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The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments

2 - The reporting of the information is accurate. It is well presented and shows that the image was truly analyzed...

Writing Feedbackthaoly2007 - Jun 3, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
THE VIEWS OF GIVING HOMEWORK TO CHILDREN

2 - This is an incomplete prompt restatement. You cannot just say that you will show the 2 views, you...

Writing Feedbackeirlys - Jun 2, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
Task 2: Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV

2 - An argument is not the same as a belief. The original prompt referred to the belief of some people,...

Writing Feedbacksherrydn - Jun 2, 2024 / Holt - Jun 9, 2024
WRITING PART 1 - PARTICIPATING IN REGULAR ACTIVITIES

2 - Is there a chance that you could write all of this information in a shorter manner during the actual...

Writing Feedbackvananh1009 - Jun 2, 2024 / Holt - Jun 9, 2024
It is important for children to learn the difference thing between right and wrong at an early age.

4 - In your introduction and conclusion, I believe that you should state your opinion and main ideas. In addition, more...

Writing Feedbackktin152 - May 30, 2024 / CTA - Jun 8, 2024
[Writing Task 2] At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively...

3 - I think you should have a topic sentence in your paragraph 1 in clear, and then based on this...

Writing FeedbackTeddyDua123 - Jun 1, 2024 / nhim3607 - Jun 7, 2024
[WRITING TASK 1] The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today.

2 - You cannot complete 266 words in 20 minutes. You have written a task 2 essay in this case. You...

Writing Feedbacktloc354 - Jun 1, 2024 / Holt - Jun 6, 2024
[PART2] In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries

2 - The second paragraph strayed from the comparison discussion. It entered into a government responsibility discussion instead. So you cannot...

Writing Feedbackchloepham - May 31, 2024 / Holt - Jun 6, 2024
Young people today don't give enough time to help their community. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - Your opening sentence is practically a cut and paste of the original statement. You did not alter it enough...

Writing FeedbackNeez - May 30, 2024 / Holt - Jun 6, 2024
advantages and disadvantages of encouraging corporations moving from major cities to regional areas.

2 - You over discussed the essay without actually addressing the discussion topic properly. Therefore, regardless of the content of your...

Writing FeedbackTUV - May 30, 2024 / Holt - Jun 6, 2024
countries should produce food for their populations to eat and import as little as possible

2 - It is not important to the reviewer that you explain why people might support the point of view that...

Writing Feedbackhiuhiu - May 29, 2024 / Holt - Jun 6, 2024
Writing task 1: The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money

3 - there are some errors in your writing such as "an rise" . The overall plays an important part in...

Writing Feedbacklilinhxk - May 27, 2024 / thaoly2007 - Jun 3, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - WASTE OUTPUT

3 - There are some plural errors in your writing as the phrase "both company" should be changed into "both companies"....

Writing Feedbackvananh1009 - May 28, 2024 / thaoly2007 - Jun 3, 2024
WRITING TASK 1: THE DRIVING TEST PASS RATE

4 - there are some spelling errors in your writing. "periodd" and " double" should be rewritten to "period" and "doubled"....

Writing Feedbacktrinhnguyen20304 - May 29, 2024 / thaoly2007 - Jun 3, 2024
IELTS Task 2 - Fast food should be taxed or not? Do you agree or disagree?

3 - Hi I think you repeated the word "impose" many times, try to paraphrase it in different ways...

Writing Feedbackviscaria - May 29, 2024 / vananh1009 - Jun 2, 2024
Some students take a gap year after graduating high school to work and travel. Discuss

3 - The idea and brainstroming very good but i think it too long and not sure you can write this...

Writing Feedbackthuy18181 - May 20, 2024 / Phuonglynnh - Jun 1, 2024
IELTS Task 2 - technology imporoves communication and transport

3 - Hi, I just a student and i can just give you feedback about ideas development, and kinds of that...

Writing Feedbackits_dylan - May 23, 2024 / viscaria - May 29, 2024
In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals as food or other products

2 - There is no need for a measured response in this statement. You are only being asked to agree...

Writing Feedbacknhat1303 - May 24, 2024 / Holt - May 28, 2024
Success: Hard Work Or Luck

2 - Rather than reviewing this as a task 2 essay, I will review it as an English grammar practice essay...

Writing FeedbackOksipyzh2 - May 21, 2024 / Holt - May 27, 2024
Burmese Value and Christian Education

2 - The paragraph is missing vital information that would make it a valid, acceptable, and informative paragraph. You need to...

Writing FeedbackZoro2000 - May 21, 2024 / Holt - May 27, 2024
Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later

2 - I am not sure what you are trying to say with this point of view. What authenticity? The...

Writing FeedbackNghi Nguyen - May 20, 2024 / Holt - May 27, 2024
Rough Draft. Enhancing Critical Thinking online learning environments

2 - You could further develop the content of this paragraph by continuing to explain what activities can be used...

Writing FeedbackVeloz73 - May 19, 2024 / Holt - May 27, 2024
WRITE A PARAGRAPH DESCRIBE DIFFERENT TYPES OF YOUR IDENTITY

2 - There are several problems with your paragraph presentation. The first problem I saw was in the way that you...

Writing Feedbacktiengiang1222 - May 19, 2024 / Holt - May 27, 2024
The proportion of part-time employees in four countries

2 - The summary overview is too short to be an acceptable analytical statement. You need to have at least 3...

Writing Feedbackhuyentrang301 - May 19, 2024 / Holt - May 27, 2024
Global warming - an environmental problem or event

2 - You have an acceptable discussion presentation here. The thought process is clear and you show an understanding of the...

Writing Feedbackgoh masit - May 19, 2024 / Holt - May 27, 2024
folic acid addition to flour

2 - Do not use specialized words in the essay. The main point of the test is to prove that...

Writing FeedbackZablok - May 18, 2024 / Holt - May 27, 2024
It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for youth.

2 - You will receive a higher score if you instead frame your writers opinion as follows: I partly agree...

Writing FeedbackPhAhn - May 18, 2024 / Holt - May 27, 2024
Reading and language skills - WRITING TASK 2 - ACADEMIC

2 - You awre using the incorrect response format. This is not an extent essay so indicating the strength of...

Writing Feedbackqnhu2105 - May 18, 2024 / Holt - May 23, 2024
Pollution problems cause damage to the environment today. Do you think the problem can be solved?

2 - There are several reasons as to why this essay will be given a failing score by the examiner. The...

Writing FeedbackCothaclac - May 17, 2024 / Holt - May 21, 2024
Can rich countries giving money to poor countries solve the poverty problem?

3 - I find your article quite confusing...

Writing Feedbackivyvory - May 5, 2024 / Rosecute2k10 - May 18, 2024
[Writing Task 1] Reasons why people moved to capital city of a particular country

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback!!...

Writing Feedbacknhxinhh - May 16, 2024 / nhxinhh - May 18, 2024
Students should learn all subjects at school, not the ones they like. Do you agree or disagree?

3 - Like Holt said, you should aim to be as close to 250 words as possible. Additionally, you should separate...

Writing FeedbackThao Bui - May 16, 2024 / akmaster101 - May 17, 2024
Development in urbanization - TASK 2 - ACADEMIC

3 - I will recommend proofreading the response multiple times. For example, change "hazzard circumstances" to hazardous circumstances as it is...

Writing Feedbackryan0807 - May 17, 2024 / akmaster101 - May 17, 2024
The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language

2 - The definition of a paragraph is a block of writing comprised of at least 3 sentences. For an English...

Writing Feedbackhoatrongvuonca - May 16, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Many people now like living in the countryside because they think there are many good things there.

2 - The essay has too many words in it. You cannot write more than 300 words during the actual test....

Writing FeedbackRosecute2k10 - May 16, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Write an essay about advantages and disadvantages of the Internet on teenagers in modern life.

2 - You must avoid using Vietnamese words in your English writing. That is not going to help you get a...

Writing FeedbackRosecute2k10 - May 16, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
( WRITING TASK 1 DOUBLE CHARTS) THE NUMBER OF FOREIGN TOURISTS VISITING XCOUNTRY IN 2019 AND 2020:..

2 - The task has too many words written. You might be able to complete this during the actual test, but...

Writing FeedbackCobehocielts - May 15, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
There are more challenges and risks than benefits to new technology.

2 - You weakened your own opinion and evidence presentation in the essay when you agreed in the first reasoning paragraph...

Writing FeedbackNghian - May 14, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
[WRITING TASK 1] The map below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010

2 - This is too formal for the task 1 presentation. Also, you misidentified the drawing. It is a map,...

Writing FeedbackEcec243 - May 13, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
In many countries, people decide to have children at a later age than in the past. Why?

2 - Your writer's opinion presentation is incomplete. You have only answered 1 out of 2 opinion questions. Therefore, your opinion...

Writing Feedbacknpaa11k27 - May 12, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries

2 - For this type of question, you should have used the disproving style of opinion presentation. A discussion based on...

Writing FeedbackNhatquangg - May 12, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later

2 - The writing format for this essay is that of a single opinion presentation. That is why you were asked...

Writing FeedbackSally Soo - May 12, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Some countries have more youngsters than older ones.

2 - Your prompt restatement is improperly presented. The restatement and your opinion should be located in the same paragraph. The...

Writing FeedbackSamiyaSana - May 11, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Research paper regarding AI-generated art

2 - The paragraphs are closing using a citation. It lacks a proper transitional discussion from one paragraph to the next....

Writing Feedbackroonilwazlib13 - May 9, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Asian countries in terms of the proportion of population living in cities - [Ielts cambridge 18]

2 - When you write the summary overview, always remember that you will tend to gain more points when you create...

Writing Feedbackloitoiphoi - May 9, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Cinema attendance : by age group in Great Britain

2 - You have misidentified the image. It is not a diagram. It is a line graph. This error has created...

Writing Feedbackan68 - May 9, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
How can an organization effectively address a major employee relations issue?

2 - Where is the paper that you wrote for editing or comments? We do not write the essays for you...

Writing Feedbacktessabob - May 9, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Women who were employed in four countries - A REPORT DESCRIBING THE INFORMATION

2 - Your efforts in writing this analysis paper is commendable. However, that does not mean that you did it properly....

Writing Feedbacklyblybubliki - May 8, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Students' evaluating teachers

2 - What is missing for your presentation is the comparison point between the public and your personal opinion. For each...

Writing Feedbacknbvietha - May 8, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Some old buildings are more worth preserving than others?

2 - There are 2 main things you have to change when you write your next practice essay. The first thing...

Writing Feedbacklinhohlala - May 7, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
1.Talk about benefits for Viet Nam as a member of international organizations.

4 - You should correct some mistakes. "Joining in different international" -> "Joining different international", "WTO" -> "the WTO", "made easier...

Writing Feedbackhuongthu - May 2, 2024 / Rosecute2k10 - May 16, 2024
Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations.

4 - I think you should only focus on the shouldn't or should side. Choosing both will make your article generate...

Writing Feedbackpnib - Apr 25, 2024 / Rosecute2k10 - May 16, 2024
All university students should do some voluntary work to help the local community

3 - i think your second body paragraph is not really convincing that in my opinion, introverts also should take part...

Writing FeedbackZenpix_loan - Apr 30, 2024 / an68 - May 10, 2024
Information technology is changing many aspects of lives and now dominates our home, leisure, work

2 - Even though you successfully wrote more than 300 words, the essay itself is empty of useful reasoning and convincing...

Writing Feedbackan68 - May 5, 2024 / Holt - May 9, 2024
The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library

2 - This is not really necessary to the discussion. Your previous sentence already informed the reader about the services...

Writing FeedbackTeresa_sssa - May 5, 2024 / Holt - May 9, 2024
Imprisonment is the best solution to crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

3 - I believe that quality assurance is the factor that went missing in your writing process as you have made...

Writing Feedbackchanpu - Apr 17, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 4, 2024
Do you think people in your community are generally happy or unhappy?

3 - You may wish to consider this commonly used structure to improve the organization and quality of your writing: ...

Writing FeedbackRozalin - Apr 25, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 4, 2024
Good ratings for five main fields of a college - IELTS essay

2 - The summary overview should be composed of 2-3 sentences. You provided only 1 sentence. That will result in a...

Writing FeedbackNgo Dang Viet - May 4, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
Some think that the government should support retired people financially.

2 - This sort of essay requires you to present varied justifications in the reasoning paragraphs. You need to support your...

Writing FeedbackLearn2rite - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
Having emotions makes me human -

2 - There are a few errors in grammar here: This should be written as "Why am I crying?"...

Writing Feedbackkleo - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024

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