Research Papers / Research abstract: "Experiences of nurse survivors on disaster" [2]

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Experiences of nurse survivors on disaster: a systematic review

Abstract
Background: Majoring attention to disaster survivors sometimes makes a fact that nurses who are the survivor as well are being forgotten. This study purposes to explore nurses' experience who served professionally throughout the world on working, coping and learning during disaster

Method: Using a systematic review, literature is identified through PubMed and Scopus using "nurse", "nursing", "experience" "disaster" ""survivor" "coping" and "Asia" as keywords.

Finding: Seven (7) publications representing nurses' experience from United Stated, Taiwan, New Zealand, Haiti and China are reviewed from a total of 2672 retrieved articles.

Result: While experience various challenge as survivors who are also in delivering aid during disaster, nurses can handle, cope and learn from their recent experience. To enhance nurses' wellbeing, the considerable contribution from nurses' organization in collaboration with government is highly recommended.

Writing Feedback / Sociological Imagination on life intersection : Essay admission for entering a university [3]

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"Urip iku Urup", an indigenous Javanese maxim, has furnished a meaningful spirit to me. It means "life is enlightening, life is giving benefit for surrounding". I am a Javanese descent who grew among Sumatera culture after my parents migrated From Yogyakarta to Palembang in 1982. Even though Sumatera's culture was always appearing in my childhood, my parents still convey on the fervent of Javanese culture for bringing me up, and storytelling session about the wisdom spirit on Javanese custom seemed to be my nature custody.

Our daily dinner was always exhilarating because Bapak, a Javanese greeting for father, will start telling sharing as your second nature will demolish your sadness as well as it will glow your happiness; if you believe it, God will always beside you in your adversity. As a little girl, such a deific saying was totally non-sense to me, but in a scary night when I was helped to find railway station by a stranger- a man wearing white shirt, wreathed ID card and blue jeans- the saying had deeply internalized. I was sophomore who tried to travel 808 miles from Palembang to Semarang independently at that time. This experience had been reminded me in an event. When I was third grade, we -Bapak and I- were waiting for bus while a gambler passed through looking for food in the rubbish bin near the bus stop. At that moment, with two pieces of doughnut and a bottle of mineral water, Bapak asked me to share my doughnut to the gambler, then whispered "whenever you do share, your will get broad mindedness and God will go to help you back in unexpected occasion"

To me, parents are looked up to as important role model and facilitator, they have a strong influence on their children (Sawitri, Creed, & Zimmer-Gembeck, 2013). Besides Bapak, Ibu, a Javanese greeting for mother, had been formed me. I was fortunate to hold supervisory by a working mother while being a working mother becomes virtually rare in our society. Due to Indonesian cultural milieu, mothers is a significant figure for maintaining harmony within family. Whoever bringing up in existing Javanese custom believed that the Almighty creates woman for deliver three specific roles 'macak (dress up), masak (cooking) and manak (delivering baby) (Rohman, 2013). A good woman in Javanese has to stay at home without complaining while the role for family breadwinner is mere a man (husband) responsibility. She is expected to spend more time with the children and therefore to be responsible for their care and discipline (Setiadi, 2006). However, the roles expected from a mother has not changed much while she is working. The working mothers are still expected to be responsible for domestic chores, but for those who have maid luckily with well-educated husband will be helped a lot because they will have started assisting their wives in taking care children, even quite often it is limited to playing with children after work or during holidays (Nurhaena, 1995). This unbalance development and change in the role of mothers and mothers put greater stress in working mother because they still expected to be the main emotional provider for all the family members, do all the domestic chores and take care of the children within the limited time they have outside their working hours (Setiadi, 2006). Despite such an uneasiness role in the family, Ibu would always be my role model. Ibu is an XX e in XX. She is a fully-fledged mother who finished her TAFE program in University of South XX. She showed me her struggling, she awoke every night to finish her thesis; she showed me that being mother brings no hamper to your study eagerness; she helped me to realize how valuable I can be (Conry, 2015), and I do not know I would have had the confidence to study without her example.

In the sake of Urip Iku Urup, I devote myself to engage with some humanity work alongside my study in faculty of psychology Diponegoro University. I registered in clinical internship in XX mental asylum, XX, did weakly teaching for disabled schoolchildren in Semarang disabled state school and conducted an annual motivational training for Semarang's orphan called XX. I feel satisfied when helped people give me a sincere smile or even just looking at me deeply and say thank you. Moreover, it is such an epiphany aspiration when I worked as an aid volunteer in XX eruption, XX. Living at the covering situation with full of eruptions' ash, limited access of water and food, no electricity and uncertain condition had realized me that I love to aid people in emergency. A feel beautifully embraced, even you just putting your hand around someone's arm or listening about what they need, it seems like you want to say, don't panic, you're not alone because I'm here to help you, and when the survivors having no panic, breathing normally and could smile sincerely, it was such rewarding and humbling experiences that I always dreamed to be a professional in XX psychology.

With those experiences, I decide to start my footstep to work among community. Since 2013 the ministry XX Indonesia was assigned me in XX, XX, XX province as XX rural representative. In such duty, I established XX, XX, and XX, XX bank so as to empower XX's rural inhabitants. Alongside my service to rural, I keep maintain my reading, and Prof Martin Seligman's concept of Positive Psychology was fascinated me, then, Post Traumatic Growth (PTG) by DR Richard Tedeschi completed my findings. I am very curious whether or not concept of PTG can be constructed by applying model of Psychological First Aid (PFA) in threatened community. I also enjoy reading research coming from American researchers, Psychology research particularly, due to its pragmatics and logics. We can subtly validate whether or not the research reveals an appropriation, thus building falsification argument as one of science characteristics would also possible. Furthermore, studying in master of XX psychology and XX in Pennsylvania XX will help me to equip my applied and research skill.

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Writing Feedback / GRE argument task : Altering news content for late-night show [2]

'The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.

"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence would be needed in order to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The case of manager and television station is quite understandable, but the depicting argument in some parts seems bemused.

The late night news is broadcasted on rest time. So the valuable visitor on that time for business exactly different when business manager take their advertisement in afternoon news. Further, increasing portion for national news content over local and weather could not strongly stand. The author does not make a cogent statistical based on why should national news, is the visitor keen on watching national over local one, or, what is the valuable of weather and local over national news so that the late-night news picks those alterations.

Following complaint from concerned people of weather and local news is also confusing. There is no exact statistical number about the proportion of protester, is it major or just minor, the author does not give an appropriate measurement. Thus, the decision to change the pattern as the former may bring bias. Content of complain too, do not clearly addressed. Is it about the decreasing duration of weather-local news or the way TV channel broadcast it.

All in all, the argument for restoring late-night show could be acceptable from the side of complain and business revenue. However, the author does may weekend the argument with not providing the exact base on why such decision is taken.

Writing Feedback / GRE issue task : Nation should operate similar curriculum for its schoolchildren [2]

A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

National curriculum may stand as a nation pathway to gain standardization. However, the implementation is not merely surrounded by benefit, as the case of uniqueness on education is still challenging. I too agree that while a nation should have a standard of education, the exception of some cases have to ponder too.

Studying in same national curriculum until college, a pathway of developing standard is built. In general, national curriculum is just element of education in every child which provides the outline core knowledge around teacher to help student gain a similar of educational achievement. Then, if it is well implemented, students are helped a lot in their undergraduate owing to sophisticated base that is taken by their nation. Despite the higher acknowledgement of western education, a tangible example in ASEAN can be seen in Singapore national curriculum. School graduates from Singapore can easily continue their undergraduate in US without any matriculation while another ASEAN school graduated should do. This then proofs that primary to high school national curriculum has taken its function appropriately.

On the other hand, in the case of indigenous education, curriculum similarity could not be accepted. Taking examples on disable learner cases, they need adaptation either in the curriculum material or in the educational infrastructure, blind students need braille textbook with special teacher, the deaf need more that sound system in language laboratory and students with paralytic illness need special material in sports. Due to those cases, what if the similar national curriculum for schoolchildren is strictly operated? Could they get similar opportunity like the other schoolchildren?

In conclusion, applying same national curriculum for elementary to high school elementary would appropriately guide student to get the similar expertise. However, some cases of student with disabilities have to highly consider too.

Writing Feedback / Tech and Brain power. Technology deteriorate human way of thinking - GRE issue Task [2]

As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Brain power is interchangeably with the advance of technology. It cannot be doubted that technology already alter all of aspect of human life, from the personal to the public issue. However, due to this kind of phenomenon, I might less likely to agree that role of technology to solve problem could be totally deteriorate the way of human think.

Efficiency takes a huge part of human daily. We know that human, nowadays, tend to rely on technology immaturely in particular way. Taking an example of the market activities, even for simple calculation people are tend to use calculator instead of trying to think the exact sum of the goods. Whereas, we can also see the development of technology detract human socialize sense. Major adult in a metropolitan city, in Jakarta for example, choose to kowtow with another people in line as an optional, and favorably to chat with their WhatsApps or Line account.

On the contrary, technology is not merely harm people's way of think, regardless, it helps much particularly in decision making. As an tangible example is the case of business executives' work in stock exchange. Due to the technology, statistical data about currency rate could be appropriately monitored and then helps the custody to make decision. This might not effectively seen, if the ramification of technology does not exist. Government also, helps much in counting the death toll after devastating Tsunami 2006 in Indonesia due to the advance of technology. Imagine, if there should be calculated traditionally. How long it takes time? How long decision is made? and how long the survivor waiting for helps.

Having said that, I do agree that use technology for solving problem may deteriorate way of human think, if the user are too lied over the facilities. However, the case of helping technology could not be neglected is one of the supporting aspect of the way people think to solve many problems.

Writing Feedback / GRE argument task : Budgeting riverside recreational activities in Manson River [3]

In surveys Mason City residents rank water sport (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational activities. For years there have been complaints about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to cleaning up Mason River. Use of the river for water sport is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational activities.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

While giving argument on why Manson city council should likely devote more budge to increase recreational activities in Mason River, the author argument does not make a cogent base, conceivably, this is stance strong with some rife, and thus, less stronger to lead funding.

Citing the rank of sport activities seems like claiming without any comparable variable. Author do not provide the base question on what activities are likely to choose from Manson's inhabitants related to this survey. So, the instrument's validity is questioned?. Analogically, a result of survey should show some optional and then make a rank based on the result getting from the subject. For example, there should be some pointing aspect, such as restaurant, sport facilities or just an artificial shunning view, that survey respondent favor on to build in their river. Unfortunately, this is not depicted in the author's argument.

Furthermore, survey population is also bemused. The author just said the conclusive without depicting any statistic proportion on how he/she can claim that is the representative result of the Manson city residents. Not surprisingly, a result should obviously share the proportion before state the conclusion. If far more 50% of respondent are favor on building sport facilities on Manson River, the claim on such survey can be reliable, on the contrary, claim with un-valid data like an antidote to the rigor of validity.

In conclusion, Manson city government may possibly invest on building of sporting facilities on Manson River as the ramification of survey. However, the depicting argument may bring un-satisfied base on whether it should implemented, the author claim is not likely persuade to allocate increased funding.

Writing Feedback / Just laws and unjust laws : GRE Issue task [2]

Dear all, this writing comes from Eddy Suaib's acount, one of the contributor here, in another website, and I copied here as his permission. Hopefully you are kindly helping me to analize on how he builds the paragraph. Thank you

Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust law.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

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The statement asserting individuals responsibility to obey just laws alongside to resist unjust law plays on recent human history. Regarding this, we should backward strictly seek a reflection on how just and unjust law can be determined. Letter from Birmingham Jail by Martin Luther King said; a just law is a code that squares with the moral law, or the law of God. An unjust law is a code that is out of harmony with the moral law. To put it in the terms of St. Thomas Aquinas an unjust law is a human law that is not rooted in eternal and natural law. Yet, while law is constructed by many pertinent assumptions, there are no exact indicator of whether one side is exactly true over the other, as far as I am concern, the position for obeying just law and resist unjust law should be seek more closely.

Every member of the society lives under constraint of law, and each of them not only legally but also morally has to obey the just laws conversely one has a moral responsibility to disobey unjust law. Taking Nazi in World War II as an example. Nazi countries such as Germany and Netherlands enforced a number of horrific law to inflict and harm of the Jew while it was illegal to hide Jews from Nazi. At that time, many Jews were caught and sent to concentration camp where many suffered death. Regarding this, could our humanity accept the rules to obey such just laws? Or we should against the law in the name of humanity?

On the other hand, the definition of just an unjust laws shows us one of the difficulties with the idea of civil disobedience of unjust law. Some could argue the bias of which one is closely related to moral law or which one is out of harmony of moral law. People could argue that laws allowing abortion are unjust and should be disobeyed while, on the other spectrum, laws on against gay marriage are unjust. There is no way to objectively measured gay marriage is not rooted in eternal law. This means that the idea of obeying unjust laws is somewhat dangerous as it gives permission to anyone to disobey the legal law simply because their moral values are not in accordance with those laws.

To conclude, the responsibility to obey just laws and resist unjust laws in every member of society cannot be stood roughly as it followed by many related values. I agree, as the member of civil society, we should pondered many aspects with no infliction at all before obeying or not to obey either just or unjust laws.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Internet excellence for communicating people and finding information [7]

It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not the best place to find information.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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The advance of information technology proliferates in 21st century. Due to its easiest access, some people use this kind of service to build strong communication while others use such media as the field source of accurate information. I am of the opinion that using internet to communicate will negate the distance as well as it can rid the barrier of accurate information.

Internet makes distance becoming nothing. As internet sophisticated service, connecting people between countries even continent become common and easy. Taking examples of G20 countries form of communication that widely helped by the service of internet. They can communicate, even held a formal conference, via Skype. This, then, actually reduces the loss of time efficiency of airway travel. However, the easiest communication by the internet may deficient people productivity as it is used for unnecessary chat.

On the other hand, staying awake on what was happening currently becomes people primary needs. People are tend to become update for the upcoming news because, with this way, they will keep on track in their main job. A business executive, for instance, will keep his eyes on the happening rate movement of stock exchange to make sure that he can get the valid information for taking his step on the business strategy on other company shareholder. Meanwhile, the abundance source of information could flood people by unnecessary information as they cannot filter which one is needed or not.

In conclusion, using internet as means of communication cannot be avoided become people primary need similar to its function on providing accurate information. In my opinion, internet with its excellence is an analogy of a knife. It can help people to cut the barrier or perhaps could bring some harm as it not use appropriately.

Graduate / 'America is not just a country it is an idea' Why master degree in USA? Cover Letter. [3]

Give your reason for wanting to pursue them in the U.S. Describe the kind of program you expect to undertake, and explain how your proposed field of study fits in with your educational background, your professional background, your future objectives, and your future involvement in community development.

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America is not just a country it is an idea. America brings the sense can do spirit in almost entire of humankind. From McCormick feeding the world to Rockefeller revolutionized energy and medicine, America has been proved within the power of idea, impossibilities become possible covert with expert. In the area of Psychology, however, American Psychological Association (APA) not only stance stronger as the world largest psychological profession association but also through its Disaster Response Network (DRN), in recent decades, has attempted the leading of adequate disaster mental health assistance. I hope that studying through the coveted of American-trained master degree will complete my future proficient service to be high qualified.

An ethical obligation on psychological services plays a vital role so as to provide proficient care. In order to do this, professionals should have sophisticated training and skills needed even though those who had some workshops or minimal training still able to provide counseling and psychological service. This what I want to pursue by studying through MA International Disaster Psychology (MAIDP), University of Denver, which will lead me towards my dream to be a disaster mental health professional. MAIDP program was created in response to the observation that there really were no training programs for international disaster psychology or such programs at graduate level. Even more, the 8 weeks mandatory internship within MAIDP's program could be even more difficult than I might imagine as this will be the real struggle to prove textual lesson into practice in the real world, the work is often in poor, under-served and sometimes dangerous, but it might provide the excellent experience that I dream of.

Furthermore, I plan to use my license to educate, train and prepare potential disastrous people in my country not only in terms of emergency but also in preparedness to reduce the risk of unavoidable hazard. I dream to spread out the essential of disaster psychology in my country, Indonesia, through the service provided by GO or NGO. Particularly, the work in the disaster area in Indonesia was begun since a large scale of Earthquake and Tsunami hitting Nangroe Aceh Darussalam (NAD) and North Sumatera in the year 2004 which was claiming the lives of 165,708 people, and inflicting property loses of 4.45 IDR trillion. Meanwhile, educational jurisdictions also raised its awareness in providing disaster postgraduate programs, but unless master applied of disaster psychology in University of Indonesia no programs as yet concentrated in the area of disaster psychology. The fact shows that the area of relieving, reducing and recovering the survivors' mental health state will be one of the essential field that on my local communities needed nor mitigating the survivor mental health is more crucial for some certain areas. I wish that finishing my bachelor degree in psychology, volunteering in Merapi eruption in 2010, working in rural community service for this recent years and prospective studying in MAIDP will open my opportunity to work in my dream job, helping vulnerable people in emergency professionally.