Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Power sources to cities and transports that are generated from fossil fuels [4]

Alternative energy sources that use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil and gas that we use to power our cities and transport.

To what extent do yo agree or disagree with this opinion ?
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Power sources to cities and transports that are generated from fossil fuels such as; the coal, oil and gas are converted to renewable energies which use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun. This process, producing the power of the alternative energy, needs a costing so much and is too complex. However, my view is that using the renewable energies give many benefits outweigh drawbacks to citizens such as a reduction of global warming emissions.

First, the process to generate the electric energies from the fossil fuels spend cost extremely and is so complex. This process needs so much budgets since it utilize a new technology which has extremely large capital cost. To illustrate, a country which wants to build solar energy stations spends the budgets highly to supplying devices: photovoltaics (PV), tracking systems, loads, and storage integration, grid monitors, and power electronics. After that, the process to produce the electric energies is extreme complex because the renewable energies often rely on weathers such as wind turbines which need the wind to turn blades.

However, I have a perspective that budgets to this process is unbalanced with many benefits which will be gained by the citizens. A increasing the supply of the renewable energy will allow the citizens to reduce the global warming emissions significantly. Based on research of Department of Energy's National in America, a 2009 UCS analysis finds that a 25 percent of renewable electricity standard will lower emissions by 277 million metric tons annually in 2025. In addition, facilities to produce renewable energy generally require less maintenance than the fossil fuels. This energy use the natural and available resource so that it reduces the costs of operation. For example, solar collectors need the sunshine to collect heat and make the electricity.

In conclusion, I fully disagree that the cost of using fossil fuels is so expensive. The renewable energy highly contributes the citizens' activities. I guess that the government in all countries should begin to consider using it.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: A process about the system of air coming in and out of a house [2]

A process about the system of air coming in and out of a house is presented in the diagram. It is important to note that a large number of ways between air getting into and out of the house are almost balanced. Likewise, the most popular way for air coming out is the upstairs of the house, and the ways of air coming into the house spread out in an underground and a base floor.

Turning to the ways of air getting out, there are six ways at the upstairs of the house. Two recessed lights and the two ways of plumbing vents are placed at the upstairs. Then, the house has an attic hatch and a bathroom fan vent which help to reduce the heat energy in the house. Finally, the heat is also pulled out through an electrical outlet and a smoke funnel at the base floor.

A closer look at the diagram reveals that the heat from electricity is moved into following the flow of the air. The house has seven ways of air getting into. There are three windows, a door and a kitchen fan located in the base floor. Following this, the air is able to get into the house by passing the downstairs dryer vent and ventilators as well as crawl space located in the underground

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  A process
  

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Many citizens argue that using the electronic media has a drawback to relationships [NEW]

The use of electronic has a negative effect on personal relationship between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many citizens argue that using the electronic media has a drawback to personal relationships among them. Actually, this matter can be surmounted by people because the effect of the electronic media to the personal relationship depend on its users so that it should not be worried. In addition, the electronic media have benefit to strengthen relationship among the citizens such as they easily communicate with their family.

One of the drawbacks to using the electronic media is that personal relationship among citizens will be more distant. The citizens feel more pleasure to communicate to their family and friends with using the electronic media such as a smartphone so that they rarely meet up directly and their familiarity will wane. Based on recent research in Technology University of Malaysia, intensity of gathering affects their friendship. If the citizens are more enjoyable to use it than gathering with their friend, their friendliness or familiarity will become more distant.

However, the effect of the electronic give benefits to the personal relationships and should not be worried by them. The electronic media can strengthen the relationship among the citizens because the citizens can always keep in touch with their family or friends. To illustrate, a husband who has job abroad can always communicate to his family with using the smartphone, and he can also monitor growth of his children. Likewise, the effect to personal relationship is unimportant to be worried since it depends on the users. For example, the user of the electric media restricts to use it when gather with family or friends so that their gathering has a good quality and can strengthen their relationship.

All in all, the effect of the electric media to the personal relationship among the citizens is not a problem which should be worried. In addition, the electric media give the benefit because it can strengthen the relationship among the citizens. As the smart users, the citizens should use it as restrict to help their activities.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The important abilities of communication owned by people for their career [NEW]

The percentage of the results of two surveys, the important abilities of communication owned by people for their career in two different years (1997 and 2006), is presented in the table. It is important to note that the greatest growth are the understanding of especially products in the external communication and the listening to colleagues in the internal from 1997 to 2006. In any case, the nine communication abilities experience an increase, except the ability to selling a product or a service which drops.

First, in the external communication, the understanding of especially products or services is the largest growth by 6% between 1997 and 2006. After that, there are the abilities of both dealing with costumers and advising for clients which follow to rise in a two-years-period by 5% and 3% respectively. In contrast, from 1997-2006, the selling the product or the service witnesses a decrease by 3% in external communication.

Turning to another part, the greatest rise is the listening carefully to colleagues by 9% in two different years in the internal communication. However, there is the ability to planning the activities of others which increases steadily by 1% between 1997 and 2006. Surprisingly, the other abilities of the external communication almost have a similar growth by approximately 5% in the same period.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: A comparison of the Pacific Ocean when experiences between a common and an El Nino [NEW]

A comparison of the Pacific Ocean when experiences between a common and an El Nino circumstance is presented in the diagram. It is important to note that the diagram clearly explains differences of both circumstances such as different seasons in two countries. Following this, there are negative effects on the Pacific when it witnesses the El Nino.

A closer look how the diagram describes the differences specifically. In the normal circumstance, trade winds at the East Pacific is stronger than at the West Pacific so that warm water flow from the East to the West Pacific. While the Pacific witness the El Nino, those situations reverse. Afterwards, storm clouds will be pushed to the West and make rainy days in Australia, and Peru's season is summer days, in the normal condition. Those situations are extremely different as the same time as the condition of the Pacific changes to the El Nino circumstance since the storm clouds move from the West to the East.

Turning to the negative effects, the pacific has poor nutrients in the El Nino circumstance. Following this, in Australia, El Nino causes a drop of number of fishes. Another impact is that the El Nino causes the summer days in Australia so that many plants do not grow effectively.

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  The El Nino circumstance
  

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Consuming so much junk food is one of complex problems in health for citizens [2]

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food? Agree or Disagree?

Consuming so much junk food is one of complex problems in health for citizens and make a growth of number of the citizens who have health problems in some countries. Consequently, government have to raise levy on all types of junk food. I do not believe that this solution can work effectively to solve the junk food since majority of consumers is rich people so that rising the levy does not influence them to consume it.

The government suppose that an increasing levy will decrease the number of sufferer from health problems because the high levy will automatically augment prices of the junk foods. To illustrate, some people who usually buy many items of the junk foods and do not question the prices order the few junk foods solely because the price of the junk foods is more expensive. A decreasing of consuming the junk foods will be linear with a declining of the sufferer.

However, I tend to oppose that this solution because it does not affect successfully. Majority of consuming fast foods is wealthy people so that the high tax does not influence their eagerness to eat the fast foods every day. In addition, the main reason why many people consume is that fast food is a part of lifestyle nowadays so that they will attempt to buy the fast food although those is more expensive. The increasing the tax only give a positive effect on income of both country and company, but it does not lessen their desire to consume the fast foods.

In conclusion, I fully disagree that the government have to increase the tax of the junk food because it only give benefit to the country and do not lessen the number of sufferer who experience health problems. The government should innovate to dispel a perspective of many people that consuming the junk foods is the part of the lifestyle and dangerous to the health. For example, the government should give instruction schools to make a seminar for students about negative effects of consuming so much junk food.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Some people believe that students need to consume healthy diet at school. [2]

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school.
How true is this statement?
Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people believe that students need to consume healthy diet at school to study effectively. I argue that this statement is really true since the students need plenty of nutrition to understand the lessons well. A school management and parents must be collaborative to observe and provide healthy diet to the students.

Actually, the students need a considerable of nutrition of healthy food so that they can follow learning process effectively in the class. However, the children tend to consume unhealthy meals although it can disturb physical condition of the students because they do have good knowledge about balanced diet. Based on recent study at Cambridge University, children need to eat healthy foods 3 times more than older people because they are in the growing. In addition, intelligence of the children is also affected by the amount of nutrition values which are eaten every day.

On one hand, the school and the parents have responsibility to guide and provide healthy food for the students so that they have intake of nutrition enough. The students need instruction clearly about the diet which they must consume and avoid because they have little knowledge about healthy food. The parents can guide their children consume the meals which contain the balanced nutrition with providing the healthy diet of house. In addition, the schools should also make regulation to canteens that they are allowed to sell at around the school, but their products should be the healthy diet.

In conclusion, I fully agree that the student need to consume healthy food so that they can study effectively in learning process. The school should make the regulations for the canteens owner that they should not sell unhealthy food. However, the parents should also guide and advise their children to eat the healthy diets which contain balanced nutrition.

Writing Feedback / A dress is needed by the workers to cultivate their performance - appropriate clothing in companies [2]

Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Fashion, in fact, touches the working world. Some people argue that workers should dress quite smartly although others have different perspectives that quality of a job is the most essential after all and should be highly regarded. Among the two perspectives, I believe that the workers should highly regard the quality of job so that they demonstrate great performance.

A dress is needed by the workers to cultivate their performance. The workers which dress smartly will seem more attractive and elegant so that their clients feel more comfortable. After that, the workers will be more self-assured to meet the clients when they dress smartly. Not only this, the workers who always get dressed smartly will present a professional of the company because the client will place a great belief of professionalism to the company. These three reasons will affect the performance of the workers if they can execute consistently.

Although the workers dress smartly, they will not render a profit to their company if the workers do not work professionally and do not regard the quality of the job. In the beginning, the clients will attract to consult something such as asking about a product or a service because the workers which dress smartly seem more attractive. After that, the clients will be disappointed when they do not find service professionally. In addition, a recent study at French by ESMOD International University found that employees do not raise good performances of a company since they highly regard the quality values of work although they are more confident when dress smartly.

In conclusion, the workers that dress smartly will seem more attractive. However, the workers do not accelerate the performance if they do not follow the company's regulation well. On one hand, the workers should also improve their ability to give the best performance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS 1: married couples are more happy than some single people [2]

A survey of the happiness levels between single people and married couples, as well as having children's effect on families is displayed in the bar charts. Overall, it can be seen that the married couples have the happiness levels higher than the single people. In any case, the happiness levels for the married couples who have or do not have children almost witness the same percentages.

A closer look at how this chart illustrates difference of the happiness levels for married and unmarried groups. The 18-29 age group is the highest level at 45% in the couple category. Afterwards, there is the same levels of both 30-49 and more than 64 age groups in the married group. Likewise, the 50-64 age group in the category of married couples has the lowest happiness level at 40%. On the other hand, the unmarried people experience the levels of happiness at approximately 21% for three age groups except the 65 and over age group at 34%.

Apart from this, another chart describes happiness percentages for the married couples who have or do not have children. The largest percentage is parents who have the children aged under 18 at 44%. After that, the percentage of the married couples who have not a child follows at 43%. Finally, 41% of all couples witness the lowest happiness percentage of another age group.

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  married couples
  

Writing Feedback / Government and citizens are whole unity. Funding to education and healthcare issue. [2]

All education and healthcare should be funded by government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Government and citizens are whole unity. Some people believe that the government should has responsibility to allocate a funding to education and healthcare services free for the citizens. The government has responsibility to fund the others sectors such as public transportations, but I believe that the sector of education and health services is the government's responsibility and also very essential because both services are needs of the citizens.

The government has authority to allocate the funding to develop both sectors because there are some reasons. Firstly, these two services are exceedingly important to be founded because both services are essential necessities which raise prosperity and welfare for everyone. Buildings of schools and hospitals are principal infrastructure which become the government's focus to boost the service and quality of living of citizens. On one hand, the citizens have paid a tax every year which should be allocated by the government to building public facilities. The government divide the funding proportionally to those two services especially so that the citizens can feel its functions comprehensively.

However, the funding to both services require good management by the government because these do not work effectively. In several condition, those services restricted because the funding is not enough. The government avoid all economic levels to use both services without emphasizing to poor citizens. To illustrate, cost of treating in the hospital is free from the lowest economic level to the highest economic level so that the funding is enough solely to first treatment in the hospital. The funding should be prioritized for the lower economic level.

In conclusion, I believe that the government should allocate the funding to both services because those are the government's responsibility. The government should has the good management to allocate the funding to both services so that these services can work effectively.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Some people are brave to start a personal business rather than being an employee [4]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

A great decision needs great bravery. Some people are brave to start a personal business rather than being an employee for another business or association. I believe that their decision to begin running the business has a large number of benefits although it also causes some drawbacks.

People who start building the personal company will get the drawbacks related to a financial matter. Owners must be full responsible to their company for first investment or its bankruptcy. To illustrate, the company has a financial problem since customers' demands experience a dramatic fall so that the owner must seek another way to cover operational expenditure such as employees' salary. Such a problem may not be faced if people do not build their business and only work at the other company.

However, I believe that the owner will get more benefits than the drawbacks of building the company. Firstly, the owners can be more prosperous and productive. They can receive more and more profit from the company if the owner always accelerates performance of the company. Also, the owners will be not pressured by a boss so that they will be more enjoyable to work in their life. Interestingly, they will have so much time together with their family since the owners can manage their own time.

In conclusion, I believe that people who choose to build the personal company will gain more benefits than disadvantages. The owners can be more prosperous and productive if they acquire more knowledge about business and learn experiences from other successful entrepreneurs. Government should help the entrepreneurs to boost the companies' performance through providing entrepreneur's training to beginners.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The aspects of Fairmont Island that tourists enjoy the most and the least [2]

A survey of aspects of Fairmont Island that tourists enjoy the most and the least is displayed in the pie charts. Overall, it can be seen that local society in Fairmont Island is the most popular aspect in attracting tourists. Budgets to live there, however, appears to be the factor many tourists are not interested in.

Turning to the advantages category, 40% tourists experience the local society as the greatest advantage. Landscape of the Island, furthermore, it is the second highest benefit, representing at 37% of the travellers. Surprisingly, culture and standard of accommodation in the Fairmont Island are the least attraction for visitors, at 12% and 11% respectively.

On the other hand, the budgets to live in the Island are the significant problem which travellers have to deal with, at 45% of all respondents. After that, 30% of them do not enjoy tourist entertainments in that Island. Weather conditions are also another disadvantage holidaymakers do not like which depicting at 20% while those who dislike the quality of food only show 5%.

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  Fairmont Island
  

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Parts of a wind turbine and its effective positions to place. [2]

Parts of a wind turbine and its effective positions to place are displayed in the two diagrams. Although the wind turbines have the same structure, the position of turbines also determines the effectiveness of the turbine in harnessing electricity.

Firstly, the left diagram describes parts of the wind turbine. There is a steel tower to buttress a generator, a sensor, and blades. To make the electricity, wind turns the blades made by fiberglass or wood. After that, spin of the blades connects to a generator which can produce energy up to 1.5 megawatts. The turbine also has a wind sensor which connects to a computer to adjust the angle and direction of the blades.

Turning to a more detailed analysis from the diagram, the wind turbines' locations determine power to make the electricity. In the right diagram, there are the three wind turbines which have different locations. The turbine is placed in the sea but it is not effective to make the great power. To get maximal wind strengths, the turbine should be located on a hill. In addition, a domestic turbine positioned near a house can produce energy up to 100 kilowatts of the electricity.

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  The wind turbines
  

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Life and a relation of entertainers (such as actors, singers or footballs) [2]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Life and a relation of entertainers (such as actors, singers or footballs) are reported by the media. There is a perspective that the media should spend more time to report the living of normal people instead. I believe that the perspective can give advantages to people if a reporter describes something which can inspire.

A large number of the media report the life of entertainers because it is attract spectacle for society. Many people want to know information about their idol so that the media use this opportunity to reach a high rating. For example, the media always reports the life of both Lionel Messi and Christian Ronaldo because the information about both football players always is awaited by their fans. Moreover, the fans always want to know difference of the lives of both. The media will explore the life of entertainments to keep stability of the show rating.

However, I believe that the media will give advantages if they report the life of the normal people which can inspire. Many normal people become success because of their attempt so that this condition can inspire other people. To illustrate, a teacher which serve in isolated area is ready to be paid whatever. It can inspire people that no all jobs must be based money. The media which describes it will give spectacle more attractive and educated

To conclude, I believe that the media can give benefits to people if they also report the normal people which can be success although they come from the poor condition. I hope the media does not think about rating only, but it create the educated shows

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The rate of recruiting teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007 [NEW]

The rate of recruiting teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007 is displayed in the bar chart, and is measured in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that both English and French-language teachers were at almost the same point in the beginning of the period, but both categories experienced a contradiction in the next two years.

In 2001, the percentage of both categories stood at roughly 70% in the recruiting teachers. In the next year, they fell rapidly to approximately 58% (French-language) and around 54% (English-language). Afterwards, the trend of both categories had a contradictive change.

The figure of French-language teachers experienced a dramatic rise of around 78% in 2003. In contrast, English-language teachers still dropped dramatically to 40% in the same year. The following two years, both categories witnessed the same increase by about 4%. Finally, from 2005 to the last period, the percentage of teaching English-language jumped down again to nearly 27%, but another category experienced a fluctuation by reaching a peak at 75%.

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  The rate of recruiting teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007
  

Writing Feedback / Nowadays, a large number of young people have the way of living which is unhealthy. [4]

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both school and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, a large number of young people have the way of living which is unhealthy. There is an opinion that this matter is responsibility of the teacher and the family to solve it. In my perspective, the opinion is precise, but it should be supplemented by responsibility of government so that the case can be solved completely.

Firstly, I would explain that the case about the way of living is unhealthy for the young people these days is responsibility of the teacher and the family. The young adults expand so much time in two surroundings: the family and the school so that these both roles can guide them to control their lifestyle. To illustrate, the parents can arrange diet consumed every day and control sleep time for the children. On one hand, the teacher also has enormous responsibility such as they always remind the young people to keep cleanliness and do not smoke. If both elements can effectively function, the children's lifestyle should not be worried.

In addition, I believe that the government should also take responsibility. The government can strengthen and accelerate steps applied by the school and the parents. For example, there is a program which was designed by the government to socialise the way and the importance to healthy lifestyle for the young people so that they can get plenty of information and reference about it. The healthy lifestyle will be rapidly realised if the government consistently do.

In conclusion, it is clear that the government also hold on enormous responsibility this issue. I believe that the health lifestyle for the young adults will be quickly realised while the three elements do solution steps together and coordination.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The percentage of issues which people have when they stay in a new country [3]

The percentage of issues which people have when they stay in a new country is presented in the bar chart. The population in the chart is categorized into three groups follow as: people aged 18-34 years, 35-54 years, and over 55 years. It is noticeable that the issue of learning the language was the most problematic for people aged over 55 years.

The issue of forming fellowship was the greatest percentage (46 percent) for young people aged 18-34. After that, 36% witnessed the percentage of making friendship for group of 35-to 54-years-old. However, for people aged over 55 years, that issue was only 23%.

Speaking the local language was the most problematic which reached to 44 percent of the oldest age group. Afterwards, this problem did not need full attention which still stood at 29% for the youngest age cluster. The cluster of people aged 35-54 years followed at approximately 35% in the same issue.

On the other hand, only 22 percent of the oldest age cluster has difficulty to finding accommodation. In contrast, finding facilities to live was the highest problem (around 40%) for the youngest age cluster. The cluster of 35-to 54-years-old was almost the same percentage with young people aged 18-34 years.

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  The bar chart