justivy03
May 23, 2016
Scholarship / How this summer program and cultural experience will benefit you in your line of study [3]
Hi Kry, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, may you find this website credible and valuable to your revision and writing references. We aim to provide you with the most accurate remarks, objective criticisms and hopefully useful insights to your writing tasks.
Now here's what I have for your essay.
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There you have it Kry, I hope the corrections above help you see the difference in the original essay and after the modifications. There are quiet a work to be done in your essay, I understand that this is not your mother tongue and this adds to the difficulty in coming up with a well written essay, however, practice is the best helper in getting better if not the best at this craft. I hope you follow through with the corrections done and you do the same for the rest of the essay.I wish to review your final revision soon.
Hi Kry, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, may you find this website credible and valuable to your revision and writing references. We aim to provide you with the most accurate remarks, objective criticisms and hopefully useful insights to your writing tasks.
Now here's what I have for your essay.
- As a scholarship
- who is studying in
- of the popular
-
- , I'm
-
- I am honored to be
- which will provide
- and
- What
There you have it Kry, I hope the corrections above help you see the difference in the original essay and after the modifications. There are quiet a work to be done in your essay, I understand that this is not your mother tongue and this adds to the difficulty in coming up with a well written essay, however, practice is the best helper in getting better if not the best at this craft. I hope you follow through with the corrections done and you do the same for the rest of the essay.I wish to review your final revision soon.