Undergraduate / Skidmore's supplemental essay: Passion for Skidmore's International... [15]

Prompt: In brief, why do you feel that Skidmore is a good match for your academic and personal goals? (700 characters)

Well tell me if it works well. This college is one of my top choices and definitely want to make a good impression. *I am applying ED for this college.

Because Skidmore is the next stop in my life road map. Skidmore appeals to me not only because of the brilliant faculty who would teach me there but also because it will allow my curious mind to explore new horizons in this wild world full of independent minds. Because I will have the opportunity to discuss "Don Quixote" by Miguel de Cervantes Saavedra with Professor Burton and learn about "Plato's Dialectical Method" from Professor Gonzalez. With the help of Skidmore's community I will not only learn a great variety of languages and cultures, but also experiment these cultures through the International Affairs' study abroad programs. I desire to learn and work as fast and effectively as a Thoroughbred!

Undergraduate / BU three words: My dwarf name. [4]

Prompt I: In an essay of no more than 500 words, please select three words that describe you best and tell us how you will use these qualities/characteristics to contribute fully to the BU community.

Do you think it sounds good? What is your impression of me? Also try to find any grammatical problems or anything. Thank you so much. =) I will comment back.

Four years old, I was lying in bed when my mom was teaching me to read the fairytale "Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs" by the Grimm brothers. I was amazed by the characters' actions of and reactions to certain events. A few months later my mom rented the movie of this fantastic fairytale; I found that in contrast of the real story, the dwarfs in the movie are named like how they act throughout the story.

Since then I have tried to find my "dwarf name." I have always been called different names because of my physical and mental characteristics: from "Güero" (white kid) to "Astutin" (ingenious boy.) I have been described in an infinite number of ways by my friends, teachers, and family. But after many years I have realized that the most used by these people are...

Assertive. I am a go-getter and a confident young man; I am committed to what I do and what I think, but I hope I also seem respectful to others' decisions and open to their thoughts. My mom says I often use the phrase "I know..." in place of what most people say: "I think"; she says that I usually answer others' questions.

Creative. All my actions come wrapped with creativity; whether I am playing my guitar and composing melodic songs, talking about political issues with my family and teachers and coming with unsurpassed arguments, or just playing with my dogs and creating new games to play with them. For example, "Tus Chances" (Your Chances) is a game I created in which my dogs must run and tap six bases hidden in my garden and surrounded by obstacles and distractions like fences and toys as fast as possible in order to obtain one cookie each, but if one of them does not finish I give two cookies to the other.

Charismatic. Although I am a great leader-something I love to be-I hate to be the center of attention because people look at me different. They look at me with great enthusiasm at the time I am talking and as my parents, they want me to act in certain way sometimes is not my desire to act. But it is also pleasurable when my six-years-old cousin, Kevin, says to me "I wanna be like you" when I am tutoring him math; it not only makes me cry for joy (because I love him), but also inspires me to overcome any obstacle and succeed in anything I do.

After all I do not have a "dwarf name" because I cannot be described in one word. However, these three words describe my persona-a leader, a collaborator, and a friend-pretty well. With my assertiveness, creativity, and charisma, I have made an impact in my community and I know I will strength my colleagues' leadership, inspire them to make innovative contributions to our future community, and we all make our time at Boston University joyful.

The facts that Boston University is both a place to be and a place to act are what have motivated me to apply. Boston University offers me not only incredible and rigorous programs of study, but also the opportunity to work and excel in life during and after your education at BU; I would have both brilliant faculty to guide me through my way to succeed and the BU Bridge to admire every night.

Known as a magnet to students, Boston University is my place to be because of its diversity and opportunities; I am from Mexico and I would be another student at BU; I could major in International Relations and work in the "capital" of New England. I can aspire to not only study Spanish, the cultures that move alongside with this Romantic language or the relations between countries, but also study abroad in Spain. I believe that instructed by Boston University faculty I will transform from a multi-cultural student into a multi-cultural "doer." I want to be a terrier and presume my guitar's strings: E, A, D, G, B, E (Everyone is Eager and Desirous to Graduate from BU Each year!)

I don't know if I should eliminate the last part, what do you think? Help me as much as you can!! Thanks guys.

Undergraduate / Stanford essay: Don Quixote... HELP [4]

The prompt is about the intellectual vitality of Stanford's students. What do you think.? Is it good, bad, horrible? Look for anything please...Any feedback is more than welcomed... Thanks guys...+)

I was fourteen years old when I first read "The Ingenious Hidalgo Don Quixote de la Mancha" by Miguel de Cervantes Saavedra and I change since then. I have always been an active learner in arts and cultures; I learn in a daily basis. I have learned music to show my passions through it, and I have learned to read (in English and Spanish) to understand archaic books because of my desire to learn about the past in order to know about the present.

After rereading "The Quixote" in English, I come to know, in my seventeenth year of life, that I am a rookie in the game of knowledge, however, I know the basic principle of the game-there is no rule in this game because I decide what and how I want to learn. And as I have learned about Cervantes, his passions, and his thoughts, I realized that languages are what I want to learn about; not only because if masterly used, languages allow to alter facts, as seen in politics, but because one way or another languages will help me achieve my aspirations to become a multi-lingual and multi-cultural lawyer.

"Is Don Quixote crazy?" my brother asked me when reading Cervantes-a master of the Spanish language-lying on the brown carpet of my bedroom. I replied "Is he?" No answer. No rational individual is able to define insanity in a sentence just as no individual is able to be sure of being right or being wrong about any matter.

In this masterful piece of literature, I aimed to fetch the possible reason to believe that this was the best book written in the Spanish language. Fortunately, I found it. It is...the fact that you have options, you decide what you want to believe. Thus, it is unwise to let someone to tell you should to believe in; as my mother told me once: "If you need to believe in something that is not your desire to believe, but others, you will never reach the sky." "What is that I should believe in then?" Myself.

Undergraduate / 'Exploring writers' - Stanford-A Good place-Why? [7]

Prompt: Tell us what makes Stanford a great place for you.

Stanford. Usually pronounced by people as [stan-ferd] yet all I hear is Xanadu: A place to live, to learn, to teach, to fetch, to be. It is the paradise for the intellectual, but also the paradise for the athlete and the artist. Stanford is often associated with students that are Smart, Tenacious, Ambitious, Natural, Frolic, Out-going, Resourceful, and Diverse. Typical adjectives people find in me as well.

My great aspiration, my ambition, is to study Law. I have been always motivated by the basis of our society-laws. However, my passion still rests on my language and its history. And through the intense curriculum that Stanford offers the students seeking the opportunity to study this Romantic language, I believe I will excel in this majestic school to later enroll in Law School. I am eager to obtain this opportunity and to know more about my culture and other cultures as well.

Since I learned to read and write in this marvelous language, I have been willing to know more about it. I have enthusiasm myself to know its origin, its history in different countries, and the best writers of this language. Writers mean to me the Spanish language itself because they are who have made this language beautiful and exotic through their works. Writers like Miguel de Cervantes, Sor Juana Ines de la Cruz, Octavio Paz, and Pablo Neruda are examples of the Spanish language.

In Stanford I am willing to explore these and more writers. Thus, I am willing to learn about other languages' writers as well. This is the 21st century: a century in which you need to explore the world and its diversity, and Stanford is the school of the 21st century.

I need feedbakc with what I have right now. Any suggestions about it. Any comments.
This essay is pretty hard for me at this moment. I am tired, so please help me and I'll try to help you as much as I can. =)