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dumi   
Jul 2, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Number of Heart cases of in England during four decades(1960 to 1990) [4]

The graph shows the number of cases of heart diseas s in England during four decades(1960 to 1990).

The graph illustrates the statistics of people who suffered from heart diseases from the year 1960 to 1990.

however, they started growing gradually up to 200 in next five years(1970). But this trend went sharply up in 1975 and the figure of heart patients raised to 500 in just 5 years. However, this number stayed at the

......, however, this number increased in next five years recording 200 heart cases in the year 1970.

But this trend went sharply up in 1975 and the figure of heart patients raised to 500 in just 5 years.

This figure kept a sharp upward trend until 1975 with an increase of 500 patients in next five years.
dumi   
Jul 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / Can a child be taught talents or he is born with talents? [5]

It's very interesting today that I have been telling this to many in the forum;
"First, you need to select "Writing Feedback" Forum for IELTS essays and make sure you open new threads in the right forum. That helps you earn good feed backs" .... yes .... I think you too would follow the same :D

ThoughHowever , it does not mean that he/she can not learn other skills.

In schools, children are oriented towards fields that they are more skillful at. However, some students may be pushed towards fields that they are not qualified enough at, but forcibly by their families.

... well, this slightly deviate from your topic. Your topic is more general and it speaks of which talent, born or acquired, is more important for professions such as music or sports. I think you need to maintain your writing to address this. Always keep a proper alignment with your prompt!
dumi   
Jul 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS essay - How can young people be made responsible drivers? [8]

You need to post your IELTS essays in "Writing Feedback" forum. Also, have a more descriptive and meaningful topic for your essay. Plus, include your prompt with your essay so that others can provide you with more meaningful feed back.

Careless youth is considered to be the main source of the problem

... this sentence sounds a bit abrupt. Better re-phrase!

, these young drivers can beteached

...."can be taught"
dumi   
Jul 1, 2013
Letters / Recommendation Letter - for an iOS Developer [5]

In the development area, at any time he has tried to offer full performance and efficiency in the fulfilling the task assigned, contributing with his point of view at potential improvements.

... I think you need to re-phrase this line... it does not convey your idea clearly. This is what I suggest, but may be I'm off track because I cannot grasp what you try to mean exactly;

He particularly displayed his great potential in the area of iOS development by meeting all the requirements effectively and efficiently while contributing valuable insights for future improvements.

P.D.: I forgot to remove the person name and de company name, could I remove this thread for privacity terms?

I removed those contents from your post :) Now no worries :D
dumi   
Jul 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / IETLS; Discuss your views on - Born talents Vs Acquiring talents [5]

First, you need to select "Writing Feedback" Forum for IELTS essays and make sure you open new threads in the right forum. Also, have a meaningful topic for your essay. That helps you earn good feed backs.

A talent is an exceptional quality that makes us special, new and different.

... the word "new" doesn't fit in there. May be you can try "unique".

That is why a lot of people ask themselves about the origins and causes of a talent,

.... well, the latter part does not sound logical...

On the one hand, someone maydemonstrateclaim that you are not responsible offor the talent you have by showing how many singers, doctors, lawyers and so on, come, in the majority of cases, from a family employed in the same professional area

.... this sentence is not properly organized. Also it's too long. You can tell this idea is a simple and direct manner. What you must do is to express the reason in more convincingly;

There may be people who claim that a talent can be acquired through proper training. They may give examples of professionals like doctors or lawyers who come from such family backgrounds. .... there are two things I need to highlight here ... First, for singing you need to have a born talent, at least at basic level, and therefore you cannot include singers here. Also, your prompt specifically deals with singers and sportsmen. So, this argument sounds out of topic.
dumi   
Jul 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS : The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of ads [3]

First, you need to select "Writing Feedback" Forum for IELTS essays and make sure you open new threads in the right forum. That helps you earn good feed backs.

As others have pointed out, your essay is too short to meet the requirement of this task. I guess you need to have at least 250 words in your response.
dumi   
Jul 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL:How should people spend money? Personal Enjoyment or Fulfilling Duties? [3]

First, you need to select "Writing Feedback" Forum for TOEFL essays and make sure you open new threads in the right forum. That helps you earn good feed backs.

Most people always have an inclination to run away from the burden of life

... I think "burden" is not the most appropriate word for this idea. I prefer a word like "responsibilities" or "problems".

Moreover,they spend time on their own personal enjoyment rather than doingfulfilling duties that they should doaught to attend.

Without having your full prompt it is difficult to find the alignment of your writing with it. Make sure you post the prompt in full for your next essay. If the prompt asks for your opinion on this argument, then your introduction should be slightly different.
dumi   
Jul 1, 2013
Graduate / Masters by research degree (Nutrition) - Admission to University Of Melbourne [5]

I strongly believe that my presence should lead to changing the world.

... changing what? better be a little more descriptive. Tell you wish to make a meaningful contribution or something like that.

I have everyall the confidence in the fact that one of the foremost means of improving the world condition is to promote the quality of life and public health.

My fascination with inquiries into health issues lies in the awareness that not only does increasing the level of public health counteract the onset of disease, it also enhances the quality of life and reduces the economic burden of health troubles on individuals and communities.

... Wish you shortened this a bit... When it's too long, the reader needs to memorize things a lot and he would not like it for sure !

"an ounce of prevention is worth a pound of cure,"

... nice quote!
dumi   
Jul 1, 2013
Letters / A letter to the travel agency to complain about the problems faced during holiday [2]

I am writting to complain about a holiday which i booked in your travel agency

Before telling this you need to introduce yourself to the agent to make it easy for them to trace your booking with them. Tell who you are and quote a booking number or some reference for them to retrieve your booking. Also, it is the general practice that you do not start letters with negative facts.

I thought it would be a dream holiday, however, it have been my worst trip ever

.... hey ... don't be so angry :D
I expected it to be a dream holiday. However, due to my dismay, it proved to be otherwise.
dumi   
Jul 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / Older generations consumed healthy food compared to what is consumed by people today. [2]

First, I have two requests ; Post this type of essays into "Writing Feedback" forum. Then also give a meaningful topic in the subject field when you open a new thread. These little things help you earn good comments and feedbacks for your essay.

ForIn the recent centurypast , diet of people has changed a lot from natural ingredients to partly artificial ingredients.

.... Better you improve this sentence;
During the last century, the food that people consume has changed dramatically due to various socioeconomic reasons. In particular, the ingredients used for food preparation have largely shifted from natural to artificial.

ancient people's food

... food consumed by older generations
dumi   
Jun 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS- begin language learning from elementary school compared to secondary school [3]

Learning foreign language has been increasingly essential in the borderless world.

Learning a foreign language is becoming increasingly essential in the modern globalized world.

However, there have been many hot debates about timewhen to start teaching between primary and secondary school.

... teaching what? You need to introduce the topic here. Say that it's about teaching a foreign language.

have much more brain growth than another level.

...have a speedy development of brain that slows down as they grow older.
dumi   
Jun 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / How overpopulation can affect society?/ Negative effects of overpopulation [8]

kindly need some help on my essay ! many thanks

....sure... sorry for being late !

Nowadays, there are many social issues people have to face in their life, one of them is the overpopulation which is becoming more and more popular in many countries.

... well... I don't think overpopulation is anyway a popular thing among people. It is something that people cannot control, but to tolerate...So, be careful with using vocabulary and if you don't use the right word in right place, it would kill your idea.

Nowadays, many countries are challenged with social issues that have been created as a result of over population.
dumi   
Jun 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / Do you agree or disagree ? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. [10]

Nowadays advertising is one of the most important things for each country and people whole the world, because withby referring to adsadvertisements we can become aware of many important aspects of each society and country, aspects such as peoples merits, concerns and also it shows whether people tend to be affluent

.... this sentence is too long. When you have shorter sentences, they help you express your ideas more clear and interesting.
I think you need to pay attention to the essay outline.
dumi   
Jun 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Letter to a friend - request to look after my sick dog Pooh [3]

I'm greatly appreciate that you have agreed to help me

... this is grammatically wrong;
I am appreciating / I appreciate.... however, in this case "I appreciate" is better.
I greatly appreciate that you agreed to look after my house and pet while I am away.

I will be leaving on the2nd. Juli, which means a week more from now.

2nd. Juli - 2nd July (July is the English term for Juli)

My staying in the south of the Country lasts for five days.

.... I think you need to use a more simpler tone for this letter;
I will be travelling in the South and returning home after five days.

We can always Keep in touch by using my mobile number in case of emergency.

... give your number to him.
dumi   
Jun 30, 2013
Graduate / Masters by research degree (Nutrition) - Admission to University Of Melbourne [5]

Hi.... welcome to Essay Forum. However, where is your SOP? I don't find it here :(
You need to type it here and then we will give you our comments in hope of improving your response. You do not need to open a new thread for that, but type it here itself so that we would give our feed backs.
dumi   
Jun 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / Children who grew up with hardships are better prepared to deal with problems; Agree? [2]

It is believed for some that children who raised in a poor family are more capable to deal with their problems atin their adult's ageadulthood than those who grew up in a rich family.

Personally, while I agree with this statement, only life experience, however; is not enough consideration for a child to become well prepared in his or her future.

I wish you wrote this in two sentences;
Personally I agree with this statement. However, I also believe that life experiences alone would not prepare a person to take up his or here future challenges.

This writing will be given reasons to support my opinion.

...no need to say this. It's implied.

Although growing up with a family that is financially struggled has a valuable benefits, and a child can be taught unique skills to become a mature person in the future, there is other important aspects that can be much better. Education is the first perspective to consider, and it has a great effect on children to become independent adults. At school time, students are learning a variety of beneficial subjects that help them to be prepared for the problems to solve it successfully. These subjects are well dedicated and organized for students to have a special skills to overcome any of negative situations when they become adults. It contains a plenty of management skills which can be used to control difficult problems. Eventually, students will be educated perfectly to deal with such a problem that may face it in their future.

... this whole para has gone out of topic. Here you need to give a reason as to why you hold that position. Once you tell the reason to the reader, you need to support it with a specific example. However, the reason here is not at all clear. Why do you talk about education? How do you relate it to the topic? You need to re-do this para :(
dumi   
Jun 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ; We are getting more and more greedy & selfish; Should we go back to the past? [6]

English is not an easy language with no good rules, I must admit! Focus on correcting the grammar, then use sophisticated vocab.

.... Yes, you need to start with vocabulary that is familiar to you and you are very sure about the usage of words. Otherwise you will in trouble when you try to meddle with new words too often.

quote=sunnyback]As deprive material and fortune can't eliminate economic criminal, return to the past can't change the nature of human character. [/quote].... this sentence is very confusing. The first part has major grammar issues. What do you really try to convey the readers?
dumi   
Jun 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Integrated writing task - Team Work is the best way to handle a new project [5]

First, the reading claims that having a wider range of knowledge, expertise, and skills in a team work will lead to better results.

First, the reading passage claims that a team exerts a greater power than that of an individual in terms of knowledge, expertise and skills.

However, the professor says that it is not going to happen all the time and of course in all projects.

However, the professor counter argues that this situation is different according to the type and nature of projects.
dumi   
Jun 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / Same laws should be applied to Tobacco as they are applied to Heroin [3]

Follow the outline suggested by jkjeremy. Also don't forget to support your reasons with a specific example that can convince your reason to the reader.

It's important that you include the prompt in your post so that others can give you better and more relevant feed backs for you.

You can write well.... with practice you can improve a lot. Also, practise with time and aim for a good score. Pay attention to the above advice and do more essays on similar topics. Post them here for comments!
dumi   
Jun 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / Break after high school has advantages and disadvantages [8]

Yes.... you are right because it is the easiest way to handle this task. Considering the time factor, you should not complicate things and train yourself to maximize the outcome within the stipulated time period. However, you can also take a moderate stance and have each of the two body paras to talk for the two different sides of the argument.

Below, I will discuss advantage and disadvantages.

I guess, it is better if you replace this line with a sentence that affirms your position on this argument.
dumi   
Jun 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / The Effects of TV on Society, especially on children; [7]

Thanks for your comments. I will modify the way of writing.

I'm sure you will ... Redo this essay and post it to the forum. We will help you with comments to improve :)
dumi   
Jun 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / Now a days technologies have became a very important aspect of everybodys lives! [4]

Now a days technologies have became a very important aspect of everybodys lives. These are the things we are using in our day today life like cell phones,computers,laptops. Some belive that with the help of technologies students now a days can learn more information and learn it more quickly; others would disagree. In my view with the help of technology students can learn more information and learn it more quickly for two important reasons.

There is lot of repetition here and some ideas are expressedvabruptly. For example;

These are the things we are using in our day today life like cell phones,computers,laptops.

....why they are so popular? What do they offer to our lives?
Also,

Some belive that with the help of technologies students now a days can learn more information and learn it more quickly

You access information and not learn information.
dumi   
Jun 28, 2013
Scholarship / MEDLIFE chapter; Pursue Your Passion Scholarship [4]

I have spent the last six months establishing a MEDLIFE chapter (nonprofit that provides medical aid to South American slums) on my campus with the support of 110 motivated and passionate students who also want quality healthcare to become a basic human right.

I spent last six months trying to establish a MEDLIFE Chapter( NGO providing medical aid to South American slum dwellers) for my campus with the support of 110 motivated and passionate students who also share the belief that every human being has a right to receive quality healthcare.
dumi   
Jun 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Should there be a law to get every child immunized? [3]

Its widely believed thatnowaday, using vaccines can prevent getting affected from lots of viruses

.... Should be either ; It is / It's, nowadays
Also, why only nowadays? Even in the past, people used vaccines as a disease prevention method.

I think that without vaccines the diseases could return and spread out easily from one person to another

However, I think it is necessary to force people to get themselves immunized, especially the young children, in order to prevent them from childhood diseases.

I think you need to pay attention to the essay format.
dumi   
Jun 28, 2013
Scholarship / Women in science/ BlackBerry mobile Computing Scholarship [3]

I believe, as a women, being a recipient of BlackBerry Mobile Computing Scholarship will increase my knowledge in the field I plan to major in which is Computer Science for Gaming

...you need to express why it is specially important for a woman.

I feel as a beginner, that I can represent the women who came before in my steps, who have participated in Blackberry Mobile Computing Program, that which in return will greater my chances in becoming a "women in science".

I like if you have a few shorter sentences insteadcof a very long one. Then you ideas would flow better.

Other than that, maybe throw in some personal examples of personal hobbies.

.... a good suggestion !
dumi   
Jun 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Is CHANGE good or bad? / People's preferences [3]

...I guess your prompt asks you about your stand on this. To which side you belong? Those like to change or those who reject change. So it is better you express your view point in the introduction itsef.

Anyways...you display very good writing skills. Good luck with exam !
dumi   
Jun 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / Ielts Task 1: Main reasons for migration to and from the UK [3]

The given pie charts present data concerning the mai and incentives why people migrated to and from the UK in 2007.

...good

Overall, the majority of emigrants and immigrants cited employment as their chief culprit for migration.

....culprit?....this word is used to describe a person who is guilty of a crime. So, I strongly feel it is inappropriate to use this word for your idea. Simply say ;

Overall, the majority of emigrants and immigrants cited employment as their main reason for migration.
dumi   
Jun 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / What's more influencial on child's development? Family influence or Other factors? [6]

Many people have been staggered by the question about the factor which has the greatest influence on a child's development. Some people believedbelieve that families are the answers, but a number of people think that other factors such as friends, TV, etc have the most influence on a child's development. This essay will describe the writer's viewpoint and opinion on both opinions.

State your position - do you think family matters the most ? Or otherwise?

It cannot be denied the role of families, especially parents on children's development as parents take shape the child's personalities and growth.

...."parents" getting repeated. You can express this idea more direct and in a more simple and concievable manner:
The parents play a very important role in their children's development. They are the people who are instrumental in shaping the child's personality. ...now give a more specific example to back this argument. For example;

For example, it is the parents who influence children's value system. This is why parents go to the extent of punishing children for being dishonest. Doing so they hope to prepare their children to be honest citizens in society.

Keep practising! You will keep improving with each practise session!
dumi   
Jun 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / Imported fruits &vegetables can affect the home grown vegetable market [2]

Economy is crucial for our life, so each country has its own standard for importing and exporting products, it is different from one country to another.

... This sentence is poorly organized. You need to rephrase this.

Bringing products from outside has greatcan greatly affect on the markets and on the home grown products, this has a negative and postive affects, on one hand , domestic vegetables and fruits in some countries cant supply the great number of people ,so those goverments should put a good system for importing fruits and vegetables from outside, surely this can have an influence on the prize of vegetables and fruits on the markets,and also on the homegrown products .

.... this sentence is too very long. It runs to almost three lines. Avoid such lengthy sentences because you tend to get carried away at the end. Also, the reader has to memorize so many details to keep a track of what you say. The reader does not like it for sure, and your aim should be to please the reader :D
dumi   
Jun 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1: The highest qualification attained by sex... [2]

The chart below illustrates the highest qualifications gained by male and female for the working age in Wales in 2001/02.

... good start.

As we can see from the data that GCE A level and GCSE grade A*-C were attained most by male and female respectively.

... Better say "The bar chart illustrates" or " The chart shows" .... Don't sound too personal and consume more words here as you are supposed to summarize the information.

Hope the following link would help you gain some knowledge about the writing outline for this task;
dumi   
Jun 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / Universities should provide both knowledge and skills needed in the workplace [4]

CollegialCollege education plays an important role onin employment opportunityopportunities these days. SuchemployersEmployers often have beenhave become increasingly interested not only skills but also knowledge. Some universities, however, often have placed the emphasis on knowledge in their own ways. This is strongly disagreed that skill acquisition is also crucial especially in detailed careers and has more job opportunities.

.... you need to improve presentation of this introduction. I suggest you to do it again.
Collegial is wrong... there is no such word. Also pay attention to punctuation.

This is strongly disagreed that skill acquisition is also crucial especially in detailed careers and has more job opportunities.

.... This sentence is very confusing and the reader cannot understand what you try to convey. Say it using direct speech. That is the best way to express your ideas clear and convincing;

I strongly disagree that ???????????? ( tell what you disagree)
or
I strongly agree that ????????? (tell what you agree)
dumi   
Jun 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ; MOBILE PHONES - Essential or Unnecessary? [4]

It seems you are new to this forum. Please select the forum "writing feedback" for your essays written on IELTS tasks. Also provide a meaningful topic in the Subject field when you open a new thread. These practices will help you earn good feed backs for your essays.

Now regarding your essay, as others suggest you need to improve a lot. First, I wish to stress a very basic point. Your essay looks so messy. It's always good to present a neat and tidy essay to your examiner. Start sentences with capital letters and separate paragraphs.
dumi   
Jun 27, 2013
Graduate / We successfully implemented the major project "Aid for blind people using image processing" [12]

I think there's no harm with starting that cliche and it provides a more creative opening for your response. But then quickly get to yourself and tell them how you developed your passion for this field. What did you do to pursue your passion ? What were your achievements and credentials? What you want to do next?

I think you have lots of stuff here, and it is only a matter of rearranging them in a more creative way. And remember, the SOP is your opportunity to tell them about your as a person and most probably your chance of making first impressions about you to them.
dumi   
Jun 27, 2013
Undergraduate / I am the first child in the family of five - Experiences/persons made me choose my career [4]

I am a very logical person thatwhobelieves that problems and situations does do not define one"s self , and one should not be afraid to dream big as long as you arehe or she is diligent, focused and hardworking.

.... Better you break up this sentence to improve clarity;
I am a very logical person and believe that problems and situations have little do with defining one's character and personality. Therefore, I think there is no harm in dreaming big as long as I am diligent, focused and hardworking. .... I think you need to bring yourself into the center.

Choosing a career in the health sector was not a decision I made growing up, my mother was a medical laboratory scientist and she told me that even as a child, I would ask her why she was drawing blood from her patients and I was so inquisitive to know a lot of things in health, so it did not come as a surprise to them when I told that I would like to become a Nurse.

... you tend to write very lengthy sentences. That's a bit of a problematic habit because it disturbs your flow of ideas and get you carried away from where you started. You need to pay attention to this fact. Better rephrase this line!
dumi   
Jun 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / Who Am I?The most basic question, but I'm never able to answer! [6]

I can contemplate on this seemingly simple question for years without establishing who I am as a person and my purpose here on earth.

... in the first line you said it is the most basic question and therefore this sounds repetitive. Without that part, it sounds better.

my experiences have made a big impact inon who I am to become

.... my experiences have made a big impact on shaping my character and personality.

My mom and dad are some of the most incredible parents I know.

... this you said in your earlier sentence and hence this one becomes redundant.

They love me to death and play a huge role in making me the mature, loving, and respectful 17 year old I am today .

They love me so deeply and has played and still play a huge role in molding me into a mature, loving and respectful seventeen year old.

I love your unique style of writing. It's very well presented and you seem to be very creative :)
dumi   
Jun 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1; GDP Growth for 3 different countries [3]

Where are your graphs? Please upload them using "attach file" for our reference if you intend to receive more meaningful comments. Also, you need to follow the appropriate structure for this task.

This bar chart shows the percentages of the GDP growth for three different countries over a period of four years starting in 2007.

.... this is good and have this as your introduction. Provide more meaningful comments on others' threads to stay active in this forum!
dumi   
Jun 26, 2013
Letters / IETLTS; Letter to the shop complaining about a defected radio [5]

I am writing you this letter to let you know a complain about the service of your shop.

... you better introduce the issue briefly. Before this line, tell them you purchased a radio ( indicate the model and a serial number of and receipt no for them to trace the item) on such an such date from their shop.

However,I bought a radio from a local branch of your chain shops but the sound of the radio was not clear at all as it seems there are some problems in the sound boxes.

... the first part should go to your introductory line. Here you need to explain the problem. Tell what happened when you started using it.
dumi   
Jun 26, 2013
Letters / Recommendation Letter - for an iOS Developer [5]

Carlos Pagés worked at Mobaloo as an iOS Developer for 6 month from February to July 2011.

.... It's better that you start with saying;

I have known Mr Carlos Pages since xxxxxxx in the capacity of (your designation) since (date) .... This gives more detailed information to the third party as to how you know this guy and it would enhance credibility of your recommendation.

During that period we could check his excellent professional preparation, his high-level skills, his great personal qualities and his high standard of teamwork.

During this short tenure, he displayed his excellent professional preparation, high level skills, great personal qualities and high team spirit.
dumi   
Jun 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / IETLS TASK 2; More money should be spend on education and sports? [4]

First, you need to give a meaningful topic for your essays when you open a new thread. That helps you earn good comments.

Education plays an important role in improving people's life since the down of time .

Throughout the history, governments have providedbeen providinghumanity(???) not only with works but also with the knowledge.

...."humanity" means " a collection of humans" or "a condition of being human" or "human nature". So I guess this is not what you wanted to mean. This is my suggestion;

Throughout the history, governments have been providing facilities and assistance to enhance the knowledge level of its people.

This argument will be proven byliking(???) at how education can both reduce poverty and help people to increase their knowledge and discover things about the world.

.... it should be replaced with the word "looking"
dumi   
Jun 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOURISM and its IMPACT on our society [7]

First, what's the purpose of this writing? IELTS, TOEFL, GRE or what? It's good that you give that information to us so that we can provide you with more relevant feed backs that are aligned with those particular essay tasks. Please do it in your next thread!

One of the most essential things for toursim to be successful in a particular place isathe quality of the enviromentenvironment, both natural and man-made.

However tourism involves many activities that have a negative effects on theenviromentenvironment

... hey ... watch your spelling for "environment" :D

itIt can putapply a great pressure on an area,and lead to negative enviromentalenvironmental impacts on air and water quality,vegetation,soil,wild life,and many other thing.

transportTransportation by air , road, rail is rising steadily because of increase in the number of tourists.

... Make sure you start sentences with capital letters.

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