Writing Feedback / Tolerance and sympathy are more crutial than a truth. [4]

Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people?

Personally speaking, I believe always telling the truth is not the most important consideration in relationships , and I will argue this point from three aspects.

First of all, I claim that there are some cases in our daily life which make us inclined to not telling the truth. And unfortunately I have experienced that kind of situations since I was at the age of 6. My dear uncle Joshua once was discovered having a troublesome lung cancer when he was 35. He was so young that it was hard for us to convince ourselves that he was sufferring such a tragedy. It was still clear for me that my parents warned me that I should keep it as a secret and telling something comfortable to my uncle.

So much for the white lie part, and I would like to give my next point now. There are a few elections which I think more important than honesty in relationships, such as tolerance and sympathy.

Tolerance is much more significant between people's communication in my opinion. According to the scientific research, people lie more than 10 times on average during their connection with others. It is implausible that individuals do not lie to people around them , even their lovers, family and friends. It is more reasonable for us to be tolerant and open to the lies. And we need to be strong enough to be vaccinate to the liers.

Last but not least, sypathy is also more crutial than truth. As I expressed above, it is incredible to find someone who do not lie in their life in any relationship. Sometimes they do it intentionally while sometimes they are just reluctant to compromise with the realistic world. Compared to complaining about being fooled, how about cooling down and trying to be considerate to their embarassed agony. And we are supposed to balance between the truth and the consistence of relationship.

Writing Feedback / We should adopt a prudent attitude towards new comrades and rely on proved friends [5]

It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. (TPO3 writing)

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Within the last generations, there has been an unprecedent development in Internet technology. Due to the great innovation, it is easy for us to make large number of new friends in our daily life. However, personally speaking, I believe that it is more crutial to keep old friends than it is to make new friends, and I would like to present three reasons why I insist on this opinion: emotions, hobbies and values.

First of all, old friends have a good command of the paths of our feelings and emotions becuase they have been in relationship with us for many years. Let us form a picture in our mind: who are there waiting our complaints when we are punished by the boss during the daytime and never give us any hard time when we feel frustrated? That's our old friends who accompany with us for several hours just delivering tissues to us.

Second, it is old friends that share the same hobbies with us so that every weekend we can find guys who play computer games in team with us or girls who go shopping together. Take myself as an example: I have a particualr interest in vampire movies or tv series; in consequence of that, there is always an appontment discussing vampire stories with my best girl every Sunday afternoon. I mean you can not imagine me talking about horror characters with some acquaintances.

Last but not least, there is no doubts that old friends have the similar values and virtues with us. Admittedly it is excited to make new relationship with others, however, the process maybe risky. For instance, some people are relatively dishonest and disreliable, which could make an adverse impact on us. In comparison to old ones, new friends are likely to render us to feel uncomfortable.

From my point of view, even if the technology has allowed us to make new friends quickly and conveniently, we should adopt a prudent attutude towards new friends. And at the same time keeping old bodies is vitally important for us, from the aspects of feelings, hobbies and virtues.

Writing Feedback / Lecture points and statement about cars; Integrated Writing Task & Independent Writing Task of TPO 4 [NEW]

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Integrated Writing Task

Summarise the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made reading passage.

The opinion which was claimed in the reading passage that dinosaurs are endotherms was totally doubted by the scientists according to the lecture.

In the passage, the author argued that polar dinosaurs fossils which were discovered by the researchers indicate that these animals could sustain in such a frigid circumstance. However, the lecturer objected that polar animals just were not capable of migrating or hibernating in the polar area.

What's more, the listening content did admit that dinosaur fossils maintained leg bones which was underneath the body, but it was not the evidence to show that dinosaurs are endothermed. The truth is they use these strong and tough legs to support their extraordinary weight because of their large size.

Last but not least, it is true that a connection was in existence between endothermy and bone structure, but there was still other signals indicating that the growth of dinosaurs was inconsistent. When it comes to the temperature, the speed of growth was influenced obviously according to the observation from the scientists.

All in all, the lecture virtually contradicted the reading from three aspects: polar dinosaurs, leg position and Haversian canals.

Independent Writing Task

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

Within the last few generations, there has been an unprecedented development of the ways of human tranportation means. Admittedly, cars witnessed the drastic changes in our daily life and sometimes people feel that these machines create heavy burden of environmental pollution, however, they are still inevitable for three reasons: population, convenience and technological advances.

First of all, there is no doubt that people on the earth are increasing gradually, and this tendency of growth will not transform no matter in the short or long term. In consequense, people are supposed to necessitate the high desires of human's purchasing cars.

Second, as mentioned above, cars are an inevitable part in our life because of its great convenience. Cars are the prevailing choice among all the transportation means owing to its flexibility. It is available to us all the time and we can drive them to the places where we love.

What's the most important, the amount of cars will not decrease in the future, for engineers will be able to improve the technology to make cars to be environmentally friendly. It is more likely that cars will still be a good assistance when we want to make travels all over the world.

Even though cars have some disadvantages, these factors cannot obscure the fact that cars are vitally important for our development due to its convenience and flexiblity. Above all, I believe that cars will not be redundant machines and deserve better progression to be helpful.

Writing Feedback / ( TPO 5 ) things they like to do ? things they should do ? [3]

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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
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Within the last few generations, there has been an unprecedented development of entertaining means due to the advancement of technology. Take my uncle Joshua as an example: he pays the visit to the museums in the city to appreciate masterpieces of art on weekend periodically. Personally speaking, I disagree with the statement that people spend too much time on personal entertaining things which they like to do. By contrast, I believe that it is vitally important to enjoy ourselves in daily life from two perspectives: people's mental health and their outlook.

On the one hand, there is nothing wrong to pour our time into entertainment in society owing to our mental health. It is revealed in a scientific research that there are large number of individuals who died from homecides as a consequence of heavy pressure. Even though making strenuous efforts to lead a life is necessity, people are virtually supposed to pay attention to amusement to divert stress, especially after a tough day of work.

On the other hand, during the process of enjoyment, people are available to the access to a brand new world. When it comes to specific hobbies, it means having a good command of fresh experiences and knowledge from the communication with acquaintances. What's more, it is likely to make new relationship, which is helpful to shape the way of thinking and to render us to be much more tolerant to differences.

So from my point of view, it is true that we are obligated to do something to suit the society demands, but it is pivotal to be obsessed in things we like to do. Not to mention the spiritual burden from competitive society, it is reasonable for us to broaden our horizon.

Writing Feedback / (TOEFL) Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. [2]

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Within the last few generations, there has been an unprecedented development of society which made a drastic change in daily life. It is convenient to surf the Internet and to travel all over the world nowadays, not to mention colossal transformations of life in China. Personally speaking, life today is more convenient and comfortable than it was when my grandparents were children.

First of all, it is evident that a few decades ago, there was no access to the Internet or computers until 1980s. My grandparents do not have a good command of computers , while I am born in the Internet era, which gives me a fantastic oppotunity to learn what is happening all over the world and to make relationship with different people through social medias.

What's more, it is difficult to obscure the fact that people are more capable of travelling around the world whenever they want for the sake of the online tickets selling. Thanks to this improvement, we are able to go outside to meet different people, to make acquitances and broaden our horizons to discover the ideal lifestyles.

Last but not least, the world has witnessed the great changes of China since 1980s, which virtually improved the standards of people's life. According to the memory of my grandpa, it was a daydream to have meat when he was a child and children could be happy for several days after eating a candy owing to planning-economy. In 1980s, there was a famous reform which transformed people's life, so that I can purchase whatever I love from the market recently.

To conclude, there is no doubt that living today is easier that it was in the past , especially in a developng country, where a reform changes our lives in many aspects, such as computers and travelling and so on.

Writing Feedback / (TOEFL) Is it more important to learn facts from factual experiences? [2]

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Within the last few generations, there has been an unprecedented development in society, due to the advancement of technology. While it is true that learning concepts from textbooks is necessary, it is more pivotal to learn from factural experiences chronically and specifically.

Admittedly, there is nothing wrong with learning from books, where there are large amounts of knowledge and concepts. And if we have no idea of the backgrounding knowledge, it will be tougher to accomplish tasks in daily life than within concepts.

But what I want to argue is that, concepts all originate from practices, which means a chronical order in the process, determining that practices matter more. Without learning facts, there will never be the progress in the knowledge in history. And moreover, concepts are not able to predict what wll happen in the future, so that it is always incomplete.

In addition, people learning from their factural lives have advantages of being flexible to specific conditions. For example, there was no concept of innocence of insinity's killing until a lawyer discovered and detected particular cases in the United Kingdom. Take another example: consumers nowadays do not concentrate only on prices of products, and they pay attention to the quality, reliability and other features during the purchasing owing to flexiblity of humans, instead of clinging to knowledge and fixed concepts.

To conclude, I don't agree that it is more important to understand concepts.than to learn facts, for the sake of unpredictable future and people's flexible reactions to specific conditions.

Writing Feedback / Television advertising should not be allowed to children. The pravailing of TV in people's home. [2]

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Within the last few generations, there has been an unprecedented development of technology in society, which leads to the pravailing of television in people's home. While television makes a positive effect on everybody's entertainment, it is difficult to deny that TV advertising is adverse to young children, for the sake of redundant information, misleading effects and premature phenomenon.

First of all, television advertising are poured into children's life which is virtually harmful for the growth. It is reported by the researchers that the merchant need to repeat the same ad continuously for many times in the period of seven weeks, so that it can be remembered by people. Watching this kind of advertisement is no doubt a waste of time and those redundant information does not make any sense.

Second, advertising is misleading sometimes because of celebrities or wrong information. For example, a pair of sneaker repesented by a champion runner will leave an impression of being easily used and high-qualified, even though it is not good at speed. Take another instance: a yogurt ad may claim that it does not contain any fat in the beverage, however,they are trying to obscure the fact that the drink was abundant in sugar, which is also harmful to humans.

Last but not least, it is likely to show some violent plots or sextual indications in advertisements to appeal their consumers, especially under the heavy pressure of competition. The images can facilitate children to be premature and distort their innocent minds.

To conclude, I believe that young children should not be exposed to overflowing advertisements in order to protect them from dangers of redundant information, misleading knowledge and prematurity.

Writing Feedback / Agree or disagree: Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. [5]

Within the last few generations, there has been an unprecedented improvement of technology in society. People have been arguing on the question whether technology has an adverse effect on creativity for many years. Some people believe that technology distracts young people from innovation, however, I will claim that technology is vitally important for children's inventing from two perspectives: uniqueness and enthusiasm.

First of all, according to the definition of creativity, young individuals need to discover something new and unprecedented. It is critical for them to have a good command of what people have created before, so that they can make an actual difference. For instance: last year I watched a television show called the Shark Tank, in which a young pupil invented a cup always maintaining its temperature at an exact point. When talking about the process, he said that he did a lot of research to assure that nobody had done the same thing before.

In addition, there is another kind of approach of inventing, which is to combine two or even more imperceptibly irrelevant things in a brand new way. Take the train as an example: after the creating of steam machines, people combined engines with wheels carrying heavy goods on rails. Without the preceding contribution of technology, there will be less interesting inventions in this world. Children's creativity is greatly inspired by the continuous advancements of technology so that their enthusiasm is not iced.

To conclude, I strongly support the idea that technology facilitates children's creativity for the sake of uniqueness and inspiration. And we should pay attention to cultivating their creativity with the assistance of scientific techniques.

Writing Feedback / Internet: repetitive, violent and fraudulent information - it is uncomfortable for us to use it now [4]

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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?_________________________________________________________________________________________________

Within the last few generations, there has been an unprecedented improvement on technology in society, not to mention the great advencement of the Internet. A large number of people are so obssessed with the Internet so that they cannot live without it even in a moment. While the Internet brings great benefits to individuals all over the world, people are arguring whether the information from the Internet has created some problems. Personally speaking, the Internet provides us an access to redundant, violent and fraudulent information.

First of all, there is no doubt that the Internet offers us with a colossal amount of repetitive information. Take the Youtube as an example: once there is a piece of popular video updated on the web, it will be shared by millions of people, so that a considerable number of my friends will repost the message again and again. Sometimes I really want the website to have a specific function so that I can get rid of browsing redundant information, which is virtually a waste of time.

In addition, the Internet are believed to impair young people because of violent images showed in the online games. For instance, there was a famous case, where a young college student killed three classmates after playing violent online computer games in 2003 in China, because he was misled by the information and could not tell the realistic world with the game world. Violent information displayed on the Internet does have some consequences on juvenile delinquency.

Last but not least, the Internet makes it much more easier to get in touch with frauds than before. Hackers are so sneaky that they tend to take advantage of people's attentions on juicy gossip. Within one simple click, people are led to particular pages so that their computers are locked by illegal hackers and cannot be unlocked without ransom. What's even worse is that they are inventing new means to fool people following the development of the Internet.

In conclusion, the Internet has brought us with so much repetitive, violent and fraudulent information, as a result, it is uncomfortable for us to use it.

Writing Feedback / Is it better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects? Or the specialization has more value [2]

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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Within the last few generations, there has been an unprecedented development of education in society, so that people recognize that it is pivotal to attend colleges or universities to prepare for the future career. There is no doubt that schools are making strenuous efforts to cultivate elites for the whole society, and to fulfill this goal, there has been an discussion on whether students should learn broad knowledge or one professional subject. I claim that students should study both of them, and attention should be paid in different areas depending on different stages.

Take myself as an example: When I attended my university, I was just a 18-year-old girl who had no command of university things. There was no doubt that I was so confused at that time that I could not choose a major subject for myself. I really appreciated that the department did not arrange any specific subjects in the first year. By contrast, I was exposed to liberal courses resulting in my understanding of a wide variety of areas, which was helpful for me. I believe that showing students with all sorts of interesting areas is quite important for students' cultivation.

When I reached the stage becoming the senior in the school, I was totally determined what I want to do in the future and I had a good command of the career prospect of my specific subject. Prior to the decision, I discovered that I did not have the stomach for Math and that I had a great interest in Political Science. Only after so many trials and attempts, students can find what subjects they really want to major in. In addition, specific knowledge is crutial for students owing to professional working skills required in the process of work. For example: I need to learn practical management skills and specific departments of the Chinese government to prepare for the future job.

To conclude, both broad subjects and professional subjects are significant for students, and young people should weigh the importance of those knowledge depending on different stages in their lives.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL TSK: The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts and uncles) is still important nowadays [6]

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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Within the last few decades, there has been an unprecedented change of people's perception about family due to the advancement of technology. Nowadays, people tend to stay at home and communicate with family members through the Internet or social media. While it brings great convenience to individuals, it also weakens love and emphasy between family members. So I do not agree with the statement that the extended family is less important now than it was in the past.

First of all, influenced by Chinese traditional culture, I, who visit my family members in every Spring Festival, am so obssessed with this characteristic culture. As a young college student, living thousand miles away from home, I really miss my grandparents, aunts and uncles. They are so significant that they remind me of those joyful moments when we got together and enjoyed the Sping Festival Gala every year. I maintain the most important position in my heart for my extended family, which can be ascribed to the conventional culture.

Second, connection with a big family will be of great assistance when I am in trouble. For example, I remember there was a time, when my family had difficulty with budgets, and in the meanwhile, I was required to pay my tuition at the beginning of the semester. Once my family heard of the news, they help us to pay for the bill and I went to the college finally. Thanks to the great power of the extended family, I could fulfill my college dream.

Last but not least, living in an extend family is full of excitement due to a large amounts of anecdotals happening in the family. I am a big fan of the tv series Modern Family, where there is a colossal extended family. The show has given me a fabulous impression that the extended family can contribute to amusement of daily life. And it also reminds me of my own family, which give me many happy moments.

To conclude, even though social media allow individuals to communicate with family members online, I still believe the extended family is vital to people nowadays, because family members can help each other and bring a lot of fun, not to mention the traditional culture.

Writing Feedback / The development of people's perception of living in society results in the changes of managing money [10]

TOEFL: Children should not learn to manage their own money at young age.

Within the last few decades, there has been an unprecedented development of people's perception of living in society, which results in the drastic changes of managing money in daily life. Admittedly, cultivating young people to manage money at an early age is favorable for the sense of responsibility, however, compared with the disadvantages, I disagree with the statement that young people should learn to manage their money at young age from three perspectives: irreasonability, temptations outside and premature worldview.

First of all, children are too young to manage their money, since they are irreasonable to deal with financial problems. At early age, kids are not aware how crucial money could be, and they are more likely to spend money randomly on some useless goods. It is hard to deny that young individuals have difficulty with differentiating important things from trivial objects.

Second, kids are not immune to a variety of allure in the world, so that they cannot manage money well. Imagine the following situation: Will a child choose to save money firmly when faced with a large bar of delicious chocolate? Even adults sometimes hardly resist the appealing effect of it, not to mention young individuals. And the chocolate in the situation could be replaced by other harmful factors, such as junk food and game coins , which could do a tremendous amount of harm to young people.

Last but not least, children are supposed to enjoy the innocent moments when they are still young. It is not appropriate for kids to learn to cope with money early, which will make them premature and unnecessarily realistic in their lives. They deserve their unique happiness living in an idealistic world at young age.

In conclusion, I believe that young people should not be required to learn to deal with the financial stuff so early, by contrast, they should be taught by their parents when they are older at a proper time.