Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK2:Student's loss interest in teaching profession [2]

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TASK:In many countries, the young generation has lost interest in the teaching profession. What are the factors and what would be the solution.

Since the dawn of time, teachers have proven their importance in the area of education. However, as generations have passed, it is apparent that for some reasons students have lost their interest in pursuing a career in teaching.

Ever since technological developments were made, the roles of educators were gradually replaced by the provision of computers. Many internet users have felt greater convenience on learning lessons through online materials. Thus, this has led most people to believe that the teaching profession would become obsolete in the near future. Apart from that theory, many have also regarded teaching as a low-paying job compared to other careers. An instance of this is commonly observed in countries like Philippines, wherein most of the graduates from educational courses end up having jobs in the call center industry. They took a course in education for the sake of having a higher qualification, and then aim a profession from a different field which has more attractive incentives.

In the goal of preserving and renewing the teaching profession, the state should consider in implementing some amendments to rectify the situation. First of all, salary levels of educators should be raised not only to motivate the existing teachers, but also inspire the students. Secondly, teaching methods should be revised to incorporate modernization of technology with the role of educators. With the use of advanced machines, teachers could focus more on other areas to further improve the standard of learning.

Although many things may have changed in the modern world, it is still an undeniable fact that society still needs the help of teachers. Moreover, it is yet too far that their purpose would be replaced by machines. Therefore, any possible means should be taken to encourage the young in taking up this profession.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK1:Complain letter about an online purchase [3]

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TASK:write a complain about an online purchase you made, describe the item you purchased, what is the problem, then what you want them to do

Dear Sir / Madam,

I am writing to complain about an online purchase I made three months ago from your shop. I believed it was mentioned on your site that buyers will receive their goods within a month despite their location. Unfortunately, I haven't received mine until now.

I purchased a pair of Jordan Retro Shoes on April 28th as a gift for my brother's birthday. After a month of checking through online tracking, I was frustrated to see that my item was held at Hong Kong customs. This worries me so I decided to speak with one of your officers to inquire about the situation, her name is Ann Santos. She provided me an unclear explanation of the incident as further investigation still needs to be done. However, she did promise to call me once there are updates on my transaction. Since then, I didn't receive a call from her and tracking information still shows the same status as before.

After careful consideration I have decided to cancel this transaction and therefore I would ask a refund for the whole cost I have paid. Please understand that I tried to be patient with this matter. But I think the delay it caused me is apparently unacceptable.

Yours faithfully,

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK2:Spending leisure time with different and the same age group [4]

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TASK:People spend their free time among the same group as themselves. Whereas some people enjoy spending time with all age groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People are social beings by nature so it is normal for them to seek the companionship of others. But, an interesting point to see is the variation on how people choose their companions, and among several aspects to be considered, age is the common one. Certain reasons are observed on why people spend their leisure time with the same age group as well as those who prefer to go with different ones.

Apparently, a person feels more comfortable around friends with the same age because they are more likely to have common interests such as hobbies and lifestyles. Thus, chances of being left out from these kinds of groups are low. Also, in games and sports, competing against someone at the same age level is believed to be fair as nobody has far more advantage in terms of experience and skills.

On the other hand, some people prefer to be with a different age group, in most cases older than them, because they believe it can help them improve their knowledge and skills. Firstly, an individual can gain a diverse perspective of certain things by listening to the stories and experiences of others who are at a different age level. Secondly, in playing a game regularly with players who are more mature and experienced, one is bound to adhere the techniques and skills of their teammates as well as their opponents. Thus, a person benefits from this by way of improving his skills.

In my opinion, it does not really matter much if you are in the same or different age group, either way could be beneficial to someone. I think what matters most is how you feel about being in the group, which one makes you happy and comfortable may it be during your leisure time or any other time.