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The Evolution of Rock Music: From Classic Rock to Modern Influences

2 - You are missing a discussion in relation to the pioneering foundation of rock which is rock and roll. While...

Writing Feedbackshauryarug - Aug 17, 2024 / Holt - Aug 22, 2024
Should the goverment support artists such as painters or musicians?

2 - What opinions are these? There is no such reference in the original statement. You should only be providing...

Writing Feedbackrumia rumi - Aug 16, 2024 / Holt - Aug 22, 2024
[IELTS WRITING] OBJECTIVITY IN NEWS

2 - You should avoid using direct quotes from the original prompt. This affects your LR and TA score. The...

Writing FeedbackQuynhdo - Aug 16, 2024 / Holt - Aug 16, 2024
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity

2 - Which countries? This statement is not informative and will confuse the reader. It is best to write a...

Writing Feedbacknghbl - Aug 16, 2024 / Holt - Aug 16, 2024
The life expectancy and GDP of certain countries

2 - There is an advised maximum word count of 200 words for the task 1 essay. That is to help...

Writing Feedbackbichnhi - Aug 15, 2024 / Holt - Aug 16, 2024
Enrolling in UEL university with IELTS certificates

3 - @Holt Sorry for that as I uploaded a seemingly unsafe link here! Sorry for that carelessness!...

Writing Feedbackhuyendiusw - Aug 14, 2024 / huyendiusw - Aug 15, 2024
Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations?

3 - @Holt the word "governmet" in this essay means the govermernt of poor nations....

Writing FeedbackLoganLe - Aug 13, 2024 / LoganLe - Aug 14, 2024
The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008.

2 - This is too wordy for a Task 1 essay. It contains 231 words, which indicates that you took at...

Writing Feedbackthu153 - Aug 14, 2024 / Holt - Aug 14, 2024
Impossible to make a significant contribution without strongly influenced by past achievements

3 - @dixitswarnika Your essay makes a strong argument for the importance of learning from past advancements while encouraging innovation. With...

Writing Feedbackdixitswarnika - Aug 8, 2024 / Vera24 - Aug 13, 2024
Consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world

3 - It's Obvious you need to restructure the essay into paragraphs. I fell you should start the paragraph in a...

Writing Feedbacklinhblk - Aug 11, 2024 / Uzor - Aug 12, 2024
Colwich Arts Centre - IELTS WRITING TASK 1

2 - I only see the today image for this presentation. Did you forget to upload the before illustration? Anyway, I...

Writing FeedbackNorton - Aug 10, 2024 / Holt - Aug 11, 2024
The funding - Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features

2 - In this case, being number specific would help since each pie chart references a different information presentation. You...

Writing Feedbacknateq136 - Aug 9, 2024 / Holt - Aug 11, 2024
The Escalating Threats of Climate Change to Coastal Regions

2 - I believe that what is missing in this research paper is an actual focus on climate change and how...

Writing Feedbackjhomero92 - Aug 8, 2024 / Holt - Aug 11, 2024
Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison

2 - There are 2 images presented in this analytical paper. There is a bar graph, which was generically identified as...

Writing Feedbackleanguyen - Aug 8, 2024 / Holt - Aug 11, 2024
numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia

2 - Good formatting for the summary overview. You correctly attached the trending statements with the summary overview. You will get...

Writing Feedbackchidung - Aug 7, 2024 / Holt - Aug 7, 2024
[IELTS ACADEMIC WRITING TASK 1] Participants for activities in a social house in Melbourne

2 - Try to keep your task 1 essay to under 200 words. Never cut into the writing time for the...

Writing FeedbackPikes_2006 - Aug 7, 2024 / Holt - Aug 7, 2024
Do store knowledge on the internet outweigh stored knowledge in books?

2 - It is unfortunate that you have only written 232 words for this topic. The minimum word count is 250...

Writing FeedbackTHANHNGAN241 - Aug 6, 2024 / Holt - Aug 7, 2024
The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

2 - There is a lack of coherence and clarity in your presentation based on these 2 problem references....

Writing Feedbackhihihihithu - Aug 5, 2024 / Holt - Aug 6, 2024
How people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK - IELTS Writing task 1

2 - "Almost" means "not quite or very nearly". It is not the same meaning as "most" greatest in amount,...

Writing Feedbacklee2nhw - Aug 5, 2024 / Holt - Aug 6, 2024
[WRITING TASK 1 IELTS] THE DIAGRAM SHOWS HOW LIVERTON DOCKS CHANGE SINCE 1980

2 - There are only 2 illustrations provided for this report. One from 1980 and the other, is present day....

Writing Feedbackmal880 - Aug 4, 2024 / Holt - Aug 6, 2024
In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What are the problems and solutions?

2 - This is your personal opinion which is not reflected in the original discussion. You cannot make such claims...

Writing Feedbacklamlinhlinh - Aug 4, 2024 / Holt - Aug 4, 2024
Task 1 - The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia had a baby

2 - Avoid using a run-on sentence for your summary overview. Concise references rely on your ability to present one idea...

Writing FeedbackUnessayforum - Aug 3, 2024 / Holt - Aug 4, 2024
Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings

2 - This is an incomplete thought. There is a missing verb here that would have completed the sentence idea...

Writing Feedbackkeylie tran - Aug 2, 2024 / Holt - Aug 4, 2024
The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries

2 - What sort of chart was provided? The chart type is important because it will help the reader envision...

Writing Feedbacktangthuyduong304 - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
How many overseas conferences held in Cities - IELTS 1

2 - You are missing the past tense word "were" which indicates a plural past for the conferences. This is...

Writing FeedbackLeMaiPhg - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
TASK 1: the number of people who don't have occupation

2 - Please remember that the task 1 essay will score best once you write between 175 to 200 words. These...

Writing Feedbackphuthinh - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
IELTS Writing task 2: Essay about healthiness problems and measures for that

2 - The paraphrasing is incorrect. It should mention, in your own words, that the weight increase is happening in some...

Writing FeedbackKitrute - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
IELTS TASK 2 [Doctors and engineers, should be required to work ....]

2 - Hello, for a review of this essay based on the band sectional scoring and possible final score, you must...

Writing FeedbackQueen02 - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks.

2 - The paraphrasing is acceptable, although calling this an argument is an exaggeration. A discussion would have more aligned as...

Writing FeedbackTuyet Trinh - Jul 30, 2024 / Holt - Jul 31, 2024
what do you think will be the highest-paying occupation 50 years from now?

2 - Hmmm,,, the title of the essay and the content of the paragraphs are two extremely different and highly disconnected...

Writing FeedbackJane Mai - Jul 29, 2024 / Holt - Jul 29, 2024
Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country's success

2 - The essay is lacking 2 words to meet the minimum word count. Deductions, which will be applied to the...

Writing Feedbacktrannhatminh - Jul 29, 2024 / Holt - Jul 29, 2024
Can discrimination be escaped?

3 - @Holt thanks so much on your feedback!...

Writing Feedbackquynnesanity - Jul 27, 2024 / quynnesanity - Jul 28, 2024
The future of the automotive industry

2 - I realize that this is a draft which leaves you plenty of room for improvement. I would probably start...

Writing FeedbackRcD - Jul 27, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Do people prefer arts to technology in your view?

2 - There is no need to justify the reasons why people would still look into art when you are trying...

Writing Feedbacklmaok - Jul 27, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
Are famous celebrities 'role models' for young generations?

2 - You should avoid presenting information that removes the focus from the actual discussion. There is no need to...

Writing Feedbackwslgods - Jul 26, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
Competition or cooperation in our society - IELTS 2

2 - The essay fails to use pronouns to reference the point of view being discussed in the body of paragraphs....

Writing FeedbackHoangminh06 - Jul 26, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day

2 - The summary overview is missing important reference information that has made it very difficult for me to understand the...

Writing Feedbackhaidang1010 - Jul 26, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
IELTS Academic Writing Task 1: Tables, Exports by Michael

2 - I found myself confused by the summary overview presentation. What taxes? What nations? What years were covered? There is...

Writing FeedbackMichaelc - Jul 26, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
the merits and demerits of taking a gap year and your own opinion

2 - Well, there is an inaccuracy in your presentation because this topic is not really a contentious issue. It is...

Writing Feedbacktvanh - Jul 25, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Essay about doing an enjoyable activity with a child and reading books

2 - The topic restatement is faulty. You forgot to reference that the activities are to be done with a child....

Writing Feedbackeddypham - Jul 24, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
Essay about the proposed new town plan

2 - I am not sure if there was only one picture provided for this analytical paper. Normally, a task 1...

Writing Feedbackindustrious - Jul 24, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
IELTS Writing Task 2: A majority of nations are striving forward to economic growth

2 - Your second reasoning paragraph has strayed from the social values discussion. Those are not really values or cultural norms...

Writing Feedbackthanhxia293 - Jul 24, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents and crime.

2 - There is no need to indicate how the news is accessed. It is not a necessary part of...

Writing FeedbackEmilia hihi - Jul 24, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks.

2 - Kindly remember that you have to clearly format the essay using the expected paragraph presentation. You need 4 paragraphs,...

Writing FeedbackRamona07 - Jul 22, 2024 / Holt - Jul 26, 2024
IELTS Writing task 1 - Production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000

2 - First of all, let me clarify the word count number for this task. You cannot write more than 200...

Writing Feedbacknhungcoi - Jul 25, 2024 / Holt - Jul 25, 2024
The use of mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries and shops. (Dis)agree?

2 - This essay meets the word requirement, but not the formatting of the page. There should be spaces between paragraphs...

Writing Feedbackthutran - Jul 22, 2024 / Holt - Jul 25, 2024
Problems with overfishing and the Environment that is impacted

2 - You have too much going on in your head that tries to translate itself onto the paper. The first...

Writing Feedbackjak001 - Jul 22, 2024 / Holt - Jul 25, 2024
Ielts writing task 2: To what extent has the internet made life more convenient?

2 - This is your personal opinion as the writer of this essay. It is not referred to in the...

Writing FeedbackMintlev - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 25, 2024
Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus.

2 - This is an automatic failing essay since it only has 247 words in it. The main word requirement is...

Writing FeedbackQuangTa - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 24, 2024
Writing Task 1: Daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004

2 - Please remember the basic rule when it comes to writing a sentence. A sentence is composed of 1 idea...

Writing FeedbackYashainu - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 24, 2024
The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

2 - The summary overview needs one more sentence, that would help the paragraph achieve a 40 word presentation, to qualify...

Writing Feedbackleehyy - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 24, 2024
The Impact of Divorce on Children and How it Affects their Childhood Development

2 - The presentation is mostly based on theories and academic studies. What we actually need more of in this presentation...

Writing Feedbackmslifka0326 - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 24, 2024
Many think that in today's world it is very difficult for people to maintain a healthy lifestyle.

4 - Your essay does not meet the requirement of 250 words in Ielts Writing task 2 and try to improve...

Writing Feedbackvuthuha19 - Jul 17, 2024 / Yashainu - Jul 21, 2024
Soccer journey - an identity, an interest, or a talent that defines them in an essential way.

2 - The essay is too long. I found myself becoming bored by the third paragraph and wishing you would get...

Writing Feedbacknadine_pf - Jul 18, 2024 / Holt - Jul 19, 2024
What problem does cyber insecurity cause? How to solve it

2 - This term does not exist in the English vocabulary. Either you mean "hyper-connected" or "cyber connected". This lack...

Writing FeedbackThanhTai - Jul 18, 2024 / Holt - Jul 19, 2024
high school entrance exam - the most difficult time in your life

2 - Is this a statement meant to respond to an English writing task or are you writing this as an...

Writing Feedbackfefeq - Jul 18, 2024 / Holt - Jul 19, 2024
Writing Task 1 - The chart below ahows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European

3 - I think once the information in your paragraph matches the information in the graph, you will be set. You...

Writing Feedbacktikafebriyani - Jul 18, 2024 / nadine_pf - Jul 18, 2024
Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with other people

2 - Your essay is over discussed and will not be completed within the 40 minute time frame. Aside from that,...

Writing Feedbacktaurus - Jul 17, 2024 / Holt - Jul 17, 2024
Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the net

2 - The paraphrasing of the original topic is incorrect. You have not provided the correct field of focus for...

Writing FeedbackTong Phuong Anh - Jul 16, 2024 / Holt - Jul 17, 2024
Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals

2 - The question provided for the discussion is "To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement provided?"....

Writing Feedbackcuongng123 - Jul 17, 2024 / Holt - Jul 17, 2024

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