Graduate / Personal statement for admission to Columbia University [3]

This is of 467 words:) Word limit is 500. Thank you for every feedback. This is for admission to MPH program.

Why you are interested in Public health program and what interests you in the specified department?

My education of dental surgery program and subsequent dental practice has guided me to pursue MPH. This was my first exposure to the fact that dentists had a hand in general healthcare as well. A dentist is tasked to look for general diseases in order to help people develop their dental hygiene. That was when I came to understand that I played a major role in preventing oral disease and promoting public health. In India, dental treatment is costly, has a weak governmental policy and does not have many active volunteer agencies. As a consequence dental checkups are mostly reactive than preventive and marginalized people are left to fend for themselves. A dentist only treats those who come to them whereas public health organizations and workers serve the community on enhancing preventive measures along with dental education thereby improving overall dental health at the first place. Pursuing Masters of Public Health is my first step towards my goal to become an asset for renowned health organizations like WHO, UNESCO to champion the dental health policies and strategies. As a dental surgeon, I came to learn about the basic oral epidemiology of a community by calculating indices for caries and periodontal diseases. I had to learn how to diagnose pre-cancerous and cancerous lesions and the effects of poor oral habits such as tobacco or alcohol consumption. I expect my MPH to help enlighten me about the broader aspect of epidemiology by bolstering my knowledge in the event of a major outbreak of oral ailments prevailing in India and how can I make a change in Indian system.

What intrigues me more is how we can promote oral health in community apart from providing basic education on dental hygiene maintenance? What type of dental policies can we make to make especially the population at high risk live healthier? What type of diseases affect the population and which areas are mostly affected? I want to cement my education with degree and certification from a renowned institution like Mailman School Of Public Health. While taking the course I will expand my knowledge and experience in relation to global health issues that are focused on issues like poverty reduction, maternal health, prevention of neonatal and child mortality, infectious diseases, environmental sanitation, and access to safe drinking water, and rising rates of chronic diseases.These issues are present in most of the developing nations including India and a global health certificate program will prime me to participate in actions working for these causes. I believe your prestigious institute will equip me with the required skills and training to help me to bolster my efforts to make oral and general health a priority in India healthcare by doing research and promoting knowledge about necessary oral healthcare.

Graduate / This changed my perspective of medical care- why you chose public health. [2]

. Your personal statement should describe your:
•Reasons for interest in public health
•Reasons for interest in program of study and/or concentration
•Reasons for interest in the school or program
•Career goals

I am looking for every kind of feedback whether grammar mistake or sentence structure. Thank you in advance for every feedback of yours.

"Everything hinges on education. Without it, you can't advocate for proper health care, for housing, for a civil rights bill that ensures your rights." - Susan L. Taylor.

Pursuing Masters of Public Health is my step to gain that education towards my goal to work for renowned health organizations like WHO or UNICEF to benefit the population at large in times where, according to WHO statistics, the global health workforce shortage is expected to reach 12.9 million by 2035. Being a dental surgeon, I realized that dental treatment is costly, is urban concentrated, does not have many active volunteer agencies and has low governmental focus and weak policy. As a consequence dental checkups are mostly reactive than preventive and marginalized people do not have access to doctors and health care facilities. The program from Rutgers School of Public Health along with its training would help me to acquire the skills with required education for working as a public health leader.

I chose medical career because as a child I was fascinated by the persona of white-coat attired doctors in hospitals caring for myriad patients. When I partook in rural dental camps as a dental student at ********* College, at Haryana (India), I diagnosed and treated under-privileged patients with primary dental care, delivered education on oral health including talking about the ill effects of chronic smoking, tobacco & betel-nut chewing. This experience made me realize that the patients I saw in hospitals were just the tip of the iceberg. The doctor to patient ratio in rural areas was abysmal with too far apart, ill equipped and under staffed medical centers. It disturbed me when I recognized that the urban healthcare system is not serving under-privileged people who are not being exposed to simple preventive health measures like maintaining hygiene, clean water usage, no tobacco use, balanced nutritious diet, sex education, physical exercise and taking advantage of the free vaccination programs and fluoridation programs. This changed my perspective of medical care and intrigued me to work for the causes and prevention of diseases along with their treatment fostering the need of becoming a Public Health Worker.

My zeal to learn about cause of diseases and how they could be prevent at the first place frames my interest in Epidemiology. With academic knowledge and practical training, I endeavor to advance my field experience through Rutgers School. As an under-grad student, I learned basics of oral epidemiology like calculation of indices for caries and periodontal diseases, studied about screening tests for cancerous lesions and disease patterns in population. Now I want to pursue broader aspects of dental care and epidemiology, increasing my knowledge about reasons of major outbreak of oral ailments prevailing in developing nations and how to affect a change in health policies by pursuing Masters of Public Health (MPH). The doctor can only help those who come to them, but a public health worker can educate the uninitiated to help themselves.

After undergrad education, I chose to spend my time as an observer at a state sponsored Government hospital. I witnessed patients with traumatic injuries, disabilities and severe infections - many a times with, unknown cause and limited accessibility to health services. These grim situations expanded my world view and steeled my decision to become a public health worker. I assisted dental surgeons in surgeries and learned how to comfort terminally ill patients, to treat disabled patients, to manage time considering the long queue of patients and to effectively work in a team in emergency accident cases wherein inter-disciplinary doctors need to co-ordinate and treat the patient. These experiences have equipped me with skills of emergency care as well as handling of incapacitated patients with compassion and diligence.

My in-depth knowledge and zeal to serve landed me a job in private clinic, Oral Rehabilitation and Implant Centre, a distinguished private clinic with daily patients in excess of 50, as an associate dentist where I treated patients independently. Impressed by my manual skills, confidence, decision making and ability to work in a team, my employer (Dr.*****) often delegated me to responsibility to run the whole clinic in his absence. Due to dearth of quality public health institutions in India, I enrolled in and completed a 2 year distance education program in healthcare services along with my practice. It helped me to develop insight into mechanics of health facility through subjects like strategic management, hospital organization and research methodology. I want to cement that with MPH from a renowned institution like Rutgers School of Public Health known for its interdisciplinary approach and research to improve health and prevent disease in diverse populations. Along with my practice and studies, I volunteered in my community by becoming member of Dharmyog Foundation (India) to organize health camps, attended by hundreds, to help people incorporate healthier lifestyle. After moving to US in March 2015, I rendered my services in the nutritional education course for kids in New York School as well as in environmental projects as farm volunteers carried out in New York Battery Park.

I perceived that plight of health issues is worldwide and I seek to support my passion for betterment with possibility to hone my skills for research on prevention and control of human disease through MPH. I am keen to participate in program to stretch my boundaries and to explore the dimensions of healthcare industry on a global scale. I endeavor to advance my leadership qualities through innovative techniques and field experience by your school. After MPH, I look forward to 1 year dental public health program which is available in Rutgers School only. With academic knowledge and practical training, I am hankering after to start my own volunteer organization to advocate the health issues in the most needed places in my native country. My experience and zest to make a mark in the lives of poorest inspires me to progress further on a career towards global health with a focus on fieldwork instead of merely academic research. I believe MPH degree from Rutgers School will advance my efforts to attain health objectives at both national and international level.

Graduate / We not only assess it but do the public health: Personal statement [NEW]

I am stucked with the last part of essay, the scholarship. How can I say that I am fit for so and so scholarship? Can anyone help me with this? Thank you for every kind of feedback. Its probably my last essay so I am trying my best to make it up to the mark. Every help is greatly appreciated. also, word limit is 600-800 and it is already crossing 800 :/.

Your personal statement is intended to give you the opportunity to submit a tailored narrative which will describe your education, experience and professional career objectives. Your personal statement should describe your:

Reasons for interest in public health
Reasons for interest in program of study and/or concentration
Reasons for interest in the school
Career goals
Applicants are encouraged to indicate their interest and fit with a specific scholarship in their personal statement.

'We don't just assess the public health, we do the public health.' This is the ideology which came out as I listened to and interacted with the faculty of Dornsife School of Public Health. I am particularly fascinated by their commitment to public health whether it's initiative of youth engagement to health awareness by ****** or work of ***** on women's health. Faculty members like ******seemed great mentors whom students aspire to have. Dornsife School will not only educate me but provide me with rigorous training and ample hands-on experience in public health field. I felt elated at the prospect of having found the launch-pad to achieve my goal of preventing health disparities in developing nations.

My immediate goal will be to gain extensive knowledge of the course and through its 8 month community masters project and 120 hours of practicum, I will learn to apply that knowledge in field area. Along with this, my purpose is to get through global health certificate program or Dornsife Global Development Scholars Program to get international health experience. I aspire to start my own volunteer organization in India to advocate the health issues. So, I will keep myself associated with multiple non-profit organizations running in NY, NJ and Philadelphia along with my studies to prepare myself for diverse culture of communities. After moving to US in March 2015, I volunteered in the environmental projects carried out in New York Battery Park as farm volunteers. Currently, I am rendering my services in nutritional education courses for kids and teenagers as a volunteer of City Harvest, New York and will continue to do so.

I chose a medical career because I was moved by the doctors working in hospitals caring for myriad patients. But when I participated in dental camps as a dental student at Swami Devi Dyal Dental Hospital and College, at Haryana (India), I realized that the patients I saw in hospitals were just the tip of the iceberg. The doctor to patient ratio in rural areas was abysmal with too far apart, ill equipped and under staffed medical centers. It disturbed me when I saw communities are suffering with thyroid disorders, vitamin deficiencies, malnourishment, anemia, TB, etc. which can be prevented. All that is required is to follow simple health measures like maintaining hygiene, clean water usage, no tobacco use, balanced nutritious diet, sex education, physical exercise, regular medical checkups and taking advantage of the free vaccination programs. This changed my perspective of medical care and intrigued me to work for the causes and prevention of diseases fostering the need of becoming a public health worker.

After undergrad education, I was offered a job in a renowned private hospital on the condition that I would bring a high number of patients to that hospital. I instead chose a state-sponsored Government hospital for observer ship. There I witnessed patients with traumatic injuries, severe infections and disabilities, diabetes, obesity, hypertension, etc. I assisted dental surgeons and learned how to effectively work in a team in emergency accident cases wherein inter-disciplinary doctors need to co-ordinate and treat the patient. These grim situations expanded my world view and steeled my decision to become a public health worker.

Due to dearth of quality public health institutions in India, I enrolled in and completed a 2 year distance education program in healthcare services along with my practice. It helped me to develop insight into mechanics of health facility through subjects like strategic management, hospital organization and research methodology. I want to cement that with MPH from a renowned institution like Dornsife School known for its vigorous approach of learning. It dawned on me that medical treatment is costly, does not have many active volunteer agencies and has low governmental focus and weak policy. As a consequence health checkups are mostly reactive rather than preventive and marginalized people do not have access to doctors and health care facilities. The doctor can only help those who come to them, but a public health worker can educate the uninitiated to help themselves. I volunteered in my community by becoming member of Dharmyog Foundation (India) to organize health camps, attended by hundreds, to help people incorporate healthier lifestyle. Many participants lost weight, lowered blood sugar and felt improved overall health with daily practice. I also took part in theatre meant for inculcating the good habits and not to get trapped in ills like drunken driving or suicides in urban areas.

My eagerness to learn about cause of diseases and how they could be prevent at the first place frames my interest in Epidemiology. I seek to support my passion for betterment of societies through MPH by enhancing my skills in research on prevention and control of human disease. My ultimate goal is to work with WHO to bring a change in lives of people through health promotion.