Writing Feedback / IELTS The table depicts the average distance in miles traveled by mode of travel per person per year [2]

changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000

The table depicts the average distance in miles traveled by mode of travel per person per year.
Overall, it can be seen that cars traveled the most miles in both 1985 and 2000, while the least miles traveled by people are taxis and bicycles in 1985 and 2000 respectively. It should also be noted that the biggest increase in travel distance is the car and the biggest decrease is the local bus.

With regards to the highest and lowest number of miles traveled, cars are driven about 3,200 miles and 4,800 miles per person between 1985 and 2000, whereas in 1985 taxi are traveled by each person for about 13 miles and in 2000 bicycles are traveled by each people for only 41 miles. Besides, per person took trains for travel about 300 miles in 1985 and trains traveled about 360 miles by each person in 2000.

When considering the changes of miles that each mode was used to travel, each person drove cars 1,200 more miles in one year, while local buses experienced a 160 miles decrease from 1985 to 2000.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS1- the forecast increase in world oil production [3]

production of the world's oil

The chart depicts the forecast increase in world oil production. Overall, it can be seen that the barrels of oil were produced the most from Non-OPEC and OPEC Middle East respectively in two periods, while OPEC Middle East is expected to produce the most barrels of oil from 2010 to 2020. It should also be noticed that the total production of gas increased from 1980 to 2010, whereas it is expected to experience a slight decrease over the next 10-year period.

In the context of the highest oil production over the period, Non-OPEC produced approximately 7 million barrels of oil from 1980 to 2000 and 8 million barrels of oil were produced from OPEC Middle East, while it is expected that OPEC Middle East will produce 17 million barrels from 2010 to 2020.

When considering the total number of oil barrels, during the first 20-year period it is about 12 million and increased by 50% to 18 million between 2000 and 2010, while the total production is expected to decrease slightly by 5% to 17 million barrels from 2010 to 2020.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS2- READING BOOKS VS COMPUTER & TV [2]

reading more profitable than spending time by the screen

Some people think reading stories in books is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that whether the benefits of spending times on books outweigh those of using computers or TV for entertainment. Although the latter has positive effects on children, I believe that distributing more time on reading is better-off to them.

Watching TV and play computers are always attractive because of their various content. On TV, many programs on different topics enable children to choose their most favorite ones. Boys prefer topics about a robot, while girls like to watch programs about cooking. Computer games also provide huge choices such as car racing and gunfight. Besides, TV can deliver knowledge faster than reading, since it can quickly update recent news and broadcasts to everyone around the world.

However, I strongly prefer a child to read in several reasons. First, children spend too much time watching electronic devices, causing the age of serious shortsighted children going down each year. When they grew up, it will even become a serious health issue that may cause them blind. Second, finishing a whole story takes hours, helping the children to develop their brain ability such as memorizing knowledge and interpreting complex information. The early-developed skills help them to outperform people in same ages on the context of career development. According to recent studies, scientists find out that the earlier people read, the greater the possibility of they succeed in work.

In conclusion, I believe that encouraging people in their early ages to read stories helps them to have a well-developed brain status and avoid the dependent on TV or computers.

Writing Feedback / IELTS2- problem/solution essay: Not enough students choose science subjects in universities [3]

the popularity of science at schools

Not enough students choose science subjects in universities in many countries. What are the reasons and what are the effects on society?

In many nations, few students select subjects of science as their major in college. The main reasons are likely to be lack of interest or stereotype of a narrow career path, causing the companies hard to find employees with science-related skills.

Since science subject requires heavy calculations, the lack of related training before college make students often fail on such science-related subjects as math and physics, discouraging their confidence in such subjects. Therefore, a lack of confidence is easy to lead to lack of interest, causing them to choose other subjects that include fewer calculations. Also, the career path of science is often connected to research jobs, which spent a lot of time working and was paid less. Unlike other industries like businesses, science will not be the first choice for high school graduates.

However, many companies require people with strong analytical skills to conduct quantitative projects like how many new facilities need to be built or the forecast for next year earnings. Lacking this kind of professions make the enterprises hard to come up with plans, causing them the risk of failure. According to recent studies, it is told that quantitative analysis can help companies to have a more accurate forecast of the future, leading 50% less risk of going bankrupt.

In conclusion, I think that schools should increase more practice of calculations and correct the misunderstanding of the science career path so that companies may have a brighter future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS1- table (five countries): consumer spending on different items / products [2]

putting in money into products in different categories

The diagram illustrates the percentage of consumers' cost on various products from five European nations.

Citizens of all researched countries spent the most on the category of foods, drinks, and tobacco. Among the five nations, the three categories together account the most percentage of cost in Turkey.

In each country, people spend more on foods; drinks; and tobacco than the other two categories of the product combined. In Ireland and Turkey, foods; drinks; and tobacco cost people nearly 30% or more money. Even in the rest of the countries, the three items still account for nearly 15% to 19% of their fortune.

For the category of clothing and footwear, all of the countries spent around 5 to 10 percent of the wealth, while consumers from the five nations are only willing to spend around 3%-4% on education and leisure. On the other hand, citizens from Turkey use more than 40% of their money on these three types of products, while Ireland spent about 36% on them.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS2- two-part question: do the role of a mother differ in some ways from the role of a father? [3]

Similarities Between the Parent Functions

In some countries, the role of a mother differs in some ways from the role of a father. Why do you think these differences exist? How might parental roles develop in the future?

It is argued in several nations that moms act whole differently as opposed to dads. While several reasons contribute to this kind of difference between parents, I believe that the roles fathers and mothers would function more similarly.

There are several reasons why parents act so differently in the context of kids. Firstly, fathers spent little time with kids than mothers do because his character in a family is to work and earn money. Therefore, dads tend not to get familiar with children' daily lives, while moms take care of almost everything related to them such as their birthday and school's name. Secondly, the ways parents talk to their offspring also differed in certain aspects. Fathers often speak straightforward to children, while mothers choose their words wisely to prevent hurting children' heart.

However, the difference between the parents' role is narrowing due to some cultural factors. Since the 1990s, women have begun to participate more in the work field instead of staying at home fostering son and daughter, making the time parents spent with children come closer. Furthermore, the advocate of gender equality would encourage dads to do a task which moms have been doing for the past century. For example, my mother was always the one making sure I finished homework when I was little, while recently my dad started to ask about my scores of midterm test.

In conclusion, although several factors contribute to the difference in parents' teaching to children, I strongly believe that the gap will become much less apparent in the future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS2- opinion type: do companies have social responsibilities? [2]

As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

service for society

It is argued that enterprises need to not only earn money but also be responsible for social contribution. I strongly agree with the idea that businesses have to do more for society than making money only.

On the one hand, companies must collect money by selling their products since the earnings are supporting thousands of people, including employees and their families. Furthermore, to account for a bigger share of the market, it is essential for them to spend a lot of money on an advertisement of service, discounts on newly-introduced items, and an expansion on their production line. For example, Nike used to sell their product only in the United States and accumulate a great amount of fortune. It was not until a bigger demand required all around the world that Nike has spent a lot increasing their factories in Asia, Europe, and Africa, making them the biggest sports companies.

On the other hand, being responsible for society may have a positive effect on enterprises. The selfless contribution to people can attract their attention, leaving a good impression on this kind of action from profitable companies. The reputation built from consumers may lead them willing to buy products and help companies to earn more for further investment on scales. According to a recent study, it is found that once a business goes through volunteer service to the neighborhood, the profit will increase by about 20%.

In conclusion, I believe that besides maximizing profits, companies have to service for society's good.

Writing Feedback / IELTS1 - the amount of electricity produced by different fuels in Australia and France [3]

IELTS1- pie chart compare

The diagrams illustrate the amount of electricity produced by different fuels in Australia and France beginning from 1980 to 2000.

It is obvious that both countries experienced a huge increase in the production of electricity. In Australia, coal stood a vital percentage in producing electricity while in France nuclear power accounted for the highest percentage in 2000.

The total production of electricity increased by 70% percent to 170 units in Australia over two separate years while the amount in France doubled to 180 units from 1980 to 2000. Comparing the total production between Australia and France, we can find that France produced less electricity than Australia in 1980 but outnumbered it 20 years later.

Throughout the 20-year period in Australia, coal ranked the first on the contribution to produce electricity for more than 50%, while unclear power ranked second to account for about around 20%. In France, coal and natural gas contributed the most to electricity production in 1980 but nuclear power took first place in 2000, amounting to nearly 70%.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS2- the pursuit of student working or traveling in a gap year [2]

gap year effects

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

In recent years, more and more teenagers preferred to having a gap year between the time of high school and college. The essay will then discuss the positive and negative aspects of this kind of choice.

There are many advantages for youngsters to choose a gap year in two aspects. First of all, by traveling around the world, they have the chance to broaden their horizon, meeting different people from various professions and exchanging ideas and thoughts with them. Through more interaction with people, they have the chance to form a new perspective to the world, respecting different nations, religion, and races. Secondly, participating in work field may help the teenagers to find out which industries were much more appropriate to them instead of majoring in a subject they later find out boring.

On the other hand, there will always be disadvantages along with advantages. Since teenagers have no plan on what goal they want to accomplish during the gap year, they end up wasting their time staying at home, playing computer games or doing things without a purpose. Additionally, a lack of studying during gap year may make it hard for them to catch up with the speed of university studies after returning to the education system, resulting in a lack of skills required for work after graduation.

In conclusion, the pursuit of working or traveling in a gap year may be beneficial to teenagers already having plans to broaden their horizons or find a suitable career path. On the contrary, it may be no good for teenagers having no idea what they are planning to do.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS1- household owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011 [3]

properties rented vs bought

The chart compares the percentages of properties rented with properties bought by people from England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

In more detail, it can be found that during the first 40 years the household owned by people outnumbered the household rented considerably. However, as time moved on, the gap between these two data narrowed until 1971 when both of them equaled.

During the last 50 years, as shown in the chart, the number of properties rented went to skyrocket to a record high of nearly 70 percent, doubling the number of houses bought, and, on the other hand, the number of properties bought went low by more than 10 percent to approximately 30 percent.

All in all, the data shows that the percentage of household rented by people increased from the beginning of the chart to the end. On the contrary, the other one presented an unstoppable decline during the whole 50 years.

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Writing Feedback / It is disputed whether parents of overweight kids should be blamed on causing offspring to be obese [5]

Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat.

Do you agree or disagree?

It is disputed that whether parents of overweight kids should be blamed on causing offspring obese. The passage totally disagrees the statement since kids are responsible for their own healthy and since obesity may occur due to genetic factors.

First, it is possible that genetic factors may be attributed to the overweight of children. Since the infant was born, the cells of overweight infant may tend to be more likely than those of normal one to absorb nutrition, causing more fat to accumulate in its body. Even though parents provide enough food, the children still tend to be obese. According to recent research, it is found that an abnormal cell from child absorbs 30% more fat than normal one on the condition that both children consume same amount of food.

Second, children should be the one who take responsibility for their health since parents can't always be present with them. When kids are at school or go on a trip with friends, there is a great chance that they consume more junk food and beverages than they usually do and, as a result, become obesity due to too much fat received. Also, the recent theory studied by nutritionists has revealed that children tend to spend 80% of their money on food, especially junk food, and drinks.

In conclusion, parents should not be punished for causing overweight kids since the cause of obesity to children may be contributed to kids' not taking good care of their own health or some genetic factors.

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