important as theoretical knowledge for children. Schools are the best place to learn social skills because they provide such environment which ordinary household cannot.

Many parents are busy with work and business. It's impossible for them to give a lot of time to their children. Moreover, yet in the developing countries, we find many of them are illiterate who do not understand the importance of education. In this case, school will be the best place to literate their children.

Research says human contact influences them a tendency in positive way. communicating with others play an essential role in their development. during their class period children concentrate with whole of thinking and have a chance to contract each other such as realization and attention to the lessons which increase brilliancy. In contrast, getting education at home keep them away from such encouragement. Children at home feel free of mobility. No presser, no home task cause less progress of children.

Some people would argue that children recently are facing foul mouths, bullies or any inappropriate behaviour. they are unprotected in the playground. Sometimes they may occur any dire accident in road. Parents feel better to keep them on teaching at home.

In conclusion, rejecting public educational system would not be better off in the modern civilized society. A child's upbringing must include sharing views with other kids.

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Oct 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / Despite having few harmful consequences, Internet has a positive effect on the society. [4]

Technology had offered us with internet a few decades before but it has enriched our lives spectacularly

In this sentence, you use conditional word "but" so you need to differentiate information between two sentence while you use "BUT" in the middle. you say in the first close " technology offers us many aspects, internet is one of them Now use connective word "but" to say negative about it
Oct 11, 2013
Undergraduate / My stork got lost : my story [2]

I feel my mood brightens up when I see the blue and yellow flags through the bus window. As I walk inside, I wiggle my toes, in excitement. There is a display of chairs, draping one wall, and I feel at home.
Oct 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role [3]

Discussion essay;
As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

In recent years, Computers have brought wide varieties of convenience in the field of education. The majority of the universities and colleges are using computer in needs of education. The advancement of education fairly depends on computers for both teachers and students. However, the arguments have come up about the excessive use of computer for educational activities which might die out the roles of teachers in the classroom. But i doubt in given statement due to the several reasons.

There is no double that computer is being used widely for the purpose of education. Students are being taught by introducing digital computer in the classroom. Each student has a personal laptop where they have a chance to store substantial educational materials. They have an access to download academic lessons, course materials and useful software via internet. For example, teachers serves students only 40 to 1 hours in the classroom but they are failed to demonstrate lessons to all the students. In this case, many students do not understand the lessons properly, they must have to rely on internet materials.

In addition, computer is a common tool for the students. They can easily bear it with them. Many people would argue that thrilling computer may decrease the relationship between teachers and students. It might lose of our traditional educational system. For example, we are forgetting manual counting process and hand writing once a computer is available.

To sum up, teachers experience is certainly required to guide and assist the students in understanding lessons. It is obviously true teachers help and computer based education must be corresponded to each other in current education.
Oct 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / Murder, bloodshed, carnage; why exactly is it wrong? [4]

From the beginning of times, M urder has been viewed as thea ultimate crime; the ultimate crime is to be scourged from i do not understand what you exactly mean here, try to interpret as simple as you can and sometimes, deprived from life for. Lately, I have been pondering, and I have a few ideas of my own, but I am relishing and dying to acknowledge further and foreign conjectures
Oct 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly [3]

Topic; People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example.

1. Causes 2. Effect 3. Solution

Drug abuse is a dangerous social curse for modern generation. Parents and guardians are nowadays very concerned about feeling of drug abuse. Many adults are addicted to taking drugs at an early age in modern society. But certain sociologist blames the patents and local people often play an example. However, There are many reasons of involving in drug abuse and on the rise.

Youth are prone to having drug during they feel frustration and depression. When they lose all hope, they seek solace in taking heroin, Afim, Eaba and such kind of alcohol tobacco. It happens while they lose or are shocked by their parents or favourite partner. They sometimes create a huge distance with parents. They forsake to make any communication and avoid taking care of their health. As a result they destroy themselves day by day. Due to the lack of adequate support by parents, young generation is suffering such problems a lot. Parents should be more protective to their children's mobility.

Many adults have a host of friends. They are sometimes motivated by the friends. Once anyone is taken drug then he gets used to it regularly. When they have drug as a regular basis they need huge sums of money to generate. As a consequence, they have to implicate with stealing , rubbering and mugging. So where there is a problem there is a solution. Before tangling with drug abuse, they should be switched from school or college to remote. They will be stopped communicating with those motivated friends.

In conclusion, I recommend that there is to be demonstrated the young generation about the havoc of drug use, and take peaceful steps to reduce the number of drug addicted people.

Oct 7, 2013
Writing Feedback / We should look at computers advantages and research to utilize them in a good manner. [6]

Topic; Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them.

Computers are the best products of latest technology. The advance of modern technology has facilitated of the way of life. Of them most wonderful invention is computer. People of all classes are involved in the using of computer. Although, people argue about its negative and positive sides. However, there is no doubt to say the one cannot imagine the advancement of life without the help of this machine.

The computer makes life more easier than making hindrance. They are good if used for educational and beneficial uses for health and living etc. It has connected our life to information technology. For example, today, we can easily communicate with friends and families through internet, and mobile phone which basic services now has been inevitable for everyone. Banking sectors, transportation even research sometimes becomes impossible without this machine. Though this works faster and small in size so someone can bear it and buy for its cheaper rate.

Moreover, science and technology contribute in every sphere of our life. These are useful in our living and beneficial works. Recently, agricultural function and medical treatment developed further due to these technologies.

Some people think that the computer has more difficulty because we are completely confined to using it in our life which likely to be a dire consequence in our society. Computer is an electronic device which might anytime damage. For example, in my country many villagers have no longer any computer even few among them have general knowledge if they are brought under technology, many aspects will go vain.

In conclusion, advanced technology has given us many facilities. But it has also many bad impact on our society and culture. But i believe that apart from the flipside we should look at its advantages and research to utilize in good manner.
Oct 2, 2013
Writing Feedback / ielts; examination of education system should be emphasised and implemented in each country [3]

Tests and examinations are a central feature of school systems in many countries.
Do you think the educational benefits of testing outweigh any disadvantages

School is a field of acquiring knowledge by applying some crucial methods such as testing and examining system. Many countries across the world practice this system over and over again regardless stressful for the students. Teachers need to assess the qualifications of how much knowledge students gain. However, I think testing is a main feature to educate the pupils. There are many reasons of which i am going to mention in the statement.

The initial benefit of testing system in the school or university is that, it creates a sense of motivation in mind of the children. Test or exam means study and study before holding it. Moreover, it makes pupils ambitious and inspiration enough and increases consciousness to education. For example, most of the pupils are not prone to study, playing games, visiting and many unnecessary jobs are interesting to them. When exam knocks on the door they instantly become eager to study hard for getting better marks.

The other important aspects are that the testing system keeps the pupils in touch up to date in academic courses. Teachers usually check the exam papers and justify the student of how much knowledge he has on the subject. If a student fails in the exam, parents and teachers easily can understand the weakness and have a chance to take proper care for further study.

Furthermore, many students feel stressful and bothering such testing or exams. This might happen once a student deviates from academic area. For example, especially adult teenagers are addicted to outdoor activities such as gossiping, smoking.

In conclusion, tests or exams are very beneficial to the students. However, i am still deeply convinced that examination of education system should be emphasised and implemented in each country of the world.
Oct 2, 2013
Essays / End of High School Essay: Quantum Cryptography [2]

Hello, I'm in mythe last of my High School year, and have to submit an essay at the end of this year which will be counted to my deploma's grade.

It's similar to the IB's extended essay in its functionin
Sep 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; governments should give financial support to creative artists [4]

Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Arts enrich our lives and society. Artists create their own thought that has a significant impact on the way of life. Their creativity is appreciated and helpful for the nations. But people have different view that whether authority supports their fundings or they will go for alternative sources. I believe both government and other sources should be funded.

Governments do need to look at creative artists. Because any genuine artist aims to make some arts better for his native land. In art project a huge money needs to create, financial support is vital for them otherwise, it is impossible for them to build a new project. They require government's assistance and help. There are many works in public the place for example, in my country, sculptures and statues are erected in the centre of cross-roads. These symbolize our liberation war. So it is easy for us to practice our cultural activities. They serve to protect our culture and heritage and we are proud about them.

In addition, people express their view that financial assistance should be generated by alternative sources. The reason is likely to be that the governments spend money on public services such as general treatment, education and fabrics. These public facilities are fundamental for a country to function properly. Provision to creative artist is a waste of money. Another reason is, some artists create arts as a passion and profession. Their arts are neither rich nor famous but they continue to produce arts as a passion.

Finally, arts affect everywhere of our natural movement however, I believe apart from the flipside government funding is to be ensured to create arts.
Sep 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] agree or disagree the purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain [7]

Nowadays, T elevsion is becoming more and more essential than in the past and modern people always spend much time watching TV with their families or friends. In this case, some people might assert that TV shows should be all educative, ticking off (informal phrasal verb. you should not use in formal writing although i do not understand what you mean here) all entertainment ingredients
Sep 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / Effects of natural disasters on countries have less impact on developed countries - Agree? [2]

People have a huge influence in theon earth, especially natural and environmentalsoas a consequence, most countries in the world have ( present tense ) suffered extremely enormous damage from climate change and hundreds of natural disasters annually. it is claimed that natural disastershavehas a greater impact on LEDCs than MEDCs in athe number of different ways.
Sep 21, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; The subjects that children are taught in schools are decided by central authorities [5]

The subjects that children are taught in schools are decided by central authorities. Some people say that teachers, not politicians, should be responsible for this task.

To what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Education is inevitable for the children and therefore a suitable subject puts an important rule in their educational fields. The central authority rules all activities of schools but some people blame teachers should be responsible instead of politicians. However, I entirely disagree with mentioned prompt.

There is no doubt, the job of the teacher is to deliver good teaching to the students but not to make any decision about subjects. Authority decides what subject is preferable in society, how much skill is needed for the current generation. The elected members call a meeting in order to make a syllabus for the children. They fix main subjects, and elective subjects and they also make a database of exams. Teacher's training program, educational expenditure, teacher's wage all have to confirm by the authority. Only teachers obey the rules and regulations which given by the authority.

The government's job is to ensure a standard education for the children of its country. They deliver provision of advanced equipment such as computers, research centre and library which help them make good quality in education. They also measure the numbers of students and compare level with developed countries. In contrast, teachers look after children and serve them some pacific subjects. They can also decide too much variation in the stands and qualification.

To sum up, teachers and authorities both have outstanding contribution in educations. While Some people argue that teachers are the responsibile to select a subject in schools. I think there is no evidence behind of their voice. But it is true they both decide how to serve their native country.
Sep 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money [6]

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead

The arts play our lives in accordance of modern events. The government makes every year a budget on both arts and public services. Music together with theatre will be one of the two sources of investment by the government. Some people believe a waste of money in art investment instead of public service. The aspects of discussion will go both sides of points first before of my preferred opinion.

These days, people often tend to enjoy better life by the help of modern development, music and theatre are to be such things, people amuse themselves. It is a kind of relaxing for all sorts of people. For example, an official employer goes to theatre with family even listen music sometimes and pass his leisure hours. Another side is the growth of economic development of the country needs to depend on arts industry, even though art is a symbol of cultural activity. The government receives a host of money as taxation from the art industry. However, this amount will lose if the government stops the provision of investment in the art industry.

In addition, Government are got used to spend money on public welfare such as schools, bridge and road construction, hospitals and so on. If the government does not provide enough supply on such sectors, the country might lag behind compared to the developed countries. It is certainly true that government has to ensure first the fundamental needs of its citizens then look at the entertainments and additional services. For instance, the authority will build up adequate hospitals in needs and schools to ensure education for children, public transport will be increased to avoid traffic jam.

In conclusion, I would say that a large amount of money goes to invest in public services as to improve the quality of a citizen's life. I do not believe spending money in the arts is a waste of money as this provides many important benefits.
Sep 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / The proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia [3]

The proportion of sole parent percentage was very high from all categories which was 21% but the person living in this household was about 65% of single,

You can not use proportion and percentage at a time in a sentence. Have a look; 1. the number of sole parent was 21% 2. the proportion of sole parent increases to 21% 3. 21% of sole parent were living
Sep 16, 2013
Writing Feedback / The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 [3]

The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001.

1991 2001

Food 155 160
Electricity and Water 75 120
Clothing 30 20
Housing 95 100
Transport 70 45

Other goods and services* 250 270
Total 675 715
*Other goods and services: non-essential goods and services

The table indicates the average family expenditure that expends monthly in Australia between 1991 and 2001. At a glance, it can be seen that expenditure in Food was by far more than other appliances.

In details, The biggest increase of expenditure was in consuming Food which more than doubled over the period being just at 155 in 1991 and 160 in 2001 per month. The second items came from Housing expending at $95 in 1991 which increased a bit to at $100 in 2001. The largest number of expenditure in total was seen in Other goods and services which rose from just at only $250 in 2001 to about $270 a month. There were considerably fewer amounts of expenditure for Clothing in 1991 only at $72 compared to Electricity and Water just at $75 in the same period, although this rate rose to at $120 in 2001.

There were almost as much expensive in Transport as in Electricity and Water in 1991. Together with Housing and food were still one of the most expensive services to the Australian family.
Sep 16, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS - CAM 5; three different countries population compare [4]

The line graph provides information about the percentage of people with an age of 65 years or more in the USA, Japan and Sweden, from 1940 to 2040

your definition of statement above is well but remember if you want to achieve a good score you've to use an attractive structure in first sentence. you should never have made any mistake in the first of you sentence. Try to avoid confusing sentence you've used "with an age of 65 years"

here look at a bit The graph shows changes in the percentage of a group of people aged 65 or more in three different countries ;Japan Sweden and the USA, over a period of 100 years
Sep 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries [4]


It seems to be watertight that the growth of magnificent standard of living is likely to be a first cause of fatness for children: Children who lead a sophisticated lifestyle, are more likely to gain overweight and obesity

This is a simple idea and you present it in a complex way. Try to pay more attention towards clarity and flow of your ideas rather than constructing complicated sentences in view of displaying your vocabulary skills. It is important to show that skill, yet your essay should be interesting for the reader to fo
Sep 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries [4]

Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions

Health related problem such as obesity, is now a general issue anywhere around the world. Children are facing overweight which is severely triggering a concern to them. There are several reasons of causing serious effects of obesity in childhood. However, I agree with mentioned statement for some reasons.

It seems to be watertight that the growth of magnificent standard of living is likely to be a first cause of fatness for children. Children now can easily adapt with modern equipment which sometimes leads them more hours to stay home. For example,children spend host of time playing games on the computer, watching TV and sleeping long which are the primary causes of gaining too much weight. On the other word, many of them do not work out even a single hour. Fatness boosts due to the lack of proper exercise. Children sleep long time instead of doing exercise and outdoor activities. Physical exercise can stabilize the obesity of children but unexpectedly they avoid it. As a result they suffer from numerous ailments and harmful diseases.

There is another prominent cause is to be the touch of advanced technology because children nowadays are accustomed to having outdoor junk first food. These foods often contain sugar, high level of calories and higher quantity of oil. These foods deteriorate children's health and increase weight. Consumers are at higher risk of disease, because which might cause diabetes, heart disease and cancer.

In addition, the number of overweight children is on the increase. It is sometimes certainly trusted that the responsibility of parents and government should be mentioned. They should take possible steps to remain stable of childhood obesity. For instance, parents should not allow them to have outdoor food. The government will prevent by banning the production of steed food.

In conclusion, even though children are putting weight rapidly, they should have given mental support and encourage them to a healthy diet.
Sep 6, 2013
Writing Feedback / Notting Hill shows the highest and Fulham is the least in both rental cost and salaries - the table [4]

The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London.

The given table show charges in weekly rental cost and annual needed salaries in three different suburbs of London. In general, of the three locations, Notting Hill shows the highest and Fulham is the least in both rental cost and salaries.

It is apparently seen that the rental cost in Notting Hill is the most expensive requiring $375 to $738 weekly for one and three bedrooms and with needed salaries $98,500 to $194000 respectively. Fulham area is the cheapest cost of renting a property just cost $600 weekly and 157500 annually needed salaries for three bedrooms. In contrast, Regent's park just remains in the middle of two areas. Although renting a property in this area is quite higher starting $325 for one bedroom to $650 for three bedrooms and therefore you need $85,500 and 170,500 salaries depending on the number of bedrooms required.