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Vns9x   
Nov 2, 2014
Writing Feedback / Right way to spend money [2]

Some people think governments should spend as much money as
possible exploring outer space (for example, traveling to the Moon and to
other planets). Other people disagree and think governments should
spend this money for our basic needs on Earth. Which of these two
opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support
your answer.

Although, some persons think that it is better to spend money on outer space. However, I have a strong belief that there is a plenty of issues on this blue planet that we need to firstly take care. Specifically, poverty and the supply of electricity. This essay will clarify all the reasons mentioned above.

Poverty has always been a leading issue in our world, since there is an abundance of underprivileged countries that require lots of supports from us. In fact, they do not have sufficient foods to consume, a proper education is not available for them. Obviously, how can we think about wasting money on outer space when those problems are still happening. Furthermore, when people are poor, they tend to do illegal things to survive such as poaching or hunting, cutting down numerous trees. As a result, our world is getting warmer and warmer each day. If we do not intend to solve this poverty issue, people will keep damaging our environment. Imagine ourselves , if we were underdeveloped and have offspring, clearly, we would have to do something about it. Hence, the only way to withstand this circumstance is by doing something illegally.

Moreover, another problem that we are suffering is electricity. Our world do not possess any permanent resource. In other words, it is limited. We have to solve this electricity issue as soon as possible. Since, electricity has played a pivotal role in our life. These days, it is almost impossible to live without electricity. To clarify, most of our technologies or utilities consume a definite amount of electricity. It can be a computer, a robot and many others.

The aforementioned reasons examine that there is tremendous unsolved things left in this world. Firstly , a large group of countries still need to be consolidated. Secondly, electricity is about to end on this planet. Indeed, I support the community, which consider that we must spend our money on basic needs first.
Vns9x   
Nov 2, 2014
Writing Feedback / The best and most cheerful memories we have from our children time [5]

Would i be able to improve in just 1 week since the exam is on 8th?And is it possible to correct those errors ?
Yes it is possible to enhance your writing skills within a week. However, it would surely consume from you lots of energy and efforts doing so.
Vns9x   
Nov 1, 2014
Writing Feedback / Travelling in a group you will have to fully rely on your leader or your members [3]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way
to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and
examples to support your answer.

Although, it is better to travel in a group led by a tour guide. However, travelling that way has an abundance of shortcomings such as inconvenience, uncomfortableness. This essay will clarify all the mentioned above reasons.

Travelling in a group in can be really inconvenient since you will have to fully rely on your leader or your members. In fact, it might turn out that the leader caught a cold or just being sick, thus, you will have to wait for him to recuperate his health. In addition, it can appear that one of your fellow of group tour has a trouble with his health. Consequently, it will pain you if you do not help him out. Imagine yourself if your tour's mate suffers from eating disorder. Obviously, every single person in that tour, it includes the leader, will surely postpone the tour in order to bring him to the hospital.

Moreover, it could be really uncomfortable as well when it comes to travelling in a group. Since, you will have to obey the principles of the tour. Hence, you cannot fully express yourself in the atmosphere. You always need to be careful with everything, because after all you are not travelling alone. In other words, rules are the huge obstacle for you and as well as your partner. To clarify it, envision yourself that you used to waking up at 10 am. However, the typical tour sightseeing starts at 8 am. Therefore, you will have to overcome your habit and wake up earlier.

The aforementioned reasons examine that travelling in a group with a leader has quite a number of drawbacks. Firstly, you always have to rely on somebody which can be irritating , especially, when they have some problems and the tour need to be delayed in order to solve the issue. Secondly, any tour has its own definite rules that you have to abide. In fact, it can be the worst feeling. And yes, indeed, I totally disagree with the statement.
Vns9x   
Oct 31, 2014
Writing Feedback / Direct communication is always better than emails or telephone calls or letters [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face
communication is better than other types of communication, such as
letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to
support your answer.

Face-to-face communication is always better than emails or telephone calls or letters. Even though, an abundance of people tend to use those above-mentioned utilities to facilitate their life. However, These are but some of the reasons that I firmly believe that face-to-face communication is irreplaceable.

Firstly, face-to-face communication helps us to understand the opposite person feelings, since we can actually see the person in front of our eyes. Consequently, it greatly reinforces us to read their minds or determining their true intentions by looking at their facial expressions. In fact, the majority of people can fake those facial expressions quite easily, because they could be really experienced at acting. However, I have a strong belief that if you talk to them for a long period of time, they will not be able to maintain their fake facial expressions. However, if you use emails or any others utilities, you will not have any chance to define their true desires, since, obviously you will not be seeing them face-to-face. Therefore, there will be huge and high wall between you alongside your friends or siblings.

Moreover, you cannot share your thoughts as effectively as it should be, by using those technologies. To clarify it, envision yourself boasting about your achievements with your friends. It is almost impossible to allow your friends to feel your happiness even by using phone, since they will not see your face and gestures or your actions, but only your voice. Hence, It is really complicated to transmit all your happiness to the person you are sharing your feeling with. In other words, they will not be to experience all that happiness from you.

The aforementioned reasons examine that face-to face communication is best type of communication you can possibly possess. You and your partner's voices and messages will not be enough to expose your true goals. There will always be a gap between you two, when it comes emails and phones, since you cannot see their faces to understand them profoundly, and you will not be able to express yourself properly by using those technologies.
Vns9x   
Oct 31, 2014
Writing Feedback / Schools, parents, and students would benefit with the requirements of wearing uniforms [4]

I strongly agree that public school should require students to wear uniforms. Uniforms can give school a better environment and class. It also, helps parents with their budget and time. As for students uniforms help them to fit in at school without fashion controversial or statues..

It would have been much more better if you had created a vague sentence. After all, it is an introduction.
Vns9x   
Oct 30, 2014
Writing Feedback / Grades are the motivation for students to study better, they can create a competitive environment [3]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades
(marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and
examples to support your opinion

Grades are the motivation for students to study better, because marks can create for you a competitive environment. More than that, it is an indicator if you are prepared to step your foot outside the comfort zone or not. This essay will clarify why grades will compel students to learn.

There are abundance of students who are also study with you. They will be rated as you ,thus, once if you find out that somebody has a better mark than you. Hence, it will force you to learn and surpass the person who obtained the higher mark than you last time. By grading students, class will become a huge competition between many students. It is inevitably to feel jealous seeing someone who has better mark than you. However, this cannot apply to everyone, since there are plenty of people who could get dismay quite easily. To clarify it , a large group of people especially these days tend to consider themselves weak or not capable of anything. Consequently, once they see someone is better than them, then they will resign. In other words, not many spirits can overcome the pressure the move forward. However, as time goes by, they will realize that it is necessary to be jealous when it comes to marks or grades.

Furthermore, mark is the thing that statistically show you your performance. It can greatly affect you in a positive way. Since, most of people on this planet knows that school or university usually associated with your future works or jobs. In other words, it usually turns out that people who studied well at school have a tendency to execute their work or job well. Despite this possibility, again this does not apply to everybody, due to everyone's spirit and lucks. There are many people who studied well at school, however, they did not have enough practical experience or patience or lucks to succeed in this cruel world. After all, everything can possible on this planet.

Aforementioned reasons examine that grades do encourage people to comprehend new knowledge. For the reason that, it grades make the atmosphere more competitive. Moreover, grades indicate whether you will be good enough to handle your future job or not. Hence, it will motive you to study as well.
Vns9x   
Oct 29, 2014
Writing Feedback / Nature vs industry - it is a must for our country to get the most out of our free space [2]

In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural
condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and
industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Cambodia is an underprivileged and spacious country. In fact, it remains abundance of isolated land that need to be developed for housing and industry. This essay will prove and clarify why it is a must for our country to get the most out of our free space.

The majority of people in Cambodia is unemployed. Since, there are almost nothing to do in this country except farming. However, there are abundance of space, which need people to get the most out of it. By building a new research center or factory, it will reinforce our country to reduce the unemployment. Hence, people will be glad about that alteration. Moreover, it will surely increase the economic growth of Cambodia. Imagine yourself if a new factory out of nowhere will be appeared. Obviously, those people who could not obtain a job or work will be more than happy due to their beliefs. Since, they have a strong belief that factory necessitate people to regulate it.

Furthermore, our country still possesses some tribes. They also need a stand in this contemporary society. Back then, they had to hunt or pouch in order to survive. More than that, some of them even dwell in cave. Consequently, building houses and in parallel, factories can greatly benefit them. Since, they will be able to learn something new and obtain a comfortable place to live in instead of cave. Even though, some country believe that it is better to maintain those tribes. Since, a large group of people desire to look at those tribes. Thereby, it can help our country to attract more tourists. However, after all, I believe Cambodia should find a better solution to enhance our economy rather than relying on those tribes. For the reason that, ultimately, those tribes will be disappeared.

Aforementioned reasons examine that it is imperative for Cambodia to develop for housing and industry. Due to numerous unemployment in Cambodia. Furthermore, our ancient tribes need to have a better living.
Vns9x   
Oct 29, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: More People Living by Themselves [6]

I think you are quite off topic. Since, they ask you the reasons of those current problems. Therefore, my advice for you is to carefully read and constantly remind oneself the prompt during your writing.
Vns9x   
Oct 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / FARMING: Agriculture plays a leading role in our country, Cambodia has abundance of free territories [2]

A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some
people want a center for business research. Other people want a center
for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research
centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your
recommendation.

Agriculture plays a leading role in our country. Since, contemporary technologies are not our strong field. Moreover, plenty of our people aspire to comprehend some knowledge about agriculture. For the reason that, they desire to enhance the quality of their product, in order to sell it properly. This essay will clarify the benefits of having a research center in agriculture for Cambodia.

Cambodia has abundance of free territories. Consequently, it is more beneficial for us to focus on agriculture. Since, our country does not possess any outstanding resources such gold or fuels and many others. Thereby, agriculture is the first and the last option for people like us to rely on, thus people have to learn more about agriculture in order to obtain the best quality of the product. By providing people with a research center related to agriculture, especially farming, it will offer people with more beneficial outcome. For the reason that, people will get more profound understanding about every aspects of farming. To clarify it, it can teach people how to correctly utilize such things as herbicides or pesticides. Furthermore, they will be aware of its consequences. As a result, the product that will be exported from our country will be healthier for many human beings. In fact, there is a tendency on our planet to overuse pesticides on plants.

Unfortunately, our country is one of many undeveloped one in the world. Therefore, we still are not able to make any significant breakthroughs. The majority of people are unemployed. Since, there is nothing to work and dedicate. By providing a research center in agriculture, people will have a small likelihood of being employed. Since, farming is the only thing that most of our people capable of. Hence, it will be reducing the unemployment of country.

Aforementioned reasons examine that research center in agriculture is imperative. Since, it is most of people in Cambodia tend to farm. Moreover, it can benefit our country by providing more jobs and works for our people.
Vns9x   
Oct 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / Numerous people have a tendency to play at least 1 hour a day - Technologies [4]

Some people think that governments should spend as much money
as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other
people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more
basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use
specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Computer technology has become the part of our life since it first released. It has holistically altered our life in a positive way. This essay will prove why the government must spend money on computer technologies.

In these days, people tend to utilize or rely on computer's technology more and more. In fact, It has completely facilitated our life. Especially, when it comes to communication's technology. It was a tough time when people did not possess such technologies such as emails and Facebook . Imagine yourself, how much money did they spend on phone during that time. Obviously, it was a huge bill. Furthermore, it can be cut off in any time. In other words, it is not stable and fast at all. As a consequence, once the communication's technologies stepped in, abundance of people commence to use it due to its efficient. However, it has some drawbacks. Since, nothing is perfect in this world. It has numerous of bugs and errors. Sometimes many people start complaining about it. However, as time goes by, those unexpected errors are still solving. Since, the government does not allot sufficient amount of money on it.

In terms of computer games, it statistically showed that numerous people have a tendency to play at least 1 hour a day. Consequently, improving games' technologies is also pivotal. It can relieved people's stress and anxiety. Moreover, a large group of people desire to entertain with the higher quality of the game each day. To clarify it, after a long day of working hard. Clearly, you want to indulge as much as you can. Hence, playing an updated game will be a solution for you. Since you do not want to amuse with outdated games over and over.

Aforementioned reasons examine that it is imperative for the government spending as much money as possible on technologies. For the reason that, it has made our life much more easier. Moreover, it can help us to get rid of useless daily stresses.
Vns9x   
Oct 28, 2014
Essays / "Social network" why is social network bad and why is it good? [8]

Well, first of all, social network facilitated our life. Since, there are no limits for us to converse any people on the globe. Unfortunately, it has some cons of it. to clarify , villains or hackers try to use this advantage to scam innocent people.
Vns9x   
Oct 28, 2014
Undergraduate / I have developed a natural interest in observing how different groups communicate between each other [3]

Urban areas and their common issues, like traffic, violence, and street maintenance, also fascinate me having spent a trimester at the Lycée Stendhal Milan, and on separate occasions, having travelled with my German class to Munich, and my French class to Paris. Each city seems to be addressing these issues in a unique way. I enjoy attending lectures outside of school at the University of Chicago searching for common solutions to urban problems.

I consider this paragraph is off topic/ In other words, you do not need ti in your essay. The rest is great!
Vns9x   
Oct 27, 2014
Research Papers / Technologies have immensely facilitated our life. However, it has some shortcomings. [3]

Technology makes people's lives simpler rather than more complicated.

Technologies have immensely facilitated our life. However, it has some shortcomings. This essay will explore the way technologies facilitate, and in parallel, insignificantly ruin our life.

There are many technologies such as Internet, robot, has changed our life. In terms Internet, it provides us with numerous information. In fact, you can easily access to any information. Consequently, there are endless knowledge awaiting for you on the Internet. Furthermore, it is extremely fast to gather anything through the Internet. Nevertheless, Internet gives you the opportunity to communicate with your relatives and siblings who live at the end of the map. Of course, you can keep in touch with them by phone. However, it is quite expensive. With Internet, especially with the unlimited one, you can converse by Skype or others programs for free with anybody on this planet. When it comes to Robot, eventually, it can substitute lazy human worker. It does not necessitate to sleep or ask for a favor. Robot do not need to have any vacation. Therefore, it is more fruitful comparing to the typical worker. To clarify it, imagine if you had to select between a human worker who always complaining about his salary, demanding for the vacation. And the robot, which can work more effectively than the human worker. Furthermore, it does not require any of those listed such as vacation and salary. Obviously, your most likely choice is going to be the robot.

Unfortunately, that is the point when technologies cause problem for us. We commence to rely on those technologies more and more. It can lead us to abundance of diseases such as obesity or cancer and so on. However, I believe that if we intended to solve the issue then it can be fixed easily.

Aforementioned reasons examine that technologies have made a leading impact on us, on our society. Even though, there are quite a number of drawbacks. However, the advantages overwhelm the disadvantages. Hence, technologies have greatly make our life easier.

Shon Do - please remember about descriptive, quaint title, and don't put to big useless space between description and essay
Vns9x   
Oct 26, 2014
Research Papers / Our city has abundance things to entertain - A new beginning [2]

A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What
do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your
town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your
essay.

Our city has abundance things to entertain. However, there are some drawback in our city as well. Therefore, this essay will explore both advantages and disadvantages about my current city.

People here are really kind and helpful. If you got lost then the first person that you encounter would most likely glad to help you. Also, there are not many people who live here. Hence, you will not have to worry about congestion or heavy traffic. Moreover, there are always plenty of space in the bus or in any public transportation such as tram, trolley. It is rare here hearing some noises since not many people reside in this city. What more importantly, there are no pollutions. Thus, you can stay healthy and experience the real nature of the world. It is a quite safe city as well. You can freely walk and wander at night without worrying of getting robbed. There is a beach, which has blue water and a huge number of palm trees. The weather is perfect for people who love swimming or scuba diving or other water activities.

Tragically, there are a few of shortcomings such as schools or universities. In terms of schools or universities. There are not many of them here. For the reason that, not many people live here. Consequently, you will not have a variety type of schools to select. As a result, numerous people tend to move to other cities due to that reason. When it comes to social skills, you can hardly improve it here because you will meet the same people over and over again. Since, it is an isolated city. Imagine if you will stay in my city. I can certainly assert that once you stepped out of your home. Then, you will be meeting only a few people during your entire day.

Aforementioned evidence examines that there are quite a number of things which can be liked by the person like public transportation, sport activities, peaceful and uncontaminated environment, safety . Despite this possibility, it has some cons such as communication and educational places.
Vns9x   
Oct 26, 2014
Writing Feedback / Sentiments about the upcoming university! [2]

The government has announced that it plans to build a new university. Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare advantages and disadvantages of establishing new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion.

The government has announced that it plans to build a new university. Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare advantages and disadvantages of establishing new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion. University is an important place for many people, especially for young generations. However, when it comes to have one near your community. Then, it is a double-edged sword. This essay will explore both pros and cons of having the university nearby.

When it comes to advantages of having the university nearby. There are numerous of them. Since, if you live near it, then it is obvious that you can sleep more. Furthermore, you will not have any anxiety such as worrying whether you will be able to come to classes on time or not. In terms of sleeping process. It will be quite beneficial if you have a sufficient amount of time to sleep. For the reason that, sleeping process can truly decide your performance in university. To clarify it, imagine if you will have an ample time of sleeping. Obviously, you will obtain more concentration. Subsequently, it will facilitate the process of comprehending unknown knowledge. Therefore, your likelihood of acquiring high mark in university is fairly high. Even though, it really depends on individual's efforts. However, no one can deny that people who live near the university will have an explicit advantage compare to those who live a far from it.

Unfortunately, there are abundance of drawbacks as well. You cannot envision yourself how much noises you are about to experience living near the university. Students will constantly enter and exit the building . They will be discussing about their problems. Moreover, they might utilize their private cars or motorcycles to come to the university. Therefore, noises and in parallel, air pollution. For instance, attempt conceiving your typical morning. You are drinking a cup of coffee and reading a newspaper simultaneously. However, imagine if the gigantic university appears, then those students and their car will disturb you from your daily routine. More importantly, their car emissions can affect badly to you and your neighborhood health.

Aforementioned evidence examines that having the building such as university nearby can benefit your schedule, specifically, your sleeping process. Despite this possibility, there are numerous shortcomings such as pollution and noises which can mar the clarity and peacefulness of your community.
Vns9x   
Oct 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / Living in dormitory can immensely enhance your independency skills [2]

Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference.

People usually have no idea whether it is better to live in university dormitory or apartment in the community. This essay will explore the pros and cons for both living in dormitories and apartment in the community.

When it comes to living in universities dormitories, there are abundance of advantages and drawbacks. Living in dormitory can be really inconvenient from time to time. Since, you will have to confront with numerous unpleasant circumstances such as noises. For instance, imagine if you will live with your roommate. Moreover, they can have a boyfriend or girlfriend. Obviously, they will be attempting to be close with each other. Consequently, it might turn out that your roommate will bring his other half to your room. Meanwhile, you will be studying or finalizing some of your university assignments. Therefore, they can mar your peaceful atmosphere which surely will disturb you from studying. However, there are plenty of advantages living in dormitory. You can consume anything and no one will judge you. It can help you to be better at scheduling your timetable. Overall, you will learn how to be an independent person. No one can deny that it is quite beneficial for your future.

In terms of apartment in the community, there are tremendous advantages and disadvantages as well. To clarify it, you will most likely live with some people. Hence, you will not have to worry about foods and meals. Your clothes will be cleaned by someone else . Despite this possibility, there are plenty of shortcomings. By way of illustration, the people that you live with might have different taste. You will have adjust to those types of food. Most importantly, your independence will be limited. Since, you are living with other human beings. And you cannot really improve your independence. For the reason that, they will be your second parents.

To put all in a nutshell. Each of them has its own advantages and disadvantages. However, if I had to select where to live, than living in dormitory will be my choice. Since, it can immensely enhance your living independently skills. As a consequence, it will benefit me and my future. And, living on this planet is all about improving oneself.
Vns9x   
Oct 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / Nowadays' communication [3]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephones
and email have made communication between people less
personal. Use specific reasons and examples to support your
opinion.

Emails and telephones have become part of our daily communication. However, it is no way near the real face-to-face communication. Since, it is not reliable and we cannot fully understand the opposite person's feeling. Therefore, I reinforce the community which agrees that emails and telephones make our conversation less meaningful.

Face-to-face interaction is considered to be unreplaceable. Since, that is the only way we can truly analyze and express the feeling of whom we talk to. Emails and telephones cannot show us their facial expression, their eyes, their body language. Consequently, we cannot identify the opposite person true motives and intentions. Obviously, they can tell lies or truth, because you will not have any clue about it. To clarify it, imagine if you will be discussing with your best friend through emails. They might be under pressure and stresses. However, once you pose them some questions, then they will nicely answer you. Clearly, it is almost impossible to determine whether she is in good mood or not. Therefore, there will be a gap between you and your best friend. Even though, it is possible for you to identify if she is suffering or satisfying. For the reason that, you and her have been conversing for a long time. Hence, you will understand her really well. However, after all, it is still better to communicate with person face-to-face.

Moreover, in these days, there are numerous hackers or some villains who want to scam you. Thus, utilizing emails or telephones are the best solutions for them . By way of illustration, envision yourself, how many programs can change your voice into the voice of someone else. Let is assume, you are always supporting your elder brother by lending him money. All of a sudden, there is a call from unknown person . However, the voice was exactly like your brother, And he was asking for money by sending some money through Webmoney. As analyzed above, it is really dangerous communicating with people through emails or phones.

It is because of the aforementioned reasons that I firmly believe that emails and others devices make our interactions less personal. Since, it is cannot substituted face-to-face interaction because it provides us with less compassion and feeling. Furthermore, it is quite hazardous due to scammers .

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