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IELTS WRITING TASK 02 - IT LESSONS AND THE USE OF COMPUTERS IN CLASSES

2 - Incorrect word usage. You are using a reference of ownership when you should be referencing the general term,...

Writing Feedbacknlbn2888 - Mar 25, 2025 / Holt - Mar 31, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 01 - MAPS - Central Library

3 - I set the alarm clock for my composition and I could complete it within about 22 minutes. I am...

Writing FeedbackNguyendangquang - Mar 19, 2025 / Nguyendangquang - Mar 29, 2025
ENG 102: Teen mental health after the pandemic

2 - You need to clarify these 2 sentences. I find these confusing and difficult to connect with the Covid...

Writing FeedbackAlejandra - Mar 23, 2025 / Holt - Mar 24, 2025
The number of old people is increasing. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

2 - The task 2 essay will never ask you to attest to the validity of a claim being made...

Writing Feedbacksweetper - Mar 17, 2025 / Holt - Mar 17, 2025
Writing task 1 (a report) The charts below show the average retirement age for men and women in 2004

2 - The report does not feel complete. Were there no age figures indicated in the bar graph? You speak of...

Writing Feedbacklenus - Mar 16, 2025 / Holt - Mar 17, 2025
Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments

2 - It is important that you use everyday English words to help increase your LR score. Other eis a misconception...

Writing Feedbacklgnueqg - Mar 10, 2025 / Holt - Mar 13, 2025
IELTS Writing Task 1: Agriculture land degradation

3 - Just some grammar checks here. I believe you meant "throughout" instead of "though out" in the first paragraph. And...

Writing Feedbackcattie_wuyn - Mar 5, 2025 / ssyynn - Mar 8, 2025
Ecotourism - TOEFL WRİTİNG TASK

2 - The word requirement for this type of TOEFL writing task is 250-300 words. You have written less than 200...

Writing Feedbackemir10 - Mar 6, 2025 / Holt - Mar 7, 2025
Ielts Practice Task 1: Production levels of the main fuels in the UK

3 - @Holt thanks for your help, I will be working on improving it based on your comments...

Writing Feedbacksporty boy - Feb 25, 2025 / sporty boy - Mar 6, 2025
Leaders and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think a younger lead

2 - This will be considered a prompt deviation since you have changed the discussion instructions for this essay. The...

Writing Feedbackchaugfgfgfg - Mar 2, 2025 / Holt - Mar 3, 2025
Draft email for Negative message to NewTech about Samsung phone

2 - This time frame is too far away for the letter. When you have a complaint, the receipt of...

Writing FeedbackShahrizoda - Feb 28, 2025 / Holt - Mar 2, 2025
An argumentative essay: A vision of future wealth taxation

3 - @Holt I understand your disapproval of the pompous nature of "hereby". I originally used it to combo with thereby...

Writing Feedbackshangapallia - Feb 19, 2025 / shangapallia - Feb 27, 2025
IETLS WRITING TASK 2 - Museums and art galleries

2 - The work that you have presented will receive an automatic failing score. That is because your response to the...

Writing Feedbackbinthai - Feb 24, 2025 / Holt - Feb 27, 2025
IELTS WRITTING TASK 1-The diagrams illustrate information about changes in a student accommodation

2 - There are 2 errors in this phrase. The first, is that you mistakenly identified a map as a...

Writing FeedbackAnnamber - Feb 24, 2025 / Holt - Feb 27, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK1: INFORMATION ABOUT DEPARTMENT STORES AND ONLINE STORES IN AUSTRALIA IN 2011

2 - The essay meets the correct word number requirement but fails to address the essay in the proper format. Since...

Writing Feedbackhsghoas - Feb 19, 2025 / Holt - Feb 27, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - LINE GRAPH - The percentage of the population living in cities

2 - The essay is overwritten. This should only be 200 words at the most. By writing 206 words, you have...

Writing FeedbackHY Ho - Feb 18, 2025 / Holt - Feb 24, 2025
The effect of technology on people live

2 - This is a task 2 essay that will receive an automatic failing score simply because it is way too...

Writing FeedbackLieuLieu - Feb 18, 2025 / Holt - Feb 24, 2025
Essay on the Paradox of Choice for an ETS question

3 - Your comparison is well-structured, but it could be clearer and more concise....

Writing FeedbackEnricoLB - Feb 17, 2025 / Vault - Feb 22, 2025
Proposal Essay: Is Social Media a Negative Impact on Mental Health?

4 - You should first make your opinion on the essay prompt clear. Only then should you bring in contextualization with...

Writing Feedbackchr2420661 - Feb 12, 2025 / clauana - Feb 17, 2025
The two tables compare the number of exchange students from Europe to Australia and from Australia

2 - You have overwritten this analytical essay. The word requirement for this essay, that falls within the 20 minute writing...

Writing Feedbackbaoanh97 - Feb 14, 2025 / Holt - Feb 15, 2025
IELTS WT2 - Socialising online or in person

3 - Hii Gwen, I feel like your first paragraph lacks a real sense. It's too short and vague without...

Writing FeedbackGwenVu - Feb 7, 2025 / clauana - Feb 10, 2025
Write a short story. Imagine you wake up in a completely different city

3 - @Holt I appreciate your detailed feedback and will apply your practical advice to make the story more engaging. I...

Writing FeedbackChuyen97 - Feb 1, 2025 / Chuyen97 - Feb 2, 2025
The traditions and customs relating to the food we eat and the way we eat are changing.

2 - You have tried to put together an intelligent sounding essay which failed to deliver. While you chose to use...

Writing Feedbackhienphuongxinh - Jan 29, 2025 / Holt - Jan 30, 2025
Guarding Against Online Shopping Scams

2 - These are considered phrase fillers. These do not help to move your paragraph forward. There is no...

Writing FeedbackPadin - Jan 26, 2025 / Holt - Jan 26, 2025
The graph gives information about employment categories of a country in 2003 and 2013.

2 - You must do a correct image identification in the summary overview to achieve maximum scoring consideration for that section....

Writing Feedbackisoldelin - Jan 26, 2025 / Holt - Jan 26, 2025
CAM 19: The proportion of the urbanites in 4 selected Asian countries

2 - Remember that you have a 29 minute writing time limit for this analytical report essay. Therefore, the advised length...

Writing Feedbackcinnamonanh - Jan 22, 2025 / Holt - Jan 22, 2025
Breaking The Chain - An essay on the opioid epidemic and what we can do to fix it

2 - I hope that you have presented the draft of the essay for our review. This is nowhere near the...

Writing Feedbackrac2209 - Jan 19, 2025 / Holt - Jan 19, 2025
Some people believe that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.

2 - This is an over discussed essay that provides too many words to actually accomplish within 40 minutes. The essay...

Writing Feedbackquan2222 - Jan 18, 2025 / Holt - Jan 19, 2025
I love the English language - summer course essay

3 - I loved the personalizaton and character that you brought out through this essay, however I feel the starting and...

Writing Feedbackkingkitten100 - Jan 17, 2025 / lamiasalim - Jan 17, 2025
Gap in progression Common App prompt (250 words)

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback! Besides that, is the content fine?...

Writing Feedbacktrippletrouble12 - Jan 13, 2025 / trippletrouble12 - Jan 13, 2025
The table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008.

2 - Refrain from mentioning the position of the image on the page. It is advisable not to do so because...

Writing Feedbackminhtannguyen - Jan 9, 2025 / Holt - Jan 10, 2025
airfare reducing, good or not?

2 - There is no way that air fare prices are on the wane. This statement implies that the prices...

Writing Feedbackgottogoya - Jan 7, 2025 / Holt - Jan 7, 2025
Some people say the fashion industry has a bad effect on people's lives. Do you agree?(IELTS WRITING

2 - Please be mindful of the word count for the task 2 essay. The minimum requirement for a passing score...

Writing Feedbacknanaaa6 - Jan 2, 2025 / Holt - Jan 3, 2025
Some people say that it's better to work from home than work in an office. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - The first problem with this task 2 piece is that it is under the word count minimum of 250....

Writing FeedbackKingnevergiveup - Jan 1, 2025 / Holt - Jan 2, 2025
Focused Study vs. Multidisciplinary Learning-IELTS Writing Task 2

2 - The prompt clearly states that you should state your opinion on the topic. The requirement for stating your...

Writing Feedbackhasham_hawk - Dec 31, 2024 / Holt - Jan 1, 2025
Should punishments be fixed or based on circumstances and motivation? - IELTS WRITING TASK 2

3 - Always start with paraphrasing the given question....

Writing Feedbacktrangdo75 - Dec 28, 2024 / hasham_hawk - Dec 31, 2024
Afghanistan's challenges - My Career Plan for Chevening

2 - While your career plans clearly state the motivation for your desire to help Afghan women, it is not properly...

Writing FeedbackAhmadzai Hezb - Dec 28, 2024 / Holt - Dec 28, 2024
Balancing Urban Growth: Should Parks Make Way for Housing? - WRITING IELTS TASK 2

2 - The writer shows an understanding of the topic that was provided through his accurate restatement of the problem and...

Writing Feedbackhasham_hawk - Dec 27, 2024 / Holt - Dec 28, 2024
The role of househusbands in the modern world - IELTS 2

2 - This is an incorrect statement that has no basis in the original topic presentation. This created a prompt...

Writing Feedbackemmaswann - Dec 22, 2024 / Holt - Dec 24, 2024
Adele - about a famous person you like. Who is this person? What is this person's job?

3 - @irrverst this sentence is a bit messy: "I admire her not only because she composed my favorite song, but...

Writing Feedbackirrverst - Dec 10, 2024 / nguyentst080190 - Dec 23, 2024
Traditions of their society - WRITING IELTS TASK 2

4 - @habibraza22 thanks for your comment....

Writing Feedbacknguyentst080190 - Dec 16, 2024 / nguyentst080190 - Dec 23, 2024
rural people are moving to cities,positive or negative development-WRITING TASK 2

2 - Kindly remember that you have a total of 1 hour to write both the task 1 and task 2...

Writing Feedbackhelen2415 - Dec 18, 2024 / Holt - Dec 21, 2024
Money was allocated to cell phones - writing task 1 (line chart)

2 - The report is over written at over 200 words. Bear in mind that you are going to be sharing...

Writing Feedbackmon1805 - Dec 17, 2024 / Holt - Dec 18, 2024
any criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. cause and solutions

2 - I am afraid that the vocabulary usage in this essay is quite problematic. The essay does not require the...

Writing FeedbackNguyen Hoai Ngoc - Dec 15, 2024 / Holt - Dec 16, 2024
Eating local food and the related environmental impacts

2 - This is not information that is found in the original presentation. Therefore, it should not be included in...

Writing FeedbackJason1997 - Dec 9, 2024 / Holt - Dec 9, 2024
Does societal impact matter more than families' guidance?

2 - In my opinion, the prompt restatement is incorrect. The original prompt refers to the general development of the child...

Writing FeedbackEdukid2309 - Dec 8, 2024 / Holt - Dec 9, 2024
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a Euro countries

2 - While the word count is acceptable at 190 words, the essay is still not well presented. The summary overview...

Writing FeedbackLe Nhung - Dec 7, 2024 / Holt - Dec 9, 2024
The Importance of Ethics in Society

2 - As a research outline, I would have to say that the premise of the discussion paragraphs are sound. They...

Writing FeedbackBlack Ink Tax - Dec 6, 2024 / Holt - Dec 9, 2024
Narrative Essay - New beginning of my life

3 - I like the way you are able to express deep emotions and feelings in the text, as if you...

Writing FeedbackThaodang - Dec 6, 2024 / Edukid2309 - Dec 8, 2024
restaurant is my favourite place!

3 - There seem to be a lot of grammatical mistakes. Besides, you can try to clarify some points to make...

Writing FeedbackTony1324565242 - Dec 4, 2024 / Edukid2309 - Dec 8, 2024
Statement of Purpose on Computer Science, PhD

3 - @Holt Thanks for your response! I'll put it clearer about the purpose of my study. It seems that...

Writing FeedbackXrchitect - Dec 5, 2024 / Xrchitect - Dec 7, 2024
Eng102 Social media and its effects on children.

2 - In the second paragraph, you should take the opportunity to discuss the sorts of mental and physical problems that...

Writing FeedbackWebDesignStudent - Dec 4, 2024 / Holt - Dec 5, 2024
Talent vs hard wordk - IELTS 2

3 - Speaking as someone who took IELTS just a year ago, I think you could improve the writing by expanding...

Writing Feedbackhaiyen221203 - Nov 24, 2024 / jakartainrain - Dec 1, 2024
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited

2 - The response is too short and will receive word count deductions. You are not even close to the 250...

Writing FeedbackEmmachou1792 - Nov 28, 2024 / Holt - Nov 28, 2024
Should High school education be mandatory?

2 - As a task 2 essay of only 200 words, you can expect to gain an automatic failing score for...

Writing Feedbackanishawriting - Nov 27, 2024 / Holt - Nov 28, 2024
How family courts are failing domestic violence survivors and their families.

2 - Wow! You are opening with a very strong argumentative opinion here. You obviously feel so strongly about the topic...

Writing Feedbackellie1234 - Nov 25, 2024 / Holt - Nov 26, 2024
People would always choose a life without work rather than working most of the time. Agree/ disagree

2 - The prompt restatement is confusing. You seem to have suddenly changed the information presentation in the first sentence. Almost...

Writing FeedbackJohn Pham - Nov 24, 2024 / Holt - Nov 25, 2024
Free theme narrative story (Grim of the schools)

2 - The dialogue is wooden in nature. It is not natural sounding nor does it come across as everyday discussion...

Writing FeedbackEdukid2309 - Nov 24, 2024 / Holt - Nov 25, 2024
IELTS Writing task 2 : Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animals

4 - @Heidi_han Thanks for your suggestion!...

Writing Feedbacksylvie813 - Nov 11, 2024 / sylvie813 - Nov 21, 2024
Mindset for IELTS 1 (Describing maps, p.34)

2 - The summary overview is a little bit inaccurate. The map shows that the 2 versions represent the layout from...

Writing Feedbackchuduythuc - Nov 21, 2024 / Holt - Nov 21, 2024

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