Writing Feedback / TOEFL ESSAY - PERSISTENCE IS KEY TO SUCCESS - AGREE OR DISAGREE. [NEW]

THE PHRASE NEVER, NEVER GIVE UP MEANS TO KEEP TRYING NEVER STOP WORKING FOR YOUR GOALS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT? SATE YOUR REASONS AND EXAMPLE TO EXPLAIN IT.

"Persistence is key to success" is a phrase that express the importance of continuously chasing our dream. Human being is capable of achieving unachievable heights various inventions, today's developed world is proof of human's capability of wining desired results. Therefore, it can be deemed as fact that human that never gives up by working hard to achieve his goal is real hero. I concur that "Never, never give up" means to keep trying to gain our goals.

By working hard any living being can inadvertently satisfies its several desires and benefits. It inspires them to live life with aim rather than leaving for leaving sake. Many people overcome their fears by repeatedly trying to get acquainted with their fear. So many learn precious tactics to tackle the most difficult situations to survive. For instances, Defense troops on war continue fighting for the benefit of entire country in most severe, devastating condition with limited resources. Similarly human go through consternations to achieve his determinations. A Bollywood movie "3 idiot" is a good example of a poor servant boy that had great desired of educating himself, who emphasized on practical learning. And this zeal of achieving higher education provided him a degree and a business that he never imagined to have.

By continue hitting ourselves to not stop but toil hard develop our stamina and fighting spirit. It motivates us towards our lure. This feeling of achieving that lure keeps the flame of reaching the goal at any cost alive in us. How fascinating it is to see an infant that is so fragile that a simple touch can hurt him. Nevertheless, he learns crawling by hurting, falling and crying. Some exceptional people have set a virtue of fighters by crossing unexpected torments on the way of their goals. For instance - a men and his friend rushed towards the Alaska in 80'S in search of the gold in the inception of "Gold Rush period", he hiked mountains covered with heavy layers of snow, faced lateral storms and lost his friend during his search of gold. But all this predicaments did not demoralized him to continue collecting gold. However, he gathered abundance gold to make his further life better.

No matter what is your background - rich, poor, intelligent or average, everybody has equal chances of winning therefore one must not stop thriving. Thriving habit promise one to take him near his goal and sometime so near that it spectacularly flips all the angles of his life.

Writing Feedback / Toefl Essay - Historical building or new building [3]

SHOULD A CITY TRY TO PRESERVE ITS OLD, HISTORIC BUILDINGS OR DESTROY THEM AND REPLACE THEM WITH MODERN BUILDINGS? USE SPECIFIC REASONS AND EXAMPLES TO SUPPORT YOUR OPINION.

Development in any field indicates sign of progress. Similarly infrastructure of city improves with the development of new buildings and premises. However many argue to retain the old buildings due to its historical importance. It is incomprehensible whether to remove historical buildings by building new ones as both have their distinct benefits and importance. In my opinion, it is better for cities to build new buildings to cop up with the rapidly evolving world.

Firstly, constructing new building would improve over all architecture and infrastructure of the city because modern designs and patterns would be used. For instance Dubai, a well-developed city of opportunities has recently completed construction of World's biggest mall; it has more than 1800 stores to facilitate citizens and visitors, that offer's versatile collection of clothing and International brands. Many restaurants and saloons are also included in the directory of mall. Moreover, it has become must visit place of Dubai for the tourists due to its exquisite features and having its name in Genius book of the world.

Secondly, new building would require low maintenance but provide ancillary facilities require by building owners such as parking, Lifts and escalators rather than staircases. It would also help many international companies to build their offices in the city that would enhance businesses and employment opportunities. Government would earn more revenue due to industrial and corporate developments. Adding to it, residence would get options of purchasing modern and fancy houses. New buildings would have enough parking spaces that will discourage people to park anywhere in the city.

Historical buildings have different aesthetic value but they are difficult to maintain. Also it would require healthy sum of money periodically. On the other hand, new buildings would have all numerous hi tech facilities at the cost of less efforts and resources to maintain it.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay - Media invading public figures privacy. [3]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspaper, magazines and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figure and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

News that can be define as" north east west south" provides happening of all these four zones of the world. It is imperative to know about the world and latest happening of it. Previously news were telecasted by limited channels, however today many channels are available that unveils lot of information about world as well as celebrities and public figures. In my opinion, these new channels indeed spread awareness about the prominent figures in the public, nevertheless they must limit it to providing superficial information rather than publishing bit and piece of their life.

Firstly, many news channels currently televised news that are more about celebrities' personal life then critical matters of the world. These channels do so to gain publicity and viewers that give them attractive sum of billing. Although invading in anyone's personal life is not tolerable. Unfortunately public personalities cannot avoid media's invading attitude in their personal life. For example - Recently a Bollywood actor was going through a devastating phase of his life "Divorce". Anybody would require tranquil environment to come out of such trauma. But Indian channels didn't missed any chance to reach to the root of his divorce and fallowed him diligently. Also it fetch news channels an effortless news for months.

Secondly, few channels are specifically designed for delivering celebrities news. For instance Zoom (Indian channels) and U S weekly (USA's magazine), these channels attracts many follower. They are made to provide entertainment news to the crowd that include news of celebrities fashion lines, style, personal and professional life, with numbers of photographs. To quote an instance - US weekly televise new of celebrities fashion preferences, marriage and even family planning. By fallowing these news people tries to imitate public figures life style. It also aspires many to consider the profession of their favorite celebrity.

In order to make abundance profit and earning publicity these channels expose prominent people's life to public. And every part of these public figures life becomes matter of entertainment for the world. Everybody has right to leave life peacefully and privately as a human- public, media and also celebrities.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay - AGREE OR DISAGREE - ONE LONG VACATION OR SEVERAL LONG VACATION. [6]

Some people believe that students should be given one long vocation each year. Other believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Everybody require some break from their tight schedules likewise students also require vocation form their intense academic schedules. Many people promote one long vocation system of the school because it would help student to start their course or academic year with strong zeal of learning. So other several, prefer numbers of short breaks during the year so that student can get rejuvenate periodically. In both the scenario students relief themselves. However, i discern that several small breaks will help students to be active in their academics.

Firstly, several vocations throughout the year will keep stress level of students low. Many educational bodies schedule its small vocations after term exams so that student's get relief form exam pressure. However, research done by universities proves that student's performance improves if they get regular breaks from their learning, preparation and examination schedule. Many colleges in foreign countries provide vocations to students after each semester that facilitate student to entertain themselves as well as prepare for their next semester. Also several holidays aid these students to not only amuse themselves but also arrange fund and materials such as books and references material for their upcoming course.

Secondly, scientific research provide several authentic survey of the students' performance after break. It states that students learning capability increase after having refreshing vocation. To quote an instance, in my school we used to get several vocations after our quarterly exams. During those vocations i used to analyze my performance in latest examination and used to go through those question or concept again to avoid making same mistakes. I also used to spend my time on developing some recreational activity or learning some sports or game. During my all vocations, I used to miss my school due to which I used to restart my session with great enthusiasm of learning and scoring good marks in new quarter.

Vocations are not only required by students but also by professionals and housekeepers. As it not only provide break to them from their regular commitment but also allows them to spend some time on themselves, heel stressful mind and boost desire of resuming to the regular schedule. Therefore schools should consider giving several small vocations to the students during the year.

Writing Feedback / Toefl - Differences between parents' generation and our generation. [5]

Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

"Every generation is smarter than the last one" is self-explanatory phrase in itself. Every generation give something new to the world, our parents' generation offered our generation the understanding of valuing love and humanity, a better version of science and technology, several inventions - e.g luxurious automobiles, organic food and computers. All these contribution by them presented our generation adequate world to live in. However, our generation is level above then theirs because we have better resources and platforms to make our generation better in all the ways.

If we talk about their contribution to humankind, the list would never end. The first and foremost contribution of our parents' generation is, they kept our historical and religious value fresh and acknowledged us about aspects of it. To quote an instance - Across the globe, parents of all religion would be teaching their children the ritual, custom and value fallowed by them in their RELIGION. On the other hand, today's generation is more focused in their advancement then keeping these religious faith and rituals in its ideal form. My grand - father used to offer prayer to god twice in a day and we on the flip side offer our prayer to god once in a week. As it said our family and custom is our identity, in todays' accelerating world our parents generation's this gift is not well taken care by our generation.

On the advancement side, it would be unfair to compare two generation as both of them would have their distinct share in building their generation remarkably well. Our parents' generation invented Mobile phone, which further had been advanced by our generation into smart phones. This incredible difference could be well experienced by people that have used Nokia 3310 and 3315 and now probably using Iphone. Our parents enrolled us in computer institutions to learn computers, we invented hi tech laptops and I - Pads that is merely small in size, but has all features of providing information about all current and previous generations. Further, the enhancement of world will flourished even better by next generations as it is unstoppable.

All - embracing inventions, values and rituals, lessons and experiences of our parents' generation have given us already built empire to make it best for our generation. As it is said change is disliked by many, yet that change is necessary to make the difference, I am glad that my generation invented many significant change to make the difference in the lives of humankind.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL -You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. [5]

Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
( I found this prompt little unsuitable for essay writing, However as i found it in one of the practicing site i am writing essay on this topic)

Globalization has brought countries of the world nearer to each other. Off late people use to commute places for commerce and trade that triggered industrial revolution and ignited the zeal of seeing other countries. This fashion started by Industrial revolutionaries allowed people to travel world for amusement and increasing their knowledge about the world. With the same will i would like to visit India.

Firstly, my parents and relatives are settle in Gujarat state of India. That serves me a very good reason to visit India and with increasing obligations of life i gets rare opportunity to see them. I desire to meet them and have some quality time with my siblings. With them I can travel several cities of Gujarat such as Surat, Ghandinagar and Ahmedabad to see various historical museum and Hindu temples. I precisely wants to visit Gandhi ashram constructed in honor of legendary freedom fighter of India - Mohandas karmchand Gandhi. This museum has various utensils, handmade thread processing machineries used by him. Gujarat's Gir forest is one of the prominent sanctuary of the India, I would like to view Lions from as near as it is possible. This species of lions roams in terrain provided to them by Gujarat Government. My visit to India will allow me to browse Gujarat state with my few family members who are residing in India.

Secondly, I have not seen even major places of India hence I would first like to see India. I have heard that India is been deemed as "Golden bird" therefore I want to find out what made primitive people to give this title to today's under developing country India. However India's unduly affluence is quit conspicuous from their wide range of culture as such I would like to see northern and southern states of India. I'll start from Jammu and Kashmir and end my journey at Mahabaleshwar. Although I will not able to see all the places of India due to lack of time, nevertheless i would get idea about mythology, history and creed and belief of the Indian populace.

Travelling other place for any reason gives us an opportunity to gain insight about the world. Also allows us to connect with our other brothers and sisters in different hemisphere of the earth. I discern before trying to know about other planets and life possibility in there, we must explore our world first, therefore i would start my travel to see the world form country INDIA.

Writing Feedback / Toefl - a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to ado [4]

Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples.

Globally myriad customs are fallowed by people and it holds essential value in their lives. Customs inadvertently has become identity of various nations. Many countries shares similar custom, so other few countries has distinct custom. Similarly India is a country where people highly believe in their customs and rituals and there are few that can be adopted by other counties. My explanation on the same will be presented in my essay further.

In India, aged people stays with their families and their kids pleasantly takes the honor of taking care of their parents. This custom facilitate elders to receive best care, love and affection of their family reciprocating the same to their children and grand kids. Unlike in USA, parents are not left alone to fight with their serenity at their last stage of life. My grand - mother -in -law was bed ridden for more than five years due to her paralysis still she was taken care by me and my mother -in- law until she died. If our parents endure immense predicament to raise us, we must not leave them alone when they have given us their every treasure and in return demanding merely love form us. Delivering good care and living with our parents gives us immense pleasure of humanity.

Secondly Marriage and other alike ceremonies are performed with historically suggested religious procedure. Although it sounds a way over - boarding and out - dated but true essence of Indian culture and beliefs can be cherished and relived in these ceremonies. This custom of ceremonies also unites extended and nearby families and folks. To quote an instance - in my brother's wedding we invited his Russian friend with his family, he tried to be part of all the rituals that groom party has to perform. He liked the custom of bride's mother and family welcoming groom and his family with blessing and prayers. He specifically performed this ritual in his wedding back in Russia to involve his step mother - in -law in his wedding more as family and not as guest. Indian ceremonies and occasion prompt people to forget their grievances and get associate as family.

People around the world accept beneficial changes with full heart. Globalization has connected populace of many countries likewise adaptation of each other's advantageous culture can help us build better compatibility with each other. India's above mention customs can indeed help people to be connected with their parents entire their life and keep their roots alive through religiously performed ceremonies.

Writing Feedback / Toefl - Do you agree or disagree? "The most important thing about a job is how much money [5]

Do you agree or disagree? "The most important thing about a job is how much money you earn in that job."

Almost everybody want to have good salaried job and they should, finance is a prime factor for which we work. Handsome digit salary is required to pay our bill and secure our future. But monetary gain has not outweighed other emotional and personal benefits which are required along with it. Further in my essay I will be appending my elucidation on importance of other factors with receiving salary for an employee.

There are various job profile that provide high salary but not necessarily promise growth to the worker. In order to increase their bank balance, they sabotage their future prospect. Many companies has promotional graph designed with its criteria that helps you to gain promotion as well as increment but not necessarily offer you job responsibilities or profile that you would enjoy performing. To quote an instance - one of my husband's engineer friend changed his job that gave him good position and package but unfortunately he find himself learning nothing in new job and concurred that good salary can be earned but not at the cost of limited career growth.

Secondly, it is equally imperative to be satisfied with your job as it is to earn attractive income. Job - satisfaction involve many factors such as work - environment, work - place, team support and other similar perks. By paying healthy amount to worker many companies demand their so much time that they do not get time to have their meals. Similarly you do not get better support team to take over your task and meet the target but you ought to accomplish it as you take good portion of companies' money. My brother did not got leave to offer his prayer in my grandmother's death ceremony despite pleading and promising to meet the goal in time.

Money can get us food and fashion but it is definitely not capable to buy us success and happiness. Money is essential but not everything in life. Our motive to earn money is to make our life luxurious but not restricted.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL ESSAY - Short stories are preferred more than movies,explain your position. [7]

Short stories are more enjoyable than watching movies. Use specific reasons and examples to explain
There are myriad options available currently to entertain ourselves but watching movies are most popular option among all. Similarly many short stories are also available to read for amusement. Nevertheless of these available options their expectance by populace varies, short stories are more popular among growing kids, so movies are enjoyed by all age beings. In many way both have their distinct importance.

Theater and movies have evolved phenomenally in recent years therefore it has gained enormous publicity. Movies are liked by people for several reasons for instance a script's dialogues and characters are played by mortal actor or actresses. It is apparently realistic colorful and bright. People adopt many fashion and trend shown in these movies, to quote an instance - Bell -bottom pants become most preferred by people in 80's as many actresses in 80's were seen cladding themselves in pair of that style pants. Movies are more thrilling with incredible special and visual effects, action, and drama that makes them more captivating. Adding to it, currently available technology has modernized movie industry as a result of it many categories of movies like animated movies and si- fi movies are also produced and seen by infinite numbers of people globally.

On the other hand, story books are indeed a very good source of awareness and entertainment but it has secure its audience till school going kids. On its merit side, it is used most for informing children about basic social information for instance - A team of fire - brigade with their truck has been called to one of the kindergarten in our vicinity for presenting demo on fire extinguishing in order to informing kids about it. Although it has been used widely by leaners but it is considered boring by grown-ups. Besides reading books are generally avoided by working and elderly people - my mother -in-law sleeps many time while reciting bed time stories to my kid. It require attention and concentration to grasp the content of it, on the other hand it is easy to connect with ongoing movies. It can be seen anywhere in theaters as well as home with some crispy snacks.

Reading stories were good mean of amusement in primitive days. However it has still kept it presence alive in specific age group. Also it is undeniable that currently movies are ruling everybody's hearts in all the ways.

Writing Feedback / My father wanted doctor profession for me; subject without opportunity to study [5]

If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.

Students chooses subject to study as per their interest or on the basis of scope course has after pursuing it. But all of those student desire to study a special subject that they are not able to learn alike our several underachieved goals and hobbies. Similarly, if given a chance I would like to study medial stream, as my family always wanted me to be doctor.

My father always wanted me consider doctor profession that something enlightens desire of studying medical course but my choice contracted by my learning Management. My father wanted to provide me and my sibling higher education to secure our future. He always emphasized on getting better education more than achieving materialized wishes. Despite every family members protest against educating daughters, he served us with best possible facilities, life and education. He wanted us to be indifferent then other alike him. To fulfill his desire of me earning doctor's degree I would like to study Medical course.

I have studied management as per my interest although i somewhere was in quandary about my choice of subject. I would wish to learn medical course to set an example in my family for growing cousins. To earn fame and name in my society. To experience that fascinating wish of operating people and saving their lives. After being growing big to maturity level I realized, how pleasurable and noble profession is of doctors. As it is said "many are wonderful creations of god but none alike human"- an imagination of saving a life created by god boost me to study it doctors course at once. One of my friend is a very good example of fulfilling his desire of studying course relevant to medical - despite being form management field she studied Nursing as she did not get admission in medical college after her 12th grade due to low mark.

Everybody has their situations and limitations to choose their career, some chooses certain realm because of its great job opportunities and financial gain, so other some are forced to do so. All profession are best as far as it interests you and can be successful in that.

Writing Feedback / Government budgets should be spent on public transportation or road and highways - Toefl [5]

Transportation means have indeed made world smaller. Good transportation facilitate easy and convenient travel. When matter is of transportation condition of platforms wherein these means of transportation are used are equally important that's why government should allot budget to maintain roads and highways. However myriad transportation means are available, but among all of them buses, trains and subways have earned more popularity among common men for several reasons as such government must spend money on improving public transportation. Further, I will be appending my views on the reasons of spending money on development of public transportation.

Buses,trains and subways are economical mean of transportation for all income group people therefore maintaining them is essential. Currently in blustering cities like Mumbai and New York, people are highly depend on subways, buses and trains for commuting. Besides accelerating inflation has highly affected the fare of all means of transportation. In such a scenario small pockets cannot afford air ways fare therefore to facilitate lower to higher - middle class people government must keep public transportation highly functional. It also help tourist who come to see a new country. Train can connect two zone of country in few hours that makes it most demanding by the populace. Having effective public transportation can deemed as asset of any country as it is for the benefit of public.

Secondly, Public transportation is used maximum world wide. Entire city would be depended on this for minor to major purpose like this transportation help many business to deliver goods in time at minimal rates and mails and posts are delivered by the use of trains. Public transportation fetch need of government as well as civilians. In city like Mumbai, student to vice president of any company would not hesitate to travel in local train or subway due to heavy traffic on the roads, which delay their arrival at desired destination. Seemingly, facilities are their but due to the improper management and use of road and highways, their usage is avoided. Government must also implement strict rules to using public transportation for safety purpose.

Buses and other automobiles are highly depended on roads and highways as such government must not ignore their effect on transportation. Roads and highways should be maintain or renovate time to time for smooth travel. As preferences of people include use of roads as well as public transportation, it is imperative to keep them in appropriate condition.

Government must divide its budget considering preferences of all income group people and growth of country, but daily used facilities must get higher priorities as such I discern that government should spend money on maintaining public transport.