Strawberry78
Dec 28, 2011
Undergraduate / Becoming a smarter person it's a natural part of growing up - Stanford; Intellectual Development [6]
Try to take out any negativity or putting down of yourself and try to turn it into a reflective realization. Such as Honestly, this made me a little jealous and frustrated mainly because I knew I could do as well as them, but I had nothing to show for. That revelation changed me radically . Try changing to Seeing their success made me realize that I wanted to change my ways to have a future like them or a variation of that. And also take out despite a crumbling economy and less than stellar job prospects . It is irrelevant to your essay. You can use that space to elaborate more on your realization. Try changing But she didn't help me with solving physics problems- she helped me with thinking critically to My teacher's efforts to help me think critically, not only helped me achieve my sought after A's, but also helped me become a smarter, more disciplined individual. Also elaborate on how you achieved those A's and better test scores. Did you spend hours studying after your tutoring sessions? Did you decide to pay more attention in class or so on? Hope this helps.
Try to take out any negativity or putting down of yourself and try to turn it into a reflective realization. Such as Honestly, this made me a little jealous and frustrated mainly because I knew I could do as well as them, but I had nothing to show for. That revelation changed me radically . Try changing to Seeing their success made me realize that I wanted to change my ways to have a future like them or a variation of that. And also take out despite a crumbling economy and less than stellar job prospects . It is irrelevant to your essay. You can use that space to elaborate more on your realization. Try changing But she didn't help me with solving physics problems- she helped me with thinking critically to My teacher's efforts to help me think critically, not only helped me achieve my sought after A's, but also helped me become a smarter, more disciplined individual. Also elaborate on how you achieved those A's and better test scores. Did you spend hours studying after your tutoring sessions? Did you decide to pay more attention in class or so on? Hope this helps.