Writing Feedback / A breakdown of the amount of consumer spending on personal items in five different countries [2]

A breakdown of the amount of consumer spending on personal items in five different countries and is measured in thousand pounds sterling is presented in bar chart. Overall, the greatest spent experienced in British people on all goods. In any case, while the consumer spent the most on photograph, the figure for personal stereos and tennis racquets had similar rates among countries.

The most popular item in Britain is on photographic film, representing at £170,000, which is the largest rate in all of the goods. Compared with around £150,000 for Germany as the lowest spender which roughly for each of the six products.

France and Italy have the same spending on toys at around £160,000. However, the figure for perfume Italy spending more money than France, but on CDs, French people spent around £160,000, Italy just £150,000. All countries almost spent the same money on personal stereos and tennis racquets around £150,000, which was the lower figure shown on the chart.

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Writing Feedback / Potential new supermarkets in the city of Garldson [2]

A breakdown of two potential locations (S1 and S2) for a new supermarket in the city of Garldson is indicated in map. Overall, while it can be seen that there is S1 potential outside of the town, S2 is located in the city center which have the largest population.

Looking at the information in more detail, S1 is on the north west of Garldson, between Hindon main road and railways, beside the main road which is close to the residential area of the town. S2 applies almost a whole of Garldson city center, and also near the housing area that opposite the industry.

The main road is linking to Garldson town center from Hindson, Bransdon and Cransdon which eoulf be no access to S2 by vehicle. In contrast,while in front of S1 lies Hindon main road, it would be difficult going to Bransdon and Cransdon. The supermarkets is close to the railways that connect from Hindon to Cransdon.

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Writing Feedback / The Percentage of Internet Users in the USA , Canada and Mexico [NEW]

A breakdown of the proportion of people who used internet in the USA, Canada and Mexico from 1999 and 2009, a 10-year is presented in line chart. Overall, it can be seen that the percentage of the population of internet users had an upward trend in each country over the time frame. In any case, while Canada experienced the greatest growth of internet users, the figure for internet population in the Mexico increased slightly.

In 1999, the USA was the most popular country which internet users saw at 20%, compared with around 10% for Canada and 5% for Mexico as the lowest percentage. Over the following four years period, internet usage in the USA and Canada increase significantly to around 70% of the inhabitant, while the figure for Mexico just only 30%.

In the last year, Canada internet users reached a peak at 100% of the population, but Americans witnessed at 80. The percentage of Mexico internet usage rose minimally at only 40% over the year.

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Writing Feedback / Changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2000 [NEW]

A breakdown of the proportion of cost house in five different countries from 1990 to 20012, a 13-year period is illustrated in bar chart. Overall, it can be seen that London saw the greatest changes in house prices. In any case, while most of nations experienced increasing prices, the figure for Japan's house price fell.

Between 1990 and 1995, the average of house cost in Japan and London had similar rates by around 7%, compared with 5% for New York house prices as the lowest percentage. In contrast, prices increased by under 2% in Madrid and 5% in Frankfurt as the highest proportion over the year.

Over the following five years period, the proportion of house prices rose significantly in all of countries, with an exception in Japan. London house prices witnessed a dramatic increased to 12% which was the largest rates over the period. As the same way, in New York saw a upward trend on homebuyerS to 5%, and to 4% on Madrid house prices. However, Tokyo remained the cheapest on house cost, representing at -5%.

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Writing Feedback / Over-reliance on modern technology means that people are failing to learn basic skills, True? [2]

A generation of innovation technology is struggling to learn conventional skills properly. As such, it is argued that people today are relying on machine and technology to do their work. While it is utterly true, as some fail to manage crud ability such spelling skills, it is claimed that people still can do a lot of activities not depend on technology such as sew and cook.

Today's tough people are unable to manage basic skills because of an over-reliance on spellcheckers. It was revealed that around a third people in the World cannot accurate spell words such as "definitely", "separate" and "necessary. For example, a recent study found that just a fifth of over-18s could properly pick out a series of potentially tricky words from a list. Teenagers and those in their early 20s were the worst spellers. Consequently, technology brings disadvantages to people's ability to operate conventional skill.

Despite this drawback, we cannot deny that people have made many aspects of life more pleasurable depend on basic skills. A lot of activities are doing without rely on technology. In my local city they have provided basic skills organization for young people who can learn conventional skills such as cooking, sewing and bunch flowers. As a result, people nowadays still can do basic skills activities without technology.

In conclusion, although some people cannot operate basic skills due to rely too much on technology, it is argued that they can carry out activities such as cooking and sewing without technology. Having said that, it is the way we use technology that cause negative effect. If it used sensibly and people can combine basic skills regularly, there are only benefits that remain.

Writing Feedback / The discrepancy of the amount of money spent on food, drinks, tobacco and other things [2]

A breakdown of the proportion of consumer purchasing products in five different nations in 2002, a year period is represented in table. Overall, there are three categories items. In any case, while food, drinks and tobacco was the largest percentage over the year, the figure leisure and education experienced the lowest rates.

The most popular consumer spending was on food, drinks and tobacco, presenting 28.91% in Ireland and in Turkey at 32.41% which was the highest proportion. As the same way, Turkey had predominantly spending on leisure and education at 4.35%. In contrast, expenditure on clothing and foot wear saw higher in Italy at 9%, than the other countries.

However, the proportion of consumer purchasing witnessed the lowest in Sweden on food, drink, and tobacco at 15.77% and only 5.40% on clothing and footwear. Compared with Spain which had higher percentage for these figures at 18.80%, but the figure for leisure and education was the lowest at only 1.98%/

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Writing Feedback / How coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops [2]

A breakdown of the manufacturing process of making coffee production and how to preparation for selling on the market is represented in diagrams. Overall, there are several complicated stages on coffee's maker. In any case, while the coffee production begins with the picking of coffee beans, it ends at packing stage.

Firstly, coffee beans should be picked in the farm, and then coffee beans are dried. After that, this continues to be roasted and cooled before it being put in a grinding machine. Having completed the cooled stage, it turns the beans into coffee granules.

At the next stage in the process, the coffee is mixed with hot water, and then this mixture is ready being strained. Following that, this mixture is frozen and continued to the grinder. This is where the process dried in a vacuum, the water evaporates and leaving the coffee. Finally, these coffee are ready to packed in the coffee jars for selling in the market.

Writing Feedback / a 100-year period on the chart reveals the ageing scale of the US, Japanese and Swedish societies [2]

A breakdown of the percentage of the population growth elderly people in three different countries from 1940 to 2040 as a projected year, a 100-year period is presented in line chart. Overall, the population over 65 will increases in each country. In any case, while Japan started period as the lowest rates, it is forecast the most dramatic changes in people above the age 65.

According to the information, Japan's over-65s population figures in 1940 were very different from those in 2040, and future predictions show even greater differences. In 1940, the number of elderly people was just at 5%, compare with only 7% for Sweden and 9% for the USA. By 1980, the percentage of older people had risen considerably to 15% in Sweden and the USA, while the figures for Japan increased gradually to nearly 3%.

However, total population people aged 65 will peak between 2000 and 2020 in Sweden at 20%, but it is expected that the number of elderly people in Japan is predicted rise substantially over the next 10 years to 25%. In spite of this, the growth in the ageing population will continue, and faster rate, so that by 2040, 28% of Japanese people will be over 65, 25% Sweden and the USA 23% respectively.

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Writing Feedback / What are the prerequisites for further space exploration - a national pride or international effort? [2]

prerequisites for further space exploration

Space exploration is such a commonly used term in twentieth century. It simply means that astronauts have become integrated national pride than effort of international issue. While it is utterly true as it made the country proud, it is claimed that international effort can manage potential of space. Also, in the future, it is forecast that astronautics of human exploration to space is possible

Field research of space exploration has been largely been pride of region. The reason for this astronautics existence made the country obtaining chiefly achievement. For example, a photograph history of Neil Eden Armstrong was the first American astronaut who walked on the Moon in 1969. He put the USA flag in the land of Moon. Interestingly, people around the world were surprised due to the American's success. As a result, America has been the most popular country which landed the first astronaut. It is a prestige for the nation.

By contrast, people argue that space exploration is international effort. Due to the fact that, some countries have collaboration on the same project how to manage the potential of space. For example, American and Europe have provided satellites to monitor the Earth's fragile environment. Those countries can provide information on the survival of extreme environments. Consequently, space exploration is meaning the effort of international communities.

It is projected plan that it will be possible for human living in other planet. Many researchers help us to explore ideal environments for human in the future. The NASA Haughton-Mars Project has been attempting to test communications and exploration for the exploration human of Mars. Also, geologists and biologists gather to help understand potential of Mars for human.

In conclusion, although country becomes pride due to space exploration, it is argue that international effort is highly useful to encourage space potential. This is projected that the human exploration will be happened in the next time.

Writing Feedback / Extinctions plant and animals and the cause of endangered plant life [3]

A comparison of endangered of plant and animal species in tropical forest from 2000 to 2100, a 100-year period is presented in line charts. The pie chart reveals the cause of plant life extinct. Overall, the number of plant and animal is forecast more safety than in 40 years before. In any case, while there are several factors in the rates of extinctions plant and animal, the most considerable cause is human impact.

In the beginning of period, the number of plant and animal extinct stood at approximately 4000 species. Over following forty-year period, it is predicted a gradual rise to 20,000. While the figure for endangered plant and animal will peak in 2060 at 50 million species, from 2080 to 2100 is forecast a sharp decline under 30,000 million species

However, when you look at the negative causes to plant life with the greatest proportion of threatened species is human impact over three-quarters of rates. In contrast natural events have the lowest percentage of extinction at 18.7%. Agriculture and harvesting are also harmful to plant. On the other hand, the danger because of human is on a much smaller scale in plantations, with figures ranging at 4.7%. Natural event threats such us natural disaster reveals at 7%, as the same rates of livestock.

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Writing Feedback / The diagram illustrates the various stages in the life of a honey bee. [2]

A breakdown of the various stages in the life of a honey bee is illustrated in diagram. Overall, the honey bee life cycle takes 34 until 36 days, while there are five main stages from egg to mature adult.

First, it is started when the female adults lay an egg, between one or two eggs every three days. After 9 -10 days, eggs are hatched and the nymph appears.

The next stage, the immature insects grow that it sheds its skin 3 times. This stage is taken 5 days process. Then, seven days after this, also repeat 9 days later. The final stage from 31 to 31days, the young honey bee is become known after the moulting stage. 4 days later it is reached maturity.

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Writing Feedback / Average annual spending on cell phone and residental phone services [2]

A breakdown of the average of spending by American people on mobile phone and landline phone services between 2001 and 2010, a 10-year period is illustrated in line chart. Overall, the both expenditures have different rates. In any case, while the cell phone had upward trend, the figure for residential phone services decreased gradually over the year.

In 2001, the most popular Us Consumer was on landline phone services that spent an average under $700, compared with $200 on cell phone services. After 5-year period, the figure for spending on residential phone services declined by $200, but on cell phone experienced a dramatic rise by approximately $300.

The amount of American people purchased on both types of phone services had similar rate in 2006, representing %500. Over following a year expenditure on mobile phone overtook the landline phone services. In 2010, spending on cell phone reached a peak around $750, while the average of spending on residential services fell markedly to $400.

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Writing Feedback / Information technology is such a commonly used term in the twentieth century. Remote work is popular [3]

Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace. (e.g at home, when travelling, etc)
Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh in the disadvantages?

Information technology is such a commonly used term in the twentieth century. As such, it is argue that an increasing of number people rely on it for many activities. While it useful for certain aspects of human lives such manage work in own place, it could be harmful and brings negative impact for people health.

Technology is highly useful for many aspects of people life. In workers field, technology could produce much more productivity. Due to the fact, workers can do many tasks using online resources. Interestingly, technology can reduce time-consuming for people. They can easily manage their task wherever they want such at home. As a result, technology has a huge benefit for workers productivities.

Despite these positive effect, one of the impacts of information technology is that it could be unhealthy lifestyles. People often spend time in front of computer screen or smartphone to access information on internet. For example, the Lancet published study about people who working in food bloggers checking out hundreds of mail in a day. Workers who spend from 41-48 hours in a week led to a 10% increased the risk of stroke. Consequently, if people rely too much on screen, they could obtain a dangerous ailment.

In conclusion, although information technology could help people in daily work activities at outside office, it is argued that it could damage people's health behavior. Having said that, we should balance time to rely on technology and take a break from screen.

Writing Feedback / The number of overseas pupils graduated from universities in several Canadian provinces from 2001-6 [3]

A breakdown of the proportion alter in the number of overseas pupils graduated from universities in several Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006, a 5-year period is illustrated in bar chart. Overall, there were upward trend in all of provinces, with exception in Alberta. In any case, the number of New Brunswick saw the highest percentage, while the figure for Alberta decreased slightly over the period.

Graduate numbers rose during the 5 years and reached their highest levels in 2006, but there was a minimal drop in Alberta graduates. In 2001, the number of foreign graduates in New Brunswick, Nova Scotia, Quebec stood at around 7%. However, by 2016 there had been more significant growth in three provinces numbers. That year, they rose to 8% (Quebec), 10% (Nova Scotia), 11% (New Brunswick) as the largest proportion of International graduates. Thus the gap between 2001 and 2006 in the number of three provinces had widened.

A more detailed look at the graph reveals that the overall growth in numbers in Manitoba and Newfoundland & Labrador had similar pattern. It experienced a gradual increased by 7% from 2001 to 2006, compared to 6% for Ontario. As the same way, the number of overseas students graduated in British Columbia rose markedly to 10% in 2006. In contrast, that was followed by a period of about five years, when number fell just over 4% Alberta. However, other graduate numbers saw their strongest growth rate, and this was well above the increases that had been seen in the end of period.

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Writing Feedback / Wasting production in Six different countries in twenty years period presented in Table [4]

A breakdown of the number of wasting output in several countries from 1980 to 2000, a 20-year periods presented in table. Overall, the amount of waste producing increased gradually. In any case, America saw the highest waste production, while the figure for Portugal and Ireland showed reverse.

It is noticeable that US was by far the most popular of waste output for the majority of twenty years period. However, there was a dramatic rose from 1980 to 2000 by 61 over the year. Compared to Portugal and Ireland stood at under 2, by 2000, the number of waste producing in both countries grew minimally to 5, which was the low level of waste production.

By contrast, in 1980 waste production in Japan was representing at 28, while in Poland just at 4. Interestingly though, Korea produced none waste in the beginning of period, but it had upwards trend over following 20 years at 19. As the same way, the waste output in Japan and Poland rose gradually to 53 (Japan) and 6.6 (Poland).

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Writing Feedback / Internet based courses are popular alternative university-based courses for students [2]

Question:
These days Internet-based courses have become a popular alternative to university-based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Answer :
Internet-based training courses are famous type of university courses. As such, it is argued that pupils should not attend to class. While it is utterly true, as it provides education to remote student that would not able to travel to university, it is claimed that face-to-face learning has more effective for students.

First of all, some available courses on the internet are delivered formal subjects with regularly times. It is helpful for students from countryside areas to obtain similar knowledge as other students. For instance, a recent poll by the UK University found that by 15% of students who attended internet based training courses increased each year because of the better education system. As a result, students can access internet based courses wherever wireless hot spot and internet connection is available in their areas.

On the other hand, this does not mean that face-to-face learning is not important for students. Firstly, student can learn more fluently from lectures, if they attend the class rooms. This is because real communications still be the best way to obtain knowledge. Also, students have many friends which could help them to share a difficult course in university. Consequently, pupils have several arguments from their class-mates aim to improve their ability and awareness.

To conclude, although internet based courses offer facility to student who do not need to go to lectures, meeting the lectures in class rooms are very useful for students. Student could think advantages and disadvantages of internet courses learning before they prefer to choose this subject.

Writing Feedback / Worldwide Mobile Phone Sales ( % share of market) [2]

The table gives information about the percentage of cell phone market around the world between 2005 and 2006. Overall, it can be seen that there had changed minimally in all of companies over the year. In any case, while Nokia was the most popular mobile phone, BenQ mobile had the lowest percentage of phone market.

In 2005, the biggest proportion of Hand phone market was Nokia, representing at 32.5, although it was popular, by 2006, it reached a peak at 35. As the same way, Motorola companies rose slightly in the number of market sale from 17.7 to 21.1. Compared with other and Samsung decreased slowly by 2% over the year.

On the other hand, BenQ mobile had the low level of mobile phone sales, depicting at 49%. There was a sharp drop in the proportion of BenQ mobile sales to 2.4 in 2006. Sony Ericsson and LG were presenting in the same statistic around 7.4for Sony and 6.3 for L.G

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Writing Feedback / Violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18 [NEW]

Question :
Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

Answer :

A recent study an in increase in the number of crime rates throughout the youngsters under 18 years old. The mainly reason of this phenomena is mass young child lack of social education and emotional from families and teachers. I would argue that children feel careless from their parents, while teachers could help to control the teenagers from their bad activities.

Parents and teachers encourage youngster to extremely pay attention on their academic studies. Circumstances at school are worse for teenagers due to high score on all of subject education. Youngsters are under pressure and stressful , if they should study hard to produce proud for their families. Consequently, youngster under the age 16 attempt to find reveal in dangerous criminals society such us violence, crime, drugs and others. It is badly for teenagers future because violent crime in their environment.

On the other hand, teachers could useful to reduce the wide range of crime rates. Teacher who teach their student at school, automatically can renewable mindset of teenagers to avoid crime in society. Because of the fact that youngster acquire protection and support from their relative, is helpful to banned crime rates from environment. As a result, youngsters would know disadvantages of violent for their future, so violent crime could decrease gradually in environment.

To sum up, it is according to the latest report about rose of violent in society among youngster under the age of 18. Mass psychologist said the most popular reason of this condition is children lose information about sociality and emotional learning from their relative. Parents are rarely take care of their children, although teachers are really need to give advice to control the number of crime between youngsters and their activities.

Writing Feedback / The table about Rail transport in five different countries [2]

The table shows proportion about train transportation in four different countries in 2007. Overall, it can be seen that passenger population had the biggest percentage in all of countries, except in Japan. In any case, while the number of people using rail in Japan was the highest percentage, USA had the lowest proportion over the year.

To begin, the most popular country on number of people using rail transport was Japan, representing 37, compared approximately 0,3 in USA. On the other hand, UK and Italy had similar statistic, depicting at under 59.

Turning to passenger population, UK and Italy were presenting the largest percentage at 770 (UK) AND 780 (Italy). In contrast, Japan and USA were not dominant in the proportion of passenger which Japan was the lowest percentage at 1,980.

Cargo carried had the same proportion in three different countries such as UK, Japan, and Italia, at around 23.01, whereas UK just got proportion at 2,820 over the year.

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Writing Feedback / In this essay, I would argue that media has positive and negative impact for people's live. [2]

Question :
It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich-society.

Answer :

Media is the biggest essential thing for human in nowadays. Some people argue that media has benefit for people to obtain a wide range of information. On the other hand, mass society thought that media brought many drawbacks for people activities. In this essay, I would argue that media has positive and negative impact for people's live.

First of all, people obtain a great deal of advantages from media. People acquire more information due to media. Smartphone for example, 1.000 population people in Liverpool city use smartphone for surfing on internet and listening music for entertainment. People usually use media for getting information and entertainment. As a result, media brings positive advantages for people's life.

In contrast, media is popular stuff for people around the world, whereas it has many impacts for people's activities. People spend their time relay too much on computer or smartphone. They focus on internet which delay other activities such work. In addition, people often meet people by face to face condition. People think it enough to communicate on social media, rather than they are gathering together. Media has several impacts for people on communication's site between their self and relative which it encourage people lose obvious communication.

To sum up, developing of media is useful for human society to obtain much information from whole world. Although media is useful for people access information on internet , it has disadvantages for communicating in real condition. People should control their time If their relay too much on media.