Writing Feedback / IELTS: multinational companies are supporting our life, in lieu of ruining it. [2]

In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important.
This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life.
Do you agree or disagree?

Multinational companies are always wonderful to have in any society. It is reasonable since they often produce for us a variety of products. This can help us have more choices when it comes to considering buying any items. Another reason is that, they will advocate us to not to be obsolete compared to other places. Therefore, I am personally convinced that the multinational companies are not destroying the quality of our life.

The items that we get from the multinational companies are really different from the rest of the company. Sometimes, it is almost impossible to choose any products in the national company because the choices are so limited. That is the point when the multinational companies step in. They usually offer us with a wide range of products that can satisfy our demand with ease. It does not always apply to every single multinational company since there are some multinational companies out there, which are even worse than the national company. Notwithstanding, the number of that type of company is quite modest. It is understandable because the vast majority of multinational companies will only emerge when they truly believe that they can entice many clients. For pragmatic instance, I have recently purchased a laptop from the foreign company because our companies do not have any powerful laptops as other countries' companies do. As a result, the multinational companies really benefit our lives.

Aside from the huge amount of choices, they bolster us regarding keeping up with other countries. It would be absolutely unfair for our people if we did not have those companies. Envision yourself a society with the national companies only. This can be a disadvantage for our people if they yearn the products that only the multinational companies possess. This can render our society to be out-of-date in comparison with other societies. Hence, thanks to the multinational companies, we now can stay updated in some sense.

The aforesaid evidence insinuates that multinational companies are supporting our life, in lieu of ruining it. Taking all the points into account, I am against the community, which asserts that the multinational companies are spoiling the quality of our life.

Writing Feedback / Education and its statistics. Breakdown information of the entrance in different Technology Colleges [2]

Three graphs provide a breakdown information of the enrollment in different colleges in the Higher Colleges of Technology, in 1999. The pie chart is measured in percentage.

It is noticeable that Dubai Men's and women's took the second and the first place, whereas certificate was favored in the rest of two graphs.

Regarding to the first graph, Dubai women and men had the highest number of people, which are 547 and 426. Both genders of Abu Dhabi managed to reach to 273 for male and 218 for female. In the meantime , Al Ain women almost doubled its males, with its 218. The leftover three candidates, such as female of Ras Al Khalnan and both sexes of Shapjah had an insignificant gap, they were all roughly 170, except Khaimah men with 102.

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Writing Feedback / World population growth will be at the highest point in the near future; IELTS [3]

Two graphs provide a breakdown information of global and urban population figures in distinguishable regions, from 1800 to 2100 and 2015 to 2040. They are measured in millions.
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Writing Feedback / Both artists and scientists have immensely underpinned our society, since they first emerged. IELTS [2]

It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members.
Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society.
Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer.
You should write at least 250 words.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Both artists and scientists have immensely underpinned our society, since they first emerged. Thanks to scientists, we now have numerous technologies and medicines that can almost solve any issue for us. Along with the scientists' helps, the artists make our life vibrant and buoyant. Notwithstanding, our society tends to bias towards the scientists because they provide us with some tangible benefits. Unlike artists, who are not favored since people need to have a survival first before amusing.

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Writing Feedback / Female and male and their ages; which group watch TV more? IELTS task 1 [2]

Two charts provide a breakdown information of TV programs watched by two genders and four different age groups, which are female, male and the ages are, 16 to 24, 25 to 34 and 45 and older. This measured in percentage. If analyzed, female takes the first place, regarding the reality shows, while 45 and older wins the first place of game shows.

Female peaks at 70 percent, if the story is about the reality shows, this value is huger than the male's one for over 30 percent. Group of ages has a different story, at first, from 16 to 24 has approximately 50 percent. The older the group the bigger the percent. The consecutive gap between all ages is about 3 percent. As a result, 45 and older reaches close to 70 percent.

When it comes to the game shows, both female and male record as roughly 60 percent. Two groups, which are 16 to 24 and 45 and older have the highest percent of viewers, as for group of ages. 16 to 24 has 50 percent, in the meantime, 45 plus has 70 percent. Alongside them, 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 share the almost identical story, with their approximately 40 percent respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Television and its powerful influences; can simultaneously benefit and ruin our cultural development [3]

Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?

- You should write at least 250 words.
- Allow yourself 40 minutes for this task.
Television has always been the tool, which can easily influence many societies. It is perfectly understandable, since most of the people these days tend to watch TV 6 hours a day. This can either influence horribly on our society or positively on our cultural development. For example, television can broaden our people's horizon by rendering lots of knowledge of any aspects. On the contrary, it can impart us with some noxious knowledge. Therefore, I am personally convinced that television can simultaneously benefit and ruin our cultural development.

There are numerous channels on our TV. Each of them has its own benefits. Those benefits can help our people to be more knowledgeable, because knowledge is never a waste. For pragmatic instance, I, as a worker who has a tendency to watch Animal planet a lot, can have a huge benefit. Animal planet allows me to understand about the animal's life a little bit more. This also applies to other individuals, who watch TV. As a result, television can truly strengthen our people as well as our society.

Aside from its pros, television can convey us with pointless information such as drugs, horrible celebrities and others. This might affect negatively to our society and the people, who live in it. I can recall myself, having a friend, who used to worship a certain celebrity through the TV. This celebrity, ironically, was into drugs and sex abuse. My friend, who used to be a nice guy tried to turn himself into the guy, who he used to worship. After two years, his personality completely altered in a negative way. He began to smoke and did some inappropriate things in front of the police. Hence, television also impacts terribly on our culture.

The aforesaid evidence shows that television, as a utility for spreading information, can harm and advocate our cultural development. Taking all the points into account, I believe that it is still uncertain, whether television spoils or supports our culture more.

Writing Feedback / Japan was the leader when it comes annual income and life expectancy - IELTS table [2]

The table provides a breakdown information of social and economic indicators for four countries which are Canada, Japan, Peru and Zaire, in 1994. If analyzed, the data suggests that Japan was the leader when it comes annual income and life expectancy, whereas Canada took the first place of daily calories per person. In addition, Japan and Canada both had the same and the highest adult literacy rate.

The annual income of Japan in 1994 stood at 15760 $, while this value was huger than Canada's one for almost 4000 $. The life expectancy, however, both had an insignificant gap, Japan's life expectancy at birth was 78 and Canada was less than 2 years. Canada managed to surpass the daily calories per person in Japan which was 2846, with its 3326. This two under review country had the same Adult literacy rate which was 99 percent.

Another two countries had the opposite story, the annual income of Peru was 160, whilst Zaire had only 130. The life expectancy at birth in these two countries which are Peru and Zaire were quite low, 51 and 47 only. The daily calorie supply per person of two countries were also terrifying, Peru was recorded as 1927 and Zaire even worse, which is 1749. It seemed like Peru's adult literacy rate equaled to two Zaire combined, which was 68 percent.

Indicators Canada Japan Peru Zaire
Annual income per person (in $US) 11100 15760 160 130
Life expectancy at birth 76 78 51 47
Daily calorie supply per person 3326 2846 1927 1749
Adult literacy rate (%) 99 99 68 34

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Writing Feedback / The benefits of living in the contemporary world! We used to squander hours on preparing our foods. [2]

Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Foods used to be an issue for people, since our people did not know, how to correctly cultivate or herd back then. Notwithstanding, now, we do not have to experience that problem any longer, because we now are quite erudite when it comes to foods. In fact, we can prepare our meals promptly. This phenomena helps our society expedite, and it can make us more salubrious.

We as human beings used to squander hours on preparing our foods. This engendered numerous troubles for us, such as being late to work or missing some memorable events. Nowadays, we can reduce the time of food preparation, which can be really convenient. For pragmatic instance, me , as a worker, tended to arrive late to work because of the foods, many years ago. Obviously, now, when I have a plenty amount of fast foods in my fridge, I will have more time for myself and works. This also applies to many other individuals. As a result, foods' these days have advocated us immensely.

Aside from the aforesaid benefit, when we do not have to waste much time on preparing foods. We will have more to cook other helpful meals. This can bolster our physical condition. Even though, it does not always work for every person, since one might decide to consume potato chips. However, the vast majority of people yearns to possess a healthy life, and thus, only minority begin to eat unnecessary foods, after the advent this phenomenon. Envision yourself, having more time after the preparation. This might possibly force you to cook more, since you used to allot an ample time to your foods. Therefore, our current preparation time definitely underpins our health.

The aforementioned reasons insinuate, that our swift preparation has contributed a lot to our society. Without it, we would never be able to be this healthy and productive, which are what we are struggling for.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: The first diagram exhibits the way the structure produces its electricity [2]

Two diagrams provide the breakdown information of the structure that produces electricity from wave power. The structure consists of chamber, turbine and two columns with some supports from the sea wall and wave.

The first diagram exhibits the way the structure produces its electricity is by having a wave as the source to create the air. Once the air is generated, it will force the turbine to spin clockwise. Not to mention that both columns and cliff or sea wall will assure that the air will breeze the turbine. Thus, that is the first way of creating electricity

Shifting to the second diagram, its features obviously identical to the first method, which are columns, cliff or sea wall and turbine, nevertheless, chamber. This time, the wave will retreat, and therefore, it will engender the turbine to spin clockwise as well, because of the wind that go from up to down. Notwithstanding, the turbine will still be revolving and making electricity.

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Writing Feedback / Worst criminals in our society. Murderers and their destiny! IELTS task 2 [2]

By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Murderers have always been the worst criminals in our society. They should be punished austerely, otherwise the number of murderers will increase. By providing the death penalty for murderers, our society will be more placid to live in, and that is what we are struggling for. Thus, I absolutely disagree that murderers should sit in the prison, in lieu of being dead.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1; Employment patterns of females and males in Britain! [2]

The two pie charts provide a breakdown information of the employment patterns of Great Britain, in 1992. Both charts were measured in percentage. If analyzed, the data suggest that male superior than women when it comes to Managerial and Professional and Craft or similar, while the woman had an advantage of General laborers, Clerical or related, other non-manual and manual.

When it comes to males in 1992, specifically, Managerial and Professional, they possessed 36 percent, whereas this value is higher than a woman's one for 7 percent. Clerical or related had another story, the opposite gender of male experienced 31 percent, but the male had only 6 percent. Other manual had the same story, women were recorded 27%, and this is 1 percent higher than a male's one. Both genders which are female and male, stood at 9 percent and 6 percent, when it comes Other non-manual. Male totally vanquished females if the story was about Craft or similar and General laborers, since a male had 24 percent and 2 percent, whilst the opposite sex had only 3 percent and 1 percent respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need; children and crimes [2]

Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Young people under the age of eighteen, these days, often commit lots of crimes. It is perfectly understandable, since people who live in this contemporary society such as their parents tend to be tied up all the time, and thus, they do not have a sufficient amount of time to take care of offspring. Teachers also contribute to this phenomenon, because some of them have a penchant for slugging during their job time. Therefore, I absolutely consent with the community which asserts that this phenomena is engendered due to the lack of attention of parents and teachers.

In this busy world, everything should be finalized promptly and efficiently, time is money. This can cause a significant impact on the child's behavior, since one yearns to obtain at least some attention from their parents, and parents sometimes are just too busy to satisfy their child's demand. For pragmatic instance, I used to have a friend whose parents were merchants and they usually worked abroad, because it was almost impossible for them to earn numerous profits in our country. So, there was a day, when my friend could not suppress his desire which is to talk face-to-face with his parents. He began to rob people in order to get caught to attract some attention from his parents. As a result, parents' attention is imperative for any kid's life.

Aside from parents' common mistake, teachers, especially in our country tend to be way too warm-hearted. They do not fulfill their duty at some extent which is to educate children properly. It does not always apply to every teacher on this planet, but some individuals act this way. I can recall myself, when I was an ingenuous kid. There was a classmate of mine, whose habit or hobby was to snitch somebody's item. At first, the teacher did not pay attention to his action, because she believed that, eventually, he would become a better person. Unfortunately, it did not go well as she had planned. After two years, that guy went to jail due to his innate habit. Hence, some teachers do underpin this phenomena.

Consequently, teacher and parents can substantially affect on the child's behavior. Taking all the points into account, I have a robust belief that nowadays, both parents and teachers spoil young generation's behavior.

Writing Feedback / 'Overall, all three museums had an upward trend' - Museums and its attenders. IELTS task 1 [NEW]

The line graph provides a breakdown of information in terms of thousands of numbers of visitors per month in summer 2013 who visit British museum, science museum and natural history museum, from June to September.

Overall, all three museums had an upward trend.

When it comes to Natural history museum and science museum, they both declined from June to July to 380 thousands and 350 thousands respectively. While the British museum sharply increased to roughly 700 thousands. The later period which is from July till august, the British museum and science museum share each other fates, by decreasing their thousands for more than 200 thousands and approximately 50 thousands. In Sharp contrast to this, natural history museum remained constant at roughly 380 thousands. At the end which is from august to September, all three tourist attractions rose simultaneously, as British museum increased its thousands for almost 100, in the meantime, Natural museum and science museum reached about 470 thousands relatively.

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Writing Feedback / Starting earlier, you will encounter more types of sentence structures, grammars and vocabulary [3]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Learning a new language has always been arduous for many individuals. The vast majority of them, usually starts comprehending another language, when their childhood have already said goodbye to them, and thus, beginning to learn a language as soon as possible is the best option, since it can reduce your accent and solidify your language foundation. Therefore, I am personally convinced that children should start experiencing a new language, when their formal education starts off.

An abundance of people finds it difficult to learn, for example, English language. It is perfectly understandable, since most of them did not have the opportunity to learn it, when they were young. As you become older, your tongue gradually adjusts to the language that you utilize most of the time. The only way for you to thwart that from happening, is to learn a new language in the beginning of your life. For pragmatic instance, I have an elder brother and a younger brother. They both began learning English at different age, specifically, the elder one from eighteen and the younger one from six. After five years of practicing English, my younger brother managed to possess the American accent, while the elder was no way near that wonderful accent. As a corollary, the sooner you start, the better it is going to become.

Aside from the accent, you can also strengthen your English or any other language foundations, since, by starting earlier, you will encounter more types of sentence structures, grammars and vocabulary. This can advocate you to articulate more like a native speaker. It does not always apply to every single human being because numerous individuals tend to never put any efforts into their subjects, when they are young, notwithstanding they will still be better than those who start learning a language later, when it comes the accent. Envision yourself, being a lucky kid with lots of chances of studying English, apparently, sooner or later you will surpass other typical kids because you have a better understanding of English. Hence, it is imperative to urge your child to study any language right in the beginning of his education time.

Consequently, the benefits of commencing to study a language, when you are young and ingenuous are enormous. Taking all the points into account, I have a robust belief that start doing anything early in this life is lucrative, including languages.