Writing Feedback / The chart shows the leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. [3]

The bar chart below illustrates the number of leisure hours which are entertained by male and female, according to their employment status.

It can be clearly seen from the figures that in unemployment and
retired categories, both sexes used huge amount of leisure hours in a typical week, whereas, full time employees have spent a little time for spare time activities.

Among those full time workers, male had 50 hours of leisure, while female had just fewer approxlmately 10 hours than men workers. In the second category, there were no given figure for male, but female had 40 hours of leisure, only slightly more than women in full time job category.

In the next two unemployment and retired categories, leisure time
showed striking increase for both sexes. Herе too, men enjoyed more leisure time over 80 hours, compared with 70 hours for women, perhaps women spend more time working in the home than men. Finally, housewives enjoyed about 54 hours, but again there were no figure given for househusbands.

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Writing Feedback / task 1. visits abroad made by UK residents from 1994 to 1998 by purpose and destination [3]

The given charts below illustrate the quantity of visits abroad made by United Kingdom residents between 1994 and 1Э98 by purpose and destination.

Throughout the period shown, the primary reason in each category why
people went abroad was to spend their holiday. It is also noticeable that majority of people preferred to visit western countries for aII-purposes. (Holiday, business, visits to loved one and other reasons)

In 1994. more than 15 million people went to abroad for holiday, while
next popular reason is trade for 3,155 people. By contrast, less than
2,700 visitors went foreign counties in order to see friends and relatives. Finally, almost 1000 visitors went abroad for other personal
reasons. Over the following 4 years, there was a gradual increase of number of visitors by purpose of visit. Only in 1995 people showed the
decrease in each reason category.

It is clear from the second table that 19,371 visitors visited Western
countries in 1994. Until 1998, number of visitors increased slowly in western, north and other areas. However, again in 1995 people .
decreased who visit abroad in categories.

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Writing Feedback / TASK 1. the table shows the consumer durables owned in Britain from 1972-1983 [5]

The table compares the percentages of British people using different durable goods such as vacuum cleaner, washing
machine, etc between 1972 and 1983.

Throughout the period shown, the most used equipment was television in each year. However, there was a marked increase in the popularity of other consumer durables, particularly using telephone and central heating.

In 1972, 93% of British home had a television and this result increased to 98% in 1983. The majority of people also had vacuum cleaner and refrigerator. These durable goods were owned by over 30% of households by the end of the period.Washing machines were the fourth most common equipment, with 66% of households in 1972, rising to 80% of households in 1983.

By contrast, less than 40% of home had a central heating in 1972 and this item increased dramatically, with more
than 60% of households to 1983. In the first year, 42% of British families had telephone and again this equipment increased fast to 77% of
household as well as central heating at the end of the year.

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Writing Feedback / Task 1. imprisonment in five counties between 1930 and 1980 [5]

The chart compares the figures for imprisonment among five major countries in five decades. (1930-1980)

While the figures fluctuated over the period shown, it is noticeable that the USE had the highest number of prisoners. On the other hand, Great Britain had the lowest number of prisoners for the majority of the years.

According to the figures, the Great Britain prisoners had increased steadily from 30000 in 1930 to 80000 at the end of the period. On the other side, in Australia and New Zealand the

number of prisoners fell sharply just under 50000 in decade period. During the period, the number of prisoners increased gradually in three countries. (UK, Australia, New Zealand) These countries showed the similar number of

prisoners more than 60000 in 1970s.

Canada had the highest number of prisoners compared to other four counties. However this result decreased over the period
from 1930 to 1980 with fluctuation. Finally, the population of UnitedState prisoners increased rapidly from the beginning of
the year until the end of the period with again fluctuation.

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Writing Feedback / Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share. [3]

The bar chart compares the number of Japanese visitors travelling abroad in a 10 year period, while the given line graph illustrates the information about Australia's share of marketing for Japan tourists.

It is clear that the highest number of Japanese tourists went to abroad in 1995, while just more than 6 % of them travelled to Australia in 1994.

According to the graph that just less than 5 million Japanese tourists travelled to abroad in the first period. This trend increased steadily from 5 million in 1985 to 15 million in 1995. However, in 1991, the number of Japanese tourists had decreased from 11 million to about 10 million.

The percentage of Japanese tourists increased sharply and reached more than 6 % who visited to Australia between 1885 and 1994. While in 1989, it decreased to just over 4 percent, the following 5 years the percentage of tourists showed an increasing in the Australia's share of marketing for Japanese.

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Writing Feedback / Traditional and International - Why do we need music? 'essence of individuals and society' [3]

There are many different types of music in the world today. Is the traditional music of a county more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

Nowadays, there are several types of music in the world such as
traditional and International music. Wherever people go, they can listen to any kind of music with the help of new hand devices. Some
people prefer to listen cultural, while others want to listen International music. In my pointofview, I believe that traditional music is more significant than International one.

Music plays an important role in our life. From the beginning of civilisation music was one of the most fundairtental parts of our society. Every one listen to it on occasions ranging from listening soft music for relaxing after hard work, or motivating themselves by

listening fast music while training or doing some exercises. For instance, in our training club, we always listen to fast playful music in order to avoid from tiredness. Most of members of club and I believe that music gives us extra power to do more complex exercises while training.

Present days, traditional music is losing its popularity because of
international music is spread everywhere. But I think traditional
music is more important because it shows country's culture, history
and citizens' life. Therefore, traditional music helps to keep alive
countiy's culture and historical events. For example, in our country signers perform only traditional music in celebration such as Navruz
and wedding ceremonies. If the international music would replaced it then the whole historical experience will die.

By way of conclusion, any kind of music is a very essence of individuals and society for ages. But I believe that traditional music is

more powerful than international.

Writing Feedback / Spending money on six consumer goods in Europe between 1980 -1990. 'British spent more' [5]

The bar chart compares the four countries in terms of amount spent
on six consumer goods.

It is clear that British people spent significantly more money than
people in other three countries on all six items. Of the six items, the
most money spent on last photographic film item by customers in
German, Italy, France and Britain countries.

British people spent just over £ 170.000 on Photographic film which is
the highest figure on the chart. By contrast, German spenders spent
just over £ 150.000 on every item. They spent more money on the
first two items than those next four goods.

The figures spending on toys werе the same in both Italy and France
at nearly £ 160.000. However, France spent more money on
photographic film and CDs, Italians were higher spender on personal
stereos and Tennis racquets. Among tennis racquets spenders, France
spent £ 145.000 which is the lowest figure compared with other three
countries.

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Writing Feedback / Should wealthy nations be required to share among poorer; education and food - government [7]

Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the government of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

In this complicated modern life, there are a lot of concerns that humans are facing each of them. Both wealthy people and government are trying to solve problems such as environmental, political, food aid and educational by spending huge amount of money. Some people think that developed countries should support poor ones in terms of food and education, while others believe that this support is responsibility of wealthy nations.

Every country has their own responsibility to look after their citizens. Firstly, governments should support their citizens with medical free service and food in order to save healthy life. Secondly, education also has significant role to play development of government. Most developed countries spend most part of their budget to improvement of education such as America, Japan and Great Britain. Finally, except their nations, developed countries should help other young developing countries by supporting such things as medicine, education and resources.

On the other hand, some people require from wealthy nations to share their own wealth among poor nations by providing food and teaching. I personally disagree with those people who stated this opinion. Although, sharing wealth with poorer nations is very necessary, I think that poor nations may become dependent on the aid. For instance, in Africa and Nigeria people very dependent to aid of both government and wealthy nations support.

By way of conclusion, I believe that providing education and food is responsibility of government not wealthy nations. However, wealthy nations should also help in some cases to poor nations.

Writing Feedback / Problems overrellance on cars can cause/suggest at least one possible solution. [5]

More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. discrible some of the problems overrellance on cars cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

Nowadays the world is undergoing a rapid change due to new technologies are impacting many people, environment and also have created a lot of issues. People are depanded on their own cars, instead of using public trasporations which mean this can be primary cause to global warming. In my opinion, there are three main possible solutions for this issue and i shall try to explain why government should consider rapidly before it brings other problems

Number of private vehicles dispite thier comfort and fast pace, more and more people suffered from them. Firstly, private vehicles are the main cause to the traffic jams and many people stuck in it in the morning while going to work and coming back home in the evening. if every people use their own avtomobile, it will also discharge different detrimental gases like carbon dioxide, sulfur oxide and so more, and it will be increase pollution in atmosphere. Because of pollution, it is hard to breathe from pure air in urban cities and unhealthy people cannot live with polluted air. Secondly, it will also raise diseases among animals and birds. if animals get illness, people will also suffer form similar illness when they consume meal of that unhealthy animals. Finally, private vehicles use many natural resources such as gas and fuels.

because of all these causes, government need to take certain actions to prevent using many cars and personal avtomobiles. First of all, government should increase public transportaion models such as bus, cab, train and so forth. Therefore, they should also make them cheaper so that many people can use them. Secondly, petrol price should be more increased so, people might think before purchose private vehicles. thirdly, government should increase taxs for driving private cars.

In summary, three main causes which are given above can be good reasons to halt private cars from increasing in urban cities. And government should increase public transportaions rather than private. In my opinion, children also should be tought at schools about how cars influence to nature and people.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: UK telephone calls - number of mins [3]

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE TOTAL NUMBER OF MINUTES (IN BILLIONS) OF TELEPHONE CALLS IN THE UK, DIVIDED INTO THREE CATEGORIES FROM 1995-2002.

The bar chart compares the overall amount of minutes of UK telephone calls, by three categories between 1995 and 2002.

It is clear that local-fixed line was by far the most used telephone call type. It is also noticeable that although mobile calls increased dramaticly for the last 4-year period, it was fewest used type.

In 1995, more than 70 billion minutes were used to make a call in local - fixed line, whereas, national and international, and mobiles were used about 38 billion and only less than 4 billion minutes. Between the years of 1995 and 1998, mobile calls increased steadily from lowest point to around 9 billion minutes. the following years, this type rose rapidly from 13 billion to 45 billion minutes over the 4-year period.

Clearly, national and international -fixed line type increased steadily from the beginning 1995 to the end of the year 2002. By contrast, local -fixed line increased gradually to the highest point 90 billion minutes by 1999. However, during again the 4- year period, you can see a little by little fall in local -fixed line from peaking point to lowest around 72 billion minutes.

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Speeches / Presentation about genetically modified foods - GM crops contain B.t toxins / Monsanto facts [2]

Presentation about genetically modified foods

Introducing yourself to examiner
Good morning, good morning examiner, I'd like to start by introducting myself. My name is Rakhimov Khojiakbar. My ID number is B1401028. I'm a speaker of group 107. In today's presentation I'm going to speak about GMO. I very much appreciate your important time and attention to my speech if you have got any question, it would be Ok, if you save it for the end.

BEGINNING:
Right, well Erm. Shell we start? Either mankind will stop Monsanto or Monsanto will stop mankind. What I want to say with this sentence, I will explain later on.

OUTLINE:
So, let me start from a brief outline of main points, in introduction part I'm going to talk about GMO's meaning and short history of GM crops. In the body part, I will talk about both sides of GM crops and I'll explain the evil of Monsanto.

Finally, I conclude my speech with summary, recommendation and prediction.
INTRODUCTION:
What is GM Crops? What are GM foods? 'Genetically Modified Organisms" are plants or animals that have been genetically engineered with DNA from bacteria, viruses or plants and animals. As you can see from the screen these 10 types of fruit and vegetables such as carrot, strawberry, corn, garden radish, tomato, melon, watermelon and so forth are genetically engineered in order to enhance size, taste and quality.

History of GMO:
The first genetically modified food was Flavr Savr tomato which was grown in California in 1994. They didn't transfer any other gene to tomato. They just modified functioning of existing gene. The products was itself was unprofitable; however it opened the doors for other GM foods. In the USA genetic modification has expanded into almost every area of food production.

Great Advantages of GMO:
Nowadays, people always talk about advantages and drawbacks of GM food. But is it really safe? Are they telling us the truth about GM crops? The people responsible for promoting GM foods argue that it is scientifically safe and capacity to provide for 1000000s of starving and famished people. GM foods have a desirably better taste and quality. Therefore, it doesn't take a long time to produce foods which can provide more people. GM foods are very transportable for long distances such as from country to county. Let me explain tomato the picture on the screen. You can see the ordinary tomato will damage in 20 days, but genetically engineered tomato can keep the quality and freshness for 45 days. On top of all that, it is possible to grow GM crops even inhospitable places.

Negative side effects of GMO:
Firstly, Gm crops have B.t toxins which kill many species of insect larvae indiscriminately. It is nowadays somehow impossible to design a b.t toxin that would kill only crop-damaging pests and remain harmless other non-target species.

Secondly, there can be no doubt that GM foods haven't yet labeled in markets. A significant majority of Americans want to know if the food they are buying contains powerful biotech or not. Many companies have succeeded in keeping this kind of information from the public.

Thirdly, many children in United States and Europe have developed life threatening allergies to peanuts and other foods. Brazil nuts into soybeans were abandoned because of the fear of causing unexpected allergic reactions. In addition, GM crops might accidently cause to the cancers too.

Shocking new Cancer Study - Monsanto:
Have you ever heard about MONSANTO ?
If you haven't come across to this, now I am going to give really bad horrible facts about MONSANTO Company. MONSANTO Company is American multinational agrochemical and agricultural biotechnology corporation which produce genetically engineered brand crops (approximately 40% of foods). Back in days, Monsanto was responsible for some of the most damaging toxins in US history. In 25th of May, 2013 people can easily remember worldwide protest against MONSANTO which cited concern on public health from young child. The protest is called MARCH against Monsanto. Around the world 50 countries and more than 250 cities joined to fight against MONSANTO Company. But these protests didn't halt company from process. In a recent scientific study show shocking news, like 70% of female rats died prematurely with Tumor cancer when fed GMOs. Because of corruption, Monsanto is still working. According to American citizens, Monsanto is spending thousands of dollars to try to defeat proposition 37 in California. People said that they didn't want consumers to know the truth about GMO's in the food they buy.

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Writing Feedback / Advertising - there are many advantages side of it which is changing our lives to positive side [3]

Theme: Advertising is all around us: it is an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. you should write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, everyone can see advertisements everywhere. Some people think that is has a positive effect in our lives whereas others believe its drawbacks outweigh. from my experience, I think that advertisements have made our life more comfortable, despite few negative aspects.

First of all, advertising inform people with new products and their price, quality and the way how to find them, on TV or on radio. Even in the Internet it is possible to search for new products following side advertisements. People do not need any more for instance, shopping around a lot of markets looking for just a small thing with wasting many hours. Secondly, many businessmen can earn big amount of money, because nowadays marketing based on advertisement. If there is no any advertising, the world economy wouldn't rise as fast as now. Finally, advertising companies may give job opportunities for unemployment society who are sitting at home and doing nothing.

On the other hand, sometimes advertisements motivate people for some products which they do not need especially women. They will run to purchase these advertised products such as cosmetics, clothes, jewelries and so forth. Therefore, alcoholic product advertisements stimulate young generation to drink or eat them which are causing teenager addictions. Lastly, some people buy good advertised medical products without doctor's permission which have a lot of side effects to human body.

In conclusion, despite some drawbacks of advertising, there are many advantages side of it which is changing our lives to positive side. I personally believe that advertisement has farther outweighed benefits than its negatives.

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Writing Feedback / Almost all things and thoughts have both benefits and drawbacks - attractions visitors [3]

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

In our contemporary world travelling has become easier and more popular. Some think that people from abroad must spend more than local visitors. However, I disagree with this statement. In the following paragraphs main sides of this attitude will be discussed.

First of all, almost all things and thoughts have both benefits and drawbacks. It is said that local visitors have more privileges than foreigners. Thus, this is not right way due to our general human principles. Such inappropriate laws can be judged as discrimination of strangers.

Moreover, nowadays it is difficult to attract people to museums or other cultural sights owing to advanced technologies. Hi-tech in twenty first century eclipsed our interests that used to be popular. So, with such new rules we can jeopardize haunting of cultural and historical places by tourists.

Furthermore, foreigners should have more rights and opportunities. Because they are potential introducers of our culture to their own nations. Our general impression partially depends on them. Well, we should be more accurate especially with prices in order to save reputation.

In conclusion, so many people, so many opinions. On one hand some people see more benefits, on the other others recognize drawbacks. We should be commonsense and think adequately. As it was noticed at the beginning anything has both advantages and disadvantages. Nevertheless, in some cases negatives more than positives or opposite. Only if right way is chosen, this problem can be solved.

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Writing Feedback / Task 1. Global sales of top mobile phones [2]

The bar chart below shows global sales of the top of five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

The bar chart compares five various mobile phones in terms of the overall sales by brand that they have sold (millions) phones.

It is clear that the Nokia is the by the most successful sold by brand in the years. It is also noticeable that the figures for Nokia and Samsung mobile phones sold by any particular years tend to be fairly similar.

The Samsung has sold a total of around 450% in 2013, including approximately 330% in 2011, around 240% in 2009 years. In the second place on all-time Nokia sold just well 440% in 2009 and again the number of Nokia sold around 420% and 250% from 2011 to 2013.

Only three other phone companies the Apple, LG and ZTE have sold more than 50% global mobile phones, all with similar proportions of each type of mobiles. After that LG was followed by ZTE are only other global mobile with a noticeable the lowest proportion of phone about 110% between 2009 and 2013. The Apple mobile company accounting for the smallest proportion around (20%-140%) from 2009 to 2013.

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Writing Feedback / Percentages of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features [2]

users of fancy mobile phones

The table shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features between 2006 and 2010.

Throughout the period shown, the main purpose of using mobile phone is making calls. But after the years, technologies are increased and developed new function of mobile phones such as Internet and record video.

In 2006, each person used mobile phone for making calls and 73% of them used phones to send text messages and 66% of people used it to take photos. Less 20 % of people played games and music on their phones.There were no figures for users doing Internet searches and recording video.

In 2010, all were changed. Using Internet function was 44% in 2008 and would increase to 73% in 2010. There was also a significant rise in the use of mobile to play games and to record video, with figyres reaching 41% and 35% in 2010. Using phone to take photos and send messages is little changed.

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