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Essay about The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites

2 - I will admit that you have met the word count requirement of this essay task. However, having met the...

Writing Feedbackhalanvuong - Mar 7, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024

[WRITING TASK 1] Percentages of tourists who used different types of transportation when traveling

2 - The location of the chart is not important to the reader. Why? The reader is assumed to not have...

Writing FeedbackThinhVN - Mar 7, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024

WRITING TASK 1 TEST 1 CAMBRIDGE 17 (TOWN OF NORBITON)

2 - The image is over analyzed. You need to write only up to 200 words for this task otherwise you...

Writing Feedbackdoquynh - Mar 7, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024

Visitors that traveled to five countries in four years - IELTS

2 - The summary overview is incomplete and will receive a failing score. The summary of information should be represented in...

Writing Feedbackkaylin nguyen - Mar 5, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024

Hosting international events - IELTS writing task 2

2 - The first thing I noticed about this writing was that you only wrote 256 words. I feel that is...

Writing FeedbackAnniehoangpham - Mar 4, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024

IELTS TASK 2 It is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centre

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback!...

Writing Feedbacksophiemoore62 - Feb 29, 2024 / sophiemoore62 - Mar 9, 2024

IELTS WRITING TASK 1 The graphs below show the cinema attendance in Australia and the average cinema

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback!...

Writing Feedbacksophiemoore62 - Feb 29, 2024 / sophiemoore62 - Mar 9, 2024

Consumption of processed food in Australia - Ielts writing task 1

2 - Was there a mention of the inclusive years for this time frame? For accuracy purposes, the year coverage...

Writing Feedbacknhattlee - Mar 4, 2024 / Holt - Mar 7, 2024

IELTS Writing task 2 correction - Ragonean

2 - Thank you for letting me know that you are self-studying for the test. I will make sure to help...

Writing FeedbackRagonean - Mar 3, 2024 / Holt - Mar 7, 2024

Unrestricted fresh water usage - IELTS task 2

2 - There is no need to indicate this part. You already stated that this is your opinion. It is...

Writing FeedbackJuicy_Goochie - Mar 3, 2024 / Holt - Mar 7, 2024

The Crucial Role of School in Shaping Lives

2 - As an essay writing guide or outline, I would have to say that this bullet listing works well. It...

Writing Feedbackshahzaibpk - Mar 2, 2024 / Holt - Mar 6, 2024

IELTS writing task 2 - Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning...

2 - You are not providing a thesis statement as required in this paragraph. You must provide the reason for...

Writing FeedbackAlbyMan - Mar 1, 2024 / Holt - Mar 6, 2024

IELTS Wrinting Tast1: The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in...

2 - You need to create a better summary overview. Follow the required 3-5 sentence format for that section to achieve...

Writing Feedbackdravenliao - Mar 1, 2024 / Holt - Mar 6, 2024

IELTS writing task 2: personal info online

2 - The prompt restatement is barely related to the original prompt. This will be judged to be unrelated to the...

Writing Feedbackalex83 - Mar 1, 2024 / Holt - Mar 6, 2024

Tet holiday is believe to be the most favourite one among Vietnamese people

2 - As an English writing exercise, I appreciate the efforts you have placed into the writing of this short essay....

Writing FeedbackPhaedramihuhuong - Mar 1, 2024 / Holt - Mar 6, 2024

3. The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked

2 - The summary overview and trending statement are clear and quite strong in this case. The comprehensive presentation of these...

Writing Feedbackmannhi113 - Feb 28, 2024 / Holt - Mar 5, 2024

IELTS Writing task 2: "In many countries, the fast fashion industry has gained significant ..."

3 - @maidong You should address at least 2 problems and propose a solution that relates to fast fashion. In this...

Writing Feedbackmaidong - Feb 22, 2024 / sophiemoore62 - Mar 1, 2024

Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

3 - @phuongstella You should further explain your first point before jumping to the next one. Be specific about it. Each...

Writing Feedbackphuongstella - Feb 26, 2024 / sophiemoore62 - Mar 1, 2024

IELTS Writing task 2: More and more people are becoming seriously overweight.

4 - @sophiemoore62 When one is thinking, one is considering all options and uncertain of the correct response. That is why...

Writing Feedbackcaohuyen93 - Feb 15, 2024 / Holt - Mar 1, 2024

secondary students believe that a university degree is the only passport to later success in life

3 - Please Grape, you have done well in giving an explicit explanation to both side of the argument but you...

Writing Feedbackgrapes - Feb 24, 2024 / Aroma - Feb 29, 2024

Writing task 1: The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours

3 - I think this can be shortened into just one sentence and you should only mention the most significant...

Writing Feedbackamber99999 - Feb 25, 2024 / sophiemoore62 - Feb 29, 2024

IELTS Writing task 2. Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication.

3 - @Miyu2k7 if you often cause misunderstanding in your writing, I think it's best to state your opinion about whether...

Writing FeedbackMiyu2k7 - Feb 25, 2024 / sophiemoore62 - Feb 29, 2024

IELTS WRITING TASK 2_ ENVIRONMENT

3 - @phuongmai123 I think generally you shouldn't ask questions in an IELTS writing task 2. Each body paragraph should contain...

Writing Feedbackphuongmai123 - Feb 26, 2024 / sophiemoore62 - Feb 29, 2024

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university...

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback! I understand....

Writing Feedbacksophiemoore62 - Feb 22, 2024 / sophiemoore62 - Feb 29, 2024

IELTS Writing Task 2: Some people think children should start school at a very early age

2 - There is a lack of proper comparison discussion in this compare and contrast + personal opinion essay. The writing...

Writing Feedbackvuduyan8 - Feb 25, 2024 / Holt - Feb 27, 2024

Writing task 2 : Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal.

2 - You cannot use a conjunction to start a sentence since there are no words, phrases, or clauses to...

Writing FeedbackSandra Charloote - Feb 25, 2024 / Holt - Feb 27, 2024

It is a natural process which animal species such as dinosaurs become extinct.

2 - Your discussion is not really very clear. You are too focused on using advanced vocabulary, which is not the...

Writing Feedbackdorypham123 - Feb 24, 2024 / Holt - Feb 25, 2024

Some students don't enroll in science majors - why?

2 - This is a writer's personal opinion. It should not be used to start the restatement section as it...

Writing FeedbackDann - Feb 23, 2024 / Holt - Feb 25, 2024

ielts writing task 2: transportation

2 - Do not write run - on sentences. The prompt restatement and writer's opinion section was written as a long...

Writing FeedbackTaylorDn - Feb 22, 2024 / Holt - Feb 25, 2024

IELTS Writing task 1_Table_The number of visitors in the UK and their average spending

2 - The analysis portion of the essay is well developed. Although, a little bit more discussion would have helped you...

Writing FeedbackTTT3miml - Feb 21, 2024 / Holt - Feb 23, 2024

the importance of Oneness

2 - Better than one? One what? I think you meant to say "Standing as one is better than standing...

Writing Feedbackclyro - Feb 21, 2024 / Holt - Feb 23, 2024

The international community should reduce or eliminate the debts of the world's poorest countries

2 - It is not enough to simply be against the idea presented when developing the Writer's opinion. Review the required...

Writing Feedbackdotranuyennhi - Feb 20, 2024 / Holt - Feb 23, 2024

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people

2 - While the restatement of the topic is aligned with the original discussion, there is a problem with the writer's...

Writing Feedbackcardilua - Feb 20, 2024 / Holt - Feb 22, 2024

There are more workers working from home and more students studying from home

2 - Pick one. You cannot use both in an actual test. This sort of undecided writing will cost you...

Writing FeedbackAyan Nguyen - Feb 19, 2024 / Holt - Feb 22, 2024

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - WORK AND STUDY FROM HOME

2 - The paraphrasing for the original topic is acceptable. The writer understood the writing task as can be seen from...

Writing Feedbackngducng - Feb 17, 2024 / Holt - Feb 22, 2024

Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

2 - You have not met the 250 word count for the presentation. This will be an automatic failing score essay...

Writing Feedbackastu123 - Feb 17, 2024 / Holt - Feb 22, 2024

Ielts writing task 2- animal experimentation

2 - While your essay meets the word requirement of 250 words, and you will avoid penalties based on word count,...

Writing Feedbackgalaxy94 - Feb 16, 2024 / Holt - Feb 22, 2024

IELTS Writing Task 2: Online and traditional classroom

3 - In the conclusion you need to summarize the information that you have analyzed and give your personal opinion about...

Writing FeedbackRandomStudent - Feb 16, 2024 / cardilua - Feb 20, 2024

The graph below gives information on the performance of a train company in October and November

2 - When you mention the type of image, it would be best for your score if you immediately include information...

Writing Feedbackhaminhuynh - Feb 14, 2024 / Holt - Feb 18, 2024

[IELTS TASK 1] Numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after it was refurbished

2 - The most ideal word count for a task 1 essay would be 175 words. That would assure you of...

Writing Feedbacksnackara - Feb 13, 2024 / Holt - Feb 18, 2024

[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] Percentage of households

4 - For the overview: I recommend you to look at the tendency of all keys, you should also be able...

Writing Feedbacksandy21709 - Jan 31, 2024 / caohuyen93 - Feb 18, 2024

Benefit of playing video games. Give reasons and examples

3 - When you write an essay, do not use contractions ( don't) , and after "such as", you do not...

Writing Feedbackannchf - Feb 5, 2024 / caohuyen93 - Feb 18, 2024

Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

3 - The question simple asks you to name and explain some pros and cons of the situation. So you should...

Writing FeedbackErik79 - Feb 6, 2024 / caohuyen93 - Feb 15, 2024

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

5 - Not only indicating the start and the end year, you should also mention the measurement in the introduction, which...

Writing Feedbackmylinh3001 - Jan 20, 2024 / snackara - Feb 13, 2024

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online.

4 - Since this is a single opinion essay, you should concentrate on your opinion. You can consider other sides' arguments,...

Writing FeedbackLouis Tran - Jan 24, 2024 / snackara - Feb 13, 2024

[TASK2] As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. AGREE OR DISAGREE?

3 - Since this is a single opinion essay, you should concentrate in your opinion. You can consider other sides' arguments,...

Writing Feedbackchloepham - Jan 30, 2024 / snackara - Feb 13, 2024

[WRITING IELTS TASK 2] Topic Social

3 - You should paraphrase the topic to improve your LR score. Take the introduction for example: People's reveling in entertainment...

Writing Feedbackmeadow - Feb 7, 2024 / snackara - Feb 13, 2024

Women like shopping, some are even shopping addicted. State your points of view

2 - I am not sure why you are using an unrelated historical viewpoint for this discussion. You are expected to...

Writing Feedbackleanbinh - Feb 8, 2024 / Holt - Feb 9, 2024

A noticeable lack of students opting for science subjects at universities

2 - Your Task Accuracy score will not meet the preliminary passing standards. While you did write a pretty acceptable restatement,...

Writing Feedbackruakahan - Feb 8, 2024 / Holt - Feb 9, 2024

The bar chart below shows the estimated world illiteracy rates for regions and by gender in the past

2 - While you have written more than the required word count to get major scoring points for your presentation, the...

Writing FeedbackMayrie - Feb 6, 2024 / Holt - Feb 9, 2024

Writing task 1 (The process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products)

3 - I suppose that if the task doesn't explicit clearly the number of stages, you should not infer them yourself...

Writing FeedbackNgocmai0311 - Jan 30, 2024 / ruakahan - Feb 7, 2024

As countries progress, there is a trend towards living alone or in smaller family units

2 - A clear question was asked as a part of the writing guide. You are expected to provide a...

Writing Feedbackruakahan - Feb 3, 2024 / Holt - Feb 7, 2024

Gothic story - dont get off the train

2 - A gothic story should engage the senses of the reader from the start. The sense of dread, terror, fear,...

Writing Feedbacksmichalo - Feb 2, 2024 / Holt - Feb 7, 2024

IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Today more people are overweight than ever before...

2 - Do not ever give an attestation to the truthfulness or falsity of the given opinion. That is never...

Writing Feedbackcaohuyen93 - Feb 1, 2024 / Holt - Feb 7, 2024

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty.

2 - One of the major deductions that will be applied to this essay is your lack of proper sentence writing....

Writing Feedbacklunaforthej - Jan 31, 2024 / Holt - Feb 7, 2024

The pictures below show how tea is produced. They also illustrate the process of making a cup of tea

2 - You are well within the word count to receive maximum scoring consideration for each section. Your explanations are coherent...

Writing Feedbackvovietnhatanh17 - Jan 30, 2024 / Holt - Feb 7, 2024

Young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school

2 - Please follow the expected paragraph formatting for the task 2 essay. The proper formatting has 5 sentences in each...

Writing FeedbackGbao1212 - Jan 30, 2024 / Holt - Feb 6, 2024

[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] Average content of sodium, saturated fats and sugar

2 - Indicate the number of pie charts and what each pie chart records as information for the presentation. It...

Writing FeedbackWilliam0809202 - Jan 30, 2024 / Holt - Feb 6, 2024

Ielts writing task 2 - The Antarctic ozone hole

2 - This compressed statement will automatically earn this essay a failing score. You have not correctly identified the number...

Writing Feedbackritazhang - Jan 30, 2024 / Holt - Feb 6, 2024

Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters

2 - There are 2 things you have to bear in mind when developing your task 2 essay. The first is...

Writing Feedbackkvy - Jan 28, 2024 / Holt - Jan 29, 2024

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