vangiespen
Jan 26, 2016
Writing Feedback / I believe that the knowledge that I have acquired from my experiences is more important - TOEFL [4]
sSo, we are not looking at any problem in logical thinking, reasoning, or sentence development. What we do have a problem with, is your ability to create more complex sentences using a more varied vocabulary. I hope you are trying your best to increase your vocabulary usage somehow. Your writing continues to improve but I would like to see a more improved vocabulary and sentence device somehow. Keep up the good work though :-)
... they have opened my eyeson TO many facts and THAT have shaped my way of thinking AND OPINIONS. However, despite of the undeniable benefits of books,... my experiences is ARE FAR more important because it THESE LESSONS AND EXPERIENCES enabled me to develop my skills and be more mature AS A PERSON.
... We generally have toexperiencE TRY it and practice it ... I did not just read books that dealT with this topic... practised PRACTICED writing every day.
Additionally,with experience, we HELPS ONE become .... It teachES us how get ourselves from troubles PREVENT PROBLEMS. ...
... .This THE latter allows us to ... practise PRACTICE the different knowledge that we read about them in books.
sSo, we are not looking at any problem in logical thinking, reasoning, or sentence development. What we do have a problem with, is your ability to create more complex sentences using a more varied vocabulary. I hope you are trying your best to increase your vocabulary usage somehow. Your writing continues to improve but I would like to see a more improved vocabulary and sentence device somehow. Keep up the good work though :-)
... they have opened my eyes
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