Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Stress is problem in many countries around the world. [8]

Stress in now major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factors in modern society that cause this stress and how can we reduce it.

One of the most important issues in society today is stress. Stress is a problem that can give negative effects on many human's lives. There are many factors in modern society responsible for this. However, there are ways to make small the potential impacts. In this essay, I will discuss the factors and how we can reduce it.

To begin with, in our society, everybody wants to get what we want. For getting that is not easy, we must try to compete each other. When students in Senior High School want to graduate of school, they must follow many tests only in four days. Then, it can conclude the students will be graduated or not. As a result, students are facing great tension and depression because be afraid to be unsuccessful. Furthermore, some people think that happiness is related to money, luxurious houses or car, and branded clothes. Ultimately, people are working every day and every night to find much money. Because of they are continuous work; they do not have time for relaxation and their families, so they are feeling stress level very high.

Nevertheless, solving such problem will not easy, but there are actions that can be taken. Better time management is often considered to be the key to organize with time pressure without be stress. Time management includes setting priorities what needs to be done most importantly. For example, students can prepare their study for long time before they follow test. Moreover, individual also can take the various steps to reduce the stress, such as take good time for sleeping and spend time with their families.

To conclude, it seems likely that many factors which may cause stress but we must have solution to overcome with this potential problem.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Worldwide water usage in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo [2]

The graphs show information about water use globally and water consuming by people in two different countries.

Overall, the charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry, and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

As per the information, in 1900, around 500 km3 of water was used by the agriculture sector globally. For industrial and domestic water consumption stood at around one fifth of that amount. In 2000, global water use for agriculture head increased to around 3000 km3, industrial water use had risen to just under half that amount, and domestic consumption had reached approximately 500 km3. The populations were 176 million and 5.2 million respectively. Water consumption per person in Brazil at 359 m3, was much higher than in the Congo only 8 m3.

A closer looked at the overall, global water rose significantly between 1900 and 2000, and then agriculture accounted for the largest proportion of water used. We can also see that water consumption was considerably higher in Brazil than in the Congo.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: The world is losing important natural resources. [3]

Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources, such as forests, animals, or clean water. Choose one resource that is disappearing and explain why it needs to be saved. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Nowadays, a lot of component of the world are losing important natural resources, such as forests, animals, or clean water. There are many things that cause this to happen, but most important of all is water. Clean water is one of the natural resources began to decrease and should be saved. In this essay, I would like to give my opinion about this argument. In this essay, I would like to give my opinion about this argument.

One of the basic needs of daily living beings in this world that cannot be separated is clean water. Water is one of resource that is needed by all humans because of their role as essential for humans for drinking, bathing, washing, and the other. Humans cannot live without water; clean water would be required so that people can maintain their health. However, the condition of the water this time it began to decrease due to excessive use. For the use of water should remain limited and kept in balance. In addition, the cleanliness of the water also began to decrease due to pollution. This contamination can be caused by industrial waste, housing, agriculture, and even households.

In any case, water is not only important for humans, but also water is an important part for both animals and plants life. For example, fish cannot live without water. However, it is difficult to find clean water, especially in developing countries because many industries are built in developing countries dumping waste directly into the sea. Thus, causing sea water contaminated directly. While, there are many marine animals in the sea feeling the effects of this waste and damage to the environment.

To conclude, it seems likely that, without water, there is no possibility of life in the world as the core of all living beings are in need of water to survive.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Our planet is experiencing losses due to uncontrolled human activities [2]

Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Humans believe that the planet is experiencing losses due to uncontrolled human activities. Without realizing it, this will provide a variety of effects on the survival of human beings in this universe. On the other hand, some believe that the activities of humans give good impact to make the Earth a better place to survive. In this essay, I would like to give my opinion about this argument.

To begin with, people will be able to cause damage in nature, so give effect to the survival of the earth. As we know, nowadays, many people use vehicles wherever they want to go. This will give negative impacts such as air pollution. In addition, the increasing number of factories will increase air pollution also. Air pollution is severe enough to cause ill health for the people. Moreover, if the green areas are not found there, then the harmful effects of air pollution cannot be avoided.

What is more, for various reasons, some people do not hesitate to cut down trees illegally. Felling of trees will cause the tree roots are not able to hold the soil and water. As a result, we could see flooding often occurs everywhere as well as in Jakarta, which only has a little green area.

To conclude, my own view of this is that damaged is one of the most serious cause's irreversible damage to our environment. We have a lot of work to stop this loss, what we are doing to our mother nature; we cannot reverse it so easy.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Global warming is one of the most serious issues in the world. [5]

Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today.
What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

Global warming is one of the extreme critically cases of many people that the word is confronted currently. There are many causes of global warming then people and governments can measure to interfere with the issue. In this essay, I give several reasons that will be mentioned bellow at the paragraphs.

Nowadays, many people be able sense effect of global warming. It is caused by increasing of carbon dioxides in our world. We can feel a changed of atmosphere condition in our environments. Sometimes, weather is very warm, but suddenly to be changeable cold. For example, recently, weather is very hot in the morning with a ray of sunlight that to sting likes a bee. On the contrary, weather be changed become heavy rain. So, it gives bad effect for human lives.

However, people have responsibility with respect about global warming. Governments or individuals have same function to solve this problem. Governments can decrease this problem with take care of conservation, such as care for forest. Conserving forests is one way to reduce global warming. Trees or plants which are serve to absorb carbon dioxides and produce oxygen. But, many people like to cut down trees in accordance with their wishes. They realize what they are doing can damage the environment. Therefore, government must be firm in dealing with this problem. In addition, tree planting around the house by individuals can also have an enormous impact in our lives. We can plant trees or small plants such as peppers, tomatoes, or strawberries.

This brings us to the conclusion that, global warming happens because many causes, such as pollution and illegal logging. I think all people in world have responsible to keep our earth and start from now on to love the environment.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Graph: Changes in the birth rates of China and USA [6]

The graph shows the alteration of birth rates compare between China and USA from 1920 to 2000.

Overall, the alteration of birth rates fluctuated slightly in the first data then decreased step by step in the last part every five years.

In China, every five years, alteration of birth rates to vary from 1920 to 1935 (approximately, from 10% to 15%). Next, it undergoes to decrease until 1940 about 5% then leveled off until 1945 before increased sharply until 1950 namely 20%. Afterwards, the rates of birth decreased step by step until 2000 with average number 2%.

In the other hand, in USA has data than almost same as in China. From 1920 to 1940, birth rates to fluctuate about 11% until 12% every five years. Then, the data declined sharply until 1945 that is 5%. Furthermore, the data started to rise sharply in 1950 around 15% and started to fall again in 2000 that is about 3%.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: To solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car [5]

In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

Nowadays, government believes when tax of private car owners increase so can solve about traffic problems. Then, they will earn to improve the city transport. There are several advantages and disadvantages from this problem. In the following paragraphs I will give reasons about my statement.

On the other hands, advantages of raising taxes are able to decrease car owners to use their cars. Because if they drive own car it will become more expensive than using public transportation. They must try to use public transportation, thus it reduces traffic problems as well as air pollution. Less cars means less greenhouse gas released to the atmosphere. So that pollution will decrease dramatically.

However, there are several disadvantages also of raising taxes. As we know, income taxes, which every family pay are heavier than before. Some people will find it difficult to pay more money for their cars. For example, if governments raise taxes, people who have difficulties with money, like poor family, will not be able to have enough money for everything.

To summary, I think government should always look for a balance in a question about whether increase taxes can be more benefits for people. Moreover, the most beneficial way to solve the problem with traffic jams is providing a wide range of different types of vehicles for citizens which will be comfortable and convenient. Anyway, I think government should not to raise taxes for car owners in order to not make them another headache and additional costs.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The percentage of sports in the UK in 2010 [3]

The table shows the percentage of boys in two age different age groups who involved in five different sports, in the UK, in 2010.

Overall, it is clearly that the biggest percentage sport was football between aged boys 6-11 and 12-16 age groups, while swimming was the smallest percentage sports.

From the table, boys in football sport have more percentages than others about 87% for aged between 6 until 11, whereas the cricket be came second, about 45% of the total. Then, basketball has data namely 35%, followed by rugby has number 23% then has 19% of boys in this group for swimming.

In the other hand, when boys have aged between 12 until 16, has percentage 78%, is also shows football has the highest point. The second highest has 34% for cricket then basketball occupy the third highest about 25%. Followed by rugby has number 21%, while swimming has namely 19%.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Many old buildings = history --> it is very important to protect them [3]

Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation's history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by news ones.

How important is it to maintain old buildings?

Many people assume that old buildings must be protected by law because have many histories. In other hand, some people think, the building must be changed with new buildings. I will give reasons about my statement in the following paragraphs.

As we know, the old buildings usually have many histories, so people can learn more knowledge from this building. Especially, for students, they are studying about history of Bung Hatta in the school, but they did not know real about the story. So, they can go to the house of Bung Hatta. In addition, the old buildings give many benefits for government because more tourists visited this building.

In the other side, we can find several buildings get renovation but keep maintaining the original character of the build and being used for modern purposes. Moreover, by studying and learning about history, we understand more about the world we live. and this helps us to build a better future.

In addition, governments should keep the buildings so not need to knock down by private individuals or companies. As it is mentioned before, those buildings reflect the history of the nation. Replacing those buildings with new ones may be a temporary solution for inhabitants but will certainly be the loss of a part of history permanently.

To summary, I think, it is very important to protect and conserve old buildings as we can learn about our history as can others from other countries. Such knowledge can also help us to understand how to make more modern our countries.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The graphs above give information about computer ownership [8]

The graphs show the information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population compare with level of education in 2002 and 2010.

Generally, percentage of people who have computer increased from 2002 to 2010 and it is same as computer ownership by education.
In the graph 1, we can see that the percentage of computer ownership increased every year, started just under 60% in 2002 until nearly 80% in 2010.

In the other side, graph 2 has explained about several computer ownerships by education level. High school graduate has value about 35% (2002) and 65% (2010). For college (incomplete) has percentage of 55% (2002) and 85% (2010). While for bachelor's degree has percentage of 70% (2002) and 90% (2010)

To summary, the highest percentage has number about 80% (2002) and 90% (2010) for postgraduate qualification. Although the lowest percentage, of number about 15% (2002) and 40% (2010) for no high school diploma.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Proposed sites for a new hypermarket in the city of Pellington. [5]

The map shows three recommended location for a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in Pellington Town.

Overall, population in Pellington Town is 120,000 which is very big city. Therefore, it needs good attentions for building new hypermarket.

To begin with, recommended location of A for hypermarket is in residential area. It is near with industrial area and with a traffic-free zone and a park then it near with a railway, also. Moreover, location of B and C are in the countryside. The sites can be compared in terms of access by motorway for location B and by railway for location C.

Interestingly, location of A is an area more near with Hampford than location of B and C. Whereas location of C is strategically area because near with an airport on the west side.

To summary, location in site A and site C are more well to build new hypermarket than in site B.

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Writing Feedback / Water cycles - process showing how water evaporates, condenses and precipitates [7]

The diagram explains the water cycles.

Overall, there are several stages in the water cycle which begins from evaporation water to be condensation into cloud then are transpired the rain or snow.

Heating water by sun is cause water which is undergoing evaporation, and water vapor condenses to form clouds. Evaporation of water to emanate from ocean contributes about 80% of total water vapor in air. Then water to undergo condensing water vapor. When water is forming cloud formation so can undergo precipitation and undergo rain or snow. Rainwater may take various paths. Some of it may fall into lakes or return to the oceans via 'surface runoff'. Otherwise, rainwater may filter through the ground, reaching the impervious layer of the earth. Salt water intrusion is shown to take place just before groundwater passes into the oceans to complete the cycle.

To summary, the water cycle is process of water which is always happened and never to stop.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: production of electricity in Germany and France from all sources [7]

The charts show the produce of electricity in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009.

Generally, the production of electricity in Germany was higher than France and conventional thermal was the important source in Germany, while France produced most of energy from nuclear power.

In Germany, conventional thermal has number about 59.6% of total energy production which is more than nuclear power (23%) source. While production of renewable consisted of biomass (39.3%), wind (36.9%), hydroelectric (17.7%) and solar (6.1%).

In the other side, France has highest number for nuclear source (76.0%) followed by renewable (13.7%) and conventional thermal (10.3%). Moreover, renewable consist of hydroelectric which contributed of the largest total in France. It was responsible only 80.5% of the total renewable, accompanied by wind about 10.5%, biomass at 8.1% and solar has number 0.9%.

To summary, Germany is most of the renewable consisted of wind and biomass which was far higher than for hydroelectric and solar. The situation was very different in France, where hydroelectric made up of renewable electricity, with biomass, wind and solar.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Graph of the winter heating costs from 2003 to 2011 [7]

The graph shows the winter heating costs because of heating fuel type from 2003 to 2011.

In general, fuel oil has highest costs for consumers than electricity and natural gas. Although, electricity has lowest costs than others.

Electricity has small costs in winter seasons that started from $343 to $460 in the final. The costs increase step by step in every year. For natural gas, the costs increase slightly from April 2003 to June 2005 then decline twice until November 2010, from $627 to $547. However, fuel oil has biggest costs for consumers then increased sharply every year, started from $928 in April 2003 to $2425 in November 2010.

Interestingly, in October 2009 until November 2010, costs of electricity and natural gas have almost same value. It is very different than other years.

To summary, there are many costumers use winter heating in winter seasons, specially about fuel oil then followed by natural gas and electricity.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The audiences of radio and television for full the day in 1992. [6]

The graph shows audiences of radio and television for full the day in 1992.

Generally, television has more audiences than radio. There have percentage until 45% for television audiences and until 25% for radio audiences.

From the first side, television audiences have percentage nearly 7% at 1.00 then decreased only slightly at 3.00. After that, total of audiences started increased slightly until 9.00 then increased sharply until 21.00. In 24.00, audiences of television declined dramatically until 15%.

In the other side, percentage of radio audiences only under 4% at 1.00 and leveled off until 6.00. It rose sharply until 25% at 8.00 then decrease sharply and to undergo to fluctuated slightly. After that it step by step falls but with a small increase in percentage at 16:30 to 18:00 pm. The percentage of audience then gradually goes down and at 4.00, it is the lowest which is near 2%.

To summary, these graphs prove the progressive popularity of television.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The sector of economy for employment [3]

The table shows the sector of economy which is different age groups for employment.

Generally, retail is higher employment sector of the economy than others, in 18-25 age groups. Followed by other employment sector in 25-40 age group and manufacturing employment sector in 40-65 age group.

From the table, in 18-25 age groups, retail is the most employment sector than others than followed by manufacturing health and other. For 25-40 age groups, work in education and local government sector. While in 40-65 age groups, people more prefer to work mostly in manufacturing but they work in retail more or less the same with the middle group's which less than 4 times that the youngest one do.

Interestingly, employment sector of law has same value for all of age groups which is value about 4. In 25-40 years-old group even has the least number working in accountancy which is just 2. Local government and education are two common sectors which all people want to work for.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The unemployment rates: US and Japan - 5% in March 99 [6]

The graph shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan among March 1993 and March 1999.

Generally, percentage of work force increase sharply from March 1993 to March 1999 in Japan. Even though in US, percentage of work force decreased sharply every year.

The unemployment rates of Japan has 2.5 % in March1993, then increased sharply until March 1996. In March 1997, it decreased slightly about just fewer than 4 % then increased sharply until March 1999 namely 5 %.

By contrast, during the same period of time, the percentage of unemployed in US fluctuated slightly in every year, started from March 1993 until March 1999. There were changes in the unemployment rate in the USA, as the figure about 5% until about March 1997. Despite some minor fluctuation, the figure remained relatively stable for the next few years, ending the final period at about 5%.

To summary, in March 99, unemployment rates of US and Japan have same value which is around 5 % of their work force unemployed.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The results of a survey by the UK residents [4]

The tables show the reasons of a survey for people who have visited to abroad and destinations by the UK in residents.

Generally, many people go to UK with many reasons. They came from several countries from 1994 until 1998.

From the first table, purpose of visitors came to UK with different reasons. Holiday is more purpose of people to visit UK, followed by for business, visits to friends and relativities, then by other people with other reasons.

The second chart shows destination of visits by main regions which shows the majority of visitors go to Western Europe (from 19.371 in 1994 to 24.519 in 1998) and North America (from 919 to 1.823) and other regions (from 1.782 to 2.486 ) over the same period of time.

To summary, visitors go to abroad in the UK increasing sharply with different results for every year. The visitors came from several cities then increase step by step every year.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: The method of bricks; heated in high temperature 200-1300C [2]

The diagram explains the method of bricks how to make it become material that people can use it.

Generally, bricks made from several methods. It starts from digger until delivery process.

To begin, the bricks come from a large digger. There are many clays in digger. This clay placed onto a metal grid, and then it realizes roller process until the clay become small pieces. Following with sand and water are added to the clay and this mixture is turned into bricks by either placing it into a mould or using a wire cutter.

Next, these bricks are placed in an oven for drying from 24 hours to 48 hours. In the later on stage, they are heated in a kiln at a moderate and then a high temperature (from 200c to 1300c), followed by process of cooling chamber about 2 until 3 days. Finally, the bricks are packed and delivered to their destinations.

To summary, manufactures of bricks are requires a very long time and it is not easy to make it.

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