Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - How to see the thoughts you don't know you are having - Caroline Williams [2]

How to see the thoughts you don't know you are having - Caroline Williams

Every second, large of quantities idea emerge on our mind. Those are in an unconscious area in which almost all people are not aware of what their thinking. In actual fact, a few experiments have been developing to touch our hidden area. Harvard University's Scholars carried out the research by using quick response test to exposing unconscious behaviour regarding origin, sexuality and gender. Unfortunately, it is strenuous to catch. While, another researcher, Russell Hurlburt from University of Nevada Las Vegas, provides a different approach. He commanded volunteers to wear an earpiece which will randomly beep for six times a day, then ask them to note their mind. After a half of decade, he has concluded that minority of people have an idea what they are thinking.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary - My Seven Species of robot - Dennis Hong [4]

My Seven Species of robot - Dennis Hong

Dennis Hong is the chairman of Romela, the robotic company in the USA and they have large quantities of rewards from prestige institutions. To run its business, they set 5 effective behaviours while the most powerful secrets are nobody criticises anybody's ideas, nobody critics any opinion. This in absolutely principal because often students fear of they fell uncomfortable to deliver idea or advice. How others likely think about their opinions is always come up in the mind. It effectively impact on students' performance, they have wacky, crazy, brilliant idea which has never been existence. Finally, the whole room is just electrified with creative energy and this is how we develop our ideas. The second secret is to endeavour your robot to overcome current problems. The company is valuable due to its contribution to society and the world.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - the proportions of students attending [4]

The given table shows the comparisons of the proportions of students attending in 4 different educational institutions are the specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled and community, between 2000 and 2009. It is noticeable that in three educational institutions the total of presented students decreases over the time. By contrast, community school has a significant increase in students attending.

To begin, voluntary was the dominance in pupils attending at 52%, compared by grammar which only stood at 24% while specialist and community had the equal number at 12%. During 2006, community markedly escalated by approximately 20%. By contrast, even voluntary was still the most attendance although it showed a slight decrease to 38% and followed by grammar which decreased to one in twenty while the specialist was the least decrease which only by 1%.

By 2009, the lowest attendance was on specialist then followed by grammar which accounted less than a fifth. Meanwhile, community slightly increased to around 60% which was three times as much as voluntary schools which was around 20% of pupil's attendance.

Writing Feedback / Over-grazing was the most dominant aspect of worldwide land degradation. IELTS chart [6]

The given chart presents the predominant causes why agriculture land becomes less productive and the provided table illustrates causes of land degradation in North America, Europe and Ocean during the 1990s. It is noticeable that Over-grazing was the most effected reason of worldwide land degradation. Meanwhile, European countries were the most affected on land degradation.

According to the given data, over-grazing was the main problem for land degradation which was supplied more than a third and followed by deforestation as the second reasons at 30%. It is very surprising to notice that the over-cultivation at 2% less than the deforestation. By contrast, other was the least of effected reason at almost one in ten.

By 1990s, Europe had land degraded almost a quarter and deforestation was its predominant trouble which was one in ten. While over-grazing as the most effected reason in the world only supplied 7.7%. Surprisingly, North America was only impacted one in twenty and the over-cultivation was the main reasons. By contrast, Oceania had land degradation almost less than a fifth and over-cultivation supplied zero impact.

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Writing Feedback / Article Summary - Russia and MH 17 Brought to BUK [3]

Russia and MH 17 Brought to BUK

Malaysia Airlines was brought down by a Russian missile on July 17th 2014, 298 people on board are death. On September 28th, (JIT) the Dutch-led Joint Investigation Team consisted of several representatives from Australia, Belgium Malaysia and Ukraine carried out investigation and collected by myriad of photo, video and forensic findings, satellite and radar data, interviews with eyewitnesses. Those are called as "irrefutable".

According to Russia media published that a Ukrainian jet shot MH17 down since they were willing to shoot down Mr Putin's plane but the missile crashed MH17 accidentally. However, it comes to the JIT's data reports that no other aircraft were flying in the vicinity of MH17. Meanwhile, the investigators revealed that the Russian army uses BUK warheads, but Ukraine's does not. However, Russia dispute the evidence and argued that the JIT's report based on speculations, inaccurate and entrusted data.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary - Joel Levine: Why we need to go back to Mars [2]

Joel Levine: Why we need to go back to Mars

NASA has ambitious to prove is there a life on Mars? After dozens of research, revealed evidences that there is no liquid water on the surface of Mars today, it is important as water is the key ingredient in the evolution process and the origin of life on a planet. However, there is fascinating finding that in the early history of Mars, there was rivers and fast flowing water. They also have predicted that 4.6 billion years ago, Mars was liked-earth. Mars had rivers, lakes, but more important there were planetary-scale oceans, which crucial for living systems.

In order to reveal the truth of these findings. NASA invited 10 of the top Mars Scientists, generated major question then we addressed on the board to find the best answer of those questions. Finally, the answer is robotic rocket-powered airplane called ARES. It is able to fly on Mars's surface such as mountains, volcanoes, impact craters, valleys, surface magnetism, polar caps, and subsurface water.

Writing Feedback / Article Summary - Donald Trump is right, America's airports are awful [5]

Donald Trump is right, America's airports are awful

During the first of presidential debate of the USA, Donald Trump's made a statement that "our airports are like from a third-world country". However, it is no hyperbole, it is extremely right. Based on Skytrax annual report, five airports in developing countries are better than the top American airport. Even, the top 50 airports, only 4 airports in the United States while developing countries supply 15. For example: New York JFK and Los Angeles LAX are in 59th and 91st respectively.

However, such phenomenon is caused by chronic underinvestment in public infrastructure across the country. The American airport has a tendency to focus on the domestic market, where there is not number of tough competitions and pressure to improve. Meanwhile, as the top airport in the world, Singapore Changi Airport, always construct new infrastructures and utilize advance technology to support them as the most convenience airport to transit.

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Writing Feedback / TED Summary - Ken Robinson says schools kill creative [3]

TED - Ken Robinson says schools kill creative

Nowadays, children are not prepared to be wrong. They always obay with the teacher's instructions, willingness and desires. However, If children are not prepared to be wrong, they will never come up with anything original. Picasso said that all children are born as artists, but in this current condition, by the time they get to be adults, most children have lost that creativity thinking. the issue which should be addressed is how to remain an artist as we grow up.

Ken Robinson explains that there are two kinds of intelligence are:

Firstly, it is drivers. We think about the world in all the ways that we experience it. We think visually, we think in sound, we think kinesthetic-ally. We think in abstract terms, we think in movement.

Secondly, intelligence is dynamic. If you look at the interactions of a human brain, intelligence is wonderfully interactive. The brain is not divided into compartments. In fact, creativity which he defines as the process of having original ideas that have value. More often than not comes about through the interaction of different disciplinary ways of seeing things.

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Writing Feedback / The free movement, is it necessary for economy or not? [2]

The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

Some people have a tendency that free trade agreement among countries will threaten local industries. I keenly agree with such opinion that free flow of goods is one the principal of international trade that should be supported due to its merit. These will be obviously explained in the paragraphs below.

On the one hand, I agree that free flow of goods among countries will beat local products. Since local brands cannot rival with exported products which have better standard and more economical price. Therefore, the foreign goods are readily absorbed in the local market. For example foreign country has been producing LED TV with advanced technology as well as it is more affordable than home country products. When the products are exported to the domestic market, people tend to choose those products rather than domestic brands due to its quality and cost.

Apart from previous explanations, I more like to agree that free trade agreement is necessary for those who are willing and eager to have the more competitive market. Having aggressive market competition is compulsory in order industries perform more competitive. It aims to provide an array of alternative and affordable products for the customers, for instance, it helps buyers to choose the best products with cheaper quality.

In conclusion, while free trade agreement certainly beat local industries. I extremely believe that free flow of goods has more upsides than its drawbacks. In my opinion, free movement of goods across national borders has long a great idea to create the competitive market.

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Writing Feedback / Article Summary - The Best -and worst- places to be a working woman [5]

The Best -and worst- places to be a working woman
The United Nation has published "glass-ceiling index" that aims to reports the most suitable place for women to work. Its indicators are higher education, labor-force participation, pay, child-care costs, maternity rights, business-school applications and representation in senior jobs. Unsurprisingly, the Scandinavia countries such as Iceland, Norway, Sweden and Finland-lie in top overall. In these regions, a woman has chance of equal treatment as men. Finland is the highest share of education compare with a man by 14%. Meanwhile, in Iceland has 44% woman on company boards. The least ranking of working woman is Japan, Turkey and South Korea where men have a tendency to fill a strategic position such as senior employee than a woman. Their salary gap is wide as well.

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Writing Feedback / Is the Internet really dangerous? Inappropriate contents, lack of direct communication [3]

The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

Majority people believe that the internet has been imposing people to change the way of transferring information. Surprisingly, it carries a large number of negative consequences for the human being. However, the society can take steps to address such drawbacks. These problems and solutions will be obviously explained in paragraphs below.

The internet brings various negative impacts. Firstly, inappropriate contents such pornographic, crime and deception are easily accessed by everyone, including children. Adolescence is susceptible to negative contents as well as they will behave based on provided information on the internet. For example: in 2015, Abraham Limau had conducted research revealed that nearly 75% of rape victims are pornography addictive. Consequently, they did sexual violence to accommodate their desire. Secondly, lack of direct communication. Since society spends more time interacting with each other online. Indeed, they have less face-to-face communication. Therefore, the internet could be obstacle family life.

Apart from previous explanations, several approaches could be the solution to overcome such phenomenon. The first, the government has authority to create a set of restriction to ban the websites contains adult and violence subjects and form strict punishment in order people obey the regulation. The second, schools have crucial roles in educating students to use internet in the appropriate way and utilize the technology only to search new knowledge and data for their future career. The third, family is required to monitor their children' activities during the use of the internet, to prevent them access inappropriate websites.

It could be concluded that the internet has vast problems for society, particularly children. However, these could be diminished by working side by side between family, government, and school.

Writing Feedback / Article Summary - How to Use Google to Plan Your Trip [3]

How to Use Google to Plan Your Trip

Google Inc. created Google Trips to revolutionize the previous apps which is Google maps. It is a personalized tour guide in your pocket, it aims to help travelers planning the trips. The application is very user friendly. After setting up the app using your Gmail account, you can plan your first trip. Afterwards, it has six predominant characteristics such as reservations, things to do, saved places, day plans, food & drink and getting around.

Firstly, reservation shows you the flight, hotel and car rental information and then collected into your account. Secondly, things to do recommend travelers to attractive destination divided into several specifications. Thirdly, day plans help arranging itineraries. Fourthly, food & drink gives you basic information regarding traditional dishes. Finally, getting around are categorized to provide transportation information included the costs.

Writing Feedback / The authority is required to create publicity for familiarizing renewable sources of energy [3]

Government should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The majority of people state that the authority is required to create publicity for familiarizing renewable sources of energy. I, therefore, agree with the statement that foster another resources will carry a large number of upsides.

On the one hand. Firstly, the non-renewable energy such as fuels, coal petroleum, and natural gas will disappear someday. It needs thousand of years to be reproduced. In order to meet human's needs, people are compulsory to move to another resource which could be renewable. Secondly, the alternative resources would be more economical because those could be generated themselves. Afterward, these would be more accessible also for those who not have the chance early. In addition, the renewable energy is more friendly environment which helps to diminish pollution and greenhouse.

Furthermore, alternative resources such sunlight, the wind, and rain would meet people's needs who live in remote areas or rural regions since these relatively easy to obtain. Even it needs sophisticated facilities such as solar cell but the benefits outweigh its investment. For example: in 2012, Chinese government built 100 solar power in Chinua region to fulfill society's needs especially electricity. After implementing this idea, Chinua society's life become better and solar power carries a lot of benefits such as job opportunities, better infrastructure, and current electricity.

In conclusion, I completely agree that the publicity of the alternative resources should be executed by the government because it brings positive consequences outweigh its drawbacks. Personally, I am fear that there is no scarcity resources could be utilized due to its limitation.

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Writing Feedback / Article Summary - Google Introduces the Pixel, Its Own Smartphone [4]

Google Introduces the Pixel, Its Own Smartphone

Google has published its smartphone manufactured by some companies such as Samsung, LG Electronics, and Lenovo. Google's new strategy of controlling both hardware and software for its devices. The Google's CEO, Sundar Pichai remarked that this projected executed to provide computers can understand what people are saying and responds conversationally with the right information at the right moment. It aims to build a personal Google for each and every individual. It named Pixel as the first smartphone with the Google Assistant built into the device. It was a component of new-product barrage including a Wi-Fi router, a virtual reality headset and a Chromescast device for streaming high-resolution video. It would be a prospective competitor for Apple and Android smartphone.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary - Rory Steart: Time to end the war in Afghanistan [2]

Rory Steart: Time to end the war in Afghanistan

The war in Afghanistan has been existing for decades. However, Afghanistan does not to pose and existential threat to global security. It is extremely unlikely the Taliban would ever be able to take over the country and It is extremely unlikely that Al-Qaeda would significantly enhance its ability to harm the United States or harm Europe. Anyway, we need more people who are telling the truth, who know the current situation in Afghanistan. We should tell the truth to the united nation since they only have little idea of what is going on over there.

Over the last 10 years, several amazing improvements developed such as within six months there were two and a half million more girls in school and There were 14 health clinics in that area alone.

Source: youtube

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 - speaking local language helps to understand culture of a country? [3]

Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language. Do you agee with this opinion?

The majority of people regard that to attain valuable insights of others cultures. It is compulsory to speak the same language as they use. I would regard that this idea is true. Even thought, for some aspects, I have an opposite opinion.

On the one hand, the language can reflect people's culture. This is because it is an essential tool to communicate and scholars can analyze people's behavior through how they use the language. So if people speak the language of a country, they attain an array of cultural information. For example, it has been known that nearly all Sundanese people find a difficulty how to make a sound of letter "P" properly. They cannot pronounce distinctly between letter P, F and V. As a result, foreign people realized that they should not force them to pronounce those letters correctly since it is one of their behaviors that hard to be addressed.

On the other hand, people have an opportunity to understand other culture without speaking their language. There are several activities could be carried out to get more comprehensive understanding regarding the culture of a country. The first method is to read book and journal. That provides a lavish number of information of the country regarding their behaviors, characters and how people interact and mingle with their neighborhood. It also supplies recent data since cultural researches have been conducted annually. In addition, traveling abroad will be a beneficial factor to understand a culture because people are able to interact directly with native citizen and adapt with new cultures they believe.

In conclusion, it is clear to me that although learning language helps citizens to understand about other culture. There are alternative methods which more effective to gain a large number of information such as reading the cultural book and watching a movie.

Writing Feedback / Article Summary - Why Uganda is a model for dealing with refugees [2]

Why Uganda is a model for dealing with refugees

The EU countries committee to provide abodes for asylum-seekers even it has been a predominant trouble in a dozen of European countries for the last decade. Recently, French governments have eradicated a refugee camp in Calais which previously has been symbolic of Europe's policies. They argue that refugee has resulted in many social troubles such as increasing the crime rate and national security.

Surprisingly, according to Oxford Refugees Studies Centre, Uganda is the most welcoming country in the world for asylum-seekers. Since 2006 lavish of refugees have been granted freedom, free of hostility and get equal access to health care and education. Those services convey numerous benefits. They have flourished in economic development and mitigate unemployment rate. Furthermore, the relationship between refugees and local people are generally peaceful.

source: economist

Writing Feedback / Students are not given a freedom to express what they think, and it kills their creativeness [3]

Over last decades, it has been a proliferation of scholars entering the educational institution. They are keen to get new insights which can be implemented in their life, then make life easier. However, the students in school are commanded to obay all teacher's instructions and they are not given a freedom to express what they think. If such trend continued, they will never come up with original idea.

Pablo Picasso said that all children are born as an artist and a parent has a responsibility to remain it. He explained that the essential steps to keep them as an artist is to understand two sorts of intelligence. Firstly, it is a driver. Several children think the world as they experience. It means that they live a life through several approaches are movement, imagination, and sound. In addition, majority of children generate a thought from their brain which interact and transfers an array of information.